Welcome, Guest: Register On Nairaland / LOGIN! / Trending / Recent / NewStats: 3,195,475 members, 7,958,440 topics. Date: Wednesday, 25 September 2024 at 02:25 PM |
Nairaland Forum / Entertainment / Literature / Ibkaye's Oral Story Haven (13621 Views)
Kizorita's Haven / Of Oral Farts And Flamboyance Stench (A HILARIOUS POEM) / The Writer`s Lawn. The First Nigerian Writer`s Article Haven (2) (3) (4)
(1) (2) (3) (4) (5) (6) (7) (Reply) (Go Down)
Ibkaye's Oral Story Haven by Nobody: 2:28pm On May 04, 2009 |
Hey, this is my thread where I will be posting recordings of myself reading stories and poems I have written, enjoy! |
Re: Ibkaye's Oral Story Haven by Nobody: 2:50pm On May 04, 2009 |
Motunrayo Part 1 (Ps, this story isn't meant to be descriptive) Akin was a very strong man, young but fearless. He possessed the strength of a lion and the wisdom of an owl. As much as Akin was tough he was also very stubborn and quick to anger. He had once killed a snake with his bare hands. He seemed to always get his way. |
Re: Ibkaye's Oral Story Haven by Nobody: 3:15pm On May 04, 2009 |
Motunrayo Part 2 Motunrayo knew no joy ever since that fateful day. After much taunting and pleading from her parents, she was forced to marry Akin. Though aware of her unfortunate ordeal, they still insisted on her marrying him. She was pregnant and that was all there was to it, it was also made intensively clear that the secret of her rape was to remain undisclosed at all costs, as if it did not, such an event would bring great shame onto the family name and Baba Motunrayo refused to allow his name be rubbed into the dirt. |
Re: Ibkaye's Oral Story Haven by Nobody: 3:22pm On May 04, 2009 |
Motunrayo 3 The next night, whilst laying on her mat, Akin was busy sulking outside by the side of the hut, distraught by the death of his baby and angry at his wife. He had concluded that it was Motunrayo’s plan all along to get him angry so that he would beat her and by doing so, kill the child. Without a baby in her stomach, she would have an excellent opportunity to run, not only from him but the village. He became even more livid at the end of his conclusion, what a ‘clever’ and devious girl she was. |
Re: Ibkaye's Oral Story Haven by ThiefOfHearts(f): 3:24pm On May 04, 2009 |
wouldnt exactly call that making love. Continue sha |
Re: Ibkaye's Oral Story Haven by Nobody: 3:25pm On May 04, 2009 |
Hahahaha, will do |
Re: Ibkaye's Oral Story Haven by Nobody: 4:23pm On May 04, 2009 |
Re: Ibkaye's Oral Story Haven by Nobody: 4:28pm On May 04, 2009 |
- |
Re: Ibkaye's Oral Story Haven by StrStruck(f): 4:43pm On May 04, 2009 |
OMG!!! I absolutely love your accent. |
Re: Ibkaye's Oral Story Haven by Nobody: 4:45pm On May 04, 2009 |
Lol aww thanks |
Re: Ibkaye's Oral Story Haven by boliatiepa: 6:20pm On May 04, 2009 |
St☆rStruck: This encapsulates what is wrong with the world. So superficial. Serious effort put into a work and only the grainy surface attracts any comment. Not that there is much to appreciate in the work anyway. Can't empathise with any of the characters. |
Re: Ibkaye's Oral Story Haven by Nobody: 6:23pm On May 04, 2009 |
boliatiepa: Ok thanks for the pointer, I'll try to make it more easier for readers to do so as I continue. |
Re: Ibkaye's Oral Story Haven by jaybee3(m): 6:23pm On May 04, 2009 |
Gud stuff. well done pwetty |
Re: Ibkaye's Oral Story Haven by Nobody: 6:24pm On May 04, 2009 |
jay bee:Thanks a bunch |
Re: Ibkaye's Oral Story Haven by tubabie(f): 8:19pm On May 04, 2009 |
