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The setting of this stor must be i Edo

Waooow,so nice of you Op,api new month too

Awwww...dats nice,do take care of yourself,following you seriously

Dis pregnancy is really takn its toil on Linda,weldon Op

Hmmmmmm

Hehehehehe,wats happening here nah?somebdy shud plz explain,dear op,hp all is well ooo?i don refresh taya.

Ah!breaks my heart buh its all for the best,a little pepper will do

Stop spreading mat,am not sure,there would be need for that.

Goodmorning everyone

PrinceAdepoju: @T.Dan, I think you should take note of these:
1. your characters. They plenty somehow that when you get to a point, it will look confusing that you have to crack your brain before you know who is who.

You can imagine you telling us everything about Uthman, Hastrup, Hakeem, Tomisin, Tofunmi, Derin, Azeezat, Tesleem, Hassan etc.

I will say stories should centre on one or two persons(My crony centres on all of your characters...it's just like Hakeem is the hero).
Then, you can give us little details about their family, friends etc.

It is not compulsory you centre on all of your characters.

2. How you decribe your characters. I think it is not every character that we readers need to know.
Like Hakeem's secretary you stated. To me, you've gone too far in describing her(that her sister is a pastor, she goes to convention and all that).
If I was a moderator, I would have banned you for derailing

Do not forget to heed DWhiz's advice of getting a break to develop yourself....by reading articles and novels.

I learnt the above from unfulfilled promises.

I bet you will improve, boss!!
I remain your humble follower.

my dear, you need to read Chimamanda Adichie's Purple Hibscuis,there you will see characters flying here and there

I never agreed less,i just pointed out something else entirely,not to worry because my opinion doesnt really matter.

TemitopeDaniel: There are many errors in it... try to read Unfulfilled Promises, you'll know what I mean... d structure and co... buh I go change. ..

hmmm...pls remind me wat diction is in literature,be ursef,hv ur style,let pple read a story n predict who d writer is
anyway,my opinion(uche onye adi njo).

To me,theres nothing wrong with this story,every writer has his own style,TeeD,dont dwell much on critics

U r good ooo,dat soup shaa....

I startd readn ds story today oo,here i am,cryn for Dave,ds op u too good ooo

Did sombori jst quote entire post nah?haba

Linda shud berra watch Henry's untamed temper ooooo,some men shaaa

Goodwrk,Mr Tee,pls do takia of ya mum ooo

Hmmm....gradually its coming out.nice one

Hmmm,nice one op,buh i was thinkn u shud stick to either d beancake or akara

Henry cool down jooor

Hmmm...dat woman isnt true wt Linda oooo,she shud beta be ready

First to sign in

Yummy breakfast,had enough fill

*Packs my keke at d roadside*

coming down lookn sideways.....

auuuchh!hits head on d keke roof,rubn my forehead wt a long hiss
mtcheeeeeeeew,

runs inside.....

Hmmm...na waoo,see as Caleb dey chop mouth

Hmmm....is Linda n her mother type of r/ship possible?slap a married woman in her home?ok ooo

Vickthoriah: Chai...*biting my nails in anticipation*

stop dat joor, u b smal pikin?no lemme wipe u cain ooo