Good, more powers to your elbow.

niDavid:
I'm here o

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Omole wouldn't hear of waiting for years to school. She would school and Aunt Isoka would pay. The understanding between the two seemed inpenetrable. The older lady had no daughter, that could explain it. It could have been the family bond too. Afterall, all maternal aunts are good. She never knew her father, his relatives probably would've helped. They bore her of course. But both courses, Aunt Isoka probably wasn't ready to see her dreams erode as the sexual desires of a grandpa.

Omole alighted the car after her aunt. She was making it an habit. It was the same way she alighted at St Rebbecas Hospital albeit the sadness wasn't so haunting anymore. The anguish wasn't gnashing her teeth anymore. She wasn't even waking to weep half into the night anymore. She must have realised it was necessary. Even, Aunt Isoka had seen a glint of her smile twice. She finally gained sanity. The rapist just couldn't hold his emotions - unplanned - ergo, not guilty. She must have realised too.

Erneto Special Learning Institute didn't freighten her in height. She half smiled as the school's piercing beauty struck her. She found herself glad Iyam Special Institution wasn't built for day students. A fraught girl possibly couldn't board for three months.

She felt gazes scorching her mild talcum skin; gazes that fought their ways through the blue gown she donned.

'Come on,' she saw Aunt Isoka already in the marked administrative block. Aunt Isoka just didn't develop phobias for buildings. Her heat eyes must have been helping.

She walked in and met a smiling petite woman. The lady was special too. She knew she would have wishes there. Her heart smiled flourishly.

She didn't feel any form of hatred towards her future baby father.

blackmarya:
i think the aunt should take omole to the doctor and find means of terminating it so far its still at the early stage, so the doc will knw better and even the paternity of d baby is nt knwn after that she can further her education

Loooooooool, ma'am!
I never thought that way, ma'am. But that's wow!

prettydiva89:
I can't predict the story.

Then stay with me, ma'am. Enjoy.

SexySapphire:
I really don't read stories like this but I'm kinda hooked to this. It's been a nice story so far and I'm glad you've followed some of the advices given to you by some literary gurus such as larrysun. Well done.

You're great, ma'am. I'm glad you've been hooked, really. Stay with me.

ChikaSunday:




A nice one

Thank you, sir. I'm glad.

UjSizzle:
Hi. I'd say nice attempt but to be honest I'm still trying to wrap my head around the story.
This is what I got: A deaf and dumb girl was raped-- she seemed to want it. Her mother is cripple.

That said, I happen to have a very sensitive palette. I love my literature simple and fluid so perhaps I'm not your desired audience here (?)
You're verbose; some of the words you use can be substituted with less brain-racking ones. Makes your writing cleaner
You use too many breaks (full stops I mean.) Try playing around sentence length. Two long. On short. Use your commas.

Of course that's just my opinion.

The story has potential so I'll keep an eye on it.

Carry on.

You just penned down my own thoughts, its got potential but those big words will make comprehension difficult.

this looks promising,
kudos man

Nice

dis na superstory oo ..der don act am

[color=#990000][/color] I'm seeing just a warning

your words are too BIG for me,am the simple type...but I grab your flow,at the initial stage I thought you were Thronekid...but what am seeing now tells me you're a different writer altogether.
I think its quite unfortunate that an incapacitated mother gave birth to an Incapcitated daughter.
Okay..your begining was eerie,i got the feeling that I was walking on someone's grave.
Nice one dear

Hi Op. Please could you take it easy on the big big English? If you can substitute them with something people can understand please do.

This is a good read so far! Lovely!

Great story from an avid reader though I don't post stuff here a lot. .. will be following the story at weekly intervals... keep up the good work and for those complaining about the words pls carry a dictionary and check up some words; Sometimes we learn new words from the books we read so it's a good thing....

#following,nice story line and I like the fact that the OP has somehow taken to some corrections.

Good skill bro.. more success

Interesting piece @op......I am in

Nice story buh your grammer no be here oo. You just ve to minimize it. Thanks

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am really learning a lot about being a writer from this guy this is a nice piece; can't even predict it.

I'm marvelled at your writing skills. More grease to your elbows.

Well done.
The simpler your grammar the better.
She struggled for balance is better than she struggled for equilibrium .

I just have to keep my eyes on this one... Its been great so far. Nice one.

OluwabuqqyYOLO:
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Your writing is highly intensive, engaging and penetrating. Your use of grammar is impeccable. You have a flowery style that not only depict action, but the thought processes that predicated the events. Your choice of character- extra-intelligent vulnerables is highly appealing. I dare say that you got it in you! Bring it ON!

sleemoon:



Your blog is only open for invited readers only.... Like Seriously?.. Add me with dis mail /sleemuun@gmail.com/

I'm very contrite, sir, but plagiarism eats up scribes faster than flames does a dry wood. I need to make my works secured and accessible by trusted minds only. Also, it's an ongoing project yet, I don't want to publicize things that much.

Kindly try it now.

ok....

The first post looks like poetry......ur command of the language is impeccable ...nyc one op
....following

Is it just me or Am i missing somtin. The main characters name was initially ONOME bt later it became OMOLE. Op pls clarify.

nyc story though. just reduce your grammar.

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