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|Re: IN The DARK (A Story Of Love,betrayal And Survival) by hormobolanle: 1:03pm On Oct 19, 2016|
yea apply first, den I will tell u ur pay
|Re: IN The DARK (A Story Of Love,betrayal And Survival) by Angelinastto(f): 1:28pm On Oct 19, 2016|
[quote author=elskillful post=50330481][/quote] Awwwwn Thanks dear. Glad you are back. Where is my bread?
|Re: IN The DARK (A Story Of Love,betrayal And Survival) by hormobolanle: 1:30pm On Oct 19, 2016|
[quote author=Angelinastto post=50287231]Episode 2
On my way home from school i hoped that mom will be around to listen to my experience on my first day. I arrived home and hurriedly got out of the car,i saw my uncle's car parked outside so i was sure my mom was home but with a visitor. I got in and met my mom and uncle mike disscussing. I entered and greeted uncle mike and hugged mom. She briefly asked about school and i left for my room. Few minutes after taking my bath, i was about coming out for lunch when i heard mom's and uncle Mike's voices,arguing and shouting at eachother. Mom's voice could not be heard clearly but every single sentence made by uncle mike was clear enough to be heard two buildings away. "Just because our stupid parent thought you could handle the bussiness better,they willed all the family wealth to you forgetting thet you are just an ordinary woman and a whole me MIKE was left with leftovers to feed on,Lillian if you refuse to forward five million naira into my account for my wedding anniversary, i will so deal with you!!" uncle mike thundered. I could hear mom telling him how wasteful he was and promising not to send him a penny. I wanted to go down stairs and probably settle their misunderstanding,but i knew mom would not like it if i go without been called upon. I remained in my room and heard uncle mike threaten my mom while mom kept on telling him he could not hurt a fly. Some minutes later i heard uncle mike zooming off out of our compound in anger. After his departure i went to mom's room,she was lost in thought when i got to her, i had to tap her on her shoulder be4 she noticed my presence. I asked her about the argument with uncle Mike and she explained how wasteful uncle mike has been and he was requsting for a huge amount just for his wedding anniversary. I told mom i was worried about d threats he made but she waved it aside and said they were all empty threats. I tried to make mom feel better by telling her about my first day at school and her face lightened up when i told her that the literature teacher seems to like me. We talked for a while before i told mom i wanted to meet Tori for my lunch. Mom then smilled and said " which tori? The one at Ibadan right?" at first i thought mom was joking not until she continued and said "you know they are both sec sch graduates and they have been planning on putting in for jamb this year. I had to let them further there education since they cannot be maids here forever,u know? They have their lives to live. I paid for their Jamb registration fee and gave them #50,000 each for their upkeep. I also asked them to come back for there school fees when they gain admission into higher institution. So my dear they are no longer here,they left after u left for school. We now have a new house help. He his a good boy,a friend recommended him to me and his name is Kelvin. I sent him on an errand,he should be back soon." I did not know what to say after mom ended her speech but the fact that she kept all this from me and i could not even say goodbye to the maids that has been like a sister to me was painful. I told mom how upset i was and she decided to bribe me by putting a call through to the two of them,one after the other. I told them how much am missing them and wished them all the best in life. We ended the call and mom started dressing up for church.
After mom left, i went into the kitchen to make noddles for myself. After putting the pot on the gas cooker,i turned on the light. I then went into the store room for the noddles. I could not find the noddles on time so i had to come back to the kitchen and i met flames coming out of the hot pot already. I was confused on what to do so i quickly poured groundnut oil into the pot and went insearch of noddles again. I searched every where but could no find any pack of noddles,i was about leaving the store when my leg hit a carton on the floor, i looked at it carefully and i saw cartons of noddles carefully arranged on the floor. I happily picked two pack of noddles and rushed to the kitchen. The sight that welcomed me in the kitchen took my hapiness away,there were flames everywhere and the pot already cut fire, i was at lost on what to do so i ended up getting a large quantity of water and poured it into the pot, the fire went up and increased, i ran away from the fire with tears, confused on wot to do,i paced around with my hands on my head.everywhere was already filled with flames. Suddenly i heard a foot step and someone appeared at the entrance of the kitchen, he quickly put of the gas cooker and he hurriedly got a lid to cover the pot, immediately he covered the pot, the fire went off. I was coughing so much i could no speak, he led me out of the kitchen to the dinning room,he then closed the kitchen door and brought me a cup of water. I took d water from him and looked at him with surprise. He smilled and said "Hi, my name is Kelvin and i work here,its nice meeting you".
