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Obinnau: you are free to go on. But I will rather watch from the sidelines.

Obinnau: yea. Grab this.

Obinnau: The viju milk drink is on me. Oya Tovot begin o

festwiz: Try using the enter key inbetween replies during convesations. Press the * key on your keypad,and go to the third page, Or click the zero key three times(quickly)

360prince: . Mr festwiz, how can i make my converstation form appear?. If you notice something in my thread you will see that any place we play the part of talking, i will ended up saying "WE CHATTED"to make everything short, due to my phone inability to space. Am using asha202 to do my typing, so i guess it because am using phone thats why my conversation is not being expressed.

festwiz: try makin g your conversation in thread form(checkout 2go),and try limiting the use of nouns,like in your last post,talking about "uduak under the palm tree...",no need to repeat this again.

festwiz: try makin g your conversation in thread form(checkout 2go),and try limiting the use of nouns,like in your last post,talking about "uduak under the palm tree...",no need to repeat this again.

festwiz: Dude work on

.1,Typographical errors
.2,Punctuation
.3, Organization.
.4, Read more literature to know how to make the content of your work feel lively.

Taiye4Christ: Hi Prince.
To be frank, you have quite a long way to go, as far as writing is concerned.
But the most important thing is that you have begun the journey. Like they say, 'The journey of a thousand miles begins with A step'. You have taken that step, i dare say.
I like your courage and determination, your passion for what you are doing and the readiness to accept corrections, to learn and to better yourself. These are vital tools you need as the writer you aspire to become.
Few words of advice, if i may.
-Please, pay heed to the points raised by ROCK. They are basic and very important.
-Type your updates, at least, one hour before you post them. Spend that time reading them over and over again, making corrections where you feel necessary (you may not have much time, I know, but it's not about the quantity of your updates, but the quality). Better not to update at all than to update shabbily
-Also, get one of your friends to proofread your works and offer constructive and valuable suggestions.
-Read wide. Read other people's works, literary and otherwise. It will enrich your vocabulary, as well as polish your grammar. English no be our papa language, but we fit improve the way we dey yarn am by reading and listening to good English.

On a final note, you 've got a great great story here. How far it travels? It depends on you. Don't let your story down.
I have taken my time to say all these because I can see a light, a potential, the seed of a writer in you, if properly harnessed.
Keep the dream alive... IT'S IN YOU.

tmamuda: Followin U

petereddy: Nice story sire but I must confess its below par.Do more to proof read ur story as often as u can.Like Rock has said,u need to space ur work for it to be readable,also punctuations in ur story isn't properly in place.In short make ur work more reader friendly.It seems to me dat u are doing more of undetailed summary than the story u are telling.Your story has content but u are failing to bring our the true elements in ur work.All thesame uve tried but u can do far better

Chiamaka01: @the rock, did all these (the last four episodes) happen during the holiday. What class were you then?

adisa204: Following.no comment naw

The rock5555: AJEBO VS PKACO 2
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"Waiter come and collect your money"

Prince shouted for the whole people in Mr Biggs to hear, everyone turned to see how much the dude has that he was shouting at the waiter like that, he pointed at me and said oya pay the money.

I was in cold sweat, i had only hundred naira before my sister collected 40naira for blackmail fee then i used 10naira to refreshing my mouth only 50naira was left.

If that my body temperature had been measured that moment it would have broken the scale, i looked at Prince who was already bossoming a smile, his body guards were looking at me like i would slap their boss.

The waiter was already impatient, Anita was red eyed and she looked down, a strong idea came upon me and i smiled.

"Waiter, get this boy and his guards a cup of ice cream each and then went we eat finish bring the bill to me, i would pay" i said coldly.

The whole People in the eatry were dumbfounded, Prince was not smilling anymore, his guards were shining their thirty two teeths, am sure they loved ice cream.

The waiter brought the order while i ate my meat like a big man, Prince was fumming and he pushed his ice cream one side.

His boys were busy licking theirs, i was very nervous when the waiter said my bill was 3,500 naira, i almost dropped my spoon and run but i forced my self to continue eating.

The best thing on my mind then was too run for my life, i had timed the movement of the door attendants, i could jump up and flee before they realise anything.

It was going to work really fine or so i thought. Anita finished eating hers while the body guards were also through with theirs, only Prince was left.

"Bros drink na?" i said.

"Is it your business, just pay abeg" he said rudely, i smiled with a shaking mouth.

"Waiter he has finish oya come" he shouted as soon as i cleaned the llast rice, meat and juice on my table.

The water walked up majestically and stood....

"Oh God, why me?" i muttered.
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"Where are you coming from?"

my mother shouted from the dining table as soon as i enter the palour with red eyes.

"Ehm, did Victory not tell yu where i went to?" i said with a ow voice.

"Which victory? Victory that said she dont know where you went to, she said you were with a girl and she held you and you guys went away. Is that true?"

I was so mad at that human being that ate my 40naira, so this girl think that she can carry my money and go and sleep, God go deal with her, i said in my mind.

"Mummy, i went to church o"

"Church with girl abi? Uduak how old are you?"

"14"

"At 14 years you are already having girl friends abi, you are supposed to be reading for your Mock exams instead you are busy chasing girls, do you want to give someone daughter belly" she kept on bashing me as my anger increased.

"Oya go and bring 5 good canes now" she said.

Just the words i wanted to hear, i prefer beatings than words so since its coming from my mother's hand there was no problem at all, i could bear it, but my sister must gain my furry.

"I would give you twenty strokes" she shouted.

I almost laughed because her twenty strokes was my dad's one so i quickly laid down before she changes her mind.

I faked a sweet cry which ended as soon as she left me and went inside smiling when she told me i wont eat that night.

If only she knew i was over filled already, i would not mind doing three days fasting and prayer if asked.

I went inside to see a worst joke, my kid sister was laying on my bed, biscuit, sweet and chewing gum packets laid all around.

I checked her pocket and saw only 5naira remaining, a wicked thought entered into my mind.

So this girl ate 35naira in less than a day and still did not do what i said in our plan, i was so mad that i took her on my shoulders and took her to the bathroom and drop on the ground.

I smiled at my evil handiwork and went to my room and laid down hoping to get some sleep when my brother shouted.

"Mummy, is like the sickness that used to catch Uduak don catch Victory o, see she dey sleep for bathrom"

Everyone ran to go see as usual except me who smiled and then felt the hands of sleep on my life.

I dreamt alot of ugly dreams that night but non of them was more horrible like what happend in Mr Biggs..

To Be Continied...

sigmundfreud: ...O ye of little faith. The alomo works well. U shd try it sometimes.

mcdokwe: I am saying you should not ridicule someone else when obviously you ain't better