Youngzubi:




sir the story is 100% fiction, that red agent part both his stunts and all that was just my way to bring in American and whitemen as whole,their way of action movie which our movie industry here in Nigeria is yet bring in

movie lovers i mean those who love action movies will understand what i mean

i love actions,with our imaginations i think we can actually make the impossible become possible

"fiction" yea! thats why it is called fiction,for it gives us the chance to express the extraordinary,once a story is not real then the readers should expect "beyond" the real life event,but" it shouldn't be over done,and thats where your point is directly pointing at,i gat that

nollywood need to upgrade
there need serious upgrading with powerful technologies
we'er sick and tired of a victim dying before bullet hit him or her


i really appreciate your kind gesture,please dont give up on your boy, i l'll try my best till you agree with my work,thank you very much sir

still your guy youngzubi

He nods...
May you continue to be a solution to your generation.

softy:



Live and let live bro. He has taken ur advice in good faith. This is a story for fun not for academic purpose.

This is how Hollywood started..... Not every post needs to be criticised. Thank you for all ur points.

Young zubi, kindly continue.

@honourable, no hard feelings though.

.......This is how Hollywood started.

Hey ,who told you that??

Let me tell you,it was NOT exactly like that or even closed to that..
And more over we are no longer living in the PAST.

He smiled....
This was episode 41,right
I have only commented TWICE!!!


I tell you this most solemnly, your "youngzubi kindly continue won't help him".

Let's assist him in becoming an extraordinary writer.

You are welcome!!!

If you know,you know!

honourable356:
.......This is how Hollywood started.

Hey ,who told you that??

Let me tell you,it was NOT exactly like that or even closed to that..
And more over we are no longer living in the PAST.

He smiled....
This was episode 41,right
I have only commented TWICE!!!True talk bro! Once you are shying away from been criticised, my brother, I doubt it if such person will go beyond the shore of nairaland. Well-done YoungZubi.


I tell you this most solemnly, your "youngzubi kindly continue won't help him".

Let's assist him in becoming an extraordinary writer.

You are welcome!!!

If you know,you know!

True talk bro! Shying away from criticism will only limit you and confine you to the shore of nairaland only. Constructive and reflective criticism always help one to grow in life, in as much as you are ready to accept it.

If I no read your tory I no day get chill
Abeg dey keep me going

honourable356:
Youngzubi stop messing up a nice plot with the impossible. I mean,you see how real everything is until you suddenly got to the secret agent side of the story...

*****the red guy fly up from wia im bin stand,for air he release multiple bullets within seconds all oga frank men from a to z full ground as the red guy land stand for ground gawwam!! with the two golden pistol for im hand*******



Unless they were few other people recruited by the said secret agent, it is quiet impossible for one person in the "open" to successful gun down to the head more than ten men all armed to the teeth and standing at different position...with just two pistol and with an undeniable accuracy.

Haba!!!!

This is over exaggeration.... even Jack baeur can't do this and neither can any special force soldier perform such stunts. It is not possible to shot many people down while in the air with just two pistol to the extent that by the time you land,you have successful killed them all with a bullet to the head. Haba nah!!!!

Wait,wait,wait a minutes...are you in a hurry to finish the story? Then you are making a mistake..a big one.

Why rush??
Calm down....
Give detail description that will get your audience nodding firmly in agreement.

Indeed you can do it...it is just a matter of time before you get it right.
Be rest assured that i will be on your neck every now and then until you give me no reason to object repeatedly.

Ride on!

Who da Bleep is this one

honourable356:


He nods...
May you continue to be a solution to your generation.

big Amen to that

about the rush,is like you'er here,i really wonna end the story,since people see this one as a "weak" thing due to the fact that am just starting and this is my first story that pulled audience, the PIDGIN thing limits my choice of words,yea!,it degrades my storyline,i struggle so hard to put things in place,but i promise you sir,my next story after sex na food will say it all

with all your great criticism and that of others i think i now know how to go about things,i just wanted to write for fun and build my imaginary ability but now am really having a second thought,i will come out full!!!!

English story coming up soon,let me just cool my head,refreshen up after sex na food then i will do it, others that have been doing it well all along doesn't have two heads


thank you for waking me from my slumber,time to work more!

Preciousbouy:


Who da Bleep is this one

no! no! no!!,i strongly disagree with this bro
i dont like such please brotherly,if his criticism doesn't go well with you, then quote reasonably,dont use such abusive word

donvicky2007:
The Suspense is getting high.
Can the Spider be able to track the secret caller. Time will tell.
Let's keep our fingers crossed as the storyline is getting more interesting.
Keep it up Youngzubi, more ink in your pen.

thanks man

👍🏽

youngzubi thanks for the update.
more wisdom fall on you .
interesting .
I laugh till water is coming out . guy you too much .
centino were you dey .

