Re: Sweet Nothings: TheScrypt by Nobody: 6:27pm On Dec 18, 2014 |
standd:
What is sensei? I really don't know grammar the way folks feel. In Somalia where I school, we don't speak big Engilishi Lol. So you left France for Somalia already? |
Re: Sweet Nothings: TheScrypt by Nobody: 6:59pm On Dec 18, 2014 |
Scrypt:
Lol. So you left France for Somalia already? Never been to France Write another poem na, love-themed. |
Re: Sweet Nothings: TheScrypt by Nobody: 7:15pm On Dec 18, 2014 |
standd:
Never been to France Write another poem na, love-themed. Whao! Thats uncharted territory. I'll need a muse for that. Will you be that muse? |
Re: Sweet Nothings: TheScrypt by zoeee(f): 7:56pm On Dec 18, 2014 |
Sweet nothings....mmmm Nice poems... I agree with standd.... We will be waiting for it 1 Like |
Re: Sweet Nothings: TheScrypt by Nobody: 8:27pm On Dec 18, 2014 |
Scrypt:
Whao! Thats uncharted territory. I'll need a muse for that. Will you be that muse? Nah. You have one already and I don't play second fiddle. |
Re: Sweet Nothings: TheScrypt by cc150615(f): 9:54pm On Dec 18, 2014 |
whistling by...... Nice poems 1 Like |
Re: Sweet Nothings: TheScrypt by Nobody: 10:27pm On Dec 18, 2014 |
standd:
Nah. You have one already and I don't play second fiddle. Oh well, there goes your poem. |
Re: Sweet Nothings: TheScrypt by Nobody: 3:46am On Dec 19, 2014 |
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Re: Sweet Nothings: TheScrypt by cc150615(f): 6:56am On Dec 19, 2014 |
Scrypt: Couldn't sleep decided to write this...
Somebody Lied
Somebody Lied, And we ate the words as feeds, Lies they told us as kids, Beautiful lies that tasted like sweets, An assurance of tomorrow.
A tomorrow which may not yield, And even if it did, In abundance a bounty of seeds, Seeds not from weeds, In large bags and not quids, Such viewed with raised eyebrows.
Eyebrows of the jealous with deeds, Deeds carried at heart like beads, Beads which has blinded them with greed, Asked they'd refute it, Refute it with words as shields, An offspring he is.
Somebody lied, When they said we'd reap, Reap a plethora of sweet smelling mint, Mint in multiple bundles the size of pints, Accrued for days longer than a stint.
We believed, We believed these lies, We swallowed them like tea They turned out to be expired pills, Pills causing discomfort not just to the teeth, Stomach rumbling to the scars from these seeds, Now nauseated we fall sick, And with regrets we should't have believed.
Somebody lied, Ruminating we wonder who did, The red coats who created the deed? The men in opulence wearing fine prints? Or the FEC sharing the seats? Expectant we wait we sit, We do not care whose head it fits, The axe of justice must make its hit, The liar or offspring must pay the fees.
-TheScrypt
Copy:
Texanomaly Laykorn Leki10
wooooooow,I'm not into poetry but I think this is awesome, I'm proud of ya! |
Re: Sweet Nothings: TheScrypt by leki10(m): 9:25am On Dec 19, 2014 |
Scrypt: Couldn't sleep decided to write this...
Somebody Lied
Somebody Lied, And we ate the words as feeds, Lies they told us as kids, Beautiful lies that tasted like sweets, An assurance of tomorrow.
A tomorrow which may not yield, And even if it did, In abundance a bounty of seeds, Seeds not from weeds, In large bags and not quids, Such viewed with raised eyebrows.
Eyebrows of the jealous with deeds, Deeds carried at heart like beads, Beads which has blinded them with greed, Asked they'd refute it, Refute it with words as shields, An offspring he is.
Somebody lied, When they said we'd reap, Reap a plethora of sweet smelling mint, Mint in multiple bundles the size of pints, Accrued for days longer than a stint.
