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I love poetry ardently but i think our environment never appreciate such..smfh! I love poetry ardently but i think our environment never appreciate such..smfh!

[Need a title and criticism for ma scribble below,thanks in anticipation ]

She came,she hurt me,she ran away.. She duped,she made me a castaway..
Her look,so bright,so fair lyk d sun ray..
Her ways,so blurr,so rotten lyk a moist hay..

Incompatible so we are..
Not her fault cos the grudge was enough clear..
Confirmed,no love ever share..
At last she makes me to glare..


No dear calling,no home coming..
Experience gained,now i'm believing..
On her,i bet no sleep losing..
I know it ain't easy but it keeps me growing..

A bye to her already said..
A bye to heartache that makes me weird..
Will never take u,if to me ur led..
Ma back now turned at a disgraceful maid..

Mistakes realised now..
Don't need to ask nobody where to start or how..
Now i concur,outta dis curse-lock i bow..
A new me,a new life i must grow..

kandiikane: Awwh, remmei, just reading your post. Is that about you? What happened?

yeah! 'Tis really about me..it happened to me last year..not an easy memory ta reminisce..

maclatunji: I got the message, I give you 6/10. As far as I am concerned, Poetry should be short concise and rich in meaning. Your verses shouldn't be too long- this isn't prose.

am honoured ta be rated by you MACLATUNJI..i appreciate it never thought i could score 1..lolz. . Ima heed to your words..

WHEN DEPRESSION HIT ME HARD_YOU ARE ALWAYS THERE TO IMPRESS THIS LAD_

GOING THROUGH SOME SLEEPLESS NIGHT_YOU ARE THERE TO BE MY ABSOLUTE MIGHT_

WHEN I THINK AM IN MA DARKEST FEAR_U CAME THROUGH AND EVERYTHING YOU CLEAR_

WHEN AM KNOCKED DOWN BY PAIN_YOU CAME BY TO COMFORT MY BRAIN_

WHEN THING TURN UPSIDE DOWN_YOU EASE MY REALM N CALM ME DOWN_

WHEN I THINK LOVE HAS LEFT ME_ON YOUR SHOULDER YOU MAKE ME LEAN_

TURNIN MA LIFE AROUND WIT A SINGLE WORD_GIMME D REASON WHY I SHOULDN'T MAKE U MY WORLD_

THANKS FOR THE LOVE,THANKS FOR THE CARE_THANKS FOR THE AFFECTION,THANKS ALOT MA DEAR_

Kinda long,but maybe someone will just let me know what he/she feel about the scribble below..thankz

HMMMMMM!


He was awake all night,couldn't sleep,couldn't blink an eye..
waiting for her to come back,cos she said she'll be right back..
he waited an hour 2,3,then he knew he was lack..
he rushed back hoping to find her there..
but her absence caused him a great fear..
he picked up his phone,her number he rang..
but her sweet voice caused his anger hanged..
i'm sorry she said,he couldn't say much cause of the weakness felt..
with ma friends,ta d club we head..
he prayed for her to have God lead..
she said go to bed honey,'tis only you i love..
and he always think to him she was sent from above..
hours later,he came online to check..
to give her a kiss and bless her with peck..
but alas! a gruesome news he met..a news that makes him severely wept and melt..
how could that happened to you,he cried..
his heart beating slowly,soul already dried..
to himself he muttered,why can't i have this accident..
why can't i carry all her predicament..
SHANIA,If i could turn back the hands of time..would have carried your cross with mine and die for u to live..i hurt here too and i do pray fa you.

Was told i shouldn't cling ta u..
was told ma adhering will leads ta blue..
but i careless bout their word..
cos in u i've found a new world..
with u boo,imma forever clasp..
honey,i'll never let u go outta ma grasp..