₦airaland Forum

Afamdman: Also one other thing. Time (age) you have like 3 generations of people here, but your description confuses their ages. But I forgive you, would be a bit difficul to hide in a movie though. Means cain should be like 15-17 years older than abel.

For forgiving me, you now have a seat reserved for you in paradise.
Cain was actually 18years when Abel was born.

Afamdman: Hello larry. Very nice story, twist and plots I must commend you. Just recently started finding my love for reading fiction novels again. So your story was refreshing. So my own reviews.
1. Am surprised many people didn't catch on the gateman was in on it. I did. When he was lost in taught about losing his job and then further with this. "Old Chima waited till he could no more hear the faint sound of the jeep as it sped down the road curve, then he made the call." Once I read that I knew he had a hand in it. To think this was in page 1 and many missed it. But then, the little trick you pulled by linking it up to the call to the lawyer did the trick.
2. I found your of description of some (scenes)overly too much or unneccessary, like you were trying to hard to put your point accros, how the place looked like, or how the person past was, you made it a bit too nollywood, you should allow us the readers imagination do the rest, too much spoon feeding is a better word.
In conclusion great book. Would do best as a movie though if directed properly. Thank you for sharing.

Thank you, Afam. You just made my night with this comment. I like having my flaws getting pointed out to me as much as I like the raves I receive.
1. I guess the red-herring I employed wasn't an enough 'deceit' on you. But, I'll like to know if you suspected the photographer before his own confession...if you did, then I'd have to go back to my drawing board of logical deduction. Lol! Just kidding. You're better than Lot.
2. I'm merely a story-teller...not yet a writer, not quite. But with time, I shall improve. I look up to the likes of Wodehouse, Poe, Chesterton Achebe and Adichie...all these are WRITERS who blend their styles with impressive stories. I see myself as the half of the pie yet.

Oh! If, however, it is worthy of motion pictures, Cameron and Spielberg must come to Nigeria. Lol!
Thanks buddy.

Afamdman: Hello larry. Very nice story, twist and plots I must commend you. Just recently started finding my love for reading fiction novels again. So your story was refreshing. So my own reviews.
1. Am surprised many people didn't catch on the gateman was in on it. I did. When he was lost in taught about losing his job and then further with this. "Old Chima waited till he could no more hear the faint sound of the jeep as it sped down the road curve, then he made the call." Once I read that I knew he had a hand in it. To think this was in page 1 and many missed it. But then, the little trick you pulled by linking it up to the call to the lawyer did the trick.
2. I found your of description of some (scenes)overly too much or unneccessary, like you were trying to hard to put your point accros, how the place looked like, or how the person past was, you made it a bit too nollywood, you should allow us the readers imagination do the rest, too much spoon feeding is a better word.
In conclusion great book. Would do best as a movie though if directed properly. Thank you for sharing.

Thank you, Afam. You just made my night with this comment. I like having my flaws getting pointed out to me as much as I like the raves I receive.
1. I guess the red-herring I employed wasn't an enough 'deceit' on you. But, I'll like to know if you suspected the photographer before his own confession...if you did, then I'd have to go back to my drawing board of logical deduction. Lol! Just kidding. You're better than Lot.
2. I'm merely a story-teller...not yet a writer, not quite. But with time, I shall improve. I look up to the likes of Wodehouse, Poe, Chesterton Achebe and Adichie...all these are WRITERS who blend their styles with impressive stories. I see myself as the half of the pie yet.

Oh! If, however, it is worthy of motion pictures, Cameron and Spielberg must come to Nigeria. Lol!
Thanks buddy.

lapagegirl: Wow larry dis is superb, u̶̲̥̅̊ re just too good.

Thank you, Lapagirl. I'm glad you liked it.

don ifez: Larry i duff my hat for thee,am a voracious reader but cant write much,am more of a poet,you will be a great force in the literary world, more stockfish in your soup.....lol,will send u a mail soon.

I like that 'more stockfish in my soup'...I like stockfish. Thank you, will be expecting your mail.

jayslickyslicky: Please Larry,please refresh my memory.who is Raymond phillip(is't Richard phillip's father)...

Jays, by tracing the subtle twitching of the web, you shall arrive at the arachnid which wove the thread.
Raymond Philip is Richard's step-dad. Martha Benson (Arewa, Rosemary) is Richard's mother. If you figure it out, you shall understand the irony inherent in the plot from the beginning and the end. However, surprise and astonishment still lurk behind the plots in THE PARADOX OF ABEL.
Thanks for reading THE BRAND OF CAIN.
Bless you.

Iaz93: Larry weldone oh...more oil to ur engine. *Reading again*

Iaz, you're really re-reading it? God bless you.

Damex333: Larry sun,man u killed it,it suspense,links,twists,is just superb,too bad i just found it,i wanted 2 cheer u all d way. The tin i like most is d links and twist. D story is a bit of everything. Man WELDONE

Thanks, Damex. I only strive to creating intelligent entertainment. I'm glad you like the story. Bless you.

uniqueren: too bad i just found your story today
and so wasn't able to encourage you all the way.
I managed to start and finish the novel (more like the only thing i did today).
unfortunately they have said all i would have wanted to say, but then *lots of hugs*
.... You simply rock dearie....

