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Skimpledawg, suxxman... My realest niggas, oya appear like willy willy

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mr kinwane or wetin b ur numenclature? see as u dey use ur guests rub am!mb don suffer ! OYA UPDATE US KIAKIA...........

Nice piece.
More!

At the begining. I was like wich kin story b dis wan but now my rum maits think am goin crazy coz LWKMD . Not ery day one comes accross a beautiful piece like dis. So I say more breeze m sory more greese (abi na breese? Just choose any one)to elbow.

this story no carry bleep?

Wow! Been fun continue pls...

What an interesting & comical piece. Abeg try update sharpaly o

alberto2k:
Skimpledawg, suxxman... My realest niggas, oya appear like willy willy

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kinwayne:
Hello friends.

What is your take on the story so far?

What would you have to say about the storyline or plot?

Humbly Expecting your criticisms and comments... Thanks..

Love y'all...

I like ur piece, infact I was forced to track ur updates up till this last episode. Kudos!
MY TAKE:
While each episode is very encompassing and funny, the characters are becoming disjointed. As in, you are not looping them together. You could be another JK Rowlings but still have more work to do on building up 40% of ur characters more strongly, if you'll be killing some off, let the readers reason wt why and when.
EG,
-how about 'Stephanie' in ep 2, she shld still be in d show or make us know what happened to her.
-how did d food seller get 2 know that ur display was orchestrated 4 her to bring police in that short a time (reader were doing d guess, like maybe she 'studied u guys unawares' u when she went 4 d drinking water) then u could hint that when she came wt d police officers.
-where those gangsters came from was unknown, and how could they pursue a random person like they have scores to settle. Next time u cld make ur readers understand that d main xter was a mischievous socialite wanted by all.
-Each episode grows much faster into the future, eg, the two friends did not ponder into their ordeals that morning (almost getting jailed/killed) b4 venturing into a new venture. And everytn happened so fast without reference to earlier occurences.

-Last shot: if u'll want to write a beautiful piece like this I'll suggest u write it out in full and not this microtintin social style. U'll becoming a writer, so make us feel you'll giving us a novel and not just a fast one on NL. U'll get used to it and be a better writer.

PLS: Just my observation. I ain't a professional writer self.

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Ride on kinwayne

Joyous888:
Ah guy i almost fall frm chair because of laf. U try... I dey front sit. Abeg mk una shift, waiter abeg giv me remy martins, i wan high small so dat i go fit concentrate. Guy let it flow

lol...guy, u sure say no b Emma piss (Remy Martins) u wan drink so? Check well oh..mk e no b lyk say u follow Val dey dream....

Modifed: buh come oh...u b male or female?

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kinwayne:
Episode 3.

'And where exactly are we headed?' I curiously asked Theo after we had circled the entire neighborhood.

'Guy whatsup na? Where exactly we dey go? I no get any strenght to waka again o' Emma also mumbled at Theo.

Am pretty sure one could hear the echoing of our rumbling stomachs ten kilometeres away. It sure seemed like world war III was fought inside my belle as the worms inside me could be heard shouting and wailing. Whatever ideas Theo had,he should better put them to good use now unless they want to start posting obituary pics of a son of man.

'Guys look over there,see that man besides the Hummer jeep?' Theo said pointing to his decribed direction. 'It seems his car is broken down, he looks well to do,lets go help him out and am pretty certain he would give us some 'Doo''.

I and Emma unanimously agreed to Theo's decision as we immediately headed towards the man's direction.

'Wait!' Theo said,' Valentine na you go talk to the man o'

'Which kind nonsense be that na,no be you bring up the idea of meeting the man?' I countered him.

'No be you get mouth pass all of us for here' Emma and Theo simultaenously fired back. 'If you no go talk to the man,make we begin dey go back now o' Theo added in more of a carefree tone.

'Oya jor make we dey go' I announced as we made to where the man was.

'Good Morning sir' I greeted him. 'Do you need anyhelp on your car sir'.

'Good Morning my child' The man responded. 'Not quite,it just needs a little pushing,thats all'.

'Then we would be glad to help' I offered while the man entered the car as Theo and Emma joyfully went to the back of the car and started pushing it.

