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Thoughts! by tohpahz(f): 11:50pm On Jun 22, 2015
Do i do this, do i do that
Should i give up without a fight
Better than suffering it is
Although i told him,i was his

Stay,a little voice says
He's still your bae ,
You can't cope with his ways
Day after day..

Optimistic or realistic
I tried making this artistic,
But the pain knows none of that
Love itself is confusion of the heart..

#tohpahz..

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Re: Thoughts! by GIYAZZ(m): 11:56pm On Jun 22, 2015
A self-consoling poem I guess.
Re: Thoughts! by tohpahz(f): 11:59pm On Jun 22, 2015
GIYAZZ:
A self-consoling poem I guess.

Lol.i honestly don't know What it is
Re: Thoughts! by forandy(m): 12:09am On Jun 23, 2015
cry cry cry
Re: Thoughts! by SleekyP(m): 12:14am On Jun 23, 2015
tohpahz:
Do i do this, do i do that
Should i give up without a fight
Better than suffering it is
Although i told him,i was his

Stay,a little voice says
He's still your bae ,
You can't cope with his ways
Day after day..

Optimistic or realistic
I tried making this artistic,
But the pain knows none of that
Love itself is confusion of the heart..

#tohpahz..
kiss kiss
Re: Thoughts! by GIYAZZ(m): 12:42am On Jun 23, 2015
tohpahz:


Lol.i honestly don't know What it is
Hmmm. . . One could guess you're passing through a relationship trouble. Is it?
Re: Thoughts! by Nobody: 5:38am On Jun 23, 2015
tohpahz:
Do i do this, do i do that
Should i give up without a fight
Better than suffering it is
Although i told him,i was his

Stay,a little voice says
He's still your bae ,
You can't cope with his ways
Day after day..

Optimistic or realistic
I tried making this artistic,
But the pain knows none of that
Love itself is confusion of the heart..

#tohpahz..

Nights will lengthen and days will be crippled, and for every time that these waves are rippled,
I'll look back on all the hugs and sweet words,
after a befitting funeral to these love buds.

Nice poem, tophaz. The simplicity is charming.

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Re: Thoughts! by Nobody: 6:50am On Jun 23, 2015
Re: Thoughts! by tohpahz(f): 6:56am On Jun 23, 2015
tunnamania11:
Kilode!!
Re: Thoughts! by tohpahz(f): 6:57am On Jun 23, 2015
laykorn:


Nights will lengthen and days will be crippled, and for every time that these waves are rippled,
I'll look back on all the hugs and sweet words,
after a befitting funeral to these love buds.

Nice poem, tophaz. The simplicity is charming.


cheesy

Thanks dear.. wanted it very simple smiley
I like ur add -on
Re: Thoughts! by tohpahz(f): 6:58am On Jun 23, 2015
GIYAZZ:
Hmmm. . . One could guess you're passing through a relationship trouble. Is it?

Something of that sort..
Re: Thoughts! by Nobody: 7:47am On Jun 23, 2015
tohpahz:

Kilode!!
I don't even know cool
Re: Thoughts! by dharay99: 7:55am On Jun 23, 2015
SleekyP:

kiss kiss
woman wrapper.
Na u she post am ⁴.
Re: Thoughts! by Nobody: 9:28am On Jun 23, 2015
tohpahz:
Do i do this, do i do that
Should i give up without a fight
Better than suffering it is
Although i told him,i was his

Stay,a little voice says
He's still your bae ,
You can't cope with his ways
Day after day..

Optimistic or realistic
I tried making this artistic,
But the pain knows none of that
Love itself is confusion of the heart..

#tohpahz..
embarassed embarassed embarassed

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Re: Thoughts! by Nobody: 9:31am On Jun 23, 2015
laykorn:


Nights will lengthen and days will be crippled, and for every time that these waves are rippled,
I'll look back on all the hugs and sweet words,
after a befitting funeral to these love buds.