to me daz not a NYC meeting. cos assuming na me o she go first chop one correct slap
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|Re: IN The DARK (A Story Of Love,betrayal And Survival) by Angelinastto(f): 1:31pm On Oct 19, 2016|
Babsopey:Seriously you rock! I was thinking that, i done ring one gbagaun, thats why u no longer comment.
|Re: IN The DARK (A Story Of Love,betrayal And Survival) by Angelinastto(f): 1:36pm On Oct 19, 2016|
hormobolanle:Iffah hear A rich dude like you Good to have you back swidy!
|Re: IN The DARK (A Story Of Love,betrayal And Survival) by Angelinastto(f): 1:39pm On Oct 19, 2016|
hormobolanle:Lol covers face for you oo. If i will be the boss no wahala.
|Re: IN The DARK (A Story Of Love,betrayal And Survival) by Angelinastto(f): 1:40pm On Oct 19, 2016|
Lol oga pikin?? You have work finish!
|Re: IN The DARK (A Story Of Love,betrayal And Survival) by hormobolanle: 1:51pm On Oct 19, 2016|
Abegi leave dat side, is der any living being on earth dat people don't critize?Leave dem let dem talk so more dy talk d more u become famous Abi u no know say amebo dy make persin BLOW?
|Re: IN The DARK (A Story Of Love,betrayal And Survival) by hormobolanle: 1:53pm On Oct 19, 2016|
|Re: IN The DARK (A Story Of Love,betrayal And Survival) by oluwatymylehyn(m): 3:17pm On Oct 19, 2016|
Good work, I think. More ink to you pen. I'm loving the story and keenly looking forward to the next update. Keep it rolling.
|Re: IN The DARK (A Story Of Love,betrayal And Survival) by Angelinastto(f): 3:54pm On Oct 19, 2016|
My phone ringing tone woke me up, i sluggishly checked the screen and the caller I.D displayed Khole. I hurriedly picked her call,heaven knows i missed her alot. At first i acted as if i was angry with her and she apologised and told me she has been bussy with school. Khole asked after mom and Jordan. I told her everything that as happened and she kept on shouting 'I said it!!' into the phone. I had to put the phone away from my ear for sometime. After shouting for a while i could hear her asking if i was stil on phone. I replied her and she started giving me relationship tips. She went on and on even though i told her i was'nt dating Jordan yet. After what seemed like eternity khole said she had a lecture to attend and would call me back when she is done. I told her i will do the calling and dropped the call.
Time checked 5:00pm and mom was not back yet. I placed a call through to her and she said she will be going to church from her super market. She also said we should make fried plantain and egg for dinner. I ended the call with mom and went to inform kelvin of what we would be making for dinner. I found kelvin in his room and after informing him of what we would make for dinner we headed to the kitchen. Kelvin asked me if i could make the meal and i told him i could try,he then smilled and said he could teach me if am ready to learn. He told me i cant be with my mom for the rest of my life and i cant possibly take a maid with me every where i go,so i have to learn how to make anything i eat. He sounded like a brother so, instead of getting angry with him for trying to boss me around,i agreed to start learning how to cook from him. The cooking lesson with kelvin was interesting,at first i did cut the plantain into a wrong shape but with kelvin's correction, i was able to get the perfect oval shape. After frying the plantain,we fried the egg and set the table for dinner. I was so excitedly anxious to tell mom that i fried the plantain and eggs with the help of kelvin. After the cooking i asked kelvin if he could help me solve some mathematical problem and he said he would give it a trial. Kelvin saw the questions as cheap ones and he teased me about been a lazy student in mathematics. Kelvin put me through as he solved the assignment and the topic got more understandable for me. Been done with my assignment i was on my way to my room when my phone started ringing,at first i thought it would be khole calling to continue her sermon but the caller I.D displayed Jordan. I accepted the call and we talked for a while. He promised to be back by friday and he invited me to his birthday which will be taking place at his resident on sunday. Finally we decided to meet at our hotel on saturday. I ended the call and went to stay with kelvin in the living room.
