EvaJael:
Apollux you're so gifted

Lol thanks...hoping I can start making money from it soon.

When Williams got out of the elevator, three consecutive grenade explosions slammed his ears. He knew what just happened. As the last explosion died down, he ran across the lobby of the building, ignoring the faces of people how appeared cowed by fear of the sounds coming feom outside. A lady screamed and fell on the floor as she tried running away from him seeing the gun he was holding. As he got to the door, he pushed lightly and was just in time to see four men shooting at a particular direction, the agreed place Davina was supposed to be at the stage of the plan. A reply fire came from where Davina was, one of the four men shooting at her dropped to the ground.
While he eas still watching, other men came out of the hotel's entrance and started shooting at her. Well it was time for him to act. He pulled out to frag grenades with his left hand and pointed the sub machine gun at the ground of mean, around about a dozen concentrating fire at where Davina was hiding. Well she had played her role very well. Her action has drawn the attention of everyone of them to her, making them temporarily forgetting the direction of the assassination gun shot. Well Williams have no moral problems about shooting enemies from behind especially when the odds are twelve to one against him. The setting of the HK was on full auto. He pulled the trigger and was almost amazed at the amount of bullets that spilled out of the gun in less than a second.
Three of the shooters went down before others realized tbat another attack is coming at them from a different direction. As they turned to observe, Williams gave the a salute with his gun, smiling he threw the two grenades and run towards Davina. He didn't stop when he got to where she was hiding, he only said, "Time to haul ass baby."
As both of them ran to the hiding place of their bike, they heard the continued shout of the gun men behind them of, "Grenades, grenades". They forgot about shooting them as they ran to take cover. Twin blasts added to the several sounds that have filled that area in the past few minutes. Williams and Davina were already at the Suzuki super bike. Davina took the wheel, as she was the better driver while Williams took her gun, exchanged the spent clips from them and inserted fresh ones. The loud roar of the super charged 999.8cc engine of the Suzuki was reassuring. It was painted matte black for better concealment during the night.

apollux how can i even describe what u are, i so much love d way u describe dose guns mehn, evry line is full of action, dis story will surely b a bomb what a talent u've got and i pray it takes u to great places,
OP i sight u frm my sniper scope (apollux hope am right) i wil love to see oyinprince kayemjay here also
Make i call dis peeps oly23 quenitee

Davina cranked the engine to its turbo charged level before releasing the clutch and accelerating. As the bike sped out of the hidden place, Williams who was on the back behind Davina, turned to face the gun men. Most of them had scattered when the grenades were thrown. Still few of them were caught in the twin blasts. But as they heard the sound of the revved bike, they started gathering again to resume their shooting or at least stop the killers from escaping.
Williams aligned both guns, set on full autos and drew back the triggers. He saw bodies twitching and imitating dances that marked their last actions on earth. In less than two seconds both guns were empty. By then the bike had moved far beyond the reach of the attackers.
"Nights like this makes me feel all Hot and my flesh is really itching to get laid." purred Davina's voice distorted by the helmet on her head.
"Fret none babe, I intend to scratch that itch off your flesh as soon as we get home." Williams replied but his mind was far away. Something was wrong with this whole night's set up, things haven't really gone as planned.

According to the arrangement with the five dons who gave him this job, after Isaac is killed, they were supposed to pull back their security men to pretend as if to guard them only allowing like three or four in total added to the four men who will be at the door to the hotel, to be the ones that will try to stop Williams after the job is done. Later the dons have continued to ask him for the specifics of his plans which Williams had refused to give to them on the guise that his professional ethics doesn't allow him to release such information what matters is that the goal is achieved. He has been paid half in advance.
The odd thing tonight was that the dons didn't stick to the initial agreement. They had carried three times the number of guards that was agreed they should bring along. Then after Isaac and his men were dead, the dons' guards hadn't stayed back as the plan had stipulated but had come out to attack Williams. It's obvious the dons had another plan, to kill him after he had taken out their enemy, so there wont be any loose end. No witness that can testify of their plans. Well it appears the dons just betrayed him and he won't be able to collect the fifty percent remainder of his payment, that is a serious mistake on their part. Well it's not him that should be worried, it is the dons. They just brought war on themselves. And pay him they will, several times over.

