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gsalvatore: " IT WAS THE PLATE-NUMBER OF A BLACK COLOURED TOYOTA CAR". What model and year? Some folks need to get a more detailed mental picture of your write up..if you know what i mean..this things goes a long way to tell your readers more about the character..for we reader to know what is real and what is invented.

The police investigation looks easy...abeg make it difficult for them.


You are trying. I think you need to spin your thinking like a web...have many senarios for each scene.
Make it unique.

Nice job.

Thanks for the advice. Am trying to make d investigation real, etc. Il put in more efforts to spin as u suggested. Ive dropped d model in a previous update. So that was a suspense part.




wait o, so ghostmode deactivated! Aha!!!! Chai diaris Godu.


Thanks all the same i improve each day.

Please dont forget to either like or drop your comments as well.


And voting takes place here...
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Ill appreciate it. Thanks all the same.

CONTINUATION.....


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The Policemen rounded up the scene of Sam's abduction. They walked about the spot Louis described as the place he saw them disappear.


"Pls Madam, can you excuse yourself for a few minutes?" One of the cops asked one of the traders near the scene.


"Officer, good afternoon! how can i help you?" she wiped her wet palms on her apron.


"We're investigating the abduction of a missing boy about 13, 14yrs old. It happened two days ago. We learnt that two men rallied the said boy into a car, or a van towards midday....."

"Officer, i cant help in that. I wasnt around, maybe you can check the next shop." she uttered and resumed her washing.


The officer went to the next shop that belonged to a tailor. He was at his machine, sewing some clothes.


"Afternoon sir, can u....."


"Yes officer, i hope no problem?" he asked curiously as he stood up from his machine.


The officer filled him in when across the street a woman in her mid-thirties began shouting at the top of her voice....



"So you've come to arrest me. I will get my lawyer, i will! That silly fellow went to report me to the police over six thousand naira." Efforts to calm her down proved abortive for five minutes.


"Madam calm down now. We havent even stated why we are here and you're already ranting and making a nuisance of yourself! Pls relax. Nobody sent us to arrest you...." one of the officers finally explained.


"So you mean you are'nt here to arrest me? So no Mr Gbenga sent you here? I thought....." she exhales with a frown on her face, feeling somewhat ashamed. She had just washed her 'dirty linen' without compulsion. " I didnt know Officer. Im sorry." She pleaded as some of them stared at her and shook their heads.


"So officer, what is it?" she offered them seats, but they politely refused. It was too early to sit down before the proper investigation began.


"Do you know that woman?" The officer with the tailor asked.

"Her customers do argue with her alot. She has a temper. Quite unfortunate!"


"Hmm. So.... Any idea of such incident. Did you see any car whatsoever.?" He looked at the tailor.


"Officer i only saw some cars speed off roughly, didnt think it was anything, but you can ask Tony." He pointed to a Depot that sold crates of drinks. A few guys relaxed around it.


"Oh okay, i'll be back though."


"He does snap pictures alot. So just ask him." The tailor adviced and returned to continue his work.



"Who is Mr Tony here?" Corporal Kenny asked on getting there.


A guy affirmed recognition with mumblings and a nod.


"Before you panic, i am not here to arrest anybody so just cooperate with us. We're here to confirm some things."


Tony glanced at his mother and signalled for her to be patient. She was already looking scared. "Yes sir, erm..."


"Did you see any usual movements here on saturday morning?"

"Like around what time sir?" He used 'sir' out of fear and not respect. The gun the cop carried looked dead, but it could be deadlier in a few seconds of an officer's anger.


"Around 10 and 11am." Officer Kenny replied and scanned Tony's face for answers.


"Not really sir."


"Are you sure young man?"


"Yes officer. Was busy here helping my dad after i arrived. Didnt notice any usual stuff." he was getting scared. His mind played a scary cell scene as he responded.


"Its okay, thank you very much." Officer kenny replied and strode off to continue his investigation.


"Erm officer, wait wait wait! I....." Tony started and lost words again.
Corp. Kenny turned back to look at him.


"Yes, you what??" he retorted back impatiently.


"I dont know officer, but i hope this might help." Tony said frightened. "did you say between 10/11am officer?"


"Yes! Yes..... Around that time. What is it exactly?


Tony fumbled with his pockets and brought out his mobile set.

"Pictures officer!"


"Which pictures?" Officer kenny asked as he drew nearing to have a glance. He was yet to grasp what he meant.

"He loves snapping pictures Officer." Tony's mother blurted in.



"Ohh! Let me have a look. And which one in particular?"

"I do take selfies, and....." He traced the pictures to the timeframe the officer called.


"Whats that, yes that one?" officer kenny queried after sighting one.


His fellow policemen were already around him.

"This?" Tony scrolled to it.

"Fephew!! Bingo!!" hahahahaha!! Officer Kenny laughed out making his colleagues to curiously ask why.


"Officer i just took that randomly." Tony implied.

"Zoom it well, abi you no get zoom?"

He zoomed it closer and Officer Kenny grabbed the set from him,placed his gun down, and showed his colleagues all round. Tony's mum was curious as well.


The picture was one of those Tony had taken that day- a personal one. It was the thing at the background that did attracted the officers.

IT WAS THE PLATE-NUMBER OF A BLACK-COLOURED TOYOTA CAR!!!


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