Mom got back by 6:30pm,we had dinner,after which i told her i made the meal with the help of kelvin. She told me she was proud of me and blessed kelvin for taking as his younger sister. We saw a movie together and we all retired for the day.
I woke up 6:30am on Wednesday morning,i greeted mom and kelvin,had my breakfast and left for school. Before the literature class in the morning,the mathematics assignment was collected and everybody's book was returned during lunch apart from mine. Since we would be having mathematics class after lunch i did not bother to go and see the lecturer privately. The mathematics class was more fun since i was able to contribute due to the understanding i gained from kelvin,i was happy i was getting better in a course i once hate. After the lesson the mathematics lecturer said he had an announcement to make, he cleared his throat and said " I am highly disappointed in you all over the simple question i gave you to solve. This is an entrance exam to higher institution you are all about to take,you all need to buckle your belts. Only one out of a hundred student solved the question to my desire and got the answer correctly,her booklet is here with me and she go by the name....ehm...'WILLIAMS NANCY' Please applaud her as she come forward" I could not believe my ears as i heard my name. All eyes were on me as i composed myself and walked forward to collect my booklet,he shook my hand and told me to keep it up as he handed my booklet over to me. After handing my booklet to me he left the hall and i went back to my sit. Am sure many of the students now saw me as a GURU in mathematics as they kept on requesting for my booklet and asking me to explain some areas to them.
After the day's lecture,i went home proud of myself and proud of kelvin,its not all about the handsome face but the intelligence got me really tripping. Ohh i so much love people with something upstairs. When i say something i mean BRAIN!!!.
(End of episode 2)
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|Re: IN The DARK (A Story Of Love,betrayal And Survival) by Angelinastto(f): 4:00pm On Oct 19, 2016|
Lol we never start anything u don dey protective like this,if we start i no need bouncer when i blow niyen.(Dancing shoki)...................... In between danhumprey is my oga in english,allow him to correct in order to motivate a better me. (thanks sugar!)
|Re: IN The DARK (A Story Of Love,betrayal And Survival) by Angelinastto(f): 4:03pm On Oct 19, 2016|
oluwatymylehyn:hmmmmmm "I think" ?
That means you are not sure? Why nao?? Thanks in between.
|Re: IN The DARK (A Story Of Love,betrayal And Survival) by Truegal(f): 4:05pm On Oct 19, 2016|
I love your art work Angel, and wat I observed is that some words are being misspelled. Keep the work going anyway!
|Re: IN The DARK (A Story Of Love,betrayal And Survival) by Danhumprey: 4:30pm On Oct 19, 2016|
To be honest, you're trying. But the story look somehow disjointed and disorganized.
- You give too much details and sometimes tend to drivel off point. Keep the details as little as possible and leave room for the reader's imagination.
- employ the use of suspense appropriately. Don't let your story be like a Nollywood film script that can be easily predicted. Unless of course you're writing a script for Nollywood.
- Do away with shorthand typing. It's annoying and can be addictive and it can affect your literary work. Type sentences in full.
- Spell words correctly. If you don't know the correct spelling of a word, consult a dictionary.
- Use the appropriate words. Do not misuse words. I noticed in the 1st and 2nd posts, you spell 'mourn' as 'moan'. That's somewhat embarrassing. There are many other words you didn't spelt correctly. You might want to take time go through your posts and correct them.
