₦airaland Forum

dominique:
Pardon me, it was her grandpa; roasting chicken and taking them on walks or something like that. It was towards the end of the book and way past midnight and my brain was almost shutting down lol. Also, I wasn't clear on the kind of STD Jide caught, it wasn't discussed till the end of the story

naijaeclectic:
Would you like an editor to help you evaluate or rework your story?

dominique:
Their opinion, the book was far from boring to me. I also wonder how you intend to turn Jide's character around in the sequel, absolutely nothing endearing about him that you would want an happy ending for. I maintain there's nothing wrong with Doris' character, neither is the plot flawed. Though, I must say there was a part of the story that threw me off balance. The part where Doris had a flashback about her Grandma. I got a bit confused as I did not realize that present melded into the past and I had to scroll back several pages to read again before I could understand that particular scene. Other than that, I had issue with the story.

The review may be discourag but that doesn't mean you should pull the curtain on the story entirely. Post it here or on your blog to get diverse opinions.

dominique:
Nice but don't tone it down too much. Even with the graphic description in some scenes, the story was still voted No.1 story for about 3 consecutive weeks here.



Yikes! I read a few reviews on the blog a while back and I thought the reviews were unbiased. I'll visit there to see how they reviewed your story.

dominique:
Anybody that attended attended a public higher will come accross different students from different backgrounds and wouldn't find the Doris character out of sorts. I had a former roommate back in uni who was born and raised in Warri but can't speak pidgin English. From her carriage and demeanour, one can tell she wasn't raised in an average Nigerian home yet some people disliked her. I see a lot of Doris, probably why found the character totally believable.

I don't see myself a critic, just a lover of well written fiction. What I look for is an enjoyable and relatable story which I got from your story. I've read a lot of bad fiction both on here and okadabooks and yours doesn't even come close. I suggest you post the story here on the thread you created for it and see how it will be received. You can also send the story to the ladies at literaryeverything.com for a more balanced review.

I'm very much interested in how the story ends. How do I get the continuation without going to Amazon?

dominique:
Anybody that attended attended a public higher will come accross different students from different backgrounds and wouldn't find the Doris character out of sorts. I had a former roommate back in uni who was born and raised in Warri but can't speak pidgin English. From her carriage and demeanour, one can tell she wasn't raised in an average Nigerian home yet some people disliked her. I see a lot of Doris, probably why found the character totally believable.

I don't see myself a critic, just a lover of well written fiction. What I look for is an enjoyable and relatable story which I got from your story. I've read a lot of bad fiction both on here and okadabooks and yours doesn't even come close. I suggest you post the story here on the thread you created for it and see how it will be received. You can also send the story to the ladies at literaryeverything.com for a more balanced review.

I'm very much interested in how the story ends. How do I get the continuation without going to Amazon?

Lleigh:
Title: The Lekki Club (previously called The Club on nairaland)

Genre: Erotica and BDSM.

Book description.
A closet male sexual submissive. An unexpected encounter.  Can he embrace what he truly is in Nigeria?

Remi Olapade is single and enjoying his time mingling with his multiple casual hookups, after the breakdown of his engagement to society girl Janet.

An unexpected invitation to the ultra-secretive ‘Lekki Club’ leads to a summons to Room 3, where he meets the mysterious Eve.

Eve strips and chips away at the walls he has put up to fool others. Slowly she gets him to admit who he really is and embrace what he truly wants.

Can Remi be brave enough in Nigeria to accept what he has been hiding all along from his previous conquests and hookups?

Can Remi convince the mysterious Eve to leave Room 3 and take their relationship into the real world?
 
Is Remi ready to stop pretending and give up his other women for Eve?

If you like sizzling sex scenes, raw emotions and bondage, then The Lekki Club is for you.

The Lekki Club is an erotic story of love, loss, the supernatural, life changing mistakes and redemption.

Download the full version of The Lekki Club to find out if Remi is brave enough to come out of the closet.

Click on the link below for the first four chapters for free.

The full book is 1000 naira.

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Please help me and leave a review.

Thank you L Leigh

dominique:
I've read I now. Started last night, finished in tje early hours of this morning. That's how "unputdownable" the story is. See, a lot of our people have this bandwagon mentality. Once the first commenter gives a comment, the rest will blindly follow. It's advisable not to take their harsh criticism to heart even though it sometimes helps in improving your abilities.

Back to the story, there's nothing boring about it. I enjoyed every bit of it (apart from the scene in Emeka's place for obvious reasons). The storyline is very relatable too. Doris' is a typical antisocial undergraduate- a sort of nerd albeit a pretty one. There's nothing unrealistic about her character, we see people like that in school all the time. Jide hating her because she didn't pronounce his name properly seems a bit farfetched. However, his backstory about growing up dirt poor and being badly treated by upper class people triggered his disdain for privileged people like Doris and a flimsy incidence like mispronouncing his name is enough to trigger the hate.

I'll compete the review when I'm chanced, I have some stuff to tidy up here

dominique:
Really, the reviews couldn't have been so bad. You shouldn't have been discouraged. I checked my library and saw that I've downloaded the story before you removed it and (like I do to every book before reading,) I scrolled to the last page where you pointed out that there's a part 2 only available on Amazon. A good number of us are not on Amazon you know?

dominique:
Aww, why did you take down the book?
I downloaded "The other woman's wedding" authored by you over a year ago and I got to read it recently and I enjoyed every bit of it. I like your writing style