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Clash Of Two Pens: Laveda Vs Jigsawkillah by JigsawKillah(m): 8:37pm On Jul 26, 2016 |
POETIC DUEL Laveda vs Jigsawkillah Theme: Enemies Judges: Suigeneris93 Yuzjet Qaisar1 Donifez Timpaker lLaykorn Firestar Pdizzle and every other poet on this forum First to 5 votes wins 6 Likes 3 Shares |
Re: Clash Of Two Pens: Laveda Vs Jigsawkillah by Laveda(f): 8:40pm On Jul 26, 2016 |
Friends warned me about you. Monster in human flesh that leaves people feeling blue. Crafty minion, my actions towards you I rue, But I'll get justice once I've the chance to sue. Your presence irritates me, your existence annoys me. I'll derive Joy in your tears, An inexplicable pleasure in your fears. You are miserable with a heart as dark as coal, And once your transgressions takes its toll on your soul, Your insecurity I'll plough. Enemy? Wish there's was a better word to describe this evil You prodigal son of the devil Heart devoid of peace or tranquil, Its civil shattered on an anvil. when the grim reaper comes to get you. Your legs will be too feeble to help you. No need to cry foul, Nemesis is on its way to wound your soul. This is just the beginning of your descent to gaol. You Juggled with my heart, You tossed it like a hat. Do you think you shall escape the claws of karma? it is a very merciless bitçh, It will dump your filthy body in a ditch. I'm happy you shall shrink and rot in hell. That burning furnace shall be your new cell. Where your body will be impaled, While you burn from a fire started from a diesel. Laveda. 29 Likes 16 Shares |
Re: Clash Of Two Pens: Laveda Vs Jigsawkillah by whizqueen(f): 8:41pm On Jul 26, 2016 |
Takes first sit 1 Like |
Re: Clash Of Two Pens: Laveda Vs Jigsawkillah by JigsawKillah(m): 8:43pm On Jul 26, 2016 |
Dear Jigs I hate the man you've become You hated insincere people, how could you be one Drinking with reckless abandon Who'd now play role model to your son? Burning away your wealth with the ganja Don't ask why you're broke, you know the answer It's either you're getting high Or after the waist of a good dancer See your love life is shattered How long will you keep telling Hannah That you love her when you're lying You smile when talking to her? no, you're trying You don't have a heart, you've become a monster And just last month, you became a fraudster Your love for money is overwhelming If I wasn't you, you'd jump at a chance to sell me I'd blame it on rap, but I've seen other rappers Boogey doesn't smoke, still has a dozen chapters MI never had to steal, albeit forming gangsta And when I show you these, I hear your horrid laughter I stare at the mirror, I see your bulgy eyes I see your goatee, and my rage would rise I see your ugly face, it's you I want to slap I bring out the dagger, but can't freaking stab You used to be better than this Until you knew the world exists Worse after you saw your dad drag a spliff Worst after George became deceased You used to be a friend, not anymore How could you call my life a bore? I hate that you became my enemy! I hate that you're me From Jeffery 14 Likes 9 Shares |
Re: Clash Of Two Pens: Laveda Vs Jigsawkillah by ShaqFu: 8:57pm On Jul 26, 2016 |
JigsawKillah, hope you know 'Pen' is a metaphor for dick? LOL. In our world, that is. Lol. 2 Likes |
Re: Clash Of Two Pens: Laveda Vs Jigsawkillah by yuzjet(m): 9:01pm On Jul 26, 2016 |
The first poem was so sincere that I could hear my tummy murmuring. The second poem however, was so dope that I could see my head nodding. But neither of the poem didn't splash any blood as the titled portrayed because all I wanna do is to fvcking splash the blood of my enemies. But here, I go for brevity and the sincerity that comes with the first poem. Laveda, u've this! 6 Likes 3 Shares |
Re: Clash Of Two Pens: Laveda Vs Jigsawkillah by Nobody: 9:02pm On Jul 26, 2016 |
Waoh... Lol 3 Likes 1 Share |
Re: Clash Of Two Pens: Laveda Vs Jigsawkillah by Nobody: 9:09pm On Jul 26, 2016 |
Ishilove ,Creamish, FirstEva ,come and see 3 Likes |
Re: Clash Of Two Pens: Laveda Vs Jigsawkillah by Pdizzle(m): 9:10pm On Jul 26, 2016 |
Jigs poem was so inviting, maybe because I'm use to reading his poetry, more conceptualized and better arranged too. Laveda on the other hand is plain and sincere, nice verses. I'll give it to Jigs. 2 Likes 2 Shares |
Re: Clash Of Two Pens: Laveda Vs Jigsawkillah by saintkel(m): 9:12pm On Jul 26, 2016 |
Brb, let me get my maltna ist.... Laveda seems to be full of it, it flows naturally from her thoughts. Jigsawkillah seems to be more *penful* n absurd with words. Both r good sha but I can only vote for one..... LAVEDA gets my vote 2 Likes 2 Shares |
Re: Clash Of Two Pens: Laveda Vs Jigsawkillah by Nobody: 9:14pm On Jul 26, 2016 |