- Paragraph. This is very important. Learn to paragraph your story. Your posts look disorganized. And make the story uninteresting. Paragraphing is very important.
- Use smileys and emojis appropriately. I see a lot of this smiley ' ' in your posts,most time unnecessarily. And that's not good.
And finally, once again, DO AWAY WITH SHORTHAND TYPING.
|Re: IN The DARK (A Story Of Love,betrayal And Survival) by DTOBS(m): 4:38pm On Oct 19, 2016|
Op! You really doing a very great work... Have been following the story since, I was banned a week ago and couldn't comment but back now. Well-done sister and keep it up.
Kindly mention me when you re dropping the next episode. I can't afford to miss it.
|Re: IN The DARK (A Story Of Love,betrayal And Survival) by Angelinastto(f): 6:46pm On Oct 19, 2016|
When i arrived from school,i hurriedly came out of the car and went in search of kelvin. I met him in the kitchen and excitedly threw myself into his arm in a bare hug. I could tell he was surprised but he accepted the hug. He released himself from my grip and asked for the reason he is getting a hug. I told him everything that happened in school, he smilled and said i will have to start respecting him now else he would tell my secret to the whole school if i disrespect him. I pushed him playfully and left for my room. Mom was not around so i had lunch with kelvin and had my nap. I woke up by 5:00pm and made dinner with kelvin. He taught me how to make garri and vegetable soup,though the meal was a little bit difficult, it was fun making it with kelvin. Mom got back by 7:00pm,we had dinner and went to our separate room after seeing a movie. Jordan called and insisted we chat. So, we had a long chat before i finally slept off by 12:00am.
I woke up lately the following morning due to the late night chat with Jordan. I hurriedly got out of bed, greeted mom and kelvin, then hurriedly dressed and left for school without breakfast.
The litrature class was going on already when i got to my department, i greeted Miss.esther and made for an empty sit when i noticed people were unnecessarily looking at me. I was about sitting when miss.Esther called my name and i turned to face her. She said "Nancy,are you not the one I saw in chemistry class some minutes ago,you told me you are a science student when i asked what you were doing in chemistry class. I already told the class you've switched to science department or did you change your mind again??" I could not understand what miss.Esther was driving at,myself? In chemistry class?. Miss.Esther question brought me back to reality,as she asked again if i had changed my mind . I told her i was just arriving school and i do not even know where the chemistry laboratory is located. I could see the surprise on her face when she asked if i really was not the person she saw at the science lab this morning,i replied positively and she asked me to follow her. I dropped my bag and we both matched out of the class. We got to the science lab the chemistry teacher also was surprised to see me he looked at me and said "Nelly I thought you said you were going to the rest room, when did you have a change of cloth?" I did not know what to say so i just told him am not Nelly.The chemistry teacher asked Miss.esther what was going on and she told him she was as surprised as he was. The chemistry teacher took my i.d and i was wondering what kind of drama was going on,who the hell is Nelly anyways?? I was still thinking when the chemistry teacher removed his eyes from my I.D and he concentrated his gaze on the entrance. Miss.Esther did the same and so did everybody in the hall. I followed their gaze and I saw the shock of my life!!!!!!
Even without a mirror i could tell that she looked exactly like me, she was expensively dressed as well, with the same fair skin,pointed nose,big eye ball and every other thing was the same as every part of my body except the height. I was a bit taller than her. Wow what a world!! She was also looking at me from head to toe just the way i was looking at her in surprise. Miss.Esther and the chemistry teacher exchanged glance and kept on looking from Myself to my look alike. 'Are you sure the two of you are not identical twin?' the chemistry teacher brooke the silence with his question. I could not respond i just shook my head. The chemistry teacher asked My look alike to come in and she came closer,there was whispering every where as everybody could not hide there surprise. Miss.Esther asked if we have met before and we both said 'No', she then asked for her surname and she said 'Stanley', so you are 'Nelly Stanley' while you are 'Nancy Williams'? The chemistry teacher asked, we both noded and the chemistry teacher said "truly God created human in twoS, if the two of you are not blood related,this will really be amazing". The chemistry teacher speech got me thinking if truly am not an only child and if possibly Nelly is my sister,why would mom ever lie to me? I asked myself without an answer as miss.Esther took my hand and we walked back to my department.
