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thanks!

U're doing a nice job, kip them coming.

Hello guys please, please and please try and drop ur comments. Because i can see that this thread is gradually loosing followers and to avoid drastic reduction in its value please drop your comments and hopefully we can hit frontpage one day.
Signed:
d9ty7

--continuation--
After checking on Mary he retired back to his room to sleep.
"Segun! What is this?" his mother called from the sitting room.
He immediately ran to the sitting room where he saw his parents standing.
"Daddy, you are back? Welcome sir." he greeted.
His father ignored and looked at him with an "i will kill you look." which futher scared him.
"What is this?" his mother asked pointing to the drops of blood on the tile.
"The blood abi?" he asked foolishly.
"And who drank this?" she asked pointing to the bottle on the stool.
"Talk now or never." his father yelled.
Mary walked into the sitting room holding the walls for support.
"The blood is from me." she said.
"How?" her mother asked.
"I'm seeing my period." she lied.
Their parents bought the lies foolishly as they dismissed them after Segun had been ordered to clean the blood. They both left the sitting room and Segun followed Mary back to her room.
"Mary, thanks for saving me for the second time today." he said.
Mary was in pains as she couldn't reply.
Just then her phone ranged. It was Mike. She looked at an angry Segun who pretended not to be angry.
"Hello, is this when you are supposed to call me. As if you are not the cause of all these. And i was trying to stop him from hitting you, that was how i got injured. Now look at the time you are calling me." Mary lamented.
Segun couldn't hear what Mike was saying in the background. He just heard Mary reply.
"How dare you call my brother an animal?" she asked angrily.
Segun folded his fists like he wants to punch Mary.
"Mike, so this is life? This is how you want to repay me, despite how much i have done for you. Remember i love you with my heart and body." she lamented angrily.
Segun was confused as to what she was saying.
She quickly got herself back as she ended the call and removed her battery.
Segun looked at her with an askance look.
"He has broken up with me." she cried.
Segun told her to lower her voice which she did to his relief.
"Thank God you have not invested much in the relationship." Segun said happily but faked sadness.
"How i wish i haven't invested heavily." she said.
"What do you mean?" Segun asked agitatedly.

--to be continued--

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Walks into the thread found Jumizie seated on The Rock's laps, i was like wtf. Come and update o, even tho u've neva replied my comments.

@Miss Jumizie- i am not advicing and neither am i telling you what to do or how to do your thing. But i think the only way you can attract more readers is when you update consistently. I was suprised when i checked the thread and found a few number of views. For someone of your calibre(who have participated on great threads most importantly The preachers son)immediately u post you link people ought to have viewed and commented on your story.
Please don't get me wrong i didn't say you are not trying and i know its not easy to think, write and type. But try and update consistently.
I am a loyal follower of urs, and you can always count on me cos i gat your back.
#PEACE#

--continuation--
Mary looked at her mother and then Segun before she cleared her throat.
"Mum, i missed my steps while i was descending the stairs." she explained.
"Is anybody pursueing you?" she asked looking at Segun.
"No mum, it was the tile that caused it." she lied.
"What have you taken?" her mother asked.
"Bro Segun has given me some pain relievers." she explained.
"Take your time and rest." her mother said standing up as she left for her room.
"Thanks mum." Mary appreciated.
"And you, see me in my room now." their mother said referring to Segun.
Segun nodded his head as he sat down on the available chair by the bedside with an apologetic look.
"Mary, am sorry for what i did." he said.
She looked at him as tears welled up in her eyes.
"I don't want you to have anything to do with Mike. He is a player who will always toil with your emotions." Segun explained.
"But i love him." Mary said sadly.
"I know but he doesn't love you. Imagine him running away when you fainted in the afternoon." Segun explained.
"He was afraid." Mary defended.
"Just be careful." Segun adviced.
Mary nodded her head in affirmation.
"Let me go and see mummy." Segun said as he walked out of the room.
IN HIS MOTHER'S ROOM
"Segun, why didn't you come to shop when i asked you to come?" she asked.
"I was attending to Mary that was why." he explained.
"Is that so?" she asked.
"Yes mum." he replied.
"I called you so that you can meet Jummy's father." she informed.
"thank God i didn't come." he thought within himself.
"We have finalised things as it ought to be." She said.
"What things?" he asked ignorantly.
"Her father will be going back to Japan in two days time, so Jummy will have to live with us now. And this will futher strengthen the relationship between you two." she explained.
"She can't stay with us. What about her schooling?" he asked.
"I'll enrol her in your school." she informed.
"Our school doesn't admitt final year students." he said.
"I'll meet Mr Hastrup tomorrow and hopefully he'll admit her." she said.
Segun looked at his mother angrily who in turn smiled at him.
"You can go." she dismissed him.
He got out of his mother's room and brought out his phone.
"I need to establish something with this girl." he said as he dialled Nike's number.
She picked the call after the fourth ring.
"Hello." he said.
"Hi." she replied.
"How are you?" he asked.
"Am fine." she replied.
"Nike, i have something i want to tell you. It has been bothering my mind since but i have to say it out now." he said.
"Say it." she replied.
He brainwashed her for the next five minutes with his romantic words which left Nike speechless.
He concluded his talks with.
"Nike, will you be my lover? Yes or no?" he asked.
She cleared her throat and replied.
"Segun let me think about it."
"When should i expect a reply?" he asked.
"Before this week runs out." she replied.
"Goodnight sweet." he said.
"Goodnight." she replied.
Segun walked out of his room and headed towards Mary's room to check on her.

