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Re: Ibkaye's Oral Story Haven by audio: 3:55pm On May 05, 2009 |
@ IbKaye, i've got to admit, i'm really pleasantly suprised. I've read your posts on the music forum and they've been, how shall we say, not entirely representative. I absolutely adore storytelling, when well written. Your good. However, i feel that i should give you some feedback as the reader if that's okay. I do not get a sense of the length of the story. Is it a short story, a book, a spoken part series meant for radio, etc If i knew, it will help explain the jumps in the timeline. The space between the introduction of Motunrayo and the rape is too short. I didn't particularly feel any empathy towards her, because i hardly knew her. Same goes for Akin, one minute he's an intense handsome loner desired by the women of the village, next minute he's a rapist and a wife beater. The charachers need fleshing out. If we don't care about them, the story loses a lot of it's appeal. My two cents |
Re: Ibkaye's Oral Story Haven by xavier3(m): 4:01pm On May 05, 2009 |
lovely story and uv got a nice accent |
Re: Ibkaye's Oral Story Haven by smooooooth: 4:14pm On May 05, 2009 |
good to see you spending your spare time judiciously. good talent you got! |
Re: Ibkaye's Oral Story Haven by Nobody: 4:15pm On May 05, 2009 |
hollandis:Lol thankies Jairzinho:Lool Thanks dear stillwater:Hehehe, glad you liked Thanks a buch sweets audio:Lol, don't mind me on the music threads, I'm pretty much there to catch fun Thanks for the feedback, I totally understand what you mean, when writing stories, I tend to write way too much when being descrptive so with this one, I tried to make it simple and straight to the point without being long and windy, I guess that's why it seemed like I jumped alot of times, I'll try to be a bit more descriptive with the next part and without being too long. @smoooooth Imeela! @All Your feedback is much appreciated! |
Re: Ibkaye's Oral Story Haven by ThiefOfHearts(f): 4:17pm On May 05, 2009 |
Your links dont work for me IBK. Guess I'll stick to reading them |
Re: Ibkaye's Oral Story Haven by Nobody: 4:18pm On May 05, 2009 |
ThiefOfHearts:Aww, they don't? Sorry o, I'll see if I can upload them to another website also Thanks for reading |
Re: Ibkaye's Oral Story Haven by Nobody: 5:03pm On May 05, 2009 |
This isn't really a story neither a poem but what I'd call a rather creative news report, had fun recording it too Voice Recording - http://www.esnips.com/doc/a7c16382-9e45-428c-89a7-2b9cd17c2634/Amebo-Radio-Station Amebo Radio: Nigerian Criminal Gang Members Arrested |
Re: Ibkaye's Oral Story Haven by bigboyslim(m): 5:08pm On May 05, 2009 |
Nice words. I liked club. Sounded naive and yet mature at the same time. Nice piece |
Re: Ibkaye's Oral Story Haven by Nobody: 5:24pm On May 05, 2009 |
bigboyslim:Thanks |
Re: Ibkaye's Oral Story Haven by AloyEmeka9: 5:32pm On May 05, 2009 |
You are a real jewel. Go girl and give Chimamanda a run for her money. |
Re: Ibkaye's Oral Story Haven by nguage(m): 5:45pm On May 05, 2009 |
Am I the only one who read it as "Ibkaye's MouthAction Haven?" |
Re: Ibkaye's Oral Story Haven by Nobody: 5:46pm On May 05, 2009 |
Aloy.Emeka:Lol n-guage:I knew someone would say that |
Re: Ibkaye's Oral Story Haven by StrStruck(f): 5:47pm On May 05, 2009 |
n-guage: Ewww. . . |
Re: Ibkaye's Oral Story Haven by AloyEmeka9: 5:53pm On May 05, 2009 |
Am I the only one who read it as "Ibkaye's MouthAction Haven?"Why you wan corrupt this small girl? |
Re: Ibkaye's Oral Story Haven by nguage(m): 5:57pm On May 05, 2009 |
St☆rStruck: Vitamins ====Φ swimming towards your lips. |
Re: Ibkaye's Oral Story Haven by bluespice(f): 6:06pm On May 05, 2009 |
tsk tsk n-guage, its certified, ur nasty |
Re: Ibkaye's Oral Story Haven by audio: 6:09pm On May 05, 2009 |
Just listened to Amebo Radio, cool. So you have the comedy thing going as well. Ever thought about putting together a sketch show? |
Re: Ibkaye's Oral Story Haven by Nobody: 6:11pm On May 05, 2009 |
audio:Erm, what excactly is a sketch show? I'm thinking about drawings, I'm probably wrong |
Re: Ibkaye's Oral Story Haven by Nobody: 7:29pm On May 05, 2009 |
IBKAYE OMO ONI UK ACCENT!!!!!!! SHIGIRI SHIGIRI!!! ME I KNOW HEAR U OOOOOOOOOOOOO To be frankly speaking, Britain mode of speaking in English is kinda of funny to me!!!! Graph English!!! |
Re: Ibkaye's Oral Story Haven by audio: 7:32pm On May 05, 2009 |
ibkaye: Lol, just a bit. A sketch show is like a collection of different short comedy situations seamlessly running together. So for example, you could have the ameobi thing, followed by say the 419 guy with hygiene problems, followed by the singer with no talent that can't take a hint, shei you get? Anyway, i sense that's not your main area of expertise, but just an idea sha. |
Re: Ibkaye's Oral Story Haven by Nobody: 7:33pm On May 05, 2009 |
audio:I see I see, thanks for the suffestion faakay:Hmmm |
Re: Ibkaye's Oral Story Haven by bluespice(f): 8:01pm On May 05, 2009 |
ur representation of a yoruba news caster is hillarious! |
Re: Ibkaye's Oral Story Haven by AmAlone: 8:10pm On May 05, 2009 |
Grrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrr What manner of rubbish is all this Is there nothing else to talk about on Nairaland Grrrrrrrrrrrrrr I can't believe I just red all THAT! hmmmmmmmm. . . . But, He Sweet SHA! @poster This is Honey! Fantastic, Tantalizing!!! multiple kisses. . . LoL, what an Irony. . . |
Re: Ibkaye's Oral Story Haven by Nobody: 8:14pm On May 05, 2009 |
bluespice:Lol thanx Am Alone: |
Re: Ibkaye's Oral Story Haven by tpiah: 8:27pm On May 05, 2009 |
is it just me or do you have a slight resemblance to Rihanna? lol- dont look at the outfit- check the face. I just copied the photo directly from yahoo without really noticing the sleeves. Surprised to see her out I guess. |
Re: Ibkaye's Oral Story Haven by AmAlone: 8:30pm On May 05, 2009 |
^ |
Re: Ibkaye's Oral Story Haven by Nobody: 8:30pm On May 05, 2009 |
@tpiah Lol, urm, I don't think so |
Re: Ibkaye's Oral Story Haven by bluespice(f): 8:32pm On May 05, 2009 |
tpiah i think its just u |
Re: Ibkaye's Oral Story Haven by tpiah: 9:06pm On May 05, 2009 |
ok thought i saw some likeness there. |
Re: Ibkaye's Oral Story Haven by eyonigger(m): 6:17am On May 06, 2009 |
just love um all. |
Re: Ibkaye's Oral Story Haven by biina: 8:59am On May 06, 2009 |
no audio |
Re: Ibkaye's Oral Story Haven by dejiariyo: 9:32am On May 06, 2009 |
the british accent killed it for me,cant understand a single word pls can u come thru with pidgin or maybe some yoruba poems? |
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