End of Chapter 2. 1 more chapter for me.
So is there anything anyone will want me to add to the story before I round off my section. I'm waiting for your feed back.
Also let's do some analysis on the story so far so the next contributors will have enough details to work on. The op already did a good job on that already.

Apollux:
According to the arrangement with the five dons who gave him this job, after Isaac is killed, they were supposed to pull back their security men to pretend as if to guard them only allowing like three or four in total added to the four men who will be at the door to the hotel, to be the ones that will try to stop Williams after the job is done. Later the dons have continued to ask him for the specifics of his plans which Williams had refused to give to them on the guise that his professional ethics doesn't allow him to release such information what matters is that the goal is achieved. He has been paid half in advance.
The odd thing tonight was that the dons didn't stick to the initial agreement. They had carried three times the number of guards that was agreed they should bring along. Then after Isaac and his men were dead, the dons' guards hadn't stayed back as the plan had stipulated but had come out to attack Williams. It's obvious the dons had another plan, to kill him after he had taken out their enemy, so there wont be any loose end. No witness that can testify of their plans. Well it appears the dons just betrayed him and he won't be able to collect the fifty percent remainder of his payment, that is a serious mistake on their part. Well it's not him that should be worried, it is the dons. They just brought war on themselves. And pay him they will, several times over.

End of Chapter 2. 1 more chapter for me.
So is there anything anyone will want me to add to the story before I round off my section. I'm waiting for your feed back.
Also let's do some analysis on the story so far so the next contributors will have enough details to work on. The op already did a good job on that already.

Following u straight up

Apollux



*Is Davina a sex mate, squad or girlfriend.... bad ass like them don't stay committed.



*please state year or date where this brilliancy could be placed.



*Normally, main characters don't get hit easily, I guess that's because he William is skilled on that part but why don't you put a twist Here. in my opinion I think Davina should be hit by a stray bullet this could warrant William to seek more revenge against The dons... she shouldn't be killed but be hit.



*I kinda love your use of Gun porn it's the Bomb




*Your law of purple prose(the law of conservation of details) is Awesome

mhizgap:
Apollux



*Is Davina a sex mate, squad or girlfriend.... bad ass like them don't stay committed.



*please state year or date where this brilliancy could be placed.



*Normally, main characters don't get hit easily, I guess that's because he William is skilled on that part but why don't you put a twist Here. in my opinion I think Davina should be hit by a stray bullet this could warrant William to seek more revenge against The dons... she shouldn't be killed but be hit.



*I kinda love your use of Gun porn it's the Bomb




*Your law of purple prose(the law of conservation of details) is Awesome

I try to make my actions as believable as possible. If you check the way the actions went. No one who survived the explosion of 3 grenades will be in a position to shoot. Beside if you pay close attention the story very well, you will notice the whole thing was well rehearsed and planned ahead. Besides this is just the opening action scene, a lot can still happen. More over, my last update has already brought up one area of conflict. The major issue of conflict will be coming up in chapter 3

I know nothing about Paris, or France as the case may be. Let me just cross my fingers and watch.

You are all doing a great job.

God bless you all.

LarrySun:
I know nothing about Paris, or France as the case may be. Let me just cross my fingers and watch.

You are all doing a great job.

God bless you all.

You don't need to know about Paris because if you look at the story, Paris was just a neutral meeting ground between the five dons and Isaac. So later events in the story can be anywhere, depending on the locations the writers will want to use.
Also I will be waiting to see your contributions later.

apollux......you rock....allah i swear.

LarrySun:
I know nothing about Paris, or France as the case may be. Let me just cross my fingers and watch.

You are all doing a great job.

God bless you all.

.....come on don't just seat and watch....please get ready to write along.....just accept our offer.....and bring in ur concept along......