--to be continued--

Lets rub minds together.
Why do you think Segun mother called to see him?
Will Mary tell their mother that Segun pushed her without putting herself into trouble for bringing a guy home?
*pls i will be very happy if you guys could take your time in aswering those questions.*
Signed:
d9ty7

¤¤¤CHAPTER 2¤¤¤
At the sound of the closing bell, Segun hurriedly walked to the SS1, SS2 class to inform the members of the football team to wait behind for practice. After that he went to the snacks shop where he paid for the snacks he bought for the junior student during the long break.
He got back changed his school uniform, put on his football kits(all provided by the school) and got on the pitch of play.
They did some exercise before they played a short match against themselves to regain their pattern of play.
After one hour, they left the school after they had achieved their set goal.
Segun walked out of the school compound and headed for the bus/stop. Just then his phone ranged.
It was his mother.
"Hello mum." he said.
"Are you at home?" she asked.
"Not yet, but am on my way." he informed.
"Okay, i just want you to meet me in the shop." she explained.
"Hope no problem?" he asked.
"When you come." she replied.
Segun returned his phone back to his pocket and increased his pace. He got home fifteen minutes later.
He knocked on the gate but the gate was opened five minutes later by Mary.
"What kept you long?" he asked.
"I I I I....erm....i was....busy." she stammered.
Segun hissed and walked to the sitting room where he met Mike sitting down comfortably with a bottle of Maltina on a stool before him. Segun looked at him with hatred before walking towards him.
"What are you doing here?" Segun asked angrily.
"Are you quarelling with google." Mike replied amidst laughter.
Segun angrily launched an attack hitting him on his nose. Immediately he began bleeding from the nose. Mary quickly held Segun from behind and in anger Segun swung his hand, he hit Mary on the head causing her to loose balance. She fell down and hit her head on the pointed edge of the chair. She lost consciousness immediately.
Seeing this Mike ran away immediately with a bleeding nose. Segun went into the kitchen and returned with a first aid box and a bowl of water. He applied his first aid knowledge of reviving a fainted victim.
Twenty minutes later Mary came back to life which relieved Segun. Her vision was blur and she was dazed, she requested to be taken to her room to sleep. Segun obliged her, he sat down on the edge of the bed watching her closely. This time he was yet to remove his school uniform.
Mary slept off some minutes later, Segun left for his room.
AN HOUR LATER THEIR MOTHER ARRIVED.
"Mary... Segun." she called from the sitting room.
Segun answered her and ran to meet her in the sitting room.
"Where is your sister?" she asked.
"She is not feeling fine, she is sleeping." He explained.
She stood up and headed for Mary's room.
She barged into the room and woke her up in the process.
"Mummy welcome." Mary greeted.
Her mother sat down on the edge of the bed and touched her body, she touched her head and felt the swollen part of her head.
"What happened to your head?" she asked.
Mary looked at her mother and then looked at Segun.
She cleared her throat to talk.

--to be continued--

Jumizie13: *typing*

*waiting*

scon-p:
Nice work bro but sorry for derailing just wanted to help a brother. Peeps check this out. No vex o www.nairaland.com/1330912/what-lurks-dark

No qualms bro. I'll check it out now.

