The intense nature of your story makes it all the more interesting.I enjoyed it from the beginning till the end.
Thank you for such a wonderful story.

It was really an interesting piece. You left me spellbound.
I would like to point out some few things I hope you could correct in your next work, which I will be eagerly waiting for.
1)Work on the tenses.
2)You saturate your paragraph with so many characters and pronouns that it is difficult at times, keeping up and identifying who is speaking.
3)To forestall above, more paragraph would be better, or you find another way to work around it.
As a doctor, , I will say that they didn't stab 'her retroperitoneal organ'. ' means behind. Retroperitoneal organs here would include the ascending, descending colon, kidneys, pancrease, ureters, rectum, which I don't think you mean.

'The girl in glasses' aka Degelinglacis, you rock

ElPhoche:
It was really an interesting piece. You left me spellbound.
I would like to point out some few things I hope you could correct in your next work, which I will be eagerly waiting for.
1)Work on the tenses.
2)You saturate your paragraph with so many characters and pronouns that it is difficult at times, keeping up and identifying who is speaking.
3)To forestall above, more paragraph would be better, or you find another way to work around it.
As a doctor, , I will say that they didn't stab 'her retroperitoneal organ'. ' means behind. Retroperitoneal organs here would include the ascending, descending colon, kidneys, pancrease, ureters, rectum, which I don't think you mean.

'The girl in glasses' aka Degelinglacis, you rock

Her retroperitoneal organ was not stabbed. A knife was pointed at those organs. From what I can picture, the writer meant the knife was pointed at her back.

@Degelinglacis, you are blessed. What a beautiful story and interesting one at that. I couldn't even make one comment while reading cos I was engrossed in it. Keep it up

Thastie:


Her retroperitoneal organ was not stabbed. A knife was pointed at those organs. From what I can picture, the writer meant the knife was pointed at her back.

Ok, but definitely not a retroperitoneal organs, just the brain.... Had to go back and recheck, you are correct. She could have worded it better as '...Pointed the knife on the small of her back' or something.

ElPhoche:

Ok, but definitely not a retroperitoneal organs, just the brain.... Had to go back and recheck, you are correct. She could have worded it better as '...Pointed the knife on the small of her back' or something.

Alright

ElPhoche:
It was really an interesting piece. You left me spellbound.
I would like to point out some few things I hope you could correct in your next work, which I will be eagerly waiting for.
1)Work on the tenses.
2)You saturate your paragraph with so many characters and pronouns that it is difficult at times, keeping up and identifying who is speaking.
3)To forestall above, more paragraph would be better, or you find another way to work around it.
As a doctor, , I will say that they didn't stab 'her retroperitoneal organ'. ' means behind. Retroperitoneal organs here would include the ascending, descending colon, kidneys, pancrease, ureters, rectum, which I don't think you mean.

'The girl in glasses' aka Degelinglacis, you rock

Thanks for the corrections.

Wow Wat a sweet ending for others and a sad one for Aina.. I must commend u lady, u rock... Pls do mention me in ur next story

Sort for ur loss,OP. .. God bless you and uphold ur family. This story is dope!! Keep the good work

Babe, you really tried with this May Almighty God give you more strength and knowledge to move on and create more wonderful stories.
Bless you my Dear

nice story I totally enjoyed all of it. well-done!!!!

wow. wonderful. thanks so much dear, please do mention me when next you start cooking something.big Ups!

Wow...I gat dove my hat for you ooo...Nice one...I really enjoyed it ...Keep it up OP

nice update dear

No peace for the wicked...lovely ending I must say. I enjoyed it, Aina got what she deserve..thanks ma'am for this beautiful write up u the BOMB

It was such a delightful ride. Well done degelinglacis

EvaJael:
It was such a delightful ride. Well done degelinglacis

hey please is ur name Evangel?

Evaberry:


hey please is ur name Evangel?

If you mean my real name...nah

Awwwn... Finally, the end!
Thanks for writing dead.

Well-done degehinglacias

Thumbs up degelinglaics. Dat was dope. My ink to ur pen.

My dear,this is one of the best stories I have read online. You really need to publish at least online like an eBook. It would really sell. I am sorry for your sister! Take heart, it is well!

pls more update

wooooow I really learned alot from this story. thanks alot Bae for completing the story.

Nice story. Guys looking for complete interesting story should read this

To d op am lost for words, take dis

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