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My favourite episode is after the break up with Tunde when Papa n Mama were counselling Daniella. I lov doz words used dia

I also lov where Daniella still went to rescue tunde from his self pity and helped him back up.

Nice Work Rachealfst

Hello everyone.

appreciate our comments, response and arguments.

I av a few point of mine to note too.
1. sometimes, a story aint all abt suspense, intrigues and d likes, from my knowledge of this story right from the start, each story in d big story has its lessons. doz dat av followed well understand this

2. If a story aint goin d way u anticipate, pls let it b, u ain't the writer after all.

3. as much as constructive criticism is healthy. making it constructive entails pointing out what seems missing and suggesting what needed to b done

4. This story is all abt morals. if u have all d morals u need and u av learnt it all in life. u may please leave d story

ewww

lez wat?

rachealfst.. dat ur finger fine o, u mind givin me just dat ring finger and d luggage on it for proper care

African women sha..
still imagining Pamilerin is a virgin.

btw..... I av a question I will like all unmarried ladies to help me attend to

Do any of ur parents ask abt ur Virginity status or they just talk about it and act with self claimed knowledge of 'my daughter never know man'

Response plzz...

I av to confess, I felt emotional too. thank God paul handled this. happy married life to dem.

Daniel and Daniella... tnx to u both

Her hesitation will prove to him dat she has done sth she aint proud of but then it also proves that she luvs him. I hope Daniel wont change after this knowledge.

Pamilerin, pls do not let that Idiot get to Daniel b4 u

rachealfst:
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Two weeks later, Daniel came to my house during the week and we are in his car parked in my compound when he changed the topic.

“Daniella I have a feeling that you are hiding something from me. Is there anything you think I should know about you. I mean both past and present” he asked.

Thanks for the dedication. I am here again while its still hot.

still following bumper2bumper

rachealfst:
Hi everyone,

Let's rub minds together.

What will you do as a Lady if you are in Pamilerin's shoes. Will you come out clean?


Guys, how will you take the news, is that the end of the relationship? or you'll ignore the past and move on with her.


Let's hear your view and please be realistic.

Do u knw dat Ladies hardly use it against us wen we tell dem our various sexcapades? Y? Cos dey r less envious.

some men even knowing dat dia lady isn't a virgin wen dey met will still be interested in knowing "how many men" "how ofen"

Now put urself in ladies shoe and let us learn to love d present and forget d past. if Daniel love Daniela without d knowledge of d past, then He needs not av a diff view even with the knowledge of that past.

in my view, Pamilerin shouldn't tell all the details. its best left as a dark secret.

my one penny

rachealfst: Episode 24



"I wished I’ve met this kind of guy earlier, maybe I will still be a virgin by now. But there are some things we can't take back" I thought.

As it dey hot

thanks dearie

Good job Racheal

I av a feeling someone is going to interview someone and someone will b shocked n disappointed


if u knw wat I mean. hit like

chistar01:
Hi Rachealfst,

Just came across this and I must say it's pretty nice but I've a few reservations.

Firstly, several people have stated this but I feel the need to emphasize more on it. The plot is generally beautiful thanks to the moral message you are passing but sadly it isn't well developed. The fast paced nature of the story makes us the readers lose the pleasure proper "detailing" can add to a story. I'll advice you take your time and tell us more about the story. It feels like you are just telling us a regular story whereas I think it would be a master piece if you can describe more. I've read 17+ pages and I really have no idea how the lead character, Daniella, looks like or what any of the scenes are like. Don't just tell us the story, "show" it to us.

Secondly, I think a little suspense here and there would help a lot. The plot keeps people coming back for more but suspense and curiosity would keep people eyes attached to the story.

Thirdly and lastly, this is not really important as your grammar is almost perfect and typos are had to come by but there still are a little typos every here and there, and if you plan on taking writing to the next level, you might want to go beyond dependency on automatic Spelling Checkers and actually read through for typos and grammatical errors.