Beautiful pieces, kudos to the both of you, you're great wordsmiths It'll be tough to choose one over the other because you both have your unique styles which is just amazing, I'm speechless Laveda, your piece is wonderful, I could feel the hurt and anger flowing from your pen, your enemies are in real trouble, lol. Talking about man being his worst enemy, Jigsawkillah your piece is profound and thought provoking. After all that's said and done, my vote goes to Jigsawkillah. Like I said, profound 3 Likes 2 Shares |
Re: Clash Of Two Pens: Laveda Vs Jigsawkillah by JeffreyJamez(m): 9:21pm On Jul 26, 2016 |
Laveda that was deep..... Nice! 3 Likes 2 Shares |
Re: Clash Of Two Pens: Laveda Vs Jigsawkillah by davide470(m): 9:27pm On Jul 26, 2016 |
Laveda's was lucid. You could actually see the words being formed. The hurt and sorrows expressively made. Jigsaw rhymes was coruscating. It portrayed deep things. Tough one though, but I go with Laveda 3 Likes 4 Shares |
Re: Clash Of Two Pens: Laveda Vs Jigsawkillah by whizqueen(f): 9:29pm On Jul 26, 2016 |
Oh boy laveda did someone offend you nii? Please tell me you didn't picture anyone when writing o. Wonderful piece I must say. Jigsawkill your love for money is overwhelming lol. I love that line jawe. Nice one. My vote goes to laveda, lines are so real and spiteful 5 Likes 4 Shares |
Re: Clash Of Two Pens: Laveda Vs Jigsawkillah by obiorathesubtle: 9:36pm On Jul 26, 2016 |
Both are wonderful, but none really charters my cheers. 1 Like |
Re: Clash Of Two Pens: Laveda Vs Jigsawkillah by ShaqFu: 9:38pm On Jul 26, 2016 |
Okay. I think writing poems in free verse form is becoming over use here in this section. Why don't you guys try other poetic form, like blank verse for instance. TheAgba, what do you think? |
Re: Clash Of Two Pens: Laveda Vs Jigsawkillah by Laveda(f): 9:48pm On Jul 26, 2016 |
JigsawKillah: Jigs you're good, wow. 3 Likes |
Re: Clash Of Two Pens: Laveda Vs Jigsawkillah by donifez(m): 9:52pm On Jul 26, 2016 |
Well It is a tough choice. Laveda- Her words are like pin, when it pricks... you feel it. She also tried with her rhymes, although her lines arrangements were not that superb. It is more real with a good imagery. Jigs- You can't take it from him,He is good. His rhymes and rhythm is top notch. Although I did not feel that real effect like Laveda lines. If it was a rap I will give it to Jigs. MVG- To Laveda. 2 Likes 2 Shares |
Re: Clash Of Two Pens: Laveda Vs Jigsawkillah by Laveda(f): 9:57pm On Jul 26, 2016 |
whizqueen: More like it babe.. Thanks. |
Re: Clash Of Two Pens: Laveda Vs Jigsawkillah by JigsawKillah(m): 10:00pm On Jul 26, 2016 |
Voting Closed! Laveda wins by first to five votes! Congrats, Lady! 4 Likes 2 Shares |
Re: Clash Of Two Pens: Laveda Vs Jigsawkillah by JigsawKillah(m): 10:01pm On Jul 26, 2016 |
ShaqFu: our world? or your world? |
Re: Clash Of Two Pens: Laveda Vs Jigsawkillah by Laveda(f): 10:02pm On Jul 26, 2016 |
JigsawKillah: It was an honour battling with the great rhymer Thanks. 4 Likes 1 Share |
Re: Clash Of Two Pens: Laveda Vs Jigsawkillah by firestar(f): 10:05pm On Jul 26, 2016 |
Harddon! Mynd44! Sigmundfreud! I summon ye! Blood from lavenda. Cuts from Jigs. This be not from Jay-Zee, Brenda nor Briggs... Bloody hell and Blue blazes Lavenda's death knell Jigs' 7 types of crazy I no fit shout Judge 'em fer me I'll find my way out. 4 Likes 3 Shares |
Re: Clash Of Two Pens: Laveda Vs Jigsawkillah by ShaqFu: 10:10pm On Jul 26, 2016 |
JigsawKillah:Our world Jigs, we're poets, remember? |
Re: Clash Of Two Pens: Laveda Vs Jigsawkillah by Mynd44: 10:12pm On Jul 26, 2016 |
Soon the two of them will be like 3 Likes 2 Shares
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Re: Clash Of Two Pens: Laveda Vs Jigsawkillah by JigsawKillah(m): 10:21pm On Jul 26, 2016 |
ShaqFu: the world itself is a metaphor we're poets with different levels I am yet to reach the stage you're in, so I don't know that a pen is a metaphor for dick 1 Like 1 Share |
Re: Clash Of Two Pens: Laveda Vs Jigsawkillah by ShaqFu: 10:34pm On Jul 26, 2016 |
JigsawKillah:Hmm I see Jigs. Never knew poets now have levels. Oahray, who sayeth thou? |
Re: Clash Of Two Pens: Laveda Vs Jigsawkillah by Oahray: 11:11pm On Jul 26, 2016 |
ShaqFu:lol. Yes o. Me and some other persons dey the lowest rung. Damn! Jigsaw is a killah! Your lines mehn... Your own enemy. Totally different perspective from the norm. See flows sha... I like! Laveda, your imagery came on very strong, although the rhyming seemed somewhat forced. Nice on the whole. Looks like voting is over |
Re: Clash Of Two Pens: Laveda Vs Jigsawkillah by JigsawKillah(m): 11:19pm On Jul 26, 2016 |
ShaqFu: seems like both I and Ray share the same views on that! |
Re: Clash Of Two Pens: Laveda Vs Jigsawkillah by Laveda(f): 11:20pm On Jul 26, 2016 |
Oahray: Yeah its over. Thanks Ray. |
Re: Clash Of Two Pens: Laveda Vs Jigsawkillah by Oahray: 11:32pm On Jul 26, 2016 |
JigsawKillah:yes o. The both of you are top dawgs. |
Re: Clash Of Two Pens: Laveda Vs Jigsawkillah by Nobody: 11:35pm On Jul 26, 2016 |
Laveda wins it nice one girl. |
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