oh boy see as spana take score agnness ooo!!,issa goallll !!!! congrat papa pikin at last,nice work boss!

spana u done become fada

Own goal is a goooooooooooo oooooooooaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaal

Youngzubi:



tem!!! tem!!!! for u my man

One love blooda...I dey feel u seriously...gberaaaa one mama

Youngzubi you are natural and of a raw talent.
I love the dynamic of your writing.

from love life to hard life, this portray of how the world is going now ,we all love riches and good life, but we should always be careful of the choices we make.

as for the Agnesss baby na you get am.

ewuo! that was too harsh on mummy ( the shouting)

ride on bro.I der your back. thumb up!

you gat my vote!

Na from clap dance dey start, I don c the belle teytey... Youngzubi, after you na you

Junior Spana on d way

Youngzubi, wetin make me vote you na the consistency at which you dey update.. show say you carry us for mind. But this dope update come get as e be as you come begin halla and throw big big insult for Ma'le. E no go well as a real Warri wey we be so. Tem Tem we get respect for Ma'le na unto say na them be the first love wey we sabi.

On a serious note, try make you no dey present the writer as person wey no get respect and as such Warri youth as people wey dey insult their Ma'le. Make we learn lesson.

AREA! I pin for Udu Road

gbefun!!! i dey gbadun your flow more ink to ur pen blooda

tojahh:
Youngzubi, wetin make me vote you na the consistency at which you dey update.. show say you carry us for mind. But this dope update come get as e be as you come begin halla and throw big big insult for Ma'le. E no go well as a real Warri wey we be so. Tem Tem we get respect for Ma'le na unto say na them be the first love wey we sabi.

On a serious note, try make you no dey present the writer as person wey no get respect and as such Warri youth as people wey dey insult their Ma'le. Make we learn lesson.

AREA! I pin for Udu Road

great observation bro,but the story get wia e dey head to,infact in other not to begin bore una wey dey read am i won begin work towards the ending becos the story get season two, i go make the lessons more clear in the ending so relax my man

for the too much insult i go work on it,so dat e nor go too much next time,but the insult was needed in dat area

thank u still ur guy youngzubi

swiz123 i use this medium to thank u for the mistakes which u pointed out,i worked on this update with reference to those mistakes u pointed out,as a writer i totally understood ur point thank u once again for the love,please do read the update and give me a feedback also point out any other area u felt i should work on thank u






jah bless!!!!!!!![/quote]
@ youngzubi

Your narrative is getting better and more realistic. However, you must improve your descriptive ability.

Starting from your characters, your readers can't even tell what they look like. You've never given any detailed description of any of them. I think big mama needs one.

Buying that duplex is your biggest achievement so far; yet, you couldn't even spare a paragraph to describe what the duplex looks like.

A writer's ability to give detailed description makes him stand out. I sincerely hope you improve on that.

Lastly, if you want to contract the words 'you are ', the correct way to write it is : 'you're'. As a writer, using "u'er' undermines your ability. Never make such 'cheap' mistake again.

tojahh:
Youngzubi, wetin make me vote you na the consistency at which you dey update.. show say you carry us for mind. But this dope update come get as e be as you come begin halla and throw big big insult for Ma'le. E no go well as a real Warri wey we be so. Tem Tem we get respect for Ma'le na unto say na them be the first love wey we sabi.

On a serious note, try make you no dey present the writer as person wey no get respect and as such Warri youth as people wey dey insult their Ma'le. Make we learn lesson.

AREA! I pin for Udu Road

The insults were as a result of the ritual which they went through; it changed their approach to life.

swiz123:



swiz123 i use this medium to thank u for the mistakes which u pointed out,i worked on this update with reference to those mistakes u pointed out,as a writer i totally understood ur point thank u once again for the love,please do read the update and give me a feedback also point out any other area u felt i should work on thank u






jah bless!!!!!!!!
@ youngzubi

Your narrative is getting better and more realistic. However, you must improve your descriptive ability.

Starting from your characters, your readers can't even tell what they look like. You've never given any detailed description of any of them. I think big mama needs one.

Buying that duplex is your biggest achievement so far; yet, you couldn't even spare a paragraph to describe what the duplex looks like.

A writer's ability to give detailed description makes him stand out. I sincerely hope you improve on that.