Thanks for the hugs. I was initially afraid of being smacked on the head.

Enitsua: Larry I will be very dissappointed if I found out dat u did nt published dis work B4 u posted it here...Do u know what patent is? Find out. Still reading on...

Would you care to post your e-mail address, Enitsua? I have a confession for you.

vislabraye: I think you should publish it.

Getting it published is my aspiration. Thank you, buddy.

Enitsua: . Larry don't u touch dat modify option, The story is perfect, it is very possible for a girl to yeild to passion in d midst of dat situation, Hav in mind dat she is a young girl who is already ripe to be plucked...Novels r nt meant to sound like every day existence it is meant to dazzle, entertain, and shock. Ride on Larry still reading on...

Thank you, Enitsua. I believe you'll like the end of this first book. You'll be enchanted.

Lyzbet: I just finished readin 'The Brand of Cain', and all people can see me do is making facial expressions at my phone. They keep looking at me with wondering eyes. They cant understand.
Larry dear, would you please post 'The Paradox of Abel' too. Please.
Probably not now. Cause am still in love with 'The Brand of Cain'.

LOL! They can't understand, I agree with you there.
However, The Paradox Of Abel, I'm afraid, will still remain under lock and keys. Forgive me. But with time, I may just decide to post it. Thanks for loving The Brand Of Cain.

semid4lyfe: I didn't follow the story from the beginning so it's kinda hard reading all the chapters now. . .read chapter 1-5 though and I liked it.

Larry-Sun, please send me an e-copy of the novel when it's available. Thanks

Thank you, Semid. You've been so wonderful. Oh yes, I shall send the e-copy as soon as it is available. THANK YOU.

aysometin: Well done...you are talented

This is amazing

Loved every bit of it

Thanks for the accolade, Ay. Bless you.

nzeaji: I just read the first two chapters. Man, you are good. Double thumbs up for you.

Thank you, Nzeaji. The remaining chapters won't disappoint you.

viciati: w

Thanks.

ijebabe: This must be the meaning of love at first sight. Im on phone and can't read it all now but will come back soon coz I can't wait to be amazed.
Good job op.

Thank you, Ijebabe. You'd be amazed, trust me.

onobi7: There is a novel by the same name though.

http://www.amazon.co.uk/s/ref=nb_sb_noss?url=search-alias%3Daps&field-keywords=brand+of+cain

Yeah, but not the same plots.

Sike: Nice one.

Thanks, Sike.

maxiflexi: Awesome story! U neatly tied up loose ends we didn't even notice existed!!! However, u left one thread hanging - Jamal the Molester (Cpt 5).

You're very shrewd. Jamal was left out intentionally. If you get to read the sequel, you shall encounter him...in the book I mean, not in reality.
Thank you, Maxiflexi.

billynoni: @Op, whao! Wonderfulpiece there. U really held me spellbound with dix 'work' of us(approx. 5 hrs 2 finish d whole story!)......though,i've 2 scream @ma rummate 4 daring 2 ask me 2 stop readin d story nd cum nd eat.

Thanks, buddy. I hope it was worth the time spent reading it.

siempere: pls is there a .txt version we can download.....this is phuking great.....

Still working on that. Thank you.

Omolola1: I love the story. Good 1

Bless you, 'Lola. I'm glad you love it.

Sike: Nice one.

Thanks.

Larry Sun was born in Nigeria on July 1, 1986. He developed a love for words and ideas at seventeen and started writing short stories just to entertain himself. At 22, he decided to try his hand in writing standard stories of which some of them include THE HOUSEHOLD SERIES: THE BRAND OF CAIN and THE PARADOX OF ABEL (A sequel). While he was writing the first book he tried to get himself into the country’s Armed Force but he was turned down due to defective eyesight. Larry is near-sighted.

He devotes a great deal of time and patience on the research for his novels. THE BRAND OF CAIN is his first novel, and he is currently working on his third book.

Larry Sun is a new Nigerian writer who hopes to become a household name with his writing style.

He can be reached directly on larrysundynasty@gmail.com.

phunmiejewels: Larry, I hav a confession 2.....I THINK AM IN LOVE WITH YOU!!!!!!

LOL! Thank you, PhunmieJewels. I'm glad you liked it.

[quote author=Cunninlingus][/quote]You don't know what you're missing.

Cunninlingus: did not bother reading

Thanks, Cun(I can't even type your name)...too risque!

DailyNews: Larry well done, but then, to make it more interesting and easy to read, cut the post in bits so it can come in short short form than being too voluminous so people can read, remember, most people that visit forum sites, always want to gland, scheme through and possibly not read a volume post.


But seriously, your story is interesting, nice to have you.... well done

Thank you, DailyNews. It's good getting a rave from the founder of YAN!

Angels and Demons
Da Vinci Code
The Lost Symbol
Digital Fortress
Deception Point

I have all. But my best still remains Angels and Demons.

cutie999: The other woman - irving wallace

I think its title is The Second Lady.