Youngzubi:


big Amen to that

about the rush,is like you'er here,i really wonna end the story,since people see this one as a "weak" thing due to the fact that am just starting and this is my first story that pulled audience, the PIDGIN thing limits my choice of words,yea!,it degrades my storyline,i struggle so hard to put things in place,but i promise you sir,my next story after sex na food will say it all

with all your great criticism and that of others i think i now know how to go about things,i just wanted to write for fun and build my imaginary ability but now am really having a second thought,i will come out full!!!!

English story coming up soon,let me just cool my head,refreshen up after sex na food then i will do it, others that have been doing it well all along doesn't have two heads


thank you for waking me from my slumber,time to work more!

Bro keep it up man! Just so you should know this your story inspired me to try something new too. Just keep doing your thing bro, bigger you I pray.
As per the bolded trust me its good to write for your readers but you are your 1st and most important audience. After all you are the first person who reads every update. Ι think there's a saying by Cyril Connolly that goes 'it's better to write for self and have no public than to write for the public and have no self' something like that and trust me the truth in those words really opened my eyes. Just keep doing your thing bro, its Lit.

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I Might Not Be A Writer, Hell I Can't Even Write Bee, I Might Even Join The Bandwagon Screaming More!!!, I Really Can't Advice You On How To Write Since I Am Below Amature In The World Of Literature But Youngzubi The Goal Is To See To It That You Grow And Better Your Paper And Pen Skills.
I Don't Know Your Person But I'd Advice You Take Advice As Pointed Out By Others Humbly And Uncle I Will See You At The Top.



Nwanem Cheers

Your update made my day keep it coming Boookworm come see

Name this one I call "every single was a hit, back to back" guy u try wella.
As per over exaggeration wey somebody complain, I believe say name anything wet writer see fit he go write for him audience. so ride on, aftrall na fiction "think and write"

God bless you youngzubi. you are always on point. more ink to your pen, more data to ur phone

souloho19:


Bro keep it up man! Just so you should know this your story inspired me to try something new too. Just keep doing your thing bro, bigger you I pray.
As per the bolded trust me its good to write for your readers but you are your 1st and most important audience. After all you are the first person who reads every update. Ι think there's a saying by Cyril Connolly that goes 'it's better to write for self and have no public than to write for the public and have no self' something like that and trust me the truth in those words really opened my eyes. Just keep doing your thing bro, its Lit.

BOSS!,i sight you bro

see as you just boost and build my moral with those few words of yours


'it's better to write for self and have no public than to write for the public and have no self'

am glad you appreciate my effort, i can never know it all, and i love it when am corrected for making mistakes,but some people tends to kill my morals when they insult and bushitt my work instead of constructive criticism


thank you man!

rowdymind:
I Might Not Be A Writer, Hell I Can't Even Write Bee, I Might Even Join The Bandwagon Screaming More!!!, I Really Can't Advice You On How To Write Since I Am Below Amature In The World Of Literature But Youngzubi The Goal Is To See To It That You Grow And Better Your Paper And Pen Skills.
I Don't Know Your Person But I'd Advice You Take Advice As Pointed Out By Others Humbly And Uncle I Will See You At The Top.



Nwanem Cheers

nna'e ndia na tiyezim confusion na'isi

micholalo:
God bless you youngzubi. you are always on point. more ink to your pen, more data to ur phone

Amen!,he will bless us all

Youngzubi:



nna'e ndia na tiyezim confusion na'isi

lol

My man! More grace to your able

Keep moving bro i dey fill u

Owu Iha Ka Ndi Bayi Na Akpo Isimgbaka, Youngzubi J'isike Atulegwu

nice write up

youngzubi rrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrriiiiiiiiiiiiiiddddddddddd ooooooonnnnnn!!!!!!!!

see anybody wey nor like this story its simple geerrraaa rrra! here!!!!!! mehnnn!!!,see i get craze o!,i just keep calm dey observe since,how peson go see fiction story and expect it to be real,nah tv back im dey watch for house?,jet li,brus lee commando all of them is any of their action real?,no i.need an answer,ok"i.agree with some areas i mean the police and military saga but that doesn't make the story useless,wait wait do u even know how addicted i and other readers av been to this great work,mehn youngzubi your talent is raw!!,always take correction sha,i see u at the top pkokaa!! brotherly

My guy. Dis critics dem get phd from Harvard university

Pinkfeet:
youngzubi thanks for the update.

more wisdom fall on you .

interesting .

I laugh till water is coming out . guy you too much .

centino were you dey .

I dey here my bro. I dey check in regularly for inspiration.

Youngzubi na youngboss! well done my bro.

honourable356. I see you my oga.

This story is becoming more and more interesting. Expecially the English/America movie stunt part. I love it. YoungZubi please Ride on. More Ink to your Fountain Pen. #BrotherlyLove

Well done Youngzubi

Me sef wan become secret agent....
Update pls

rather than having secret agent shoot all of Mr Frank's bodyguards with just two guns u cud have said he beat them up.
we have seen Jason Statham, Jet Li, Steven Seagal etc just to mention a few beat up enemies wit guns.
Jason Statham will not even get a stain on his white shirt after the fight.
Great story tho, keep it up

This i s really Amazing , am loving it. Pls keep it coming

Pls keep it coming