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[quote author=Foxy_Flow]You need koboko.

I am outrightly disappointed in you. After all the bragging and everything. Smh[/quote]quote me in the comments you think i bragged

[quote author=Mazi_Omenuko]Friday was yest'day, right[/quote]give me today please, its 80% ready

where is tolite? Don't let this prey go unscathed!

you dared to come in,
sit tight and face the music

We are waiting

mynd don come with him ban wahala join.

#unanogokillperson

#sips coke#

*grabs coke and popcorn*

this writers are not smiling oh, you talk one, they talk two!

Na here judging and criticizing tie rapper and hold walking stick.
#seriousbusiness

#stuffs more popcorn into mouth#

[quote author=Mynd_44][/quote]







#dntreplymeagain

^Aye! A prey is come, bearing gospel news
And Shall we make him pay the dues,
or watch him tread so loose?
Tolite, you seek blood for your thirst
Now the preacher comes with kingdom zest
Bring ye out your clubs, claws and broom
For now is the time to kick out the gloom
Blood, deep red, full and holy
Now flows through the witches' coven
Drink till your eyes are popping
Drink till your stomachs are churning
For The dark side finally rules again
Roll out the drums and beat me that melody of pain.

[quote author=Mynd_44][/quote]your case don reach supreme court tey tey

[quote author=Mynd_44].......[/quote]i swear, you are really a case waiting to be judged.

[quote author=Mynd_44].........[/quote]*shakes head*

You, this...this Mofo, i swear, are trying to anger me, but...let me just leave it next time.

You guyz are killing me
kaycee and tolite!

I hope we have prey that would come lurking round

Tolite22: Those who live on the sidelines
Never make the headlines
It's time to stop playing big Sis
And throw your hat in the ring.
Bring on Kaycee
Bring on Hades
Bring on the blood gang and let's see!

How do you like your blood?
Warm, boiling or red hot?
Do you get a rush
When it from the veins gush?
Will your heart stop
When I come to stomp and romp?

I'm a vampire
Your blood rush takes me high and higher
I'll suck it slow until you quiver and tire.
Princesa,
If you think you'll remain the umpire
You're a damn good liar!

*demonic laughter*

hmm, someone is bent on igniting lost fire
I wonder why you wont let a witch retire
blood and claws are no more the spark?
Or Maybe I've lost the fury of the demon shark -
Wrenching, groanings, ripping and piercing
are no more to me than subdued yearnings
Can't i indeed watch from the sidelines?
I had my time, now's ur turn to shine.

But...
still the darkside lovingly calls
that metallic taste wets my soul
But i must stand, or less i fall
And make a slip to the red roller coaster roll.
Nostalgic.



#attitudeblood

[quote author=Mynd_44]Can y'all please stop?[/quote]it would have been better Sir, if you had also hidden her post and not quoted it. And when i replied, you hid mine. If i hadn't seen it in the first place, we wont be having this discussion now.


Just thought i should let you know that you're not fair.

alutacontinua: *lemme just spread my mat here*

#sonotfair

i waited for your epistle all month, but it never came

Damex333: like you neva clamour for it wen you were in position

clamour i did for it yes, i don't deny it.


But lets break it down, shall we...


- I mentioned it once on my thread just like yours truly has done. And voila! readers of my story took it to the right door step, just like readers of yours truly have also done.

- but guess what, It ended there!
I didn't go complaining and whining all over peoples thread (it would have made me look like a mofo)

- I didn't also come to break down Mynd's 'office' demanding for action some times later, (cos he don't own the frontpage, he don't even own nairaland)

- I just allowed it take its course, and voila! again it did. I hit the frontpage, just like yours truly has finally done (Thank goodness)

So my dear, when you talk about 'clamour' please also endeavour to set the boundary as it pertains to different individuals.

Thank you

OMA4U: Thanks for the analysis. I just want to channel a different style for myself (writing yoruba in english).

I would like to ask if you enjoy the story?

yeah, i enjoyed your story and some others...

[quote author=Mazi_Omenuko]Princesa has her analysis submitted already;

https://www.nairaland.com/1441838/short-story-competition/24[/quote]no she hasn't. As Abu said, its just 3 outta 15. Although I've dropped somethings about the other stories earlier on.

But Am still gonna extract and update it all in one post (I can't do long analysis like you guyz) so pls give me till Friday. Thank you.



#couldn'tresist

Obinnau: Nice analogies.

Nice analyses you mean...
analogy means comparism/similarities, i dnt think it connects with the afore-posted

#dontbotherreplying

Hmm the Secret of the gods = The medallion. Now i get the title.


You my dear are still doing great. Glad to be ur princess

#speaks in low tone#
Enhe, so i still left this gate open?


#addresses chief Mazi#

Father inlaw welcome, all the way from Abia to say this, you should have just called na. anyway, I have heard and will submit mine before Sunday, okay

oya come lets go to the house so you can refresh and relax, i hope your trip went fine?


#Leads father inlaw out, locks gate and throw keys into the ocean for good!#

The dark side lives again!
For Tolite wants to start the blood-reign
With red rain pouring from the ryhming gate
And look ho! He even wants a playmate -
someone to pierce hearts and rip out souls in part
So Kaycee, why don't you take up my path
Lets see you rhyme in bloody demon style
And I'd be by the sideline clapping my head out

are you sure, you're in my family tree?

[quote author=Foxy_Flow]Tripping for who?

Not in a million years. I am supposed to ask you that self...

#Fine boy no pimples#[/quote]like i care

[quote author=Foxy_Flow]Like seriously, na which kind person you be self.... You just abandon the thread like that and you know say to quarrel with you na fun [/quote]fun ba, i know you're tripping for me

anyway, my hormonal fluctuation determine my mood and if i wanna comment or bicker, and for a while its being static

Finally he gets to the zenith of his nl career





#hmm, maybe i should read this also, but the over 20 pages scare me#

[quote author=Foxy_Flow] [/quote]someone is having middle age crisis

[quote author=Mazi_Omenuko]I pray thee to wait a while longer until the submission thread is opened tomorrow so you can drop your nominations there.

Thanks.

#how is my son treating you?#[/quote]okay then, i surely can wait



#hmm, your son and I are having those couple crisis they talk about on tv we seem estranged these days with both of us seeking succour in the arms of others, poor me, can't even make a relationship work #

Okay, finished reading all entries and as usual I've got a little something something


T-flow: good choice of diction, impressive narration and dialogue, consistent plot. The opening paragraph was bulky, some copy and paste work? Please endeavour to keep the opening paragraph catchy, precise and punchy.

Numerruno- Me thinks your story lacks a definite sense of direction and the plot inconsistent with so many characters that do not have clear-cut roles. I advise that you concentrate on and develop very few characters if you get to the next round.

Oma4u: hmm, it felt like i was watching a flick from 'yollywood' (the yoruba version of the nollywood ). Anyway, the proverb coloured dialogues suit the epic piece I.e. Good dialogue, good spacing too, but the length! Did you word count? don't forget you have to always work with the rules of the competition.




That all criticism i have, will be dropping my best five soon..

I guess the apex of every writers 'career' on nl, is in making front page.


#unanogokillperson