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| Re: 1985.... 1987.... 2014--[a Crime Story] by D9ty7(m): 8:16am On May 05, 2015 |
--continuation-- Mayor was seated in his living inside his three bedroom apartment. Five heavily built guys were seated on the couch around the cenre table and several pictures, cut out pictures from magazines, calendars, newspapers laid on the table as they discussed. "Baba, how stuffs na?" The most built of the guys asked. "Nothing much jare. I still dey feel Dragon's death." Mayor replied. "Baba, nothing do you. You gats carry am off body." The guy said. "I dey tell you, that Clara girl fit be witch." Another of the guys said as everyone bursted into laughter. It was no news that the most closest of the guys to Mayor was Dragon. He performed a role similar to that of a personal assistant, he handled messages in the absence of the boss, he excecute missions single handedly in the absence of the boss, as well as making desicions in the absence of Mayor. Hence, the reason why Mayor trusted him with everything he has, including his bank details and family identity. And the guys knew that, no amount of persuassion could bring Mayor out of his depressed mood, even though seeing him laugh gave them assurance that things could only get better. "Clara is a silly detective." Mayor said. "Can you imagine, Dragon was driving her out of Lagos when she saw a boy and stopped to pick him up. It was during that period that she was spotted by another detective." He explained. "Silly witch." The guys added, followed by another round of laughter, only that this time, Mayor didn't join them. "So, wetin go happen now? We have so much on our table." The youngest of the guys asked pointing to the pictures and papers on the table. "I dey go golf club on sunday to clear my head." Mayor replied. The guys exchanged looks. Mayor was not someone who plays golf or enjoys watching the game of golf. The few times he had visited the Ikoyi club, it was strictly business. The first time, they went to attack a politician, the second time they transacted a drug deal, even though, they ended up getting the drugs off the seller and they still returned home with their money. The last time which was the most recent was when they were paid to tail a particular business man, and the tailing which started at the golf club, ended at the golf club. And now, Mayor deciding to visit the club could only mean one thing. Flying solo or on the other hand, flying solo. "Baba, job dey?" One of the guys asked. "Nothing dey. I can't fly solo at this period. You know how crowded the club is always on sundays? I'll like to mingle with people and get people's contact. Who knows?" Mayor explained. "Jah bless your hustle baba." "One of you will be going with me. I intend going with my nephew. You know Christopher, don't you? Tina's son." "No wahala na. But we still never discuss this lady's matter o. Mrs Adeola Martin. The little boy she asked us to kidnapp." One of the guys reminded. "Which on be that?" Mayor asked. "You have forgotten the story? The woman claimed her husband no longer loves her, but is now obsessed with the son he had with another woman." "Oh oh oh! I remember, but You no show me pictures na." Mayor said. "Baba, don't worry. We can handle it." "That's good then. And don't forget, you are going with me on sunday." Mayor said before standing up. "I wan sleep small." With this, he walked out of the living room. --to be continued-- 2 Likes |
| Re: 1985.... 1987.... 2014--[a Crime Story] by KingzPen(m): 8:29am On May 05, 2015 |
D9ty7! "The Mayor was seated..." Could be better and simply written, 'the Mayor sat...' Read and re-read your works to yourself over and over again. Don't just tell us what happened, but rather show us what's happening... You have a nice storyline here and only thing crippling the intense of it is that you're telling it... 2 Likes 1 Share |
| Re: 1985.... 1987.... 2014--[a Crime Story] by macpetrus(m): 8:36am On May 05, 2015 |
Keep on the Good work!!! |
| Re: 1985.... 1987.... 2014--[a Crime Story] by Sirme411(m): 9:21am On May 05, 2015 |
KingzPen:. Exactly |
| Re: 1985.... 1987.... 2014--[a Crime Story] by kwencypresh(f): 9:53am On May 05, 2015 |
so tina n mayor er related.......dee notin shud happen to chris oooooo |
| Re: 1985.... 1987.... 2014--[a Crime Story] by Slimzjoe(m): 11:02am On May 05, 2015 |
Skimpledawg:  |
| Re: 1985.... 1987.... 2014--[a Crime Story] by Slimzjoe(m): 11:15am On May 05, 2015 |
I think it would be better if Some Kidults stop Correcting Dee's work  The most important thing is, his readers understand the Whole thing Pls and Pls correct it in ur head and stop derailing |
| Re: 1985.... 1987.... 2014--[a Crime Story] by kenwins(f): 1:09pm On May 05, 2015 |
Slimzjoe:What if Dee decides to get the work publish? Where would you expect he starts his proof reading from? Mistakes are bound to be made and correction is the only way to make things right. Please, let them correct them. I'm sure Dee stands to be corrected as no one is an island of knowledge + me as an individual not only learn from these writers bt also from their readers who took it upon themselves to correct them. 2 Likes |
