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Re: Red Ashes by Chumzypinky(f): 8:07pm On Dec 24, 2016
ayoxelee:
U are so amazing mam, despite ur busy schedule u stl made time to prepare dz wonderfl update.... tnkx man
Tanx dear. I jst try 2 put my readers 1st
Re: Red Ashes by Qasaforlife(f): 10:09pm On Dec 24, 2016
Most times it's difficult forgiving those dat hurt us. Chioma shld forgive Mabel cos had it been she played her wifely role well ,Chucks couldn't hv got entangled to Mabel.
Re: Red Ashes by Chumzypinky(f): 11:06pm On Dec 24, 2016
Dedicated to all the running arounds i did today, lol.

KAINENE.


'those girls eh...they are crazy oo...' Kaka said breaking the shells of her boiled groundnuts 'better craze wey no get beginning and the end dey work them for inside their head. Stupid girls! That one dey break for bottle for me. E be like sey she no knw sey i be waffi babe. That bottle she go break am for my head, e go pieces, no quata. Babe just dey dey puff, dey spread. The other one say na queen of Amazon. Na only am be amazon, she never see where dem dey use bottle chuk for queen nyash. Abi she no know sey queen get queen? For this life, na only God na no get master oo, no reason am oo, bae. No be only she be queen. As i dey so, u know my story na, sey i comot for cult no mean say i no get contacts oo babe, i go just treat her fuckup for this town...' Kaka raked and raked.


'abeg make i hear word. When the babes dem dey perform, i no even hear pim from your mouth not to talk of shut up. Abeg abeg, i no dey for radio without battery matter now. Just gbes, you dey hear me so? Pam, chilax. Hapummaka, leave me alone' i hissed throwing some groundnuts into my mouth.


'babe, na me oo...' she stood up with her palm on her chest 'na me oo Kaka, Kaka d Kaki, one and only. No leave, no transfer. I say if i just ball in waffi now, you know homage wey i go get? Babe, forget that thing oo, no fall my levels'


'i hear well well. Na your level high pass. After you na you, nobody reach you'


'i bow for you oo...' she sat down and hissed 'stupid girls! Eh-hen,' she hit my laps 'have you called Nathan?'


I hissed 'which Nathan? The monkey own abi the human being own?'


'your papa own!' she snapped 'mumu! Sometimes, i just dey wonder the day wey you go finally see sense for ground pick...or when person go just pity you dash you small sense. Nathaniel, Nathaniel Imore, i your head dey do push and start'


I hissed again 'abeg, make i hear jareh...' i packed the empty shells of groundnut into an empty bowl 'that guy is a fool oo. You cant imagine that he couldnt even call to apologise for what happened that, apologise for what he....'


'for what? Apologise for what?' Kaka cut in 'apologise sey wetin happen? He kill person?'


I paused and looked at her 'that guy disobeyed me!'



'what?' there was confusion written all over her face 'you've gat to be kidding me Kainenechukwu Igho. I just didnt hear you right, i might have gone deaf too'


'your problem, not mine'


'who are you for the guy not to disobey? Who are you for the guy to bow down to your every need and command? Queen of England? Even queen of England sef, people dey wey dey disobey am, no lele. Babe, i'm disappointed in you oo. What you did that day was really wrong and i expected you to realise that even earlier but you surprised me as usual. You dont own people's lives Kainenechukwu, and as such, you cant control them, you cant tell them what and what not to do with their lives. If you dont like the way people around you handle things, the best you can do is advice, you think say na gra gra be everything? Its not. Kainene, you're too proud for my liking. I just dey look the way you dey form James Bond for that guy that day even before im mama arrive. I just dey watch you, for my mind, i be like, what is all this rubbish for? I nearly dragged you outside to talk sense into you but Casmir noticed and held me back. Everyone is important Kainenechukwu, no matter their lifestyle. Infact, i don provoke, wetin dey do you? You think i wouldnt have reacted more if i had happened to be in his shoes? There's a limit to what everyone can take Kainene. You dont expect him to oblige your every wish, its rubbish. No be you carry am come life. I saw the way the guy was trying so hard to please you that day and the least i expected from you was gratitude and appreciation. But...haba! Kainene!!!! Do you know there was a way you would have talked to that guy that day and he would have apologised to his mum?'


'he insulted his mum for fuvck sake!'


'he did wrong, yes! Damn it! I know, we all know. You're his friend Kainene. And you should stop making it look like you're only doing him a favour being his friend, what are you? Whats so special about you? Are you not like every other human being in this world? Do you have two heads? Are you the most beautiful girl ever?'


'Kaka, leave my house'


'even before i finished talking, i knew you were going to ask me to leave. But think about what i told you. And if you feel i'm right, pick up your phone and give him a phone call. As for me, i'm off' she picked her bag and left.



