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|Re: Rain by OluwabuqqyYOLO: 12:00am On Jun 02|
I never got your mention, dear, and I only popped in when I saw it was Gracile. I'm truly glad you are finally doing this.
The story's okay - from what I've read. Now, this campus part is where I might tend to grow wary. I really hope it doesn't turn into a full-fledged teen story, reminding us of the day-to-day activities of the Nigerian higher institutions and how horrible they are (permit my pejorative view here). BUT, importantly, you should go with whatever you have in mind and make us feel you bleed.
Maybe it's unnecesary but I feel Rain has settled down far easier than how it should have been. Parting with NANA would have been more difficult in reality too. BUT, but - what do I know? It's your creation. You are presently a god and us faithfuls. Make us worship.
You might also want to watch your tenses by the way.
I'm immersed in it already and I'm afraid I won't be capable of pulling out like the one making quick jerky movements on a woman of the evening.
|Re: Rain by gracile(f): 12:16am On Jun 02|
I leaped with joy on seeing your mention I also sensed it was getting quite shallow but based on your confirmation now, I'll go do my assignments and make adjustments where necessary. Afterall, that was my point of putting it up here in the first place so I could the opinion of amazing people like you.
Thank you for taking your time to read and comment, it means alot
|Re: Rain by OluwabuqqyYOLO: 9:20am On Jun 02|
gracile:LOL, ma'am, why are you being so cheesy? You flatter me too much, dear. You are amazing too, you were there when I needed you. But, seriously, buckle up. When you are done here, maybe we can work on one or two piece(s).
How about those rats (who were actually your siblings) you were fighting with? I know you didn't take my silly advice of shooting them then. Hope everyone's been fine.
Hello, TiffanyJ. This is Thronekid. It's been quite a while, I faintly hope you do remember me.
|Re: Rain by TiffanyJ(f): 11:32am On Jun 02|
OluwabuqqyYOLO:Of course I remembered you or thronekid. We suddenly lost contact. How have you been?
|Re: Rain by Nedlog(m): 11:51am On Jun 02|
PLS CHECK THIS
A true and educative story..
|Re: Rain by trendymiss(f): 1:55pm On Jun 02|
Nice storyline. Great choice of words.......waiting for more
|Re: Rain by OluwabuqqyYOLO: 3:32pm On Jun 02|
TiffanyJ:OKAY. I hope you've been fine too.
|Re: Rain by Nedlog(m): 1:15am On Jun 03|
EPISODES 2 & 3 NOW OUT..
CHECK IT OUT ON
|Re: Rain by Akinwale14(m): 10:08pm On Jun 03|
gracile weldon and whats keeping u so long? Am waiting for update o
|Re: Rain by marianneada(f): 12:40pm On Jun 04|
This story is superb,... More inspirations to you dear,.... You're too much.
|Re: Rain by Akinwale14(m): 3:07pm On Jun 04|
|Re: Rain by Nedlog(m): 9:21am On Jun 05|
EPISODES 4 & 5
CHECK IT OUT,
YOU DON'T WANT TO MISS
|Re: Rain by crislyn(f): 5:33pm On Jun 07|
Gracile what happeneee? shey ko si o?
|Re: Rain by TheAgba(m): 8:17am On Jun 22|
Gifted hands bridged to the brain...I love this rain, water yet thirsty.
|Re: Rain by EvaJael(f): 5:36pm On Jul 01|
|Re: Rain by gracile(f): 5:24am On Jul 09|
Oh I'm so pleased to welcome you new readers. I apologize for the delay. Actually, my naira land had refused to open for quite a while now, just reluctantly decided to try it now and voila
It disturbed me a lot and I even had to ask around to be sure it wasn't the'tsunami' again.. But I'm glad to be back and this time I'm promising steady updates, thanks for sticking around
|Re: Rain by gracile(f): 5:26am On Jul 09|
Rain was seated on the reading table, in their room, pondering over her roommates behaviour.
"How can I cope with such a person as roommate?" She thought to herself, her palms against her cheeks. "She's constantly chattering and yapping like she has nothing better to do. Someone who spends the most of her time partying or shopping, how is she even in medical school for Chrissake!" "I miss you Nana..
" Rain" she heard a voice, and was snapped out of her thoughts.
"What are you thinking about? I was asking you about the fresher's party and the miss fresher beauty pageant been organised. The form is only 1,500. You're interested right? I got mine already".
" No, I'm not interested"
"C'mon girl, this is the opportunity to showcase that beautiful face of yours, don't worry about your height, I, Meggy can fix that! She grinned. And added, on getting no response; " and if it's the money, I can pay so..."
"I said I'm not interested" Rain scowled
"Okay! Please don't shout on me. I am only trying to salvage your suffering social life".
" I don't remember soliciting for your help" her expression falling.
"It's not a fight abeg so save the attitude" she hissed and left the room.
Rain simply sighed. Then she took her phone and dialled a number.
