This story is a fiction,any resemblance of it to anybody or event is a coincidence,big time o.please sit tight and enjoy the adventure of prince Bambashe

Looking at u with red eyes, atleast this would kip u away from my neck for now.

na u sabi oo oga rock,infact dis 1 jst gave me a big reason 2 disturb u as my nl pman.d story ll begin wen i ve mb,cos am short of it.get ready u ve a big work 2do o.u beta go and update nw o

Danpersie31: na u sabi oo oga rock,infact dis 1 jst gave me a big reason 2 disturb u as my nl pman.d story ll begin wen i ve mb,cos am short of it.get ready u ve a big work 2do o.u beta go and update nw o

Hahaha see this man, u do thread come leave am dey wait for MB abi, u go dry for there, if i come back and u never update eh i go delete u for 2go

Ogbeni van persie abi Danpersie why u dey do us like this.
Imagine, i don comment when d story neva start.
Wait o, did i hear you say you'll start when u get mb? Smh.
Lol

my chairmen abeg make ena no vex,na mosquito and aje boys keep me o.#akpa man jazz down,anyman where trouble me dis year go contact,no doub#update is coming by 7:30.

Danpersie31: my chairmen abeg make ena no vex,na mosquito and aje boys keep me o.#akpa man jazz down,anyman where trouble me dis year go contact,no doub#update is coming by 7:30.

Shebi 7;30 never reach Am out of here

In the kingdom of Ekupe,a powerful kingdom that was known for its wealth,rich culture and traditions and had a very powerful king who was called king oli,because he acted like a god whose words were final.the kingdom had a prince called bombashe,he was fond of making mischief and looking fos trouble.He usually uses his horse to trample the villagers farms and he knocks down people.he was popularly known as the"notorious prince bambashe". His mischievious behaviour became so much that his father the king threatened to make another person king in his stead.
One night, he had a dream which turned his life around.

(gudn9t pple make i go apologise 2 rock,my nl father and iron church clothe)gudn9t pple and sweet dreams.peace

--CONTINUATION--

It so happened that one fateful night when the prince was sleeping that he had a dream.In the dream he saw a very beautiful,pretty (wey fine pass rock wife#winks# and fine pass aunty Grace and Uduak) lady who was crying, she looked like a princess and a very ugly, scary fairy (wey luk lyk troll) was tormenting and mocking her. And she was crying for help,just when he was about reaching out to save her, she and the fairy vanished.
The prince woke up worried and bothered to the extent that for two days he didnt eat anything, he just stayed in his chambers. His father became worried and asked after his well being. He was told that prince Bambashe had being indoors for two days now, he wouldnt eat or go out, even the villagers were worried what was wrong {imagine o,and if he comes out they ll complain. Maybe dats why tubaba said anything u do u must b criticized} .His father ordered for his presence, what the father saw made him jump up from his throne.

#i try ba oga 360prince,rock and d9ty,make i go shit abeg,new year shit.den check my oga threads#

am new in writing,pls i need u pple 2 help me check d story out, wat are those tinz lacking in d story.even my nairaland father is nt helping matas @the rock.d9ty and 360prince. I want to knw xo i can write d next update well .
Peace

This story wudda got me excited only if I were in primary 3. Your infusion of ur 'role models' is too much and getting annoying. My advice: close down this story. Get a better plot. Get ur freedom from ur 'role models'

wreckingball: This story wudda got me excited only if I were in primary 3. Your infusion of ur 'role models' is too much and getting annoying. My advice: close down this story. Get a better plot. Get ur freedom from ur 'role models'

thanks wrecking ball,i wuld take ur advice into consideration.i cant write a novel lyk diz.

--continuation---

When the king ordered for the prince presence in his palace, he almost jumped off because he was shocked to see the whole prince Bambashe looking tattered and stinking. He was depressed and moody, so the king asked what the problem was, after much persuasion he revealed to his father about his dream. His father then told him it was the great princess Atala, who was kidnapped two years earlier by a wicked fairy and many warriors, princes and kings that attempted to rescue her never returned. Still Bambashe was still bothered so he vowed to go and rescue her, the king tried all he could to stop him but he was determined and adamant to go. The king then ordered that the prince be prepared for the journey ahead, he was offered an army to accompany him but he turned it down and rather opted to go alone alone.

Prince Bambashe got prepared and was set to go, the who kingdom was in a gloomy state as the people didnt want their prince to die, now they know that they love him despite all his behaviours.

Watch out for the next update.will the prince go?will he succeed alone?

