quote author=repogirl]Hi Capt. I finally found some time to read through your story (Sexcapades with my Bf's BF)loving the title, really nice one but how can you leave us hanging like this? .
As for all those talking eish about bad spellings and what not, please put a pen to paper and lets see what you've got before you start condemning others. As one writes, one improves, it doesnt just happen over night.
Nice story line, both boyfriend and girlfriend are useless though, u could do much worse.[/quote] tnx love..my nxt upd8 wee b much more betr..nd talkn abt unfinshed story..gooooo nd finish urs,af been waitn fa

Cindy,I wil honestly advice u to drop wateva u hv wit dat guy. He is just tryin to play bt he's seen u hv fallen 4 him. And Ini is not worth callin a friend fa. To think dat she has a boyfriend already n is stil threatenin u over Fabian. Besides d Fabian is nt worth u( u n ini) fightin for

Shinyheart: Cindy,I wil honestly advice u to drop wateva u hv wit dat guy. He is just tryin to play bt he's seen u hv fallen 4 him. And Ini is not worth callin a friend fa. To think dat she has a boyfriend already n is stil threatenin u over Fabian. Besides d Fabian is nt worth u( u n ini) fightin for

tnx for the advice dearie

@Capt Cindie,ar u sure u n ur frnd av always bn honest wt eachothr cuz i c no reason y she shld raise hell,she was gonna play d guy 4 chrissakes.As 4 Fab drop im faster thn a hot potato he's nt worth it.

Ms Spaqs: @Capt Cindie,ar u sure u n ur frnd av always bn honest wt eachothr cuz i c no reason y she shld raise hell,she was gonna play d guy 4 chrissakes.As 4 Fab drop im faster thn a hot potato he's nt worth it.

my dear,av learnt my lessons,tnxx love

Capt cindie, for me I feel de guy isn't desent at all if he could allow emotions rule him why with your friend even thought she was playing him, shows u de kind of humanbeing he is, he can do dat to u too , so my advice wd be back off from de guy retain ur friendship. Or rather back up from de both of them ,definetly u wd meet some better person whose hot and cuter dan de fabian guy

Interesting Storyline, Dumbass Writing pattern, adaptive author- with promising Potentials..#cindy, u'll most likely improve faster than we all can imagine# lov u..

& 4 d 'du.mb.ass' a nig.ga'z jez been shrewd.

Mr shroud: Interesting Storyline, Dumbass Writing pattern, adaptive author- with promising Potentials..#cindy, u'll most likely improve faster than we all can imagine# lov u..

& 4 d 'du.mb.ass' a nig.ga'z jez been shrewd.

nice comment..

nichole2: Capt cindie, for me I feel de guy isn't desent at all if he could allow emotions rule him why with your friend even thought she was playing him, shows u de kind of humanbeing he is, he can do dat to u too , so my advice wd be back off from de guy retain ur friendship. Or rather back up from de both of them ,definetly u wd meet some better person whose hot and cuter dan de fabian guy

my dear,ȋ̝̊̅ will be wiser nxt time,ανε got nothin to do wit him again.tnx

Interesting story.

but Cindie you need to wake up... anyone telling yu to ride on and improve is deceiving you. They are just enjoying sex related stories.

Writing well and spelling well are separate things. I think you dont respect your readers enough to realise that you owe them a duty to educate.

Use a dictionary. use long hand. get a second opinion, before posting.

your writing may improve but shorthand and wrong spelling is akin to laziness, ignorance and blatant disregard for your readers. I hope you don't realise after it's too late.

Dear Cindy! I must tell, you are one of the best writers because you write-up was communicable whether you had good constructed sentence or not. But i must tell, your story was making sense and even have the best ideas of written but my word to you my dear sister, is that take any form of criticims as challenge and way to go pls. Don't get upset losely on any correction either in good tone or bad one.
Stay bless

Sapphire86:

Babe I'm nt saying u shd accept mediocrity if u feel it is, bt if nt 4 anything appreciate d fact dat she is a woman lyk u. Don't knock down her hustle.

So she can go ahead and do that if the OP is a male abi?
Anyway, regardless of the gender of the OP. Her way of criticism is wrong and makes her look like she's uncultured. Simple courtesy doesn't kill now. The criticism is not constructive in any way.