I sighed in confusion.


TBC

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Re: Red Ashes by fam24(f): 11:31pm On Dec 24, 2016
Chumzypinky, well done. Compliment of the season.

Keinene is too harsh. All her toughness and command tones can not change Nathan, only love, gentleness and calmness can change him for the better. She may even make him worse with her attitude. She should stop behaving as if she is doing him a favour by been friend with him. She should stop behaving as if the world revolve around her. She is even beginning to annoy me. I believe Kaka will be a better partner to Nathan than her.

Nathan is a product of an unloved home. His major vice is his rapist attitude. I hope he changes for the best, and found love. He can still be a better man with love and patience.

Chioma: If she can forgive Chuks, why can't she forgive Mabel. She should also give Mabel a chance, she should at least listen to her and reason it out. She should forgive both Chuks and Mabel, but should not give any of them the chance to ruin/control her happiness. Her happiness depends on her, not on anyone, neither a cheating spouse nor an unfaithful friend.

Chuks: Hmm. The man every female keeps seducing. He does not even have the dignity to tell the truth to ask for forgiveness after so many years. Even if he would cheat, not with someone close to his wife. He is not even repentance, after all these years. He will still cheat again and again, so why ask for forgiveness. Why lie to your wife's friend, just to fornicate with her? There are so many ladies he could have sex with, without lying or hurting their feelings and spoiling their relationship.
To me, he is the worst character in this story so far. I hope Chichi see through his lies, and not fall for them

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Re: Red Ashes by ibullem(m): 6:05am On Dec 25, 2016
Merry Christmas Chumzypinky
Re: Red Ashes by berhdo: 7:18am On Dec 25, 2016
Merry christmas Mrs. Chumzypinky
Re: Red Ashes by PrettyMizQdot(f): 8:56am On Dec 25, 2016
Merry Xmas, Ma'am Chumzypinky. . . JOLADE! *Y i dey cal u self*.. i don already giv up on u. . . hmmm, op somtin worse ll nt apen to Adebriana.. I dey fear 4 Kene o.
Re: Red Ashes by Pureheart91(m): 12:30pm On Dec 25, 2016
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I hereby wish everyone a merry xmas and happy new year in advance.

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Re: Red Ashes by Chumzypinky(f): 1:28pm On Dec 25, 2016
*Carries tray of rice and chicken into the building and drops it on the table* Una wel done oo.
Nnde Nairaland, akenem unu (bear with me, i cant rite igbo oo). Since mornin, my children jst dey shout, MERRY XMAS.


For my mind, i just dey laugh. I was once lyk dem 2. And nw, i'm matured, i dnt evn have tym 2 start screamin MERRY XMAS. Wen chicken full ground 2 fry? Wen my oga wey put me 4 hauz don order me to cook all types of rice. As in eh, buffet no b here. Coconut rice, Fried rice, Jollof rice, White rice, ofada rice, oil rice, as in eh...i wake up around five, and i stil dey kitchen till nw.

My children wan block my ear for me. "Mummy, are we going to the cinema?" "Mummy, are we going to see mama Victor today?" "Mummy, wont you take us to a swimming pool"

And i look at them and say "your papa no want make i rest. Whether na im hauz dem 4 born Jesus wey he wan invite pple come make dem chop, i no know. Is out hauz a manger? Isnt it funny?" D tin is dey dont evn undastand.


So i jst say make i drop in here, greet una smal.


I've finshed cookin Jellof, Fried and Coconut, Stew dey fire, wic 1 una wan chop, make una place una orders.



Merry Xmas to all the Nairalanders in the hauzzzz!!!!!
I love y'all, have a wonderful christmas jareh. And pls oo, make una bear with me, no updated today. No vex, pele.


*Runs out of the thread b4 pple pursue me*

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Re: Red Ashes by Mstylz(f): 2:11pm On Dec 25, 2016
Thanks for the dedication Chumzypinky and merry Christmas
Re: Red Ashes by Winters22: 2:43pm On Dec 25, 2016
Chumzypinky:
*Carries tray of rice and chicken into the building and drops it on the table* Una wel done oo.
Nnde Nairaland, akenem unu (bear with me, i cant rite igbo oo). Since mornin, my children jst dey shout, MERRY XMAS.


For my mind, i just dey laugh. I was once lyk dem 2. And nw, i'm matured, i dnt evn have tym 2 start screamin MERRY XMAS. Wen chicken full ground 2 fry? Wen my oga wey put me 4 hauz don order me to cook all types of rice. As in eh, buffet no b here. Coconut rice, Fried rice, Jollof rice, White rice, ofada rice, oil rice, as in eh...i wake up around five, and i stil dey kitchen till nw.