Lastly, if you want to contract the words 'you are ', the correct way to write it is : 'you're'. As a writer, using "u'er' undermines your ability. Never make such 'cheap' mistake again.

i owe u a lot brother,i never realise all these,u just opened my eye and to be sincere,you'er right

i will take my time to work more and would definitely try as much as possible to shed more light on how each of my main characters looks like


i respect u brother,thanks for the responds

am still a learner and would get better just like u said,so bear with me,only u the readers can see the mistakes

Episode ..............29





life goes on!
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for a gang to always succeed in dia mission,spiritual consultation suppose be secondary issue,onto say na naija we dey,everybody get him own jazz,some dey wear am for body,some dey swallow am while some people na ju-ju him self


watin i dey try make una understand be say,we nor fit put our hope of survival ontop that ritual protection wey we carry out,if care is not taken one day go be one day we go jam peson or gang wey get stronger power and protection then we own, then monkey go-go' market him nor go return,if people like the great anini fit fall then any better-sensed peson suppose know say jazz get expiry date,so as a gang we focus our main means of survival ontop our human abilities
onto say nobody have ever been born with gun for him hand to become a great assassin,we make ourselves watin people call us,supernatural powers dey exist only in cartoon network,nor go try such nonsense here in naija except you want make ya own witch hang for electric pool,this one na reality nobi Commando film


as the gang leader my top priority nah to always see say the gang succeed in every mission,brain work nah my own,as assassins nor dey write down their plans ontop paper,everything nah metal calculation,so your ability to calculate,put things together within seconds determines how great you be in the field of assassination"
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bobo wake me this morning with better banging for my door,ontop say nah drug enhanced sleep i enter yesterday after my ma'le yan that heartbreaking news,i sleep without dreaming at all,u fit call am empty dream


gboo!!!! gboo!! gboo!!!,he jam three heavy banging for my door, viam! i jab up as headache wey dey ring like alarm begin samah my head,i manage drag myself go unlock door


guy watin dey sup nah.......bobo yan as him enter with better smile for him face,i notice say him don go plate hair again,like i yan una before,bobo yellow sotey people come dey mistake am for white people,him tall come slim with pointed noise wey be like pencil,i swear if to say i be woman eh! i for don toast him tey tey!


nna guy!,guy! my ma'le don burst rain ontop my dry weed o!....i yan as i scratch my afro hair wey don rough finish


bro forget that level,spata don explain how e take happen give us,whether nah u give am belle or not,acceptance dey ya hand!,your mama nor fit make choice for you,as you don turn to a man dey hustle to feed your sef,you get the 100% permission to make your own decision since you nor dey under your mama wing again,so tear that level joor!!......bobo yan as him bring out some paper



nah true talk,infact i go kukuma comot mind ontop that matter make dem sort themselves out jare.........yan as i collect the papers from bobo


bro my visa don click o!!.......bobo yan with better smile for him face



eh!! o boy thank gawd for u,wow very soon u go turn chinanian........i yan


olodo labata!.......bobo yan



i be olodo " good,oya teacher correct me.....i yan


em! nobi say i nor sabi am o! but forget am for now.....he yan



ewu! wey yellow like oyibo,abeg go sidon jare!......i yan
just go begin thank gawd say ya visa don work


nah u i go dey thank,watin my paper nor fit do for me,my own blood brother nor even gree make we come dey visit him since he marry,but see as u just do me like your own brother,my dream to travel go China for years nahim you just help me achieve without me begging,see brotherly i go always appreciate this thing u do for me till i die......bobo yan as we shake hand


guy no talk like that,nah we'we so relax,help wey man give him fellow man nah "take and hold for me"becos wen the peson raise him go surely remember your help and go double am for u,so my man we go celebrate am before u travel.....i yan


ok bro,make i go do some quick runs,i fit log for hotel and return tomorrow morning.........he yan as him comot




after eating that morning,i bin dey plan to do small travel since we never get any mission when better idea enter my head nahim i gather my guys for parlour



"great be the spider gang"...i shout

"one spirit one soul!!".....they respond


i greet una my brothers brothers,as we all don agree to do this thing together,we all make up our mind say nah either we hama or we die trying, but if no life must be wasted then no time go be wasted,as una leader i won begin see una abilities,e go useless and dey senseless for us to just carry gun jump into mission without any experience on fire to fire battle,we need to train our mind well,we need to get some moral and at least get small taste on how gun mission take be before the real mission



better idea!"......Stevo yan


ah trust spana,nahim make me dey respect am,him sense nobi hia o!......simple yan


good,so my suggestion be say tonight we go begin our mission,we need to face gun battle small in other to get ourselves prepared,we go rob bank this night........i yan