Apollux:

I try to make my actions as believable as possible. If you check the way the actions went. No one who survived the explosion of 3 grenades will be in a position to shoot. Beside if you pay close attention the story very well, you will notice the whole thing was well rehearsed and planned ahead. Besides this is just the opening action scene, a lot can still happen. More over, my last update has already brought up one area of conflict. The major issue of conflict will be coming up in chapter 3

Alright and guessed right



Shoot on Boss

Damn! Scalding hot!!!!
Madam bib294 tnx for the invite..
Apollux I'm definitely searching for your stories...this has started with a climax already..thumbs up man
Menesky I'm definitely in..what's ma number pls..
Salute all the gr8 writers onboard

mhizgap:
Apollux



*Is Davina a sex mate, squad or girlfriend.... bad ass like them don't stay committed.



*please state year or date where this brilliancy could be placed.



*Normally, main characters don't get hit easily, I guess that's because he William is skilled on that part but why don't you put a twist Here. in my opinion I think Davina should be hit by a stray bullet this could warrant William to seek more revenge against The dons... she shouldn't be killed but be hit.



*I kinda love your use of Gun porn it's the Bomb




*Your law of purple prose(the law of conservation of details) is Awesome

Also as for the date of this story, I tried to leave it open for other writers to decide on that but I gave some clues for them to choose from. The HK MP7A1 is a gun produced in 2007, that is a real life fact, check it out. Then the Suzuki GSX-R1000R Supersport bike is a 2017 model. So the story can chronologically be placed anywhere (or anywhen if I'm using time travel terminology ) between 2015 to 2025 AD.

No insults intended but I really can't read this no matter how hard I try.

Apollux, your use of present and past tense is both heart wrenching and appalling.

Sometimes you use "have" and other times you use "had".

Try to show a bit of consistency. Also, find a way to edit and skim through your work for errors before posting.

Make it easier for us to read. I didn't read it so I can't point out more issues.

Like I said, no insults intended so please no attacks.

Warmest regards.

And to the creator of this thread @ meneski, wtf? You didn't learn the need to use a capital letter in beginning every sentence?

Reading your posts causes my eyes to lose their visibility. Learn to begin the first word of every sentence with a capital letter and do away with the ellipsis, they are not very necessary.

Warmest regards.

Neduzze5:
And to the creator of this thread @ meneski, wtf? You didn't learn the need to use a capital letter in beginning every sentence?

Reading your posts causes my eyes to lose their visibility. Learn to begin the first word of every sentence with a capital letter and do away with the ellipsis, they are not very necessary.

Warmest regards.

.......thank you buh......

souloho19:
Damn! Scalding hot!!!!
Madam bib294 tnx for the invite..
Apollux I'm definitely searching for your stories...this has started with a climax already..thumbs up man
Menesky I'm definitely in..what's ma number pls..
Salute all the gr8 writers onboard

......U gat number 8 ..... After mhizgap.....wellcome bro.... Bibi294 said you were another writer we really needed down here... Thanks for cuming wans again.

Neduzze5:
No insults intended but I really can't read this no matter how hard I try.

Apollux, your use of present and past tense is both heart wrenching and appalling.

Sometimes you use "have" and other times you use "had".

Try to show a bit of consistency. Also, find a way to edit and skim through your work for errors before posting.

Make it easier for us to read. I didn't read it so I can't point out more issues.

Like I said, no insults intended so please no attacks.

Warmest regards.

.... Hey, why don't you write along? I can't wait to see you bring on ur flawless concept, it will be good for the story, u knw?.....so waya think?.... Apollux wont dat be ok?

meneski:
.... Hey, why don't you write along? I can't wait to see you bring on ur flawless concept, it will be good for the story, u knw?.....so waya think?.... Apollux wont dat be ok?

Nah, I'm too busy for that right now or maybe I could join up later down into the novel. Kudos to y'all mehn, it's not easy to be a writer, sincerely. To talk more of no getting paid for it

Neduzze5:


Nah, I'm too busy for that right now or maybe I could join up later down into the novel. Kudos to y'all mehn, it's not easy to be a writer, sincerely. To talk more of no getting paid for it

.....its the life we choose

eight writers and counting.....

Matrycx:
apollux how can i even describe what u are, i so much love d way u describe dose guns mehn, evry line is full of action, dis story will surely b a bomb what a talent u've got and i pray it takes u to great places,
OP i sight u frm my sniper scope (apollux hope am right) i wil love to see oyinprince kayemjay here also
Make i call dis peeps oly23 quenitee

Reporting to duty SIR

Chapter three.

