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My Poetry by vescucci(m): 5:22pm On Sep 25, 2012 |
I must warn you, dear reader, that my poems veer towards the dark. Even when I write about love, there's a piercing melancholy about it. This is because I believe sadness is the deepest and one of the purest emotions. Sadness can be beautiful. Apologies in advance. And please, feel free to critique. This is the reason for posting them. And of course the perverse need for validation that humans are afflicted with 2 Likes |
Re: My Poetry by vescucci(m): 5:24pm On Sep 25, 2012 |
[size=14pt]Conscience[/size] On his black stallion he watches He watches the moon rise over the small city The small city he will conquer before dawn One dawn more among many, many dawns He looks to his left at the flag waving in the breeze The waving flag carrying a gruesome insignia An insignia that holds to him meaning no more No more meaning than the highest bidder His gaze now, beyond the waving flag Almost in a trance, as the hour draws near And tugging at his chest the familiar feeling he totes A pulsing feeling of dishonor hither His gaze returns to the crested flag As he holds back a traitorous tear In the gleaming moonlight, as his sight hazes, he notes With this dawn, the last of his conscience will wither 10 Likes |
Re: My Poetry by vescucci(m): 10:04am On Sep 26, 2012 |
[size=14pt]LIFE[/size] It dissolves my resolve Once I asked how a leopard can blot its spots Or a tiger wipe its stripes You’ve gotta live the moment before it passes Just like flames before dust and ashes You have to cherish it before it perishes Peace resides on the other side of conflict And there’s no berth around it For tis easier to cut along the grain A bit to lose but more to gain For who defines light without knowing of darkness? Or vice versa? Many good things have sad ends Lovers become friends Friends become strangers Strangers become enemies But memory lane is a two way road One just needs to choose between Tarnishing the varnish Or varnishing the tarnish 7 Likes |
Re: My Poetry by Tgirl4real(f): 10:44am On Sep 26, 2012 |
Nice! You are back. |
Re: My Poetry by vescucci(m): 10:49am On Sep 26, 2012 |
Perhaps |
Re: My Poetry by sino(m): 12:20pm On Sep 26, 2012 |
Good, your first poem, the use of word(s) at the end of a verse to begin another verse interests me, is there any literature's vocabulary for it? Expecting more.... |
Re: My Poetry by vescucci(m): 12:53pm On Sep 26, 2012 |
Thanks. I don't know if there's any literary term for it. I'm not a technical writer. I don't know the rules to follow sef. Did you notice the rhymes though in the last eight verses? I made them after four lines. |
Re: My Poetry by sino(m): 12:27am On Sep 27, 2012 |
wow, i just noticed the rhymes, i have always wanted to do that, nice one man. Lol @not knowing the rules, same here too...let us hide under the poetic licence |
Re: My Poetry by vescucci(m): 6:52am On Sep 27, 2012 |
LOl. People usually miss that and I hate to have to explain it for I do it a lot. There's always some kinda symmetry in what I write but explaining it takes away the fun part. LOL. Let's hide under the Poetic Licence....Hear hear |
Re: My Poetry by mufex(m): 10:23am On Sep 27, 2012 |
Average.....just average.... |
Re: My Poetry by babarazy: 3:58pm On Mar 12, 2013 |
I didn't really undastand wats happening here but, I had to comment †o add †o M̶̲̅y posts. |
Re: My Poetry by Koonbey1: 4:03pm On Mar 12, 2013 |
nice Work... |
Re: My Poetry by Uchenna42(m): 4:03pm On Mar 12, 2013 |
Cool....thumbs up! |
Re: My Poetry by SisiKill1: 4:09pm On Mar 12, 2013 |
Awwww! Vesc. . . this is lovely! Dark and Lovely....just the way I like 'em. |
Re: My Poetry by webcityng: 4:24pm On Mar 12, 2013 |
mufex: Average.....just average.... PLEASE WHERE IS YOUR OWN? 1 Like |
Re: My Poetry by Nobody: 4:27pm On Mar 12, 2013 |
I love this. Melancholy often fills the gaps. |
Re: My Poetry by etalker: 4:37pm On Mar 12, 2013 |
You’ve gotta live the moment before it passes I love those lines. But the poems aren't dark as warned. I was expecting something scary (though, i noticed the sadness on few lines in the "LIFE" piece) I enjoyed reading your poems. Thanks for sharing. Keep the muse up! |
Re: My Poetry by PatOgidi(m): 4:59pm On Mar 12, 2013 |
I love it. This is good. |
Re: My Poetry by Esinwaju: 5:07pm On Mar 12, 2013 |
Brilliant. Especially the one about life. I relate with you on that one cos presently I'm faced with a situation and your poem captures it perfectly and you were more rhyme concious on this one, that I find very appealing as a rap afficionado lol. 1 Like |
Re: My Poetry by Pdizzle(m): 5:27pm On Mar 12, 2013 |
nice.. |
Re: My Poetry by ariblaze(m): 5:33pm On Mar 12, 2013 |
interesting ... i like i am also sure you can do darker com'n don the cape of the reaper which you are |
Re: My Poetry by Jarus(m): 5:45pm On Mar 12, 2013 |
Poetry is one branch of literature I wish I was gifted or can develop myself in. 1 Like |
Re: My Poetry by kay9(m): 5:50pm On Mar 12, 2013 |
ariblaze: interesting ... i like^^ Blazeman... Where u been, mate? @Vesc, u got any more of these? First one reminds me of Tom Cruise's Nathan Algren. |
Re: My Poetry by ariblaze(m): 5:59pm On Mar 12, 2013 |
in a dark place,barely holding on to my sanity . . . @kay9 how you doing bro? |
Re: My Poetry by kay9(m): 6:14pm On Mar 12, 2013 |
^^ ''dark place''? Sounds like your usual place of abode to me. I'm ok, man, just same old same old. |
Re: My Poetry by poeticjustic(m): 6:29pm On Mar 12, 2013 |
well, I didn't quite get a hold on the first piece, either 'cos of its depth or lack of it. idk. the second Is cool tho |
Re: My Poetry by Orikinla(m): 7:17pm On Mar 12, 2013 |
Good poetry. Very original. |
Re: My Poetry by talk2s(m): 8:47pm On Mar 12, 2013 |
This poem helps reminisce the good old days: when the beauty of art was given its pride of place; When art was not celebrated for fun but for the sakes of art; When the place of art was extolled and amplified... Indeed, that is a masterpiece of poetry. 2 Likes |
Re: My Poetry by Nickydrake(m): 8:49pm On Mar 12, 2013 |
Vescucci, reading your work is always a treat. Believe it or not, i spent a good amount of time poring over your satires over at Naijastories (that was the only time i ever used the site). The piece on cursíng was especially entralling. These poems are good, no doubt about that, but because i'm much less captivated by poetry than by prose, i find myself drawn more to your opening post. Your opening post is fuckíng excellent. I beg your pardon, the expletive was necessary for emphasis. I think you should ditch poetry and move into a monastery where you'll devote the rest of your life to producing bewitching satirical pieces for people like me to revel in. This is crappy advice alright, but i hope you consider it all the same. Great work, my friend. 2 Likes |
Re: My Poetry by Onyegecha(f): 8:49pm On Mar 12, 2013 |
Very good poems, my friend. I love the simple but cute diction you used. Good poetic devices and images too. very well done |
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