" correct!!!........erotic yan


" supported boss!!!........sentino stretch out him hand as everybody do thesame we seal the idea


for now i go give una position and duty post based on una physical Appearance since i never see watin una dey capable of which is the main purpose of this idea,during the mission i go dey watch everybody's move,your performance go determine the position wey i go put you



so Stevo since u no slim u no fat and u sabi target well,you go dey handle the sniper,your position nah to always stay far away from the premises wia we go dey operate,make sure wia u go hide go give u clear and better view of the compound wia we won go operate,make sure u clear any opponent wey surface or block our wey from wia u go hide.......i yan to Stevo


yes boss your wish na my command.......Stevo yan


good.....i reply



"simpl!!"


yes boss!!".........simple yan



u go be our watch dog,your position nah to stay outside,dey watch how people around take dey react ontop our presence,if any officer or security personnel surface your job nah to alert us,never you dare follow us in,no matter what,just hang outside dey shuk head piom piom enter different direction to see if anything won happen,make sure to alert us of any danger so we go fit find our way,hope u understand??


sure boss,i be spy,i be the watch dog wey go dey sniff around once i perceive any danger i go halla una through our Bluetooth communication.....simple yan


"good!"......i yan


then sentino,spata,erotic and me go enter inside onto say four of us get thesame hug body stature,we go face our opponent face to face,and you sentino since you be banker u suppose sabi everything about them,so nah u go handle their manager,make sure say him open their vault......i yan


no le'le boss,watch and see,i go do my part exactly as u yan.....sentino yan



correct!,great be the spider gang"....i shout




"one spirit!! one soul!!!!"

erotic run go carry wine as we begin celebrate


later-later sentino waka go back to him house tho him dey live with us but onto say him never pack out,he normal visit there once in a while,while me and spata go bar go Cruz,we just relax dey enjoy the cool music till others later come join us even sentino



we begin drink dey chop pepper soup,till around 4:00 nahim we settle our bill shuk head enter house


within 25mins everybody don change into our uniform,black all through with spider logo on our back ,i bring out the spider cross like chaplet share am to eveeybody nahim be our connection to that tree wey go dey receive every pain or bullet wey hit us


e get one special car wey big mama give us,the car is specially designed to hide weapons nobody fit discover weapons wey dey inside the moto,no matter how dem take search am dem nor fit see anything ,so we hide all our weapons ranging from,4 pistol,1 sniper and 8 AK 47

Stevo,sentino and simple use one lexus while me,spata and erotic use the golden dragon,nahim be the name wey we give the special car, onto say him bonnet resemble dragon teeth as the moto carry golden colour



1:55hrs later,we reach our destination,omo e no easy o!,as the place far from festac,we choose far place onto security reason


within 9seconds Stevo don already position himself opposite the bank

i look as everybody follow my instructions without delay,nahim i yan enter the Bluetooth wey dey my ear"una don set?"


"yes boss"dem whisper enter their own Bluetooth"


like the shield for wwe wrestling we match forward with our guns well positioned,powaa!! we scatter dia gate as people wey lineup for ATM stand scatter!


to be continued



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This is serious

gem!! gem!!!! zubby why e come be wia the story begin sweet me pass u just cut am,Chai e no good oo!!!,try finish dat bank matter this night biko make sleep gree me becos my mind go just hang dia!!!!

Spata and Spana.

From konjified boys to hardcore men

It's Youngzubi on the beat. Nice one man

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Neat job

Well done Youngzubi

nice write up, keep it up

Great development bro.


Well done!!

i wish I was watching this....Great story. keep it up.

The Story Just Collect Another Face, Weldun Youngzubi Hope You Know Sey Na Ur Bk We Dae So.

I thought this story is about the sexcapades of Spana and Spata?
It's taking on the tone of a thriller like Tarasha. Only difference is the continued pidgin english.

this tory turn action kudos bro i dey feel u youngi youngi zubi zubi abeg KONTINUE!!

Episode.......30


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mission possible
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I look back as i sight Stevo well positioned,him focus on the camera wey dey ontop the sniper with one eye closed then the other eye open"good @stevo i whisper enter the Bluetooth"

"yes boss"..he yan


"spata!"