The recipient picked on the second ring:
"Ina wuni Sir" (good evening Sir) Rain said forcing a smile.
"Lafiya, mun gode was Allah" (fine, we thank God)
"Dan Allah, Nana tana gida?" (Please, is Nana around)
"Toh ba damua, sai ta dawo" (okay no problem, till she comes)
She dropped the call and stood up, as if suddenly remembering something.
She went to the wardrobe and pulled out her bag then, she dug her hand into one of the pockets of the bag. She found what she searched for, it was a piece of paper. A strange feeling of urgency washed her fueled with curiosity, she unfolded the old paper gently.
_"My dearest Salome_" her heart lurched in her chest as sh read the first line. She swallowed and continued
_my heart bleeds with longing for you and the pains caused by our unfortunate fate. Our love for each other and our unborn princess is the only thing that gives me joy and strength in this turbulent times. My dearest Sally, can you promise that you'll be strong for us? And never stop believing in us? Because, I'll do whatever it takes to be with you and our pretty princess; together, we're going to be one happy family. And no one, not even your mom, will come between. Take care of yourself and peachy for me. Until I see you_.
Rain stood frozen in shock and disbelief. She was yet to recover from the meaning of the words before her and the raging thoughts in her head. Her head suddenly began to ache. Her nostrils flared and her pupils dilated, threatening to spill tears. She squeezed her eyes shut and sat herself on the bed. She stood and paced back and forth, clenching her jaws, the piece of paper firmly grasped in her right hand. Her eyes darted over the room and settled upon the calendar on the small cupboard in between their beds. She picked it up and scrutinized it briefly before dropping it again.
"Four months is a long time from now, I need to get home as soon as possible". Her brows knitted in thought. "Damn you Nana!" I always knew there was something up your sleeves, you were not telling me. I, Rain Kumar, must get to the bottom of this". She declared, her eyes blazing red.
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|Re: Rain by gracile(f): 12:52pm On Jul 11|
Margaret walks in holding two polythene bags. She empties the contents on the bed and says "sup" to Rain.
Rain responded, "good afternoon"
She took a silver dress and went over to the standing mirror, holding the dress against her plump frame.
" Is it okay? " she asked
"It's beautiful" Rain replied
"Look at the shoe, does it fit?" She said looking from the is silver heels to the is lover dress.
"Yes, its perfect" Rain responded flatly as she folded her clothes
"Ah ah, you doing don't even look.."
"I am fine. It's all fine, beautiful.. Everything you bought s beautiful okay" she finished and zipped up her small bag.
Meggy scanned the room briefly " Are you going somewhere? " she inquired
"Yes. I'm going home
" I hope there's no problem? " concern creasing her eyes.
Rain paused momentarily, "No. No problem"
Meggy was unconvinced, but ignored it and continued
"You haven't even commented on my new hair, Rain"
"Oh don't mind me it smells nice" Rain said, with a plastic smile.
"So it doesnt look nice eh?" Her brows raised up
"No its not that bad"
"Give me a razor I'm loosing it right now!"
"C'mon. I said its not looking bad"
"I don't just want it " not looking bad", I need it on clerk for tomorrow's night; speaking if which, hope you will be around? "
"I just told you I will be travelling"
"Can't you leave it till the morning after? Babe, you don't want to miss this party o"
"I wish to be around but t this is urgent trust me"
Meggy folded her arms and tilted her head sideways obviously expecting an explanation.
"It's a long story okay, and none of your business she sighs. Just take lots of pictures, I trust you, and you'll gist me all about it when I come back"
"When are you coming back"
"Soon..don't worry I'll call every night to tuck you in bed, you won't miss me too much eh"
Rain bursted out laughing
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|Re: Rain by gracile(f): 2:08pm On Jul 11|
Cronk Cronk Cronk..
The intermittent noise from the rickety taxi had become attuned to their ears. Boarding a motorcycle would have been faster and she would not be suffering from the discomfort of this tight vehicle and the pungent odour emanating from it; but of course this was way cheaper. Not that she was stingy or broke, but because grandma her well the benefits of spending moderately.
Outside, the sky was clear blue except for the shy sun peeping from the east. It was past 9am by her wristwatch which meant, her grandma was back from the farm. Its early September so most schools were yet to resume from the break which explains why the streets were littered with so many kids. There were some playing football on the sands of their bungalows with improvised goalposts, others were running and chasing one other; little girls and young ladies carried pails of water or baskets on their head, smiling and chatting as they went.
It's been only two months but she realized how much she had missed the simple life of her village, it was nothing like Lagos. She thought of her friends Asabe and Philomena, and hoped they'll be around to help plait her hair, theirs were often tinier than her grandma's gigantic cornrows.
They were the only people who had the patience to braid her full, long hair.
The rickety taxi finally stopped at the junction. She alighted and took the road by the left which led to their quarters (missionary quarters), the other led to the village square, the market and one of the streams. Her friends and most of the villagers, including the Sarkis' Palace, were based there.
