|Join Nairaland / LOGIN! / Trending / Recent / New|
Stats: 2,184,799 members, 4,763,727 topics. Date: Saturday, 16 February 2019 at 07:07 PM
|Re: Twine (A Drama Series) by latbas(m): 6:45pm On Aug 29, 2016|
this is getting interesting. nice story u ve got here. watch the way u switch from prose to drama though.
|Re: Twine (A Drama Series) by Opeoluwa99(f): 8:26pm On Aug 29, 2016|
I actually saw a story of yours "Allen avenue" somewhere and he said he's an editor but i was kinda suspicious knowing you went through a lot posting the story
|Re: Twine (A Drama Series) by Frozeen(m): 9:53pm On Aug 29, 2016|
|Re: Twine (A Drama Series) by gabazin080(m): 4:58am On Aug 30, 2016|
bibijay123:thanks for the mention. following u like zombie
|Re: Twine (A Drama Series) by toboski1(m): 8:54am On Aug 30, 2016|
Bibi is back again Am here eye glued to tis amazing story
|Re: Twine (A Drama Series) by olatex25(m): 9:22am On Aug 30, 2016|
Job weldone sis, more greese 2 ur elbow...
|Re: Twine (A Drama Series) by skarlett(f): 9:59am On Aug 30, 2016|
This Linda just reminds me of 'Didi' in 'King of Hearts', such a cold and heartless biitch
|Re: Twine (A Drama Series) by bibijay123(f): 11:17am On Aug 30, 2016|
My sister i just tire. I saw it on a site too and d guy was claiming ownership of it. He didn't even ask for permission before copying. That is why i am dragging my feet with this current story. I know the stress i went through hanging around Allen at night just to get gists for d story. I tire
|Re: Twine (A Drama Series) by bibijay123(f): 11:17am On Aug 30, 2016|
Please give a review. Thank u
|Re: Twine (A Drama Series) by bibijay123(f): 11:18am On Aug 30, 2016|
Thank u, i will watch out for it.
|Re: Twine (A Drama Series) by bibijay123(f): 11:21am On Aug 30, 2016|
You are welcome Ma'am
|Re: Twine (A Drama Series) by skarlett(f): 11:30am On Aug 30, 2016|
The story looks promising but you should watch the change of episodes/scenes, sometimes I get lost because they seem quick and have to go back to understand how the scenes follow eg the scene that introduced Linda and Tomi's ex. It looked really sharp, maybe you should designate the scenes to the characters like you did in Allen Avenue bcause it can be really confusing when one minute you're reading about Tomi and the next you're in Linda's mind.
3 Likes 3 Shares
|Re: Twine (A Drama Series) by jacy67(f): 11:54am On Aug 30, 2016|
people are just too lazy! how can one just sit and wait for someone else to work only for them to claim ownership. Don't be discouraged dear. what if you write your stories on okadabooks so that you'll be paid for your creativity? It's only a suggestion though.
|Re: Twine (A Drama Series) by crazygod(m): 3:47pm On Aug 30, 2016|
bibijay123:Babe y not just build your own blog and post stories there. U already have a fan base and it will be easy for u to even make money from it.
|Re: Twine (A Drama Series) by bibijay123(f): 4:58pm On Aug 30, 2016|
Thank you. I will do that.
|Re: Twine (A Drama Series) by bibijay123(f): 5:00pm On Aug 30, 2016|
I will do that in due time. Thank you
|Re: Twine (A Drama Series) by toboski1(m): 6:56pm On Aug 30, 2016|
Bibi I agree with building of a site, all this pirates no get joy at all
|Re: Twine (A Drama Series) by aminat02(f): 7:03pm On Aug 30, 2016|
Yes Bibi, you should consider selling your stories on okada.com, I am willing to buy! Bon travail,cher
|Re: Twine (A Drama Series) by Jesusgirl92(f): 7:33pm On Aug 30, 2016|
Bibi biko drop sometin already.
|Re: Twine (A Drama Series) by bibijay123(f): 10:42pm On Aug 30, 2016|
The story continues......
I don't know if what I did was the best. I sat down on a low fence calculating my chances. I could hear my heart beat. Maybe it wasn't the regular thumping sound, just the squeeze like you've lost something. I have lost something. It is something I consider priceless as most of my life work is in it. Yes, my laptop.
How did it get lost? I have been racking my brain for the answer. The last succor is this fence I am currently seating on. The sound of loud music blaring from the speakers in the beer palour did not move me neither did the numerous girls plying their trade entice me. Maybe one had. Tall, fair, obviously bleached, had a massive cleavage. Yes, I love cleavages but there are well packaged ones that when freed from the momentary prison called brassiere, would force tears down your eyes. Women are deceitful and men, just blind. I had stared at that particular commercial sex worker longingly but the thought of my laptop pushed my lagging legs into jet motion.
One must not live by bread alone, in this context, breasts. You allow those things control you and you will end up a tad poorer. If you are among the unlucky lot, you will have urine laced with latex condoms as an evening bath. Better stay away from them and by them I mean sex workers referred to as ashawo in some quarters.