All in all, this is a beautiful story, and more ink to your pen. Shallom .

PEACe.

Oga Chistar.. u no fit remember me o.. but u r among d few dat made me stay loyal to Nairaland, especially d literature session

Chubbiehills:
something good about this morning is we are on front page.....more blood vein.

I am happy abt this. . for d OP who is hard working and for many Ladies that will learn a lesson or two from this story and for many men that will have a change of attitude to relationship.

Let Lessons be learnt[b]

rachealfst:
Episode 14


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Daniel hugged me and whispered slowly into my ears “I will be back”

“I’ll be expecting you” I whispered into his ears too.

Thanks for d update Racheal.

btw.. ladies make una learn o
guys like Daniel often still end up not treating gals lile Pamilerin well....
you are asking why?


cos she is too quick to show him she also wants him and as such, Daniel wont consider d fact dat he is lucky to av her. he myt just take it as av gotten her out of my lucky charm.

guys do diz a lot wen a lady is already falling b4 dat proposal

Happy birthday to you Rachealfest.. may the wishes of ur heart meet with the Grace of God for quick response . amen. Thanks for d lessons embedded in ur story.

rachealfst:
Episode 11

“Fine, the relationship has ended before now, all this is just formalities. I wish you all the best”



“I thank God oooo, broken relationship is better than a broken marriage. Who would have thought that, that boy would change like that”

“Every disappointment is a blessing, and if one door closes another we open. So please try as much as possible to move on with your life”


“That’s his lose my dear, just take heart, I believe God will provide someone far far better than him”



“Please don’t kill yourself over one stupid son of Adam o”

I lov d quoted.

if everyone can take one or two lesson from those statements.

if u consider urself as a blessing to anyman.
then you will know its his loss.
btw.. heartbreak is heavy mostly when both partner have had much sex. only if ladies can stand dia ground of No Sex.
the body wants it. but the spirit doesn't need it out of wedlock.

Thanks Rachelfest for d lessons u r bringing up.




btw.

watch your Will and We.
"if one door closes, another 'will'open.

rachealfst:
I'd like to chirp in one or two things before I post the next episode, you are free to contribute as well. Thanks


Excerpt from Episode 7&8(Case Study:Pamilerin)
To all the Ladies in the house.

If you are been abuse either physically or emotionally, please don’t patch things up, don’t make excuses for him or even defend his actions.

If you are in any abusive relationships, please get out of that relationship.
You know you are not the only one he’s dating and you still held on to the relationship or *you caught your boyfriend/fiancé in the act but you decided to let it go because he apologized.*
I think it’s time we stop this crazy things we do for love.

Do you think if you leave him, you won’t get someone else? Hell No!
Don’t say he will change, you can’t change a guy who is not willing to change.

Atayis pointed out something in his comment. “If a guy fool you once, he is a fool. But if he fools you twice then you are the biggest fool”

nikz says"We make unfavourable plans for ourselves while God is busy thinking and planning good for us" Yes! God's ways are not our ways neither His thoughts our thoughts.

Shallom!

I do not quite agree with you on that aspect I starred.
I was once there and even though it was due to carelessness. I was forgiven and I can't joke with her now. I love her so much for d big heart she displayed and it made our love stronger

rachealfst:
Cc:
OneTeslim, opeano, krinniebouqui iOluwaMichael, sharliz, sal1974

I am an introvert. ...

someone has already crucified us here ..

now u called me out and calls for me to acknowledge dat am loving d story. been impressed with your story and language use.

where do I drop constructive criticism?

For doz crucifying Pamilerin cos she went bak to Tunde on his request after some distance created. It doesn't look like u av loved someone u r afraid to lose. genuine love I mean.

Great work of literature. . started following when it reached FP. am glad I followed it as I enjoyed every bit.

btw.. I did not read d part where some pipu here quoted TJ as murdering someone.. has sth changed?