" Aunty Rain, Aunty Rain welcome " the kids exclaimed as they rushed to collect her bag and handbag.
"Thank you so much " she said to them and handed each of them bananas from her handbag
"Thank you Aunty" they chorused and skittered off
She entered the house, calling grandma, when no response came she checked Nana's room but she wasn't there either. She then went to her own room to drop her bags before going to the backyard.
Nana was there, turning a big pot of tuwo balanced upon firewood.
Immediately she saw Rain, she jumped and came to hug her, full of smiles
"Ah, why didn't you say you were coming"
"I wanted to surprise you"
"You people are already have on break?" She said while smoothening Rains hair.
"Not yet ma..
" Ha, you've grown so lean o, look at your neck, have you been eaten well or you fell sick?"
"No Nana, it's nothing just stress that's all. I'm fine"
Rain went and started turning the food on fire.
"No my dear go and rest first, I'm almost through its just remaining to warm the soup I prepared yesterday. It's even your favorite.
" Hmm I miss your food Nana, but this tuwo is plenty o, or are you expecting a visitors? "
"I'm not expecting anyone. She laughed, bI like I always tell you, one should always have extra food ready in case of unexpected visitors...
" Should such visitors never come you have yourself dumamen two" Rain completed
"And you know how I like leftover food"
"I know Nana" she said, and both laughed.
Few minutes later, they were both seated on two stools each, swallowing a mountain of tuwo da miyan kubewa(corn meal and okra soup).
Grandma wash her hands and scrutinized Rains face briefly and then she began
"Speak what is bothering you, I'm listening"
"Tell me about my parents.. Everything"
"Nana winced but immediately plastered a smug smile on her face. " Is that why you traveled this distance abandoning your studies? "
" I need to know the truth" Rain said with a grave seriousness. "Here" she took out a piece of paper from her pocket and handed to Nana. Can you please explain this to me"
Fear crossed Nana's faceas she unfolded the letter to read
"My glasses please"
Rain went in and returned with her glasses
After glancing through, she began, her voice shaky..
"This is...was..her voice stuttered. Your father..wrote this.. this letter"
"Obviously" Rain retorted, her jaw clenched.
"I don't know anything about this letter dear. This... this doesn't change anything.
" Oh yes it's changed everything Nana, this letter changes everything, you lied to me!"
Nana gritted her teeth, "whatever I did, I did for you my dear, for our family, for us" a line appeared between her brows
Rain held Nana's trembling hands in hers, "What. Did. You. Do?" She asked, stressing each word.
Nana simply shook her head and pressed her lips, her eyes were welling up " It will break you, the truth will break you"
"Tell me! Rain snapped, her nostrils flaring
" Not now please my child, not now. I'll tell you everything by sunset, it's a long story but t I'll tell you all you need to know"
Rain released her grip " Fine, by sunset Nana, by God, let your worda be your witness"
With that, she left to her room.
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|Re: Rain by gracile(f): 2:12pm On Jul 11|
Evanjael, Crislyn, TheAgba, Nedlog, Akinwale14, Marianneada, oluwabuqqyYolo, TiffanyJ, trendy miss, kingphillip, Royver , all of you, food is served
|Re: Rain by vakjay08(m): 5:49pm On Jul 11|
Gracy ur story is dope. I'm enjoying it. Kip it up. More mb 2 ur fone. Meanwhile where is micheal nw?
|Re: Rain by crislyn(f): 9:41pm On Jul 11|
gracile thank God u r back o.
|Re: Rain by gracile(f): 9:56pm On Jul 11|
crislyn:Don't mind me I be like NEPA abi
I'm having an idea tho, maybe we should fix particular days for updates, what do y'all think?
|Re: Rain by gracile(f): 9:58pm On Jul 11|
I thought no one would ask lol, don't worry Michael thinks he's hiding himself but we'll find him soon
|Re: Rain by crislyn(f): 3:00pm On Jul 12|
gracile:I think that would be the best and it will also free you from the stress of everyday update.
|Re: Rain by EvaJael(f): 3:48pm On Jul 12|
Welcome back gracile
|Re: Rain by Kamelot77(m): 6:03pm On Jul 12|
|Re: Rain by vakjay08(m): 7:12am On Jul 13|
gracile:Alrite nw lets c how its unfold. Viewing in 3d.
|Re: Rain by gracile(f): 10:13pm On Jul 13|
EvaJael:Thank you ma'am.
|Re: Rain by kelvinhilton(m): 12:04am On Jul 14|
Fascinating story so far!!! Can't wait to see how the truth unravels it self..peace!!!
|Re: Rain by swankmee(f): 6:08pm On Jul 14|
Wow... Nyc writeup gracile
|Re: Rain by marychommy(f): 11:15pm On Jul 15|
thanks for d mention. dis remind me of my seatmate back in school her name was Rain DAT she was born in d rain didn't believe her den but now am starting to believe why her name was called Rain. pls next
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