The last update got me smiling cos i can see u typed with little or no error, thumbs up sis.
@ your question: it is possible Chuck's phone was picked by one of his numerous chicks.

I just saw d link to dis story on The Rock's thread, i decided 2 ignore it but immediately i saw it's a story by Jumizie, i have no choice than to follow it to the end.
No mistakes so far, cos i knw u must have learnt 4rm the rock, kmj and other gr8 writers b4 launching ur own story.
Let's go there sis.

Am enjoyin your story lyk madt. But wait o did i hear u talk abt marriage? Hester no fit marry that dimeji of a guy, he is full of himself and their marriage will be a total disaster.
Just a guess. Btw Queen you ar doing a gr8 job, front page tins.

--continuation--
Segun went to the snacks shop to buy something to quench his hunger.
"Good morning sister Joy." he greeted the attendant in the mart.
"Good morning my brother, how you dey ?." she asked.
"I dey o." he replied.
He bought two packs of cupcakes and a vanilla flavoured yoghourt. He started a conversation with Joy as he munched his food.
"Senior...senior Segun....." a junior student greeted kneeling down.
"How are you?" Segun asked.
"Am fine sir." the girl replied.
Segun finished what he was eating and left for his class. He got out of the mart and met Mike. Mike blocked the way.
"Hey, leave the way let me pass." Segun warned.
"What if i don't leave the way?" Mike dared him.
Segun moved close to Mike and held him by his collar causing him to whince in pain.
"Segun, what's going on there?" Peace(an asthmatic patient) a girl in SS3A(the science class)asked walking close to them.
Segun left his collar and walked angrily back to his class to avoid listening to unecessary preachings from her. As he got to the door of his class, a junior student ran to him.
"Senior please, i misplaced my snacksmoney and i am hungry." the girl said.
Segun looked at her for some seconds.
"Go and meet sister Joy. Pick what you want in my name." Segun told her.
"Thank you sir." the girl said as she ran towards the direction of the snacks shop.
Segun got into the class and was suprised to see the whole class facing the direction where Wilson the class monitor was seated.
"Segun come here and lets talk as brothers." Wilson spoke to him.
Segun walked to him and the whole class began talking at the same time advising him to change and reduce his temper. He was infuriated by this and angrily yelled at them.
"You all must be crazy. Are you sent to school to advise me?" he asked as every member of the class started dispersing one by one back to their seats.
Segun sat down and laid his head on his locker waiting for the next teacher.
"Hypocrites." he said and hissed loudly for them to hear.

END OF CHAPTER 1

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Knocks on the door to the inner chamber of the queen, got no response. Assumed she is still resting, left and walked back to my thread.
When you ar strong enough to update u know where to reach me.

--continuation--
"Jude please let the boy go." the principal begged the military man.
"You mean he will go unpunished?" Jude asked.
"I have a reason for that." the principal explained.
"Your wish is my command." Jude replied.
"Thank you." the principal thanked him.
Jude walked out of the office leaving Segun behind.
"Akinola what's your problem?" the principal asked.
He kept mute with his head bent down.
"You have grown wings abi? Despite the likeness i have for you." the principal lamented.
"No sir." Segun defended.
The bell was jingled which signified break time.
"Sir, can i go? It is break time." Segun asked.
"Are you serious at all? You are under punishment and you are telling me it is break time." the principal said banging his fist on the desk before him.
"Am sorry sir." he replied.
"Tell your father to see me tomorrow morning." the principal said as he dismissed him with a wave of hand.
Segun walked out of the principal's office, got outside, adjusted his uniform and walked back to his class.
"Shegzy. Aren't you playing football today?" Wilson asked.
"Am not jare." he replied.
He sat down and brought out his government textbook. He read through the topics he had missed while he was away writing exam.
Mary entered the class and walked towards Segun's seat.
"Bro how far?" she asked.
"I dey o." he replied.
"What happened between you and officer Jude?" she asked with concern.
"Nothing much. Just a little burst up." he replied non chalantly.
"Bro, i think you should try and work on your temper." she advised.
"Are you here to preach?" he asked already loosing his temper.
"Am sorry o." she apologised.
"Mary i want to see you." Mike called through the window.
Mary made to leave to join her boyfriend but Segun held her roughly on her hands.
"Don't dare leave my presence while am still talking to you." Segun said angrily.
"Man leave the girl alone, she is through with you." Mike said entering the class.
"She is my sister and i have every right to tell he what to do." Segun said advancing towards an oncoming Mike.
Oblivious of the fact that members of Segun's class had turned them to a movie. Mary quickly got in between the and stopped them from hitting themselves.
Mike tried leaving the class with Mary but she angrily left through the other exit which led to the school playing ground.
Segun angrily sat down and closed his textbook. He removed a small hand towel from his bag and wiped his face with it. He stood up checked his wallet, he headed for the school's snacks shop.
"If i should meet this mad boy on my way, one of us must visit the hospital." Segun said to himself as he headed for the snacks shop.

