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maejackie: Wow! Larry, this is so very great. I'm your number one fan. Will you sign my autograph? Pleeeaaasssseee!

Thanks a lot, Maejackie. Bless you.

kanechimex: Larry Sun!

Thank you, bro.
Bless you.

brokoto: @bolded, see ya life?

Bless you, buddy. I wish you understood what I meant.

Ishilove: Kai, this guy like epistle sha

Thanks Ishilove. I caught the faint whiff of innuendo.
Bless you.

I nominate Omolola1. She's good.

Now, what caused the impasse? The nominations should continue please. Thanks to those who nominated me. GOD BLESS YOU ALL. This is fun; a real fun. I was really enjoying this thread when it suddenly stopped. Oh! It shouldn't.
However, we all should nominate fairly and squarely...and it isn't a matter of who is better or worse. I believe each person is a master in his/her own kind of art. Literature is diverse, and serious writing takes special skills and styles. The battle for supremacy in this thread may not come mainly out of wit and humour, but of creativity.
Nominate someone you 'believe' has earned your nomination. It would be quite unethical to vote out of friendship, acquaintanceship, gain or whatever. There are still great writers/posters (of course, the nominees/posters should be writers. This thread is under LITERATURE and WRITING) who still need voting in. Do not confuse the moderator, put the name of your nominee only once and let equity play its role. I know the Moderator is honest.
I think nominees should not nominate themselves...there is no pride in that. But they should have the liberty of nominating some other people, if they so desired.
Bless you all.
L.S.

For those of you who nominated me, and those who still will, I say thank you. I have a gift for you in return: I shall post the Prologue and Chapter One of THE PARADOX OF ABEL (The Sequel to THE BRAND OF CAIN) this week. I'm sure you will like the excerpts.
Thanks.

I'm hooked, HBG. Keep them coming...impressive! I like the fusion of Nigerians and South Africans...it fills me with glee.
However, some grammatical constructions therein still need to be revisited. Words like 'fourties', 'worser', 'had wrote', etc. should be re-written correctly. And, 'african' and 'nigerian'...you know that these are proper nouns.
Great job, HBG.
Bless you.

Persevere. But, at least, evidently, you've got internet reception. Taking a walk is healthy though, but in the bush with animals of the night...I wouldn't call that very healthy in the least. Find a blanket, please, lest you turn Eskimoic.

HumbledbYGrace: This is great.

Looking forward to the sequel boss.

God Bless u

Finished it, I guess. Thanks so much, HBG.
God bless you too.

Eny1: larrysun: why are you not campaigning for poster of the year you competitors are rigging. readers of this thread should vote in his honor. i joined nairaland for this thread.

You joined Nairaland for this thread? God bless you, Enyl.

Nicely written piece...I like your descriptions...you should continue with the story, it's great. However, after using punctuations, you need to leave a space before starting another word. Who says Africans aren't talented? HBG, you're a living proof of how Africans rule the literary world.
Bless you.
(Waiting for more updates)

HumbledbYGrace: *yawn*

Larry!Larry

I just finished page six,I have to rest now.Man u are ma chosen african John Grisham

I just hope I don't have morningmares!

Page six or Chapter six? Thanks for the accolade, HBG. I initially thought you've already read it. You won't be disappointed.
**XOXO**

HumbledbYGrace: his or mine

His

Mine, I guess. Do you have any work of art too?

Damex333: me 2,i want more of it,but it seems lyk most of ur topics are just fragments 4rm ds 1.

True. But there is still a sequel...did you read this one (The Brand Of Cain)?

HumbledbYGrace: I love ur work.I wanna get more of it

You shall, trust me.

Not everybody understands Hausa language, you ought to provide interpretations. Good job.

HumbledbYGrace: I was in Nigeria last night,with Richard and saw everything.I love ur work sir

Wow

You were in Nigeria with Richard? Lol! Abigail mustn't hear that.
Thank you, I'm glad you loved it.

yertyr: Here 4 nairaland...I've read so many stories... I've come to rank authors and their work.Your's d best and seconded wit anoda guy wit funny name,then a few others.Larry u're too much.

Thank you, Yertyr. Your rave means a lot to me...merci.

HumbledbYGrace: Link please.

I love reading about Africa as a whole and lately I embrace African works.

It's right on the first page of Literature and Writing (The Brand Of Cain). Prepare to be amazed (not an overstatement).

One thing I like about this story is the humour. However, you still need to work on your dialogues and setting. Your paragraph alignments need some rearranging. And, one other thing, do as much as self-editing as you can. With that, you shall see your errors, and more addition into the tale would emerge. I commend your effort, though.
Kudos. Waiting to read more.
I also posted my first book (The Brand Of Cain) here on Nairaland (Literature and Writing). You may check it out.

breathing: The book captured reality as it is. It's about cultism and life in a Nigerian university in the 90s. It was interesting to note that not much has changed. There's so much to learn from it sha, you should get to it soon.