I did not pay full attention to the literature lesson so the class ended on a boring note. I went to the cafeteria to get lunch and if only eyes could kill,i should be dead by now. I was waiting for my order when i felt a tap on my shoulder, i looked behind me and i saw another version of me! She smilled charmingly and said 'Hi, am Nelly'. God! She even smilled like me!!
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|Re: IN The DARK (A Story Of Love,betrayal And Survival) by Angelinastto(f): 6:48pm On Oct 19, 2016|
Truegal:Thanks alot dear,i will take note.
|Re: IN The DARK (A Story Of Love,betrayal And Survival) by Angelinastto(f): 6:58pm On Oct 19, 2016|
Firstly: about the story been disjointed its some how intensional,at the ending you will understand better.
Secondly: about the use of shorthand, most times i type fully but you know there is a limit to the number of words i can type at a time (5000) so i sometimes make use of short hand in other to deliver what i want to deliver in a post.
Thirdly: wrong spelling, am guilty of that, am too lazy to consult the dictionary. My bad.
Fourtly: paragraphing I try my best to amend.
Thanks for taking your time in making me a better writer. God bless you for me!
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|Re: IN The DARK (A Story Of Love,betrayal And Survival) by Angelinastto(f): 7:02pm On Oct 19, 2016|
DTOBS:Wow,am honoured! Thanks alot.
|Re: IN The DARK (A Story Of Love,betrayal And Survival) by Angelinastto(f): 7:03pm On Oct 19, 2016|
DTOBS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! (hope i did not block your ear). I just updated.
|Re: IN The DARK (A Story Of Love,betrayal And Survival) by DTOBS(m): 7:17pm On Oct 19, 2016|
Angelinastto:Wow... Not at all... Thanks!!!
|Re: IN The DARK (A Story Of Love,betrayal And Survival) by DTOBS(m): 7:22pm On Oct 19, 2016|
Getting more and more interesting....
|Re: IN The DARK (A Story Of Love,betrayal And Survival) by Angelinastto(f): 8:23pm On Oct 19, 2016|
Sir i went through my write up and corrected the spelling errors i noticed. Kindly help me go through it again. And i dont make use of smiley or emojis,how come you are seeing them in my post?
|Re: IN The DARK (A Story Of Love,betrayal And Survival) by Angelinastto(f): 8:24pm On Oct 19, 2016|
|Re: IN The DARK (A Story Of Love,betrayal And Survival) by Danhumprey: 10:18pm On Oct 19, 2016|
Angelinastto:incase you have not noticed. When you type this punctuation mark '?' thrice in succession or in multiples of three close to each other,you end up producing this smiley===> when you click the submit button.
Try it and see
|Re: IN The DARK (A Story Of Love,betrayal And Survival) by abdulwadood(m): 11:08pm On Oct 19, 2016|
Following.. More ink to your pen
|Re: IN The DARK (A Story Of Love,betrayal And Survival) by ezechueze(m): 6:35am On Oct 20, 2016|
|Re: IN The DARK (A Story Of Love,betrayal And Survival) by Nobody: 7:16am On Oct 20, 2016|
Ride on baby.....we are here.
Will be coming back for more
|Re: IN The DARK (A Story Of Love,betrayal And Survival) by NwaliE01(m): 7:29am On Oct 20, 2016|
This piece is on point and one of its kind. The story line sounds foreign but I enjoyed it. Please keep it coming!!!
|Re: IN The DARK (A Story Of Love,betrayal And Survival) by Angelinastto(f): 7:31am On Oct 20, 2016|
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|Re: IN The DARK (A Story Of Love,betrayal And Survival) by JOSSYperfect(f): 8:35am On Oct 20, 2016|
Where and how can i get the full story please
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