Good gracious,after pushing for a considerable distance,the engine kicked and started.

Zoom! Zoom! Zoom!! The man hit the gas as he sped off,not even looking back to say 'Thank You', leaving us exhausted and wasted as we cursed him.

'May Ogun strike that man for me' Emma cursed.

'Even money for boys,he no fit drop,why we come go waste our strenght sef,Na God go punish am' Theo added,wailing of hunger in the process.

'I swear,that man look like chief Ahun himself' I said.

We found our way to a nearby shade where we sat down quietly.

'Guys,see that woman wey dey carry food for head' Theo the "ideologist" said.

'Wetin come happen to the woman?' I and Emma asked.

'Una no well,abi una no dey see food. Mtchew. Psst psst,Madam!' Theo called out to the woman as she turned and came towards us.

'Guy you get money?' I fearfully asked him.

'Una too dey worry jare,dont worry,Na me Theo,everything is under control' He assured us as we both started hailing him.

'Good Morning sir's' The woman greeted when she reached where we sat.

'Confam!,Madam this your food sweet so?' Theo foolishly asked.

'Ah Oga, this food sweet sotey E no dey sweet again' The food seller defended her asset.

'Oya serve us shaperly shaperly. Give us one plate of rice and stew with big big Canda' Theo ordered while the woman gladly rushed and started serving the food.

Hmmmn,I dont blame her. I could imagine what was going through her mind that moment. What a great way to start up the morning business. But seriously,did she see us as 'Better People'?

We had already guppled down more than halve of the food,while she stood,watching us eat.

'Yeeee!! My belle' Theo screamed holding his stomach.

'Ah,ooosh,yay i don die,my stomach o' Emma wailed vomiting the contents of the food on the floor.

I was shocked. What could be happening to them.

'Madam, Ah! What have you done to my friends. What did you put in their food?' I anxiously asked the woman who seemed like she was already peeing in her pants at the show Theo and Emma were displaying.

'Nothing sir! I swear to God,i didnt put anything in it' She frightenedly responded.

'Madam! You must be kidding me!' I yelled angrily. 'Is'nt it the poison you put in your food?'

'Sir! Please believe me,the only ingredient i added to the food was salt,pepper,onions,white Maggi--'

'Ah! This woman has killed my friends,i shouted,cutting her off from completing her list of ingredients. 'You have killed them for me o,didnt you know they are allergic to white maggi?'

'Please sir,believe me,i meant no harm'

'Ah, yay! My belle o' Emma and Theo continued their showdown.

I turned to the woman. 'Oya,rush fast fast and buy them water, quick quick o'.

She hurriedly left us while Emma and Theo stood up and started laughing uncontrollably.

'Na me be the master planner' Theo praised himself.

'Chai,this woman food sweet o' Emma added, rubbing his stomach to make his point.

'I swear. Una dey craze for head. Make una no ever put me for condition to repeat wetin just happen o' I warned them.

'Yes sir' The both saluted and quickly returned to their former positions as the woman returned with the water.

We further threatened to sue her in court while she apoloqized and squeezed a One thousand naira note into my hand. She quickly took her leave,leaving us to 'Feel Ourselves'.

We strolled home carefree,feeling proud and happy at what we just accomplished,but it was soon cut short.

Pow! Pow! Gunshots.

'You Three are under arrest' A voice came from behind.

I guess this update was inspired from 1 Ghana movie like that.

Anyways bro. Keep it up.

More draw draw to your elbow.

Ok

I don take my sit

Nice one!!!

alberto2k:
Skimpledawg, suxxman... My realest niggas, oya appear like willy willy

Shaun Sir!!! Permission to carry On!!!

Skimpledawg:

Shaun Sir!!! Permission to carry On!!!

Nightwalker. #Asewo

Am in but not later, nice write up

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Skimpledawg:

Shaun Sir!!! Permission to carry On!!!

carry wetin wen i de here??

oga kingwanye my observations so far are just few.

read through yur last 2update. suring the baba scene, thiers is a little error. (its not too big )
thanks

Any space for sale

Wey dt boy?comon coman phinish dis tin bfor I will vex

Jesus!!!!!!! What am I seeing?? Frontpage? I owe you guys an avanlache of updates...... Thank you very much guys