My name is Dantata and I like to rant. I am not much of a talker but if you should open my mind, be sure to cover your ears with wax. I am a jigolo by coercion. Yes, I know I have judged the girls but then, they are the masters of the game. They have the freedom to come out in the night and display their huge packages, flaunt what their mama gave them but us guys, a long story.
You try to flaunt yourself and you will incur the wrath of the mob. Many a guy had been mistaken for gays and had been set ablaze. When your clients decides that you have to meet them dressed in seductive clothing then putting on tight fitting leather trousers that brings out the contours of your buttocks comes into play. One had to survive. In my case, I was surviving for my family or helping my family to survive.
I had not always been like this, meeting clients, rich women, taken to posh hotels and returning with fat envelopes and a painful waist. Yes, I did not have to think if by the age of fifty I would start using diapers when I meet clients that decides that my shithole would be their tool of amusement. They poke me with different set of objects and even use horse whip on me. All through I have to pretend that I enjoy it.
There are days you don't forget in your life. These days are marked by incidents that altered the course of your life forever. I was in my room, room that I had managed to push my dirty clothes that littered everywhere to a corner and covered it with a not too clean bed sheet. My dad had gone on one of his numerous journeys and had promised to get me a PlayStation One if I manage to keep my room clean.
He said he was going to return in exactly a week's time. Today makes it the seventh day. I had woken up and had quickly piled my clothes in a corner then went ahead to dig through it again to get a clean boxers. The one I was putting on smelt like a rat had died in it. Anytime I dip my hand, scratch my balls and return same hand to my nose, the smell seem to knock me out.
The "fresh" boxers smelt less bad but it smelt damp. I had no time to spread it out on the line to dry. After covering my clothes, I swept my room for the first time in many days then proceeded to play "Chicken Invasion" on my desktop computer.
It was the voice of my elder sister Suraiyya which she had Americanized to Suresh. I turned to look at her, my finger on the left click button as I wasted the damn alien chickens making drumsticks from their body with the bullet fire from my jet.
I greeted her. She was chewing bubble gum and did not bother to respond. Instead she twisted her nose upward and said in a nonchalant voice.
"Daddy is dead. The plane he was travelling in crashed."
She did not wait for my reaction before spinning around and leaving my room keeping my door ajar. A thousand and one reaction came to my head but none surpassed the numb feeling that ran from my head straight down to my legs.
"Alhaji ya rasu..."
I muttered over and over again.
To be continued...
Note: Written by Foxyflow
13 Likes 6 Shares
|Re: Twine (A Drama Series) by bibijay123(f): 10:43pm On Aug 30, 2016|
|Re: Twine (A Drama Series) by bibijay123(f): 10:44pm On Aug 30, 2016|
I will dear thank u
|Re: Twine (A Drama Series) by kerr9(f): 11:09pm On Aug 30, 2016|
this is short ooooo
|Re: Twine (A Drama Series) by toboski1(m): 1:42am On Aug 31, 2016|
Bibi who is foxyflow and why is the update so short fa?
|Re: Twine (A Drama Series) by olatex25(m): 3:16am On Aug 31, 2016|
Meaning of alhaji ya rasu ...? U ryt dis story 2geda wit floxyflow or u jst gave him an honour for dis episode...?
Anyway u guyz are doing a gud job in here, more grace 2 ur elbow's..
|Re: Twine (A Drama Series) by aninexzy(m): 6:27am On Aug 31, 2016|
[quote author=mhiz post=48791807]Yay, bibjay123 is back. And she's here to slay. Keep rocking sis, I dey your back [/quot e]. Nice one
|Re: Twine (A Drama Series) by MrsExplorer(f): 6:40am On Aug 31, 2016|
my dear, i never understood the pain of someone stealing your work until i started writing on nairaland and someone copied n pasted the whole of my story unto his blog. its really painful.
thank God for nairaland, its dated so you can always use it as a proof, hopefully one day you can sue their ass.
Anyway, i'm thinking of a way round this, can i contact you once i come up with something?
|Re: Twine (A Drama Series) by Daliano(m): 7:39am On Aug 31, 2016|
Question is,Does the boss know that he is your lover?
|Re: Twine (A Drama Series) by pagorino(m): 8:06am On Aug 31, 2016|
dz bibi e yaff come again ni fa. ayam following u bumper to bumper, more diesel to ur engine. pleasing writeup #kudos
|Re: Twine (A Drama Series) by Anugod(f): 8:17am On Aug 31, 2016|
johnwizey:No be only you o. Bibijay123 no fit call pesin abi? I'm just seeing it on Frontpage
|Re: Twine (A Drama Series) by Teespice(f): 8:44am On Aug 31, 2016|
I don't know.
I am kinda lost in the story. you introduce new characters which makes me forget the other characters.
I should start from the beginning, maybe I would understand.
read your other works and you are a really good writer.
|Re: Twine (A Drama Series) by Gabbyraze(m): 9:13am On Aug 31, 2016|
Nice story,I like the characterization in your story and also the different facets in your story. Would try to read your other story
1 Like 1 Share
|Sections: politics (1) business autos (1) jobs (1) career education (1) romance computers phones travel sports fashion health |
religion celebs tv-movies music-radio literature webmasters programming techmarket
Nairaland - Copyright © 2005 - 2019 Oluwaseun Osewa. All rights reserved. See How To Advertise. 123