Nice poem, tophaz. The simplicity is charming.
I'll never allow someone like you be friends with my girlfriend. undecided grin
Re: Thoughts! by missstella(f): 9:52am On Jun 23, 2015
tohpahz:


Something of that sort..
Ermm hello dear I sent u a pm,need to rectify sometins from u.
Re: Thoughts! by GIYAZZ(m): 6:40pm On Jun 23, 2015
tohpahz:


Something of that sort..
Hmmm. . . I'd advice you to take things easy. Don't give in yet if you really love your man. But most importantly, know what you want and get it when it's time!
Re: Thoughts! by Nobody: 10:51pm On Jun 23, 2015
AgapeCharis:
I'll never allow someone like you be friends with my girlfriend. undecided grin


What I do? grin
Re: Thoughts! by Nobody: 10:56pm On Jun 23, 2015
laykorn:



What I do? grin
With that poetic skill you've got, you wouldn't even know her not to talk of been friends with her.


It's not insecurity, it's wisdom. grin
Re: Thoughts! by joseph1832(m): 11:04pm On Jun 23, 2015
tohpahz:
Do i do this, do i do that
Should i give up without a fight
Better than suffering it is
Although i told him,i was his

Stay,a little voice says
He's still your bae ,
You can't cope with his ways
Day after day..

Optimistic or realistic
I tried making this artistic,
But the pain knows none of that
Love itself is confusion of the heart..

#tohpahz..
I'm curious as to what you meant when you said "Love itself is confusion of the heart" in the last line of your poem.

Kindly elucidate on this.
Re: Thoughts! by Nobody: 11:19pm On Jun 23, 2015
AgapeCharis:
With that poetic skill you've got, you wouldn't even know her not to talk of been friends with her.


It's not insecurity, it's wisdom. grin





What Nigerian girl cares about poetry these days? Poetry koor...... Prose ni undecided


Na money sure pass, my brother! grin
Re: Thoughts! by Nobody: 11:36pm On Jun 23, 2015
laykorn:






What Nigerian girl cares about poetry these days? Poetry koor...... Prose ni undecided


Na money sure pass, my brother! grin
Friends with benefit don't spend a dime!
It's better to be safer. wink grin
Re: Thoughts! by Nobody: 12:36am On Jun 24, 2015
laykorn:






What Nigerian girl cares about poetry these days? Poetry koor...... Prose ni undecided


Na money sure pass, my brother! grin

Laykorn grin


I care about poetry.

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Re: Thoughts! by Nobody: 7:49pm On Jun 24, 2015
Krystalxxx:


Laykorn grin


I care about poetry.

Really? smiley

Here we go.......

As I lay my head
upon your lap
I'm able
to see the carefree clouds
drifting high above
in the light blue sky
while the swans are swimming
in the lake nearby

Summer breeze is wafting
gently
your faint fragrance
onto my body
and blowing
your soft long hair
all over my face

I feel like I'm dreaming
and I'm willing
to dream my life away
this way
to lie here
for a thousand years
and more,
to let your tender green hands
touch me,
and cover me
with layers and layers
of your loving leaves,
till one day,
of you I'm a part.
Till death, do we never part!

Are you dead yet, baby grin
Re: Thoughts! by Nobody: 8:10pm On Jun 24, 2015
laykorn:


Really? smiley

Here we go.......

As I lay my head
upon your lap
I'm able
to see the carefree clouds
drifting high above
in the light blue sky
while the swans are swimming
in the lake nearby

Summer breeze is wafting
gently
your faint fragrance
onto my body
and blowing
your soft long hair
all over my face

I feel like I'm dreaming
and I'm willing
to dream my life away
this way
to lie here
for a thousand years
and more,
to let your tender green hands
touch me,
and cover me
with layers and layers
of your loving leaves,
till one day,
of you I'm a part.
Till death, do we never part!

Are you dead yet, baby grin

angry
I'm going to show you now grin

Did you hear of the riddle
Is love, death or death love?
If thy ode followeth not the fiddle
From your nostrils the blood must dribble

As death sinks it's fangs
Into the fair neck of life
Dost love not do the same
On the chest of sweet, pure innocence?

