Ishilove:
Damn straight. I was writing a series and towards the ending part, I was dallying too long on a particular scene because I was dishing it out piecemeal and was too busy to just write everything once and for all. The wake up call came when semid4lyf bluntly stated that my story was getting boring. That jolted me and gingered me to create time out of NO TIME to finish up the series on my siggy.

That is what criticism, whether positive or negative, should do: ginger us to reach inwards and strive to be better at what we do.

So this is going out to all o' y'all who are waiting for Ishilove to present her submission so that you can rip her creation to pieces because y'all think the biatch too like to dey condemn other people work. The only thing I'm gonna say is. . .

BRING IT ON.

Ishilove:
Damn straight. I was writing a series and towards the ending part, I was dallying too long on a particular scene because I was dishing it out piecemeal and was too busy to just write everything once and for all. The wake up call came when semid4lyf bluntly stated that my story was getting boring. That jolted me and gingered me to create time out of NO TIME to finish up the series on my siggy.

That is what criticism, whether positive or negative, should do: ginger us to reach inwards and strive to be better at what we do.

So this is going out to all o' y'all who are waiting for Ishilove to present her submission so that you can rip her creation to pieces because y'all think the biatch too like to dey condemn other people work. The only thing I'm gonna say is. . .

BRING IT ON.

Efemena_xy: All right folks, fellow writers and readers - I've pasted the first part of my contribution which basically is to give a brief background description of some of the key characters featuring in this story.

What I'd like you guys to do for me, is to comb through and fish out any grammatical / syntax errors within my write up, so that I can have these corrected before the next writer's update.

Look upon this bit of contribution as the introductory part. The second part would consist mainly of the body / story for which I intend to tie up some of the already introduced characters with the new ones I've introduced.

The last part would be my half-hearted attempt to solve the riddle but, I would invariably create more questions and riddles for the next writer to pick up on.

Okay, let me go get my beauty sleep. Will check back later to read your comments.

Goodnight / morning all!

Efemena_xy: @All, thank you for your encouraging comments so far.

Ishilove:
So this is going out to all o' y'all who are waiting for Ishilove to present her submission so that you can rip her creation to pieces because y'all think the biatch too like to dey condemn other people work. The only thing I'm gonna say is. . .

BRING IT ON.

Oahray: [size=52pt] OKAY! [/size]

[/size][/b]
OKAY TOO [size=8pt]

Ishilove: Nice and rather intriguing. The plot thickens... The circle of biatches... Lol

Except for very few wrong spellings and wrong usage of verbs, your submission is a-okay.

Might I make a suggestion? This work is a collaboration. Each writer gives his piece and steps aside. I suggest you submit everything once and for all so that the next writer will know which angle to tackle the story from. I am suggesting this because you have give us the impression that the chapter isn't done yet. Unless I'm wrong, but if I am right, then the piecemeal updates of your chapter will distract the next writer from proper planning of his submission.

st.okolie:
larry abeg tear me my own viewer's slip to avoid harassment.

gabialonso: @efe hup u'll still meet wit ur deadline in view of dis ur "big contribution"

Larry-Sun:
Weldone, Efe. It's a nice chapter you are creating. If you can still meet up with deadline, then ride on. I said 1500words at least, I didn't say the words cannot be more. A chapter can contain as much as 5000 or even 10'000words. The most important thing though is to plot a worthwhile story therefrom. I believe you're going to leave enough pointers for the next writers to work on. I already wrote it in the first page that where one writer might believe he has tied loose ends, another writers might just pick up from there and give the story a different direction, but not vying away from the theme though.

But, Efe, you left me confused when you brought in Agbani Darego. Remember that Agbani Darego is an actual person living. She is the former Miss World. I just introduced her in the dream of Lucan's. I never imagined that she'd really be created as a character. I wouldn't want Agbani sueing us all o. But seeing that you've got more arrows in your quiver, I'll just keep my thumbs crossed Weldone again.

Larry-Sun:
Okay, I'm gonna change the name asap. By the way, the constant use of 'babes' between Lucan and his paramour seems too monotonous.

Larry-Sun:


Still haven't explained the link between Lucan's adventure in the dream and the burnt mansion in reality.

Larry-Sun:

Viewer's slip? Lost! Lost!! Lost!!!

Larry-Sun:
These are the few errors I've been able to catch for now:

1. Strewn carelessly besides them on the floor were some loose bits of change...

2. "You, my dear Suleman, are one very sick man[b]",[/b] she grinned cheekily.
The commas should be reflected in the quotes, and not out of them.

3. I think I'm quite disappointed with you today.

4. Yes, they were there allright, all five of them online...

5. Someone who was probably a lot closer to him than he aware of...

6. For some inexplicable reason...

7. ...informing him that that would be using his flat for his latest "runz"...

Sooo sleepy I am now...later.

Efemena_xy:

Almost there, dear. Take a look.



Thanks Larry,

Let's see how far I can go with this thing eh?

Re: Agbani D, I had no idea it's a real life character. No, you're right - one's got to be careful with these things. Okay, I've change her name to Amina Dasuntu. I think you should do the same thing too on your piece for consistency.

Mazi_Omenuko: @Larry,
I've finished my work already. Can I submit it now?

It contains just two words: "THE END"