--to be continued--

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Uthman51: Watin b d suprise? ......

Na there him go see Gloria

Knew about this story thru The Rock. Hope am not too late sha?
To make corrections later. Nice work.

Advise for the Op.
1. Try and make ur update lengthy and detailed.
2. You made this story look like a fairy tale, a story without proof. I almost lost interest in it after the first date ish. You could have done better if you had showed or included conversation or proof that they(Adeola & Dayo) are going on better with each other.
*With all i av said i knw u will improve to serve we ur readers better. Not like i am Chinua Achebe or Wole Soyinka, but i am aspiring to be like them even though i am a learner. Btw all i need is updates.
Hope u ar nt angered by my so called advice.

merit12: yea thanks again for reading joor,it the typo
thanks for correction i promise 2 edit over and over again before posting.hope you understand my storyline ooo?it not like i have degree for it,i did not offer the subject even in scondary school.but i have been doing short story and i decide to post this one.
i will give it all my best

chao

I understood u perfectly. Literature is not an easy subject even to me who did it. But u shud try edit before u post. Not like am a pro o, cos we are all learners.

More comments please.

--continuation--
"Follow me to the staff room." Mr Ige commanded.
Segun obeyed him and followed him to the staff room.
They got to the enterance of the staff room and Mr Ige went inside. Segun surveyed the teachers sitted in the staff room. He discovered they were mostly young teachers whom he had good rapport with because most of them are his friends on some social network media. With this he walked into the staff room with confidence.
Mr Ige reported him to the teachers present and seeked their opinion on how to punish him since the use of cane is prohibited on the SS3 students.
The teachers turned the question to a jovial matter as they all laughed it of and they offered Segun a seat as they began discussing about sports, politics (the minister who bought a car worth about 225m naira for security reasons. As if na inside car she go sleep.)
He was released to go back to his class as he ran back. He got back to the class and found his classmate dancing to a popular song sang by a musician who was 19yrs for three years. The principal showed face from nowhere and was watching the dancers. Segun and his classmate settled down and were laughing at the dancers foolishness.
The principal cleared his throat causing the three dancers to run back to their seats. He entered the class and seized the phone with which they were playing the music from.
"This is the time you need to face your studies squarely. The fact that you have written gce doesn't mean you are through with your education." he advised.
The students all mumured some incoherent words.
"You keep on listening to worldly songs that are of the devil. Tell me what is the meaning of 'skelewu'?" he complained.
"Mr principal is so on point. So you know what is in town." Segun said loud enough for the man to hear.
"Who said that? Before i punish everyone of you." the man asked.
"Mr man shaaaat up there and go back to ya office." Danjuma a hausa boy in the class said.
The whole class bursted into laughter as the principal looked on foolishly. He walked out of the class and went to his office.
THIRTY MINUTER LATER
Five men walked into ss3c class. They were dressed in military uniform, they were the student disciplinary squad(SDS). They marched the students to the football field and ordered them to do frog jump from a goal post to another.
Segun stood his ground while other began the frog jump as if their life depended on it.
"Hey! Do what you are asked to do." the youngest among the five men yelled at Segun.
"Am not doing any unecessary stamina training." Segun replied and the students who were frog jumping bursted into laughter.
The man closed the gap between them and held Segun by his shirt as he marched him to their leader.
"Boy, i heard you decided not to do what you were commanded to do." the man said.
"Yes." Segun replied.
"But why?" the man asked.
"I know my rights and and you can't just come and deprive me of my rights." he defended.
"And what are your rights?" the man asked.
"As stipulated in the constitution of this country. It is wrong to subject a citizen of a country to arbitrary torture." he explained.
By this time the other students had stopped frog jumping.
"I need to teach this boy some manners. He needs to visit the barrack." the man said as he headed for the principal's office.

--to be continued--

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Nice story but na oliver twist mode i dey o