We believed, We believed these lies, We swallowed them like tea They turned out to be expired pills, Pills causing discomfort not just to the teeth, Stomach rumbling to the scars from these seeds, Now nauseated we fall sick, And with regrets we should't have believed.
Somebody lied, Ruminating we wonder who did, The red coats who created the deed? The men in opulence wearing fine prints? Or the FEC sharing the seats? Expectant we wait we sit, We do not care whose head it fits, The axe of justice must make its hit, The liar or offspring must pay the fees.
-TheScrypt
Copy:
Texanomaly Laykorn Leki10
Great work dear, its really wordy. Check ur fourth to the last line. Punctuate it properly, keep it up. |
Re: Sweet Nothings: TheScrypt by Nobody: 11:04am On Dec 19, 2014 |
Scrypt, you have been chasing me with mentions kwa! lol The theme of the poem is so impressive. You just need to work on the punctuation like my oga at the top, leki10 said. You finished every line which is not the last on the stanza with a comma. Just try to imagine that you were writing those words beside each other in prose. Punctuate just the way you'd punctuate your prose work sir. Oga! Please don't forget to write a love poem for standd. Ayamlaykorn |
Re: Sweet Nothings: TheScrypt by Nobody: 11:11am On Dec 19, 2014 |
laykorn: Scrypt, you have been chasing me with mentions kwa! lol The theme of the poem is so impressive. You just need to work on the punctuation like my oga at the top, leki10 said.
You finished every line which is not the last on the stanza with a comma. Just try to imagine that you were writing those words beside each other in prose. Punctuate just the way you'd punctuate your prose work sir.
Oga! Please don't forget to write a love poem for standd. Ayamlaykorn Thanks for the review. I'll do the needful.
Standd has been suspended indefinitely, She broke my heart. |
Re: Sweet Nothings: TheScrypt by Nobody: 1:56pm On Dec 19, 2014 |
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Re: Sweet Nothings: TheScrypt by Nobody: 3:32pm On Dec 19, 2014 |
Scrypt:
Thanks for the review. I'll do the needful.
Standd has been suspended indefinitely, She broke my heart. |
Re: Sweet Nothings: TheScrypt by Nobody: 3:34pm On Dec 19, 2014 |
laykorn: Scrypt, you have been chasing me with mentions kwa! lol The theme of the poem is so impressive. You just need to work on the punctuation like my oga at the top, leki10 said.
You finished every line which is not the last on the stanza with a comma. Just try to imagine that you were writing those words beside each other in prose. Punctuate just the way you'd punctuate your prose work sir.
Oga! Please don't forget to write a love poem for standd. Ayamlaykorn I asked him to write a love-themed poem. I NEVER asked him to write a love poem for me. Do you get the difference? |
Re: Sweet Nothings: TheScrypt by Nobody: 4:38pm On Dec 19, 2014 |
Veralaw:
[size=20pt]REVIEW MY POEM NA [/size] Na so me self beg oh. standd:
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Re: Sweet Nothings: TheScrypt by Nobody: 4:43pm On Dec 19, 2014 |
Scrypt:
Na so me self beg oh.
You said I broke your heart |
Re: Sweet Nothings: TheScrypt by Nobody: 5:06pm On Dec 19, 2014 |
standd:
You said I broke your heart Did you? |
Re: Sweet Nothings: TheScrypt by Nobody: 5:55pm On Dec 19, 2014 |
Scrypt:
Did you? Acceleration is + while deceleration is - If you tossed me your heart and I tossed it back at you, displacement is zero. Initial velocity is zero and there's no law of physics that states otherwise Am I communicating |
Re: Sweet Nothings: TheScrypt by Nobody: 6:18pm On Dec 19, 2014 |
standd:
Acceleration is + while deceleration is - If you tossed me your heart and I tossed it back at you, displacement is zero. Initial velocity is zero and there's no law of physics that states otherwise.
Am I communicating
Lol. Standd! . All these for a simple question, "Did you"? .
Interesting.
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Re: Sweet Nothings: TheScrypt by Nobody: 6:25pm On Dec 19, 2014 |
Scrypt:
Lol. Standd! . All these for a simple question, "Did you"? .