My children wan block my ear for me. "Mummy, are we going to the cinema?" "Mummy, are we going to see mama Victor today?" "Mummy, wont you take us to a swimming pool"

And i look at them and say "your papa no want make i rest. Whether na im hauz dem 4 born Jesus wey he wan invite pple come make dem chop, i no know. Is out hauz a manger? Isnt it funny?" D tin is dey dont evn undastand.


So i jst say make i drop in here, greet una smal.


I've finshed cookin Jellof, Fried and Coconut, Stew dey fire, wic 1 una wan chop, make una place una orders.



Merry Xmas to all the Nairalanders in the hauzzzz!!!!!
I love y'all, have a wonderful christmas jareh. And pls oo, make una bear with me, no updated today. No vex, pele.


*Runs out of the thread b4 pple pursue me*

*Smacks* thanks for the meal ma. a na m ekene unu niile.....
biko onye nwere oche m ma eji nodu? no one? happy xmaas..
Re: Red Ashes by Chumzypinky(f): 3:54pm On Dec 25, 2016
Winters22:

*Smacks* thanks for the meal ma. a na m ekene unu niile..... biko onye nwere oche m ma eji nodu? no one? happy xmaas..
lol... male or female?

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Re: Red Ashes by gtin(m): 4:01pm On Dec 25, 2016
Merry Xmas to Chumzypinky 1 of d best writers i knw

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Re: Red Ashes by Winters22: 4:25pm On Dec 25, 2016
Chumzypinky:
lol... male or female?
female
Re: Red Ashes by Chumzypinky(f): 9:21pm On Dec 25, 2016
gtin:
Merry Xmas to Chumzypinky 1 of d best writers i knw
*hides my face* I am shyin. I wish you d same Honey
Re: Red Ashes by Chumzypinky(f): 9:22pm On Dec 25, 2016
Winters22:
female
pretty gal
Re: Red Ashes by Feyikemi12(f): 9:39pm On Dec 25, 2016
wow! this is simply amazing can't keep my eyes off my phone till I got to the this page ride on ma'am #following
Re: Red Ashes by TeleboiZ005(m): 11:41pm On Dec 25, 2016
Finally gotcha!


Nice one!






Can u see me
Re: Red Ashes by Winters22: 5:47am On Dec 26, 2016
Chumzypinky:
pretty gal
*smiles* tenchu... but hu sed am pretty? u aren't seeing me
Re: Red Ashes by Chumzypinky(f): 9:34am On Dec 26, 2016
KAINENE.

I stared at my phone...hoping and praying he was going to call. I felt like calling him to apologise but my pride wouldnt let me. I felt he was the guy and he should be the one apologising.


I sighed and rested my head on my palms. Maybe i behaved rashly. Yes i did. I wasnt supposed to command him, that i knew.



My phone rang and i hurriedly picked it up, but i hissed when i saw it was my mum.


'hello mum?'



'eh-hen, Kainene. I'm travelling to Abuja oo'



'which Abuja? I mean, what business have you with Abuja?'



'i'm travelling there with your dad. We have to see his people and set a date for the renewal of our wedding vows'



'what?!' i screamed 'i dont understand...what...what is happening?' i asked with a raised voice.

'your dad and i are renewing our vows...' then there was silence 'Nene, i'm sorry, i didnt tell you on time. I knew you were going to object to it'



Tears poured out from my eyes. I'd never ever in my life thought my mum was ever going to choose my unfaithful father over me. She knew very well that she was going to lose me if she renews her vows with her husband, but she still went ahead to do what she did. Because she loved me less and loved him more.


I swallowed hard 'have a...have a safe trip. By the time you come back, i must have left. I wish you a happy married life' I hung up and hurriedly packed my things from the table as tears rushed out of my eyes.



I dashed out of the hotel, to the garage and drove out to the car.



***

I pressed the door bell again and this time, Mrs Onome Chukwuka opened the door. She looked more beautiful than i last saw her. Her grey hair was still very visible and she had her hair in afro style.


She smiled warmly at me 'my pikin...long time. Hug me na...' she spread her arms and i went into it.


'how is your mumsi?' she asked closing the door 'this one wey you carry this kind big bag, i hope all is well?'

'all is well mumsi...i just say make i come stay with una small'



She screamed in excitement and gave me a high five 'you're highly welcome my darling. You can stay here as much as you like jareh...this is your house. Your friend Kamsi dey inside her room, dey ping as usual. That girl lazy eh...she no dey help me for kitchen oo. Very lazy human being. The only thing wey she sabi na to dey ping ping ping. Ah, wetin? Abi na so you too dey ping? You know the popular saying, show me your friend and i'll tell you who you are'


I laughed 'mama, no be so..' i so much loved this woman, a complete waffi woman. She was educated, attended one of the best schools in the US, and she had a thick foreign accent but that didnt stop her from mixing her words with pidgin.