"yes boss"


"first thing u go do once the atmosphere don clear nah to blow that security door wey lead inside the bank.....i yan


"noted"....he yan



"erotic!"

"yes!"...


"coordinate everybody wey dey that ATM machine,i know say all of dem go begin run once we enter,so make sure u treat their fuckup,if anybody disregard blow him head off!,no time to check time!


"ok boss!....



with dat,me,spata,erotic and sentino begin waka near the bank,one security guy wey sidon for plastic chair,him keep ak 47 ontop him laps as him dey poff cigarette

he jab up instantly him eye jam us in a swift motion he position his gun as him begin scatter bullet for our body tatatatatatata!!!!!!!!!


after him don waste bullet finish nahim come stop,but watin him expect nobi watin him see as all of us just stand dey look am like say nah toy gun him use dey shoot us,he look left,look right as him pick race


"Stevo clear him"....i yan i never finish sef as the guy head scatter!

"good job!"


like shield for WWE wrestling,we match forward scatter their gate then bounce inside as people wey full for ATM stand scatter

four security men surface instantly,like say dem don do the practical within a second dem circle us as we stand for their middle

"Stevo!"


"sir"

"hold ya fire"

"eh!"


"just hold am,i won observe something"...i yan enter the Bluetooth onto say i never want make him shoot any of dem



i watch as their oga,him go be around 50yrs old with bar head like grinding stone,him beards don over grow as the thing no gree peson see him mouth,tall,dark as him two eyes enter inside,him light cigarette begin smoke as him step out

"una don enter lions den today,just begin ya last prayer,2mins remain before i go send una go heaven....he yan


"rubbish,i hiss"Stevo! clear dem!"


from no wia bullet begin hit dem,the man turn only to see him boys full ground as their brain scatter every wia


"my guys separate immediately as each of dem go begin do as i already instruct dem


the man turn as him sight only me standing for him front,he comot dagger from him pocket,he rush me as he force the knife enter my belle,he comot am then repeat am again for seven times but nothing do me,blood no even dey the knife sef,the man shift back as bullet from no wia scatter him head

"correct!".....i hail Stevo


"nah my duty!"...he yan




i look the atm side as i sight everybody laying down flat facing the floor with erotic pointing gun for their head"keep ya eyes on dem erotic,i yan

"ok boss"erotic whisper enter Bluetooth



i begin waka enter inside the bank,spata don already blow their security door as him and sentino don dey operate inside


as enter nahim i see as everybody lay down flat for ground,dem plenty,even the bank workers and people wey come deposit money

"wia the manager!!!..i shout

"boss come hear watin this goat dey yan o!....sentino yan



i move go meet him wia him stand hold one lady with pistol wey him point for her head


"watin??....i yan as i near dem


"i bin dey ask dem to provide their manager since but she just dey talk rubbish.....sentino yan


madam wia una manager?....i shout


please believe me,he didnt come to work today,he actually went on trip to dubia yesterday....she yan with her leg shaking


who be him assistance??....i yan


"i sir!.....she yan


"good,wia una vault dey....i yan

em! sir its only the manager that have access to it....she yan,the thing vex me die,i for shoot her but onto say she fit be the only peson wey go sabi open their vault nahim i cool down,i waka go drag one young cashier up


now look me i shout ontop the lady head,as she look my side


i tear the young guy one hot slap,as the thing carry him head go jam for wall,i waka go drag him up again"open ya mouth i shout

the guy open mouth as i put my pistol inside him mouth pooaa!!! i release bullet inside him mouth as blood scatter ontop their desk,the guy use back land on the floor,as the woman scream ahhhhhh!!!



shut up!!!!!...i shout


now u don see say we mean business,nobi film we come act hia,so wia una vault dey for the last time!!...i shout


i dont know!!!!...the woman shout with her lips shaking maybe na fear,but she still dey prove strong head


my eye red instantly as i rush the woman piam! i kick her leg comot from ground as she do back flit go jam head for table,i rush her again as i use my small knife tear her clothes off,i just have to wicked the lady becos time don dey go anything fit happen

i naked the lady as i waka go meet one guy wey lay down for floor,i comot him belt,then waka go meet the woman


lay down flat onto that table, i shout!,she still dey prepare to carry out the order,but watin dey give her moral wey she just dey do like say she get spare life for house


with vex i begin wipe the ego comot for her body till she begin beg


blood begin rush out from her nose,mouth as she lay down for ground dey point some wia