Anderson Nathan drove his metallic gray colored Chevrolet Sonic along the George Washington Memorial Parkway, by the Southern bank of the Potomac River, flowing steadily from the Peak of Mount Vernon North East of Langley, Virginia. The well kept lawn interspaced with trees calmed his mind as the car moved through the road. Soon he got to the first security check up. This road is a restricted one, only authorized persons or those with invitation are allowed through it. He showed them his security card, he waited for the ten seconds delay it will take for his card to be cleared. He was cleared and allowed to pass.
Driving into the access road, he know the place is covered by several CCTV, motion detectors and laserr grid trip alarm. Underneath the innocent looking green lawn, are SAMs launching pads, that can engage up to five air targets at once. Another security defense of the area, hidden from the schematics and official maps of the area, is a launch pad for the latest Hellfire missiles, with super sonic engine, equipped with heat sensor, smart targeting and have a range feom ground to air of twenty five thousand feet. Armed black combat clad security guards patrol are notably present. Some areas around have crack shot snipers hidden and ever watchful. Other bits of defense setup are scattered around and Anderson knows each of them and where they are located . It is his job to know.
He got out of the car at the special reserved park for top executive officers and walked down to the George Bush Center for Intelligence, Langley where the squat HQ building of the CIA is located.

Enduring the necessary delay another line of security checks demands, he bire them with any irritation because he wasn't in a haste to get into his office. True there are still some files on his desk he will wont to wrap up but nothing too serious and beside he didn't receive any call to come rushing to the office to handle an emergency case. Today is shaping up to look like one boring long day. He was cleared at the entrance and git into the building. A wide lobby greeted him with several suited people milling around with documents, files and tablets on the hand or armpit, as if having very busy things to do. Women also on official dressing copied their male counterparts. At every door leading out of the lobby is a guard in black armed with just a side arm. Several gave low nods of greeting as he stepped in.
By the right of the lobby is the reception desk, with Miss Mary Ludlow, dressed in multiple colored flowery dress, she was busy chatting animatedly with another female, on black coat on ash pants. Anderson couldn't tell who she was as her back was to him.

"Hi Mary" he said as he got to the reception desk.
" Good morning Mr. Nathan." replied Mary but her next words were drowned out by the female standing with her.
"And if it isn't my latest bunk mate." she said with a short laugh her voice tingling like tiny bells. "Hope last night wasn't too much for you?"
"Oh, April...ah I meant Miss Mattson, didn't see you at first." Anderson stammered as his face flushed red with a light blush. Almost every one in his directorate knows the reputation of April, she is the slut of the place. Most men here have had her. After the collapse of her second marriage, she had said her good byes to matrimony and just live for the thrill of sexual escapades.
The last night she pointed out was the time Anderson has had with her . He has been her latest victim. The sex session has only been memorable for just she strength and insatiable urge. He had fallen so cheaply in to her trap and remembers it with deep regrets.

Sorrowtore his heart apart as he remembered that he cheated on his wife. It hurt more that he did that with a woman who makes no meaning to him. And this happened at a time when he has failed saving his marriage.
His earlier two marriages failed miserably, when he met Martha Turner, he knew she was the perfect woman for him. After fifteen years of marriage, through all the difficult times, after two daughters, she had proved again and again that she is a worthy mate. But sadly Anderson has failed her and his two daughters.
The commitment he gave to his job had robbed Martha love and attention from a husband. After enduring that and still holding on to the marriage, he had added another hurt. He started cheating on her. First it has been with Diana, then Amberley and Sonia. Each time Martha had discovered, he had apologized and promised to stop but he never did.
So many nights he had returned home to see Martha crying. She really did love him but he was a jerk. He continued to take her for granted not until the divorce notice had come. It was like then he sobered up. He realized what he had done to her, his kids and his family. Asking for forgiveness was too late at this point. He wouldn't forgive himself.

pamelB hope you are getin ready.....apollux is on the last chip.

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oyinprince

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