youngcrysta:
Muder story (continuation)

Now the light is on, Silence ruling
In a lucid moment, Eve remembered
Her loved ones kissing the earth,
A fair masked man with metalic weapons
With a wicked grin.
Eve bowed her head while her heart kept saying a silent prayer.
"I am known to perform three action",
The thunderous sound made her heart skip
Silence bow down for it.
"To kill, steal and Destroy"


Everyone immediately became a silent prayer warrior
Wishful thinking.
Alas! it was granted
They stole
A soul, was taken
by the recuse team.

CC: texanomaly, laykorn, cisse7575, krystalxxx, everestdebliu, Donifez, leki10

Nice work dear,I call this 'a poetic prose' or ' a narrative poem'
Was it intended or you just saw yourself here?

texanomaly:


Not sure I understand this one.

Goodmorning... Okay lemme explain

Eve noticed that she wasnt the only one present in the scene her family all lying down flat was also present. According to the bible a thief is known to kill, steal and destroy, any normal human would pray/wish for him to steal and not to kill or destroy anything. Before he could make his decision he was shot dead by the recuse team.

Pls point out errors, hope you understand?:-x

EverestdeBliu:

Nice work dear,I call this 'a poetic prose' or ' a narrative poem'
Was it intended or you just saw yourself here?

I guess it was

youngcrysta:


I guess it was

U guess?,that means u ain't sure...next time u want to write,figure out what u want before starting...
Your work is good; over 10,I give u 6.

youngcrysta:


Goodmorning... Okay lemme explain

Eve noticed that she wasnt the only one present in the scene her family all lying down flat was also present. According to the bible a thief is known to kill, steal and destroy, any normal human would pray/wish for him to steal and not to kill or destroy anything. Before he could make his decision he was shot died by the recuse team.

Pls point out errors, hope you understand?:-x

Aww! '...shot by the rescue team'.
#Twisted fate

EverestdeBliu:

U guess?,that means u ain't sure...next time u want to write,figure out what u want before starting...
Your work is good; over 10,I give u 6.

thank you sir

youngcrysta:
Muder story (continuation)

Now the light is on, Silence ruling
In a lucid moment, Eve remembered
Her loved ones kissing the earth,
A fair masked man with metalic weapons
With a wicked grin.
Eve bowed her head while her heart kept saying a silent prayer.
"I am known to perform three action",
The thunderous sound made her heart skip
Silence bow down for it.
"To kill, steal and Destroy"


Everyone immediately became a silent prayer warrior
Wishful thinking.
Alas! it was granted
They stole
A soul, was taken
by the recuse team.

CC: texanomaly, laykorn, cisse7575, krystalxxx, everestdebliu, Donifez, leki10

I think it's a nice poem, about adam and eve and the temptation which led to the fall of mankind.....nice,but you should keep writing so you can improve and do even better than this.

Krystalxxx:


I think it's a nice poem, about adam and eve and the temptation which led to the fall of mankind.....nice,but you should keep writing so you can improve and do even better than this.

alright... thankz

I like the imagination you brought into it...didn't get it at first,but she was on the street,ow did her family end up there with her at that time of night?
I got a wild imagination of that too...all in all,it was a very nice poem...keep it up

Ghostlady:
I like the imagination you brought into it...didn't get it at first,but she was on the street,ow did her family end up there with her at that time of night?
I got a wild imagination of that too...all in all,it was a very nice poem...keep it up

. Yes I like the imagination.
Ayamlaykorn

laykorn:

. Yes I like the imagination.
Ayamlaykorn

mr laykorn,you have being ignoring me all this while y

Ghostlady:
I like the imagination you brought into it...didn't get it at first,but she was on the street,ow did her family end up there with her at that time of night?
I got a wild imagination of that too...all in all,it was a very nice poem...keep it up

I forgot the word 'alley' when writing, just noticed it... thankz for the correction and comment

laykorn:

. Yes I like the imagination.
Ayamlaykorn

thankz...

youngcrysta:


thankz...

You neffa sleep ?
Ayamlaykorn

youngcrysta:


I forgot the word 'alley' when writing, just noticed it... thankz for the correction and comment

you welcome dear...good morning

laykorn:

You neffa sleep ?
Ayamlaykorn

vigil

Symbol, synecdoche, stire, rhymes, anagram, character

There she laid in tears
I could sense her fears
But what can I do?
I bid her adieu.


CC: Krystalxxx, OMA4U