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rofemiguwa: Luvmi d plot is perfect.for someone u v bin 2gada dis. Long talking abt ur experience wnt v come at a better tym dan wen he asked.dy didn't jus meet remember and even if deres a mole.inspector sent his own mehn meaning pple he can vouch for not some random. Police officer.franko u r my bestest.can't wait for more.abeg don't keep me waiting for long

Bros Frank,u are bestest too o

Bros Frank, you have to do better in potraying the inspector as unintelligent. If I am ask to list the attribute of the inspector, it will go like these:
uncorruptible-cos if he is not the Omnekas would have bribe him.
Deligent- he is passionate about his job which is crime solving.
Critical Thinker- his ability to discovered there was a mole among his men.
Wise- show me a man's friend and I will tell you who he is-Chidi.
Now back to Adanna- I want you to research the phschological effect of rape. I know she is not raped but almost no lady will narrate that kind of story willingly except if she was specifically ask.

[quote author=frank3.16]ok, concerning me and u getting married... i think we are gradually getting there.

look ehn, if i marry u, i will give u the best love u can ever imagine. i will love you with all my heart and give u all the care u need.

no i can't stay three months away from you without cheating on you. remember, that will never stop me from loving u. if i tell u i wont cheat, then i am lying. if any man tells u he wont cheat... i promise u that most of them are lying. unfortunately, u girsl are comfortable with lies, rather than reality. what more can i say, my name is FRANK, i cant do otherwise.[/quote]Haha Bros Frank, na bros I deh call you o. Thanks 4 be been frank So how long can u stay without sex?

The inspector work was to solve crime and to do that the perpetrators need to be taken to court and for him to do that, he definitely need witnesses. Due to leakages under his watch, a witness was brutally mudered, then Daniel and Adanna were nearly mudered. If he was as smart as you said, he was not suppose to entrust the lives of his main witnesses in the hands of his colleague until d mole is caught. Now I will suggest a trusted retired police officer or a friend that is in the bussiness of body guarding.
Daniel ask her do you have a bf? The next thing is for her to say no and jump to the rape story. Frank, it didn't gel or is that the reason why she doesn't have a bf?

repogirl: At lvmj, abeg allow me to ta si, notice frank said such guys...he didn't say guys, jide didn't have any obligation to daisy. He was a raver and had a certain lifestyle already which he was into, he couldn't have just stopped it. It's even supposed to get worse as he's supposed to be rebellious cos he was forced into the marriage.

Thanks 4 ta si-ing. Lets leave Jide case aside. Repo can't you see what they are writing, that a red blooded male can't do without sex for 3 months. So my husband to be can't travel without me, oga o.

Frank, well done. We are getting to the end of story.
Lets have another discussion. There was a mole in the police force but the inspector still sent 2 policemen to guard Daniel and Adanna. He also sent policemen to take jack to the hospital. How was he sure thoes he sent were not the mole?
Also Adanna telling Daniel about the rape case and few min later Chidi's call came in was too neat, it was too far reaching.

Br3nd4: Muhehehehehehe. . .

Dear #team Daisy,

Y'all should park well jor. you think Bren and Daisy has it coming?
Wait till you see Jide's toasting skills.. All of you plus Brenda sef would putty back to Jide's arms

Your gal still gat madt love for Our boy. Shey una sabi

It's only natural that he does a lil wooing and this time Daisy iz gonna fall HARD, real HARD!
*mischievious grin*

Signed:
#team Jide

Lol.So na don dey admit small small say Jide go beg,grovel and knee b4 Daisy go gree am.

Princesa, I dey feel you o..... @ Dr shroud, ehnnnn.

[quote author=frank3.16]almost impossible... such guys are nt even fun to be with, i bet u wont like their kind[/quote]Bros Frank hian! For instance if I get marry to you that means you cant't or even I can't travel 4 3months without you cheating on me?

[quote author=PAGAN 9JA]you cant do that!

you cant just put random words and call that a poem! there have to be sentences and rhymes (unless its free-verse)[/quote]It is called impulsive poem. Immediately I read Ishi's poem,the spirit came over me and I did it within 5 min. *chuckling*

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Izylove u raised very good points but I will have to disagree with you that a lady should marry a guy that loves her irrespective of the love she gives in return.
Daisy was silly but I can understand coz she was stupidly in luv. Jide was understandably angry but no lady should accept calmly the shit Jide is dishing out the way Daisy did, that is why I'm happy brenda is coming to Nigeria.