@Ibkaye Hey nice one. Ur story has potential to get better.I like the murder poem, it had the connection and empathy an earlier poster pointed out was lacking in the story. Am sure you'll get there , When u write about the characters dont assume we know all the emotions they may be feeling, u are still scratching the surface of the beautiful plot. Let us feel Motunrayo's anger, hurt , frustrations, fears and joy if any; same goes for Akin .Hit us with the emotions and get our imaginations running. Looking forward to the next, [size=5pt]i hope my criticism will be taken in a good light o cos u may just want us to sit back and enjoy without voicing out nothing.[/size] |
Re: Ibkaye's Oral Story Haven by StrStruck(f): 9:10pm On May 04, 2009 |
boliatiepa: Sucks for you, huh? |
Re: Ibkaye's Oral Story Haven by Nobody: 9:11pm On May 04, 2009 |
tubabie:Thanks a bunch tubabie I understand what you mean about feeling the emotions of the characters, will try to improve on it on the coming parts St☆rStruck:Lol |
Re: Ibkaye's Oral Story Haven by StephenP(m): 9:21pm On May 04, 2009 |
I remember "The Club" from the Role Play thread . . . you already know how I feel about it. |
Re: Ibkaye's Oral Story Haven by Nobody: 9:29pm On May 04, 2009 |
StephenP:Yeaaaah I know na |
Re: Ibkaye's Oral Story Haven by StrStruck(f): 9:43pm On May 04, 2009 |
just letting you both know that I'm still here lol |
Re: Ibkaye's Oral Story Haven by Nobody: 9:47pm On May 04, 2009 |
Lol you give me jokes, yeah I know of course |
Re: Ibkaye's Oral Story Haven by tpiah: 4:17am On May 05, 2009 |
you have a very nice British accent I agree- the love scenes are quite |
Re: Ibkaye's Oral Story Haven by gillo25: 4:29am On May 05, 2009 |
[color=#006600][/color]i feel so sorry for the girl god help her |
Re: Ibkaye's Oral Story Haven by ThiefOfHearts(f): 4:58am On May 05, 2009 |
Fo some reason I can hear the *wavs |
Re: Ibkaye's Oral Story Haven by FLGators1: 5:01am On May 05, 2009 |
The fact that it's named after me gives you a 10/10 But that's you? Mehn. . . .I need to Nigerianize you oh. We don lost one. . . .again. |
Re: Ibkaye's Oral Story Haven by FLGators1: 5:06am On May 05, 2009 |
Did you stop reading at the ending or was that a technical problem? |
Re: Ibkaye's Oral Story Haven by Nobody: 6:57am On May 05, 2009 |
tpiah:Lol thanks Yeah, I kind of made certain scenes brief so that each part did not turn out too long or too skimpy, I guess that took away the chance for readers to empathise with the characters more gillo25:Hehe, it could get better for her, who knows, thanks for reading ThiefOfHearts:wavs? FL Gators!:Lool you haven't lost anyone jor FL Gators!:Think it maay have been a technical problem, but then the written version is also available if you missed out on anything |
Re: Ibkaye's Oral Story Haven by hollandis(f): 2:16pm On May 05, 2009 |
ibk my pikin,one day i know say you go make me proud |
Re: Ibkaye's Oral Story Haven by Jairzinho(m): 3:27pm On May 05, 2009 |
really cool voice,you're certainly not in bauchi or kano or which other location you've been using. Your initial intros had a lot of 'ems , and awkward pauses,the motunrayo story went really ell only the accent kinda affects the traditional pronounciation of those names. keep it up !! |
Re: Ibkaye's Oral Story Haven by Nobody: 3:53pm On May 05, 2009 |
"Club" was funny. Words come to you easily. That's a good sign you'll turn out good. Keep it up. |
(1) (2) (3) (4) (5) (6) (7) (Reply)
Reasons why I killed.......Wild Wild West...... / The Day Jonah Became A Fish! / Ideal (18+) [book 4 Of Xav-verse] [completed]
(Go Up)
Sections: politics (1) business autos (1) jobs (1) career education (1) romance computers phones travel sports fashion health religion celebs tv-movies music-radio literature webmasters programming techmarket Links: (1) (2) (3) (4) (5) (6) (7) (8) (9) (10) Nairaland - Copyright © 2005 - 2024 Oluwaseun Osewa. All rights reserved. See How To Advertise. 46 |