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Wow! I hope this is not the end. *following*

Emyo: diary section should be on nairaland or do you mean literal Dairy?.

What and what should I be modifying, I thought that should be the reason why we came here after we left the endorsing thread?

You said it is only the message I 'WANT' to pass that will determine what class of literature it will fall into, that is to say the explicit use of words denoting, confused and devastated self central boy was not good enough for you? I would need better suggestions please!!!

Hey against your first position of this not having a place. In literature, you asking if it has a tone of a devastated person, and if yes then it now falls into poetry...I thought I saw a comment applauding me of writing a poem minced in prose?

Well I don't have better words to pen down devastation.
Thanks for your kindness.
I will be wanting for
1. A suggested title for this piece from you.
2. Points of where I should modify so my message will be listed under poetry.
And AOB why mydd_44 will not move it?

Tell me first,the messages you want to pass across to your readers.
Lets do it like this, I will list the messages I got from what you wrote.
1.You want to commit sucide.
2.You were sad mostly because of your school fees palava.
3.Juliet came to your rescue.

Are those the messages you want to pass across?

True words, Op thanks.

I love it, Mynd well done o.

Cold blooded: you killed it, I guess u are very good in literature.

Thanks,I love and appreciate art.

In my opinion,what you wrote up there doesn't fall anywhere in literature except the diary section.
If you are going to modify your write-up, the message you want to pass to your reader will determine what class of literature it will fall into.
If d message you want to pass to us is how devastated you were the day she died. I will suggest poetry.
My question to you is,what message do you want to pass to your reader?

Rasheed dey suffer o. Slickest well done o.

Emyo what you wrote up there is not a memoir rather if I'm going to class it, I will call it an obituary.
Also what I got from your write up is that you are a selfish instead of a caring son due to your repetition of who is going to pay your school fees. Your mum died and all you could think of his your school fees.
As a memoir,you are suppose to share with us the moment you spent with her,what made her the best mum to you, what made you want to commit sucide,I hope it is not because of your school fees.
You are suppose to take us on a journey so that we will be able to climax together but you failed to do that.

Emyo: do you think am jobless? Coming to nairaland to seek attentions?
Here is my work shop ...Critics are the tools building me.

I learn from critics of even other peoples work. So please be free to say thing to me at all times.

Sorry for my tone! But it just to say, u welcome.

I'm moving to your thread.

[quote author=Mynd_44]Enough of this...you two take this elsewhere before you two get banned[/quote]Egbe Agbara le,chill jor.

Emyo: oooooooooo buh why do you think. So?

I will tell you why but on 1 condition,that you won't take it personal o.

It talks about the aftermath of the war at the warfront,obviously the Nigeria civil war. How norlmacy was never achieved due to the pain and loss caused by the war but life continues. It talks about things before the war that annoyed them such as NEPA men who bought bills who are now source of joy because they didn't believe they will
get to see them again. It also talks on how they couldn't remember the dance steps due to the brutality of the war. Finally it talks on how they have to force themselves in defeat,in fear and in shame to go back home to lick their wounds.

Wow so sad. Abeg I no major in anything o.

Slickest well done o. When Rasheed left that house,wasn't he suppose to run?

[quote author=Mynd_44]Stop chasing me[/quote]Lol, Mynd abeg make the thing go front page. Emyo front page weh this thing deh go na abuse then go take you do o. I don talk my own.