"hello boss!....simple yan enter the Bluetooth



"watin!".....i reply


"i just sight one fat man now, him wear suit,him follow back of the bank tear race enter one bullet proof moto as dem speed off,with my observation na their manager be that.......simple yan



"shiitt!!"....i shout as i waka go drag the lady up,she direct me enter one room like dat

remove that AC on the wall she yan

i tear one better blow ontop the AC as everything scatter,something like glass come dey for the wall as the AC scatter finish


she stagger go there then begin draw something like pattern for the glass like magic the wall shift go one side as one big iron surface,for the body e carry botton wey dem write 123 to 9 and 0 then one big botton wey dem write enter

she press 18 digits then press enter botton as the iron open,money just full every wia,well arranged in bundles


"simple i yan enter the Bluetooth"


"yes boss"....he yan


"drive the lexus inside".....i yan


"ok boss".he yan


"Stevo!"...i whisper


"sir!"...he yan


"keep at alert,simple don comot, blow anybody wey surface at all!,make sure nobody enter inside the bank...i yan

"noted boss"...he yan



"within few seconds simple rush inside with two 1000kg bag,sharp sharp we load the bags with money as spata,simple and sentino drag am outside enter the lexus


i look the lady,i for no shoot her but for the fact she lie give me come delay me join,i place the pistol ontop her head as i blow her skull"never tamper with a man wey hold gun,always put ya life and survival first gawd punish you! i yan as bounce outside

erotical!!! go enter moto i shout as him leave those people wey dey lay down for atm stand go enter moto



i waka go meet dem as i sight soldier truck with 8 soldier dead body for ground,i look Stevo as him smile do thump up"good job bro i yan as we shuk head enter moto,we release bullet for sky as we zoom off


our moto increase speed immediately we burst out for express,we begin drive roughly as some moto begin park oneside for us to drive pass

25mins later we sight two soldier amurd truck chasing us

i yan spata say make him change direction since nah dem carry the money,while i continue driving straight with golden dragon so that dem no go chase spata

40mins of long chase dem begin fire bullet for our moto but e just useless becos our moto nah bullet proof we sef nah bullet proof

still running from one street to another with those soldiers,1:23mins later i receive call from spata say dem don reach house,then i stop our moto for road yan Stevo say make dem drive dey go house as i stand for middle of the road with two explosive for my hand,golden dragon zoom off leaving white smoke everywhere


i don already calculate my moves,since their truck dey high i go fit pass under freely


their truck begin surface with great speed as their full light nor gree me see well,so i use my hand to shed my face as dem begin shoot me from different direction,bullet just dey tear my body like rain,i begin wonder the kind blood and mark wey go dey that tree body by now


the truck driver notice say those bullet no do me anything, as i expect him,nah watin i know say him go won do,he increase him speed with aim to jam me,i smile as i prepare for action

the truck near me just small make him jam me nahim i dive enter under the truck,sharpaly i magnet one explosive under the truck as the heat of the engine won suffocate me,i still lai down flat for ground waiting for the second truck, the idiot driver won use him tyer smash my head as him sight me laying down for ground but i quickly shift as the truck speed pass, since i nor fit put the second explosive under the truck,i quickly throw am enter inside the truck as the soldiers wey dey inside throw am back for me omo i tear race i no know say moto dey come with speed for my back just for me to turn nahim the moto hit me gboooooo!!!!,i land inside gutter as i quick press the explosion botton gbooaaaa !!!! the first truck catch fire as human parts begin fly enter different direction

the moto wey jam me still dey try reverse,i quickly rush the driver as i drag him outside,without wasting time i enter the moto reverse and zoom off festac straight,nah wen i don enter road dey tear better speed as fresh air begin cool my body,i look the passenger sit as my eyes jam one beautiful babe wey sidon jeje for passenger front seat

"what!!! ,....i shout


"please!! dont kill me!!!.....she scream

to be continued.....


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youngzubi is the man,guy u'er talented!!!!

Jerryolumide:

baba na your head creativity die and resurrect. This your story dope like cocaine, sweet like tight kpekus �� more ink to your pen bro

bros no dey quote update nah

Youngzubi...youngzubi...youngzubi...go...go...go...I dey feel u like fela Igbo...abeg no jus stop...the any is the beginning for u...oya gberaaaa...Madiba hail