A Soul in Anguish

If only the future i can predict,
times witout number while i sit,
never would i have had 2 regret,
nor would i have this feared death,

a life of eternal bliss now in doubt,
my soul in anguish and so it cries out,
agonising at the pain that awaits it,
hot and steamy,d air i now breath,

My soul mortgaged 2 the grimreaper,
with promise of fame and being richer,
signed in crimson liquid off my thumb and on it a seal,
now i see it was a crappy deal,

every second i live with the thoughts in my brain,
i wish d heaven wud fall on me for i will feel less pain,
place Mt Everest on me,i wud feel less strain
my quest,my fame,my money,my women were all in vain...

like if u think my write up/Poem is kul...comment if u tink it was great

[color=#990000][/color] COOOOOOOL...!

u try with d poem but is not necessary to make it rhyme. U need to study more poems to develop urself. Beginning of each line hv to be capitalized.

Tanks gr8mind...i was always a pedestrian literature student wayback in sec sch...these are actually my first poems...am still a bigtime novice...i wud heed ur advice tho

Nice one, bro. Keep it up.

"I wish heaven would fall on me for me to feel less pain"


My fav line

timpaker: "I wish heaven would fall on me for me to feel less pain"


My fav line

hmm..nice 1 bro

OMA4U: Nice one, bro. Keep it up.

tanks

Cvesta: A Soul in Anguish

If only the future i can predict,
times witout number while i sit,
never would i have had 2 regret,
nor would i have this feared death,

a life of eternal bliss now in doubt,
my soul in anguish and so it cries out,
agonising at the pain that awaits it,
hot and steamy,d air i now breath,

My soul mortgaged 2 the grimreaper,
with promise of fame and being richer,
signed in crimson liquid off my thumb and on it a seal,
now i see it was a crappy deal,

every second i live with the thoughts in my brain,
i wish d heaven wud fall on me for i will feel less pain,
place Mt Everest on me,i wud feel less strain
my quest,my fame,my money,my women were all in vain...

like if u think my write up/Poem is kul...comment if u tink it was great

@cvesta you good.

@cvesta you good.[/quote
tanks boss

Cvesta: Tanks gr8mind...i was always a pedestrian literature student wayback in sec sch...these are actually my first poems...am still a bigtime novice...i wud heed ur advice tho

Thought a poem of one stanza is real but u hv to divide it into stanza with runs on linel, i mean enjabment that is each stanza will follow next in meaning, all literary devices has to be study and for your poem to be more meaningful u hv to use poetic language and figure of speech etc

Cvesta: @cvesta you good.[/quote
tanks boss

Cvesta: @cvesta you good.[/quote
tanks boss

study this poem

the theme is, we youth are the leader of tomorrow should the leaders of today are laying bad example, invariably future is painstaking


It is a known facts
Its imperative can not be part
egg shall turn to cock
soon piglet shall becomes pork


Garbage in, garbage out
says computer terminology
proper preparation
prevents poor performance


It is a known facts
Its imperative can not be part
adults shall be ripped
and sow shall be reaped


But It's a funny honey
to achieve the vision and the mission
Kitten copycat the Cats
and wearing their shoes


What would be its tomorrow
when its chickens are misguided
sorry, a moribund succession
tomorrow in the hand of youth

gra8mind:
study this poem

the theme is, we youth are the leader of tomorrow should the leaders of today are laying bad example, invariably future is painstaking


It is a known facts
Its imperative can not be part
egg shall turn to cock
soon piglet shall becomes pork


Garbage in, garbage out
says computer terminology
proper preparation
prevents poor performance


It is a known facts
Its imperative can not be part
adults shall be ripped
and sow shall be reaped


But It's a funny honey
to achieve the vision and the mission
Kitten copycat the Cats
and wearing their shoes


What would be its tomorrow
when its chickens are misguided
sorry, a moribund succession
tomorrow in the hand of youth

hmm..kul 1

thanks