Man, you are trying nd d more u try the more u get better. I can see u tried infusing suspense, but i must tell u the strory is yet to strike. Here are some loopholes.
1. You introduced the prince as being wicked and violent, which makes the pple hate him right? But now you said the pple loved him. How come.
2. Pay attention to details. You introduced one Princess Attala. Let us knw d relationship dat exist btw her and d prince. From my own perspective, she should be d princes' sister. But how come he couldn't recognise her? And the king knew her at once.
3. Lastly, update regularly and make them lengthy.

princess atalla is a princess from anoda kingdom.who was captured by d wicked fairy,she was popular and famous for her beauty and d story abt her capture made her popular too which made d king recognise dat it was her immediately prince bambashe told him.
Thanks d9ty,u jst told me wat i wanna hear.God bless u.update comes 2moro morning

princess atalla is a princess from anoda kingdom.who was captured by d wicked fairy,she was popular and famous for her beauty and d story abt her capture made her popular too which made d king recognise dat it was her immediately prince bambashe told him.
Thanks d9ty,u jst told me wat i wanna hear.God bless u.update comes 2moro morning.gudn9t

Are i for real?. This is trash mehn!.

Story! Story! You know what, like someone said, it would have been interesting if you're writing for Primary 1 pupils. Try to give more descriptions. Follow the popular saying, show, don't tell. Give your readers the vivid pictures and be more articulate. Also, remove those unneccesary words in parenthesis.
Thanks...

Good morning everyone following or maybe viewing this story..

@DAN.. Hmmm sorry for not showing up for long period now, i was busy amending my own mistakes.

Concerning your story i compliment you for your diligency, good work bro...
I also encouragement you about how you started.
it's nice and well begin, but pls involve and attached yourself towards d9ty7 instructions.

I'll be checking here lateron... Take care

Good morning ladies and gentlemen...

Check dis out:
Popular and famous are two words havin the same meaning but differs in spelling...
So you can either choose one..

Pls take note boss.

thank u all guys i ve hrd wat u all ve said,i am working on dat and am trying my best 2 make it beta.pls bear wit me and i ensure u dat i ll get beta.thank u all

Good to hear that you're working on it. Don't worry you will get there

--CONTINUATION--

##THE EXODUS##
As the prince finally got prepared to go, he went to his father and said "father i know i must have brought alot of shame upon you, and i have not being the good son you ought me to be. Just want to say am sorry for hope to change that if i get another chance. Please if i don't return in a forthnight, take it that i have fallen with the rest. But until then, i am determined to save the woman i fell in love with in my dreams." Those words struck like a blow to the king, but he saw the determination in his son and was happy that for the first time his son has taken a decision as a man.
The prince went to meet the oldest man and the wisest, Ojete to give him wise ideas and teach him what to do, he wanted wisdom. Rather Ojete told him that nothing has ever defeated love, he should follow his heart and soften it, only then would he succeed. He was grateful o Ojete and saw himself now fit to face the journey ahead.

The people escorted him as he walked with determination towards the boundary of the kingdom, the people were sorrowful that their future king might not return. At the boundary, he turned and thanked the people for their kind gestures and apologised for all he had done. Just at that moment he heard a growl, the whole people that escorted him ran for their dear lives but the prince was unshaken, rather he turned and faced the dark path ahead and started his adventure.

*i have never heard of anyone that was determined like this unto death that died but would that be the case of prince Bambashe?*

bro this story is for primary school student....plz close down diz thread asap

Ooops! I thought i was writing the worst story on Nairaland......









Guys check this out,read my story its on my signature.

--CONTINUATION--

***THE COUP PLOT**
Unknown to anyone,
the king's younger brother had being hatching a coup plot against his brother since the day Bambashe had that dream. He had a plan to kill the king after the two weeks that the prince was to be away. The cabinet members sat in two rows, six seat on each row and the king's thrown was at the end, thereby making it in a way that whoever enters into the throne room must pass in between them. Three guards stood on each side of the throne to guard the king. The king's brother Zul was also a cabinet member. He planned to use that two weeks to win over the other members to his side so that he can impeach the king.

However, he had a
plan to just assasinate the king if his plans fail. He thus became a regular perpetual visitor to the houses of all the members, trying to win them over. But no one suspected any foul play in the air.

Meanwhile, in the jungle of kechi was the lonely prince walking alone,trying to find his way. He was walking briskly because his water had ran out. His cough was full of white saliva, the jungle of kechi favoured no one, though it was a jungle it dealt with those that entered it with desert characteristics.

The prince walked and stopped under an oak tree to rest for night. He lit a fire to keep off wild animals.

High up in the heavens, the gods were seeing what was happening and some of them had sympathy on him. They were watching to see how things turn out. The god of black magic was happy as he thinks that Bambashe will end up like those that came before him.
But the other gods had another plan.

Wow interesting ....












just joking... the story is; one word?

Horrible

Samanther: Wow interesting ....












just joking... the story is; one word?

Horrible

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I must confess, i made d mistake of my life by reading & commenting on this thread. To be frank its all shit.
You have no writing attributes, the best you can be is a reader.
But if u have passion for writing, you should check out correct stories, where you can gain and not some stories that are unecessarily long and comedy based.
Even me as a writer is also a learner, i hoped i could learn a thing or two from ur story but was suprised when i read d 1st update.