She was married to an igbo man, Engr Chukwuka Chukwuka(CC). She had six children, all girls with Kaka being the fifth. A very disciplined woman and Kaka feared her even more than she feared her dad. And an excellent cook for that matter.


'let me check on Kaka' i said.


'no problem. KC dey around oo'



'serious?' KC was the last born of the house. She schooled abroad.



'eh. But she and her papa comot. Only God know where them waka go. Na yesterday she come oo. For the Christmas celebrations. That one concern them, all of them lazy. Make Kaka just do, marry comot, make i know sey na only me dey house. Nobody kukuma dey help me cook my food before. Make i rush cook Ikodo for you'



'mama d mama! Na you sure pass. Make i go see Kaka' i hailed happily.


'tell her make she come down! Tell her sey if i meet her for there eh...she no go get herself oo'


'no problem' i said dragging my box upstairs. Mummy Kaka was a chatterbox and if i hadnt left when i did, she for use talk kill me.



I pushed the door to Kaka's room open without knocking. As her mum had said, she was busying with her phone, so busy she was, she hadnt even noticed when i stepped into the room.


I tiptoed to where she was and tickled her.
She jerked, dropping her phone to the ground, she eyed me and hissed.
And i knew she was still mad at me.



'Kaka, i'm sorry. I'm really sorry about my attitude towards you the other day, it wont happen again' i apologised.



She ignored me pressing away.


'Kaka, now, no do this kind thing..'


She dropped her phone and looked at me 'see Kainenechukwu..i'm sick and tired of your shitty and bratty attitude..sometimes i wonder how we managed to cope as friends..when we are two different people with different idealogies..about life. I wonder if this friendship thingy can still...work out between us. Because with the way we've been disagreeing about so many things nowadays..hmm....' she sighed.


Cheap talk! How many times had she said that? Kaka and i were inseparable, besties for life.


I hugged her from behind smacking her ass and she giggled.



TBC

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Re: Red Ashes by Phrankher(f): 10:34am On Dec 26, 2016
Ghost mode deactivated
nice story.
Re: Red Ashes by Chumzypinky(f): 11:04am On Dec 26, 2016
Goldenbasil i is saws u oo
Re: Red Ashes by Chumzypinky(f): 11:06am On Dec 26, 2016
Phrankher:
Ghost mode deactivated
nice story.
Tanks 4 finally deactivatin ur ghost mode miss/Mrs Phranker
Re: Red Ashes by Chumzypinky(f): 11:08am On Dec 26, 2016
Adetorobukola
Winters22

Abefe99

i'm seein u guyz viewin
Re: Red Ashes by Michelle55: 11:13am On Dec 26, 2016
chei! Dis woman can write 4 africa. Weldone ma'am nd happy boxing day.ermmm,please box me with a very sweet and lengthy updates biko..#OliverTwistModeActivated#
Re: Red Ashes by Phrankher(f): 11:13am On Dec 26, 2016
Chumzypinky:
Tanks 4 finally deactivatin ur ghost mode miss/Mrs Phranker
Lol. It's a miss. Can't wait for d next update
Re: Red Ashes by Chumzypinky(f): 11:20am On Dec 26, 2016
Michelle55:
chei! Dis woman can write 4 africa. Weldone ma'am nd happy boxing day.ermmm,please box me with a very sweet and lengthy updates biko..#OliverTwistModeActivated#
Lol. I wil so box u...so box u, dat wen pple c u, dem no go recognise u
Re: Red Ashes by Chumzypinky(f): 11:21am On Dec 26, 2016
Helz234

Twinkle004

Omorelu

Winters22
Re: Red Ashes by Chumzypinky(f): 11:22am On Dec 26, 2016
Omoerelu1
Re: Red Ashes by Michelle55: 11:46am On Dec 26, 2016
Chumzypinky:

Lol. I wil so box u...so box u, dat wen pple c u, dem no go recognise u
ermmm,nsogbu adiro bt rem its with a very swt nd lengthy updates dat u r goin 2 box me wit me o.. Na dat kain boxing i fit accept gladly
Re: Red Ashes by Chumzypinky(f): 11:53am On Dec 26, 2016
Michelle55:
ermmm,nsogbu adiro bt rem its with a very swt nd lengthy updates dat u r goin 2 box me wit me o.. Na dat kain boxing i fit accept gladly
Na ds hand wey i take dey pound akpu na i go use gv u blow..afterall, its boxin day
Re: Red Ashes by Winters22: 11:57am On Dec 26, 2016
Chumzypinky:

Na ds hand wey i take dey pound akpu na i go use gv u blow..afterall, its boxin day
lolz. nwayo....

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