Interesting.
You started it na. Accusing a gentle, innocent lady of breaking a heart she never even saw. So, I decided to speak the only language I understand- Physics. |
Re: Sweet Nothings: TheScrypt by Nobody: 6:35pm On Dec 19, 2014 |
standd:
You started it na. Accusing a gentle, innocent lady of breaking a heart she never even saw. So, I decided to speak the only language I understand- Physics.
Still, it is interesting. And young lady, this conversation is not over. |
Re: Sweet Nothings: TheScrypt by Nobody: 6:43pm On Dec 19, 2014 |
Scrypt:
Still, it is interesting. And young lady, this conversation is not over. Ayamu not interested jor 1 Like |
Re: Sweet Nothings: TheScrypt by Nobody: 7:29pm On Dec 19, 2014 |
Scrypt, stop derailing your collection thread. |
Re: Sweet Nothings: TheScrypt by Nobody: 7:45pm On Dec 19, 2014 |
laykorn: Scrypt, stop derailing your collection thread.
Review my poem na,please. I'm losing interest o.. |
Re: Sweet Nothings: TheScrypt by Nobody: 8:23pm On Dec 19, 2014 |
How will I be able to post mine after seeing this na |
Re: Sweet Nothings: TheScrypt by Nobody: 8:22pm On Dec 21, 2014 |
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Re: Sweet Nothings: TheScrypt by Nobody: 9:02pm On Dec 21, 2014 |
Elantracey: How will I be able to post mine after seeing this na Lol. Trust me, it gets better. |
Re: Sweet Nothings: TheScrypt by Nobody: 9:09pm On Dec 21, 2014 |
Scrypt: Fade away, Fade away, Fade away.
Cracks like quake faults Reeling through my being as pain pulse, Distraught, I sit with deep thoughts, Thoughts of how you make me slip up, Trapped in memory's cold port, Port, no means to sweet shores.
My cogitations of never more, Fade away these thoughts, fade away.
This is me, breaking the seal, This me, telling you how it feels, Constantly lost in thoughts, Imagination running it's course, This is me, doing the time.
I wonder how you feel about me, If you really care, When I reach out, you retract, It hurts, thats unfair, Fade away these thoughts, fade away.
Emotions running through my veins, Spiked seeds of pain, Tears I've searched but vain, Burnt courage and scorched heart left for dead, I'm passed for insane.
I wonder if I bite your thoughts, Like you split mine, I wonder if I am your sort, As a sweet wine, Fade away these thoughts, Fade away.
How I wish to hold you close, Kiss your lips, make a toast, Rub your back, make you laugh, Matter of fact, you attract, I plead in pains, Fade away these thoughts, fade away.
Hoping, Wishing, Dying for change, You sliped through my arms, It kills me, I'm frail. Yet, you constantly in my face, Fade away, Fade away, Fade away.
It hurts, I'm just the other guy, Around me, how uncomfortable you got, It breaks me, I'm sore.
Maybe I'm doomed, when it's about you, My league is a factor, what do I do? I hope somehow, now we are two, That someday, you'll see me as true, Fade away these thoughts, fade away.
Copy: Texanomaly Laykorn Leki10
I doff my hat. I cock my gun. Gbosa for you 1 Like |
Re: Sweet Nothings: TheScrypt by Nobody: 11:56pm On Dec 22, 2014 |
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Re: Sweet Nothings: TheScrypt by EverestdeBliu(m): 6:10am On Dec 23, 2014 |
Scrypt: [center]Shreds, Broken heart, Pieces as tears, Her memories, her fears, Love, attention, affection, she's scared, Scared of reflections impaired. Prince, the heir, Affection repaired, Pearl.
[/center] owkay now Scrypt,lemme involve you a lil, What's the theme of this piece? |
Re: Sweet Nothings: TheScrypt by Nobody: 3:05pm On Dec 23, 2014 |
EverestdeBliu:
owkay now Scrypt,lemme involve you a lil, What's the theme of this piece?
Pearl |