I also read Adaobi Tricia's 'I do not come to you by chance'. This one is about yahho boys, and it's funny and touching.

You'd like my work too; 'The Brand Of Cain'. It's here on Nairaland (Literature and Writing)

punche: IS THIS A REAL LIFE STORY?

It's a work of fiction, Punch. Plotting, Characterization and Setting are purely imaginary. There isn't any Abel Chima at large in the real world, and no library in Nigeria bears the name BEDLAM. I hope you liked the story.

legendprac: I normally think ahead of the authors of crime/detective novels, and most times, I arrive @ d correct conclusions before I get to d end of d novel... But larry, u were so Ǧ☺☺ϑ, I didn't K№ω where to start from. I found it hard making a meaningful theory that will help me solve the mystery... (Maybe cuz I stopped reading novels abt 5yrs ago or just cuz u r damnn too gud)...

I comot my cap for u joor... I pray u get published...

Thank you, Legend. I'm glad you were intrigued...you owe me a hug.

HipsyDipsy: All I can say is WOW! Thumbs up larry sun. U made ♍Ɣ little heart skip @ some points in d novel. Great work. Held M̶̲̥̅ƹ spellbound for hours. Buh I knew dere was an "abel" somewhere. Caught dt wen I saw dis inchapter 5
"and most importantly, he needed the assistance of Abel to finish the business at hand first, and if that was done, Eze Chima would not have any reason to work here anymore. Because, by that time, everything would have changed immensely"
U shlda seen M̶̲̥̅ƹ shouting "I talk am!" Wen I found out abt Abel ; ;DD more grease 2 ur elbow bro. Sincerely hope u get published.

Very good of you to notice that, few people did. Thank you so much, Hipsy.
Bless you, ma'am.

Currently reading The Moonstone by Wilkie Collins...great book.

avicky: Yes, i noticed them all. And when it was time for Lot's investigation, d fotographer was d only one absent and dt young muslim boy spotted his absence.

You mean you already suspected Abel? That's intelligent, Avicky.

Afamdman: Ike I said it didn't take notice, it was not enough to raise any red flags, you wrote it, so your the only one in on the inside joke. Changing the name to leba, won't raise any flag, hakeem asking after the photographer didn't do it for me either, you made us believe words from hakeem were not to be paid much attention to, his youth and clownish attitude. As for the photographer not taking good pictures, hmmmmm still nothing there. The only thing that would have raised the flag to me, was "what was mr eze chima doing making sure the photographer was around. I would think the photographer was working for the police. But quite frankly if you didn't write the epilogue we won't have been none the wiser, except of course me. Because I would still have asked you of mr eze chima making that call.

Okay, forgive my errors










[quote author=Afamdman]Ike I said it didn't take notice, it was not enough to raise any red flags, you wrote it, so your the only one in on the inside joke. Changing the name to leba, won't raise any flag, hakeem asking after the photographer didn't do it for me either, you made us believe words from hakeem were not to be paid much attention to, his youth and clownish attitude. As for the photographer not taking good pictures, hmmmmm still nothing there. The only thing that would have raised the flag to me, was "what was mr eze chima doing making sure the photographer was around. I would think the photographer was working for the police. But quite frankly if you didn't write the epilogue we won't have been none the wiser, except of course me. Because I would still have asked you of mr eze chima making that call. [/quote

I wasn't cheating my audience...I tied all the knots therein, except the affairs of Jamal. I even wrote that the audience can make a solution to the mystery. Abel is liable to suspicion, as others are, only that it would be somehow difficult for the readers to come up with how he murdered Cain; and almost impossible to ascertain his relationship with the deceased. Another pointer reflected in Daniel's confession 'I thought I shot the pistol wide'. About Abel, if I had made his actions more conspicuous, everybody would have suspected him, and that would have killed the chapter 25. I initially wanted to include him among those people Lot questioned, but I thought better of it. His presence there would seem meaningless. Moreover, the doctor was there but he wasn't questioned.
Okay, forgive my errors...I just hope you weren't too disappointed. I pray the plotting isn't too puerile for your liking.
Bless you, sir.

Afamdman: I never paid any attention to the photographer, you never gave me any reason to. He didn't make an impact, except you want to give him more role to play. Except you mentioning mr eze making sure he was around, you didn't give us something to suspect him. I like it this way. Though in a movie it would be better seen than read in a book. Like him developing the film and taking a closer look at the dead man, and a cut to another room inside the studio, where we now have on the wall,different pictures of cain that would make some good suspense. But great story.

The pointers are there, but you didn't take much notice.
1. The lawyer noticed that the photographer was an inexperienced one (Ch 10). Imagine someone who knew nothing about photography noticing that a photographer was taking amateurish shots of a corpse.
2. Richard asked about the photographer's name, but Chima told him by scrambling the name ABEL to LEBA.
3. Lot said he received some money through a bank account by the name Abel Martins.
4. Hakeem asked about the photographer, but Chima shut him up.
They were all there, plainly visible.