~ Lala247

Lemme post this first..


Gone through all of the verses...

• Twaci : Like I told you before, I liked your straightforwardness and simplicity. You remind me of the South-African writer- Athol Fugard. But what was lacking in your beautiful piece were Literary devices.. You put everything in the cooking pot but forgot to add Salt. Metaphors and similes are The backbone of any literary work... Kudos for your efforts anyway.. And I really like your d.p baby..call me



• Mirexx : OMG!! Like Farano my darling wife, have you been reading the Library of Alexandria? I'm really impressed.... ~ This was your opener...--
I am trying to place my thoughts and words on a
mortal vase, but none will be deep enough ...Bravo! This is really poetic and this is what's making Kendrick Lamar millions of dollars...
You even did ABAB rhyme scheme... You had decent metaphors.. - I love you baby.. Call me!


• Mzchinny - Hmmmmm... You took the Story-telling approach in expressing your feelings.. Exactly the way Nas does it. The only fault I found was your lack of literary devices..You relied solely on painting a picture with your words but you could have done it figuratively.. No one would mind if you called him your Suya meat or your #20 Akara or Aso-ebi , as long as its a metaphor . .
I did see a Paradox though and I thought it was splendid.. --
~don't care whether you're a player
I need no wise words from a soothsayer.
I love you with all your [b[ perfect imperfections [/b]
I want you to be my ride or die lover... Wonderful!! ... Call me baby


• Dimples192 : ...My Indian biatch made me proud.. She capitalised on her man's weakness.. Every man's weakness is a woman.(I mean if a woman start speaking seductively..I don't know about you.. But I'd get aroused and grab her one time..) That's what she did..she went in raw the way guys would like it...I don't know if the poem of lust is yours but it was unfuckwitable... and remember to put a Bindi on your forehead


Rozzay : My beautiful Rozzay. The sleek mermaid with golden hair and the type of ass that gives Rokiatu a run for her money . you did totally great. BANG !!!!!!!!
Like Mzchinny, you took the storytelling approach..little literary devices here and there.. But your descriptive prowess did it for you. Reading Your lines were a Don de Marco moment.


• More reviews coming before the 3 winners are announced

kinglahkay:

nothing

I'm just trying to let the love flow

Sorry, I meant

What do I stand to gain?

jacksparrow1207:


They can only ban me, I'l always be back

But this banning stuff na nonsense, we are all here to catch fun xo why dem go dey ban person.walahi if some people be God dem no go gree let rain fall...Imagine make person dey form boss for nairaland .SMH

my big d.ick has been kidnapped

MzNelly:



But I know nothing about KingTom

There's nothing to know, Kingtom is an ugly frog

kinglahkay:


forget the girl bakazi can make a deaf & dumb speaking in tongues

Jesus! E big pass Bombay?

missclasssy:


Nice one joor, I was just kidding

Enjoy your man

Aproko, thanks....

Nneka123:
Tasha! thanks girl

. Lucky girl... Your lines gave me teary eyes...feeling those words are deep.
Blacket got you on fleek

Naijaboiy please let the mods leave this thread on the top of the romance section homepage

MzNelly:


Sorry, I meant

What do I stand to gain?

fun, friendship, love, care whatelse

that's all

chimerase2:
wetin u do?
Upon say gal no gree woo u she cum de ban u ontop is like she is crushing on ua amu

Nna eh! She just spoil my day, but e no too pain me sha

stephenqueen:

But this banning stuff na nonsense, we are all here to catch fun xo why dem go dey ban person.walahi if some people be God dem no go gree let rain fall...Imagine make person dey form boss for nairaland .SMH

I tire for dem o. dem go hide posts, e no go do dem, dem go still dey ban. God pass dem sha

KingTom:
There's nothing to know, Kingtom is an ugly frog

Lol
You're not looking bad at all

jacksparrow1207:


And who is your new babe sir?

i don hang boot,such terrible situation where a 24yrs old footballer hang boot because of so many surgeries

Brandnew2:
. Lucky girl... Your lines gave me teary eyes...feeling those words are deep.
Blackett got you on fleek

hehehe, thanks. oh yeah he got me on fleek, and i can't wait to feel him on fleek sef

naijaboiy:

Seriously

But how will I get it

Where are you?

Everything is possible..

KingTom:
Jesus! E big pass Bombay?

I swear my guy

missclasssy:
Naijaboiy please let the mods leave this thread

I support this!!!

naijaboiy:
Oga blackett don dey fall in love o

Lol...he z so soft tonight...Ladies sha.

Scrypt:


Your write up is a beautiful work of art. Loved it! Errrr, spied your blog. You should work on having more content, great read by the way. .

Thanks.

KingTom:
See the summary of my life! Chai I don suffer!

jealousy

naijaboiy:
Aniwilz I sight you. Have you got your lines?

yea

Lala247:


Lol ur growing wings

yea call me ArchAngel-2dice
...and its a Rap yor

kinglahkay:


fun, friendship, love, care whatelse

that's all

Lol

Go jhoor

jacksparrow1207:


I tire for dem o. dem go hide posts, e no go do dem, dem go still dey ban. God pass dem sha

Na winch wey dem be. Idiotic fools God go Run their life the way dem dey run Nairaland