| Re: 1985.... 1987.... 2014--[a Crime Story] by sammyomotola: 1:11pm On May 05, 2015 |
Chris b at alart |
| Re: 1985.... 1987.... 2014--[a Crime Story] by Skimpledawg(m): 1:57pm On May 05, 2015 |
Slimzjoe:Ifaa hear piim again, u go hear ween |
| Re: 1985.... 1987.... 2014--[a Crime Story] by ElvisGee94(m): 3:58pm On May 05, 2015 |
Paddi... U good... Dis ll b d first time i am commenting.... I hv read virtually all ur works n i can tell dat U hv improved alot... Keep d good work going... Love d way U arrange ur plot,setting n d conversation... It has a touch of professionallism.. Love dis story...... I must confess u made me become a member.. I was cool wit just d Guess tin until U threaten to send d concluding part to pals dat hv bin commenting i knew ma time was up... Good tin U did tho.... Good work bro... |
| Re: 1985.... 1987.... 2014--[a Crime Story] by Nobody: 4:44pm On May 05, 2015 |
Slimzjoe:My dear, every writer want/need corrections & criticisms to improve,yes! We understood perfectly what he meant,but dee needs correction,and the critic is doing it in a civil and polite way. If you see where others are correcting eeh,you go fear! |
| Re: 1985.... 1987.... 2014--[a Crime Story] by Sirme411(m): 6:07pm On May 05, 2015 |
Slimzjoe:I can't Remember D Last Tym Uncle Dee Said No 1 shuld Correct Him.....No 1 z Perfect....Xo Bro Draw Ur Claws Baq In...let Him Be Corrected |
| Re: 1985.... 1987.... 2014--[a Crime Story] by malonephill(m): 6:13pm On May 05, 2015 |
kenwins: |
| Re: 1985.... 1987.... 2014--[a Crime Story] by Nobody: 6:54pm On May 05, 2015 |
Sirme411: Seconded |
| Re: 1985.... 1987.... 2014--[a Crime Story] by Hennyhorlah(f): 8:55pm On May 05, 2015 |
A great well done to u,am falling in luv wit d story buh its taking much longer dan I expected.pls make it more faster.......lemme quickly get u a bottle of coke *catwalks* |
| Re: 1985.... 1987.... 2014--[a Crime Story] by D9ty7(m): 7:05am On May 06, 2015 |
Good morning guys. In response to some comments that were dropped yesterday, I want to use this opportunity to repeat the everyday request that we writers make. "Do not hesitate as a reader to point out mistakes, grammatical blunders and any form of oversight in our works." The reason why this story is being put up here is not to entertain the readers, but to get criticised and corrected in any way. And I hope to gettl more of those as the story progresses. 1 Like |
| Re: 1985.... 1987.... 2014--[a Crime Story] by labaski(f): 7:23am On May 06, 2015 |
D9ty7:. okay sir |
| Re: 1985.... 1987.... 2014--[a Crime Story] by Sirme411(m): 7:45am On May 06, 2015 |
D9ty7:Broda Adult Slimzjoe *JawDrops* |
| Re: 1985.... 1987.... 2014--[a Crime Story] by Slimzjoe(m): 8:05am On May 06, 2015 |
Sirme411: Enough said Boy....Get a hold of Yourself |
| Re: 1985.... 1987.... 2014--[a Crime Story] by seyilaw3(m): 8:05am On May 06, 2015 |
D9ty7:nice job bro.kip it up |
| Re: 1985.... 1987.... 2014--[a Crime Story] by sammyomotola: 9:40am On May 06, 2015 |
D9ty7:anyway or anyhow. just go on with ur good works |
| Re: 1985.... 1987.... 2014--[a Crime Story] by unilever(m): 9:42am On May 06, 2015 |
Finally caught up. Nice job oga D9. Saw the story on first page and went ahead to read it cause i enjoyed ur all in a circle. Keep it up. |
| Re: 1985.... 1987.... 2014--[a Crime Story] by Nobody: 9:49am On May 06, 2015 |
Oya update now,before my sub finish |
| Re: 1985.... 1987.... 2014--[a Crime Story] by Sirme411(m): 10:36am On May 06, 2015 |
Slimzjoe:Well Since "Boy's" Are Allowed to Talk On Nairaland .....I would Take Daht As a compliment..... |
| Re: 1985.... 1987.... 2014--[a Crime Story] by Nobody: 11:43am On May 06, 2015 |
Wow..this is getting tougher |
| Re: 1985.... 1987.... 2014--[a Crime Story] by Onemansquad(m): 5:19pm On May 06, 2015 |
Sirme411:bia u dis man ah don dy watch u 4 dis thread since...ah wil bounce u outta hia nd i wil shoot u if u survive i shoot u agn |
| Re: 1985.... 1987.... 2014--[a Crime Story] by Sirme411(m): 5:31pm On May 06, 2015 |
[quote author=Onemansquad post=33480431] bia u dis man ah don dy watch u 4 dis thread since...ah wil bounce u outta hia nd i wil shoot u if u survive i shoot u agn [/quoteU din't talk Wen Ur Broda Called sumpple "kidults"....it's Now dah I'm Talkin....U wanna Bounce Me Out  LOL |
| Re: 1985.... 1987.... 2014--[a Crime Story] by Shebarh(f): 7:05pm On May 06, 2015 |
Onemansquad:wicked killer ;Doga dee chop knucku.. ya d bomb |
| Re: 1985.... 1987.... 2014--[a Crime Story] by Onemansquad(m): 10:17pm On May 06, 2015 |
Shebarh:shey hav warned u dat i dnt wnt 2 c u here wen am here skimpledawg!! Abg luk 4 cane 4 me |
| Re: 1985.... 1987.... 2014--[a Crime Story] by Shebarh(f): 10:40am On May 07, 2015 |
Onemansquad:go and get d cain ya self.. stop sending him... wicked killer... oga dee no update |
| Re: 1985.... 1987.... 2014--[a Crime Story] by stuff46(m): 1:33pm On May 07, 2015 |
Brov, its isnt that way. How can he get better if de choose to over-look the corrections or correct them in one's brain? Slimzjoe: Skimpledawg, were you de? |
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