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Lolz, dis ur update funi die... make i guess maybe she dey lie, she wan knw weder u like her. sama me airtime because na me get am... waiting patiently 4 ur nxt update

Xo d train has started moving... nice update... feed me more

Watch out 4 handy brigg, d guy dat kill anna(richard wife) nd how d former president will be judge 4 accusing him of killing senator kennedy, nd nancy will she die because she cut her waist even if she survived will she agreeded 2 go 2 a psychatric home, will richard ask nina out or will or will d latu official dat want 2 ask her out will act fast
WATCH OUT FOR ALL DIS IN PART 2, U CANT AFFORD 2 MISS IT OR SO I THOUGHT.

Xo dis story wan enter anoder dimension anyway me dey follow u like twitter, am curious 2 knw hw dis part2 wan start... Xo me no get any presidential or senate name it is unfair oooo... waiting patiently 4 ur nxt update.

I don laff tire 4 road pple just dey look me 4 road but me i no mind dem as far as d rock dey update 10times in a day... dis ur last update gbaski

I have been following dis ur story as a guest since day 1, i must confess u are a gr8 writer... more knowledge 2 ur brain... waiting patiently 4 d nxt update

I am now missing tramor like kilode, but anyway let d minis3 kip moving.....




Tramor bus-stop, he be like say nobody wan gri come dwn, driver rock pls move on 2 d nxt bus-stop(sebastin bus-stop)

HAPPY NEW YEAR 2 ALL D PRECHER SON FAMILY
AMEN @ RITABABE

Xo u no va see ur ba3 change since 2 continue d story , no let make i slip wit suspense dis nyte ooo

WICH KIND ONLY GAL BONANZA BE DIS 1 NA, ANYWAY COME UPDATE SHARPLY SHARPLY... AM ENJOYING EVERY BIT OF UR STORY. U NO VA TALK HOW U TAKE BLEEP AUNTY CHARITY

PRINCE, U just 4get me 4 back, it is unfair oooo anyway nice update but u should try 2 be updatin quickly... 1 luv

[color=#006600][/color]ROCK, HE NO GUD OOO... U NO EVEN REMEMBER ME UR GUY... ANYWAY I DEY FOLLOW U BUMBER 2 BUMBER... COME ND UPDATE QUICK ASAP.

Na Jesus or father chrismas come save u ni ...

Rockyfancino: your fans are abandoning this thread or many have abandoned it. You know why? because u Dont update regularly. Can't u see for yourself that there are no many comments like when u started the thread. You shouldn't have started if u had known u wouldn't update regularly.
Kindly update...

SECONDED

Make i hear say rock d badoo repent, part 2 shall tell... @ROCK, Me get question 4 u, dat aunty may dey call u oduwa 4 ur compound, she don delete 4 dis story because me wan hear as u bleep her and do come and update

Na Christy auz u go go nd u go nak her akpako... i hope say na me 1st get d guessing.

Why all of ena just dey fight 4 d ella luv, Thank God say nobody dey fight 4 ruthia, Ruthia here i come

Prince, wich time did u want 2 update... am getting tired self... movin slowly out of tread, peeping maybe i can see an update, didnt see an update hiss and move out of tread quickly.

linpok: Nna Mehn!!!! u for just tell us say na HeaVen u attend ur High School...

U funi die... he be like say na inside 3D he take dey watch all him class-mate...

Prince, are u nt updating 2nyte... Waiting patiently 4 ur next update... 1 love bro

Uduak, u just like 2 dey put us 4 suspense, abeg do come update...

*Chai, see as rock take 4get me 4 back... if no be because my fone go relegation, i 4 dey follow u bumper 2 bumber... tank God say i don catch up...

*MY FONE DON CAUSE YAWA 4 ME, SEE AS I DON MISS MANY TINZ, ANYWAY I AM BACK ND BETA*

Oga Rock, tanx man... Nice update, but seriously woman no go kill u... He be like say i go create girl account 4 2go i go come add u may u dey dash me credit like water

Rock wher u go nah.... U no give us update yesternyte nd i enter tread now i no come see early mornin update wetin dey shele nah

LogoDWhiz: There are something's I will like to point out from this post.. It would be good if you could go back and modify asap..

--you don't need to say were as glassy as tears, just say "uduak eyes were filled with tears" "when she walked past me"
--'adjured' do you know the meaning? You can use words people understands and words we use in our everyday conversation...
Adjured means:To issue a formal command, especially in a legal context. Or. To earnestly appeal or advise. As you can see it doesn't go with what you actually meant to say... You could have written "I confidently apologise for my bad behaviour towards her" .. (You don't need to use confidently) just saying..
--"When I got to the hall, Uduak was singing in a low tone, more like she was murmuring she to herself"..

--She looked at me for sometime and with no further words to say, she prayed for our success in the exams and that excellent result should be ours..

--Thereafter, Uduak said I am forgiven, I was extremely glad because, having a feeling of enmity towards another person isn't good...

--"On the field"
--"flimsy" not flamsesy
-- "i'm leaving 00oo!. I wan go look for emeka. We get important gist " i said, the moment i tried pulling the door handle to myself.
--i didn't want anyone to spoil my arrangement. She brought out "a 500 naira note".. "She asked me to buy a tin of tomato and a packet of spaghetti .

-- do you blush when u are being sent on an errand? And if you do, it should be ". " errand boy, abi ?" i said, blushing without ceasing untill i ran out of the room."

-- "As i was approaching the gate exit, i saw..."
Check out your punctuations.. It makes it easy to read and understand...
-- "entered", "cooking" "paid" "walked out" "met emeka" "I asked as we greeted each other" "I banged" "intruded" "intention" "spoke"

-- I don't understand this part, kindly clarify.. ""she told about her acceptance""

Remember:: You are telling us a story that occurred in the past, hence some of your words should be in past tense such as walked, intruded, walked and so on.. Be mindful of that..

Your character's names first letter should Start with a Capital letter with other names you are going to write also.. Reason being that, they are nouns... And a bound should start with a capital letter...

nice 1, i am sure he will take note of all d corrections

Oga Rock, abeg do come update nah... Dis ur suspence 2much ooo

prince dis ur last update use style short ooo... U ar stil u sha

Mr. Rock, i hope say no be because man u lose na him u no wan update give us... I go advice u may u migrate go crystal palace or cardif city ... Na brotherly advice oooo

uduak abeg come nd update nah... Since mornin may u dey eat dog meat u no va eat a finish ni.... @ lekinz, God will provide a new and beta fone 4 u but na moni u go use buy am sha...

The rock5555: "Chai see dog meat oo, make i go buy am, maybe before evening i go don chop am finish"

Oga Rock, abeg do eat ur dog meat finish b4 12pm ooo.... Waitin patiently 4 ur next update... Team uduak, Teak Rock

tanx 4 d update... I hope say d harm may u dey cause 4 d CS no be bleepin tinz sha