The dance of death
Is a dance for eternity
The dance of love
Is a dance of cursed unity

Unexpected death comes!
And so does the vampire master love
The two share the same favourite color
Red is love, and red is blood

At the moment of the full moon
You must submit to my boon
Solve the riddle or be cursed
Or your vial of time may be bursted

Watch my sardonic smile
As I sit on the throne of life
Is love death or death love?
I watch as your confusion devours you

tongue
Re: Thoughts! by Nobody: 10:07pm On Jun 24, 2015
Krystalxxx:


angry
I'm going to show you now grin

Did you hear of the riddle
Is love, death or death love?
If thy ode followeth not the fiddle
From your nostrils the blood must dribble

As death sinks it's fangs
Into the fair neck of life
Dost love not do the same
On the chest of sweet, pure innocence?

The dance of death
Is a dance for eternity
The dance of love
Is a dance of cursed unity

Unexpected death comes!
And so does the vampire master love
The two share the same favourite color
Red is love, and red is blood

At the moment of the full moon
You must submit to my boon
Solve the riddle or be cursed
Or your vial of time may be bursted

Watch my sardonic smile
As I sit on the throne of life
Is love death or death love?
I watch as your confusion devours you

tongue

What! shocked

I suck at freestyle poetry but leggo embarassed

Don't go about solving love riddles..... For This is you......

The images hung in mid-air
; frozen
suspended
stuck somewhere between thought and
execution
like a treasured landscape from eons long
past and thought forgotten

Flashing in glimpses, sparking your neurons
and for a brief moment you feel the laughter
brim
in that harbor that was once your heart,
love abounds
and you are there, as time stops
on days like these when whispers remember
daffodils scream and butterflies curse...



And after 'saving you; this is us......

next to the burning ocean
there was
you,

like a golden umbra
intoxicating
mesmerizing
a mortal soul like me

salty sea breezes played with our tongues
as our minds wandered below cinnamon waves
grasping one last vestige as we held out hope
this resuscitation would be something more
than lips to flesh
silk to felt

meet me in the hydrosphere
we will make our way there
sharing quintessence
having lasted for days and weeks and months
is this our epiphany
or do we need more...

Marry me, so we can do these freestyles back and forth everyday. sad
Re: Thoughts! by Nobody: 7:08am On Jun 25, 2015
laykorn:


What! shocked

I suck at freestyle poetry but leggo embarassed

Don't go about solving love riddles..... For This is you......

The images hung in mid-air
; frozen
suspended
stuck somewhere between thought and
execution
like a treasured landscape from eons long
past and thought forgotten

Flashing in glimpses, sparking your neurons
and for a brief moment you feel the laughter
brim
in that harbor that was once your heart,
love abounds
and you are there, as time stops
on days like these when whispers remember
daffodils scream and butterflies curse...



And after 'saving you; this is us......

next to the burning ocean
there was
you,

like a golden umbra
intoxicating
mesmerizing
a mortal soul like me

salty sea breezes played with our tongues
as our minds wandered below cinnamon waves
grasping one last vestige as we held out hope
this resuscitation would be something more
than lips to flesh
silk to felt

meet me in the hydrosphere
we will make our way there
sharing quintessence
having lasted for days and weeks and months
is this our epiphany
or do we need more...

Marry me, so we can do these freestyles back and forth everyday. sad

Lol laykorn, you're so funny.

La Coy.....

She sits and gingerly feeds on shrimps
Eager, but yet, unsold by pimps
Her smile, the very signature of mockery
Her actions readily point towards debauchery

The fly he envies, it touches every place
Suitors cannot touch for the sake of her grace
It spies on her lips
And cloth hidden tips

La coy, la coy
Will you not agree to be his toy?
No no, forever more
Everyone ,to her, is a bore

The suitor embraces his anger
His advances become mere furious banter
Still la coy, proud la coy
She wil not submit to anyone's ploy

Perhaps she will rot in the grave
Married at last by death's knave
And she and her spouse will stand brave
Upon her grave, her new domestic cave.
Re: Thoughts! by donbenedict(m): 8:27am On Jul 12, 2015
Tohpahz
Re: Thoughts! by tohpahz(f): 8:28am On Jul 12, 2015
donbenedict:
Tohpahz

Cutehector
Re: Thoughts! by donbenedict(m): 8:30am On Jul 12, 2015
tohpahz:


Cutehector
hw are u?
Re: Thoughts! by joseph1832(m): 8:41am On Jul 12, 2015
tohpahz:

Tohpahz! Why have thou forsaken me?

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