PURELY FICTIONAL
Wisdom Wisdom wake up sounded d voice of my mom itz tym 4 school,I woke up with a sigh,went straight 2 d bathrum,with those sleepy eyes i took ma mum's brush which she uses in dyeing her,i put on d tooth paste,brushed ma teeth,and there was no mirrow in d bathroom,so u gat to see d color of ma teeth,(black-brown),i took ma bath prepared 4 school,den our wicked driver drove me 2 school,as i got to the school,i met a girl i have been dating since ma j.s.s2 called christy, she rushed me 4 d normal greeting,as i try kiss d girl,she shouted and ran back ,on d process she collided with a teacher carrying scientific equipments,na so she hit head 4 d apparatus,den she fainted,na dat tym na im i no sey i don enta hot okra soup,jux because of ma teeth,as i ran to d venue of d incident,d teacher asked me to xplain wat transpired b/w me and christy,out of fear as i open mouth,na so i fart sori,I mess dose kind mess wey dey confuse blind man abt war,,sori i cant update any longer,let d comment roll along

I believe say this story go sweet well well. But you get many work to do sha.
1. Stop to dey use abbreviation. I.e rum for room. E.t.c
2. Make use of paragraph well well.
3. Work on your spacing.
4. Use quote i.e " for any conversation between you or any person.
This na the few things i notice for now.
Well done bro.

As I reach house that afternoon,with my two days suspension letter, my dad ask me wetin happen i explain give am,my dad laff to d extent him blow one kind big fart(MESS) wey make our 7months baby wake up begin dey cry,i begin pity the pikin,i Waka go bathroom to go check my brush na dat tym i come see brush wey i use in the morning,i begin pity christy yet notin i fit do for her because she dey clinic,so as i from bathroom waka comot i go dining room/kitchen go eat,after i don eat finish i wear my football jersey and tug go play ball 4 street,as i enter street naim ma street guys begin laff me,sey i be dirty guy,as i try xplain give them,one big fat strong bully wey im papa name kunle,still dey laugh na im out of anger i forget who him be,naim i rush kunle beat me enter gutter,na so dat day football use end,i run enter house with all d wound,ma mum begin nurse the wound 4 me with antiseptic,i begin shout like mad boy,i shout to the extent i no know when i use go sleep,d next thing wey i see be sey morning don reach,,,,,,,,,,,,more comments needed,tanx 4 d advice @ yemi

Sori sey i neva update since abeg i fit get 20 comments b4 i continue

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