Doctor Shroud: Princesa, its a great job you're doing...keep it up...i'll like to bring some issues to your notice; Jide a lagosian in his early 30's, who had an active sexual life with grace, couldn't have possibly stayed celibate for 3months, i mean, feed us on his lifestyle outside matrimony's walls...where does he get the fun? Who'z the gurl, that'z still generous with her favours to him? You said grace qualified as an ex? So it can't be grace, right? Jide is flesh n blood, and i deduced ,from the story, that his guard-once in a while, fails him, in the face of Daisy's charms, even if for a second, even if he resisted daisy's attempted seductive measures, i think we should have been given the impression, that he struggled hard, withing himself to, resist her.
"hell hath no fury,like a woman scorned" i wish my preety gentle Daisy, would stumble on those texts in quote, somewhere, and ACT LIKE A WOMAN SCORNED! Good work princesa

You mean,it is impossible for a guy to stay 3 months without sex?

repogirl: Are you using a mobile phone? Its like there's an issue with commenting via mobile phone, will check it out later and see what I can do, right now my internet is wack. By tomorrow u might be able to.

Sorry for inconveniences abeg.

No problem.

Slickest is this you? I can bet with the whole money I have (which is not much) that you are the one that wrote this piece.

When you are lost for words, use proverbs to find it.
Op and Abishow... thanks for those beautiful proverbs.

Hmmm, I can't wait to read it, congrats for making your country and yourselves proud.

Ishilove: I am fire
I am ice
I am water
I am the earth.

I am the north
I am the south
I scream, even when
I am silent.

There is a rage beneath
Bubbling beneath
In the calm underwater
Volcano.

I feel love
I feel hate
I take a knife
And plunge it deep.

In fascination
I stare at it
At my own blood
At mine own torment.

I am not what I seem
I am exactly what I seem
Look very closely, because
I am what I am...

I am what I am
I am Mona Lisa
To the world
I am white
Cool
Calm
mild
Meek
But I am what I am
Deep down
I am red
Fire
Wild
Blood
Wind
So I am what I am
I am Mona Lisa

Ishi, well done.

Frank,there is point in what you wrote, is just that you didn't state it in your write-up. Lets move on.

Frank, pls humour me, we are talking of the Omneka's boyz. The bad boyz and the popular jingo of owerri. They are the only one that will dear blocked the road leading to police station and u are saying there was no crowd.
Coz when u are explaining Benson and bodyguard u said the Omnekas were popular.
Agree with u about the witnesses if it were more than 1 or there is a crowd.

[quote author=frank3.16]i didnt talk about crowd being dispersed. perhaps i should have pointed that the road was a lonely one (my bad). jack was injured and not joe. i was meant to write jack, will modify immediately (thanks)[/quote]You alluded there was a crowd when inspector Bassey was was having flashback of how he got to know what happen. You wrote Chinedu escaped by running into the crowd.

Repo I can't comment o. Abeg give the steps weh I go follows.

Frank I will give you pointers by asking the following questions. How were the crowd and the cars dispersed with a cutlass and an axe? Chinedu and jack didn't bring any weapons to the scene, how were they able to wound Joe with an axe?
In my opinion, I will suggest the fight scene should be set in a less busy place if you are not going to make use of a gun and the witness who will report to the police should be briefly introduced.

Op nice write-up and I partly agreed with what you wrote.
I have read books written by the English and they don't write big grammars the way you did, pls try and break down your words for better coherence and comprehension.

Frank, beautifully done.
But at your leisure time, I want you to go over that fight scene again. Once again well done.

repogirl: LVMJJ, how far now? where you dey since, have you seen my blog? please checkirout (Sorry for derailation, Princessa).

Awww, congratulobia. I'm definitey going to check it out and I'm definitely going to comment.

Go Brenda! Go Daisy! Go Brenda! Go Daisy!
Jide must hear, see and smell wen.

Onegig well done. So far beautiful story.
But two things, can you please write ur main characters in one update i.e pls try and make ur update longer.
Also since your story is set in two countries, I will urge you to describe ur characters in details. For instance I will love to know the height, colour, nationality and accent of Scarface.

swaggerkid: Smiles @ur Name Luvmijeje Luv mi tender

Lol, thanks.