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Re: Nairaland's "The Poet" Competition by Tgirl4real(f): 2:29pm On Aug 08, 2012
Selfless is my Love

Selfless is my love for you
Your beauty radiates, brighter than the shining star
Brighter than the Cherubim and Seraphim
You glow like the rising sun

Unconditional is your love for me
Everlasting love you have for me
Everything I am, you made me to be

When u look, I see the tickle in your eye
Your stare, leaves me speechless
I have joy unspeakable
Peace as the calm of the sea

Deep in thoughts, I think of you
Forever I want to please you
...and till the day we see face to face
I will always be in awe of you.
Re: Nairaland's "The Poet" Competition by Cuddlemii: 2:32pm On Aug 08, 2012
The floor is open for criticism.
Pick on any poem & judge it.
"Constructive Criticism" is the right way to do it wink
maclatunji, keep it up!
Re: Nairaland's "The Poet" Competition by Cuddlemii: 2:35pm On Aug 08, 2012
Contestants please pick your dates wisely!
You can also pick from the author's whose poetry has no subject.
Contestants can own, abduct or even smooch any writer at this point.
The power is in your court.
Kandii, who are you having for supper today? Denzel?
Re: Nairaland's "The Poet" Competition by Tgirl4real(f): 2:39pm On Aug 08, 2012
Na wa o . . .

Another competition?
Re: Nairaland's "The Poet" Competition by maclatunji: 2:39pm On Aug 08, 2012
Tgirl4real:

Really . . . What have I been writing? Anything close?

Your poems are okay, just try and make them a little bit more concise. Keep your reader guessing such that 20 people will read your poem and have 20 different interpretations from the same work. Once you turn to narration your poem will lose the "Wow" factor.

Of course, there are times when the opposite would apply. You want to tell the world/someone something and have chosen poetry as the medium.
Re: Nairaland's "The Poet" Competition by kandiikane(m): 2:47pm On Aug 08, 2012
Cuddlemii: Contestants please pick your dates wisely!
You can also pick from the author's whose poetry has no subject.
Contestants can own, abduct or even smooch any writer at this point.
The power is in your court.
Kandii, who are you having for supper today? Denzel?


Lool, I really don't get this fixation on me and denzel.

I haven't decided yet. tongue
Re: Nairaland's "The Poet" Competition by Tgirl4real(f): 2:50pm On Aug 08, 2012
maclatunji:

Your poems are okay, just try and make them a little bit more concise. Keep your reader guessing such that 20 people will read your poem and have 20 different interpretations from the same work. Once you turn to narration your poem will lose the "Wow" factor.

Of course, there are times when the opposite would apply. You want to tell the world/someone something and have chosen poetry as the medium.

Yea, that is what I do most time. Can you expatiate more on what u mean by turning to narration? I'm working on a story and someone said I should do more of showing than telling. Can you explain please?

Here is the link: https://www.nairaland.com/956935/road-redemption
Re: Nairaland's "The Poet" Competition by Cuddlemii: 2:50pm On Aug 08, 2012
kandiikane:


Lool, I really don't get this fixation on me and denzel.

I haven't decided yet. tongue

Alright I am waiting to see ur selection! cheesy
Re: Nairaland's "The Poet" Competition by maclatunji: 2:56pm On Aug 08, 2012
Tgirl4real:

Yea, that is what I do most time. Can you expatiate more on what u mean by turning to narration? I'm working on a story and someone said I should do more of showing than telling. Can you explain please?

Here is the link: https://www.nairaland.com/956935/road-redemption

I have seen many poems here that quite frankly could be much shorter if the poet just took some extra time to choose the appropriate words and streamline his/her thoughts.

I am a little bit busy at the moment and will look at your story later within the context of "showing instead of telling." It can be applied to real life now. You can say you love someone and not show it and you can show you love someone without saying it and they would understand perfectly what your feelings are.
Re: Nairaland's "The Poet" Competition by denzel2009: 2:57pm On Aug 08, 2012
kandiikane:


Lool, I really don't get this fixation on me and denzel.

I haven't decided yet. tongue

I wonder o kandii
Re: Nairaland's "The Poet" Competition by mikuz(m): 4:42pm On Aug 08, 2012
Tgirl4real:

That is the original intention tongue

By the way, this thread has official turned to freecocoa and chuky love poem thread undecided
no wonder! And i wasted my time coming to this thread. Nairaland poetry competition indeed.
Stup¡d me!
Re: Nairaland's "The Poet" Competition by maclatunji: 5:22pm On Aug 08, 2012
mikuz:
no wonder! And i wasted my time coming to this thread. Nairaland poetry competition indeed.
Stup¡d me!

Wow! Don't feel bad, we are all winners. This thread is beautiful and a good advert for Nigerians and Poetry.
Re: Nairaland's "The Poet" Competition by chucky234(m): 6:04pm On Aug 08, 2012
hmmm,I was just rushing down here to check if my Freecocoa is at home ooo not knowing that aunty Cuddlemii has already locked the entrance gate.
No wahala na back door we go use play the remaining love na,my cocoa butter if I whistle make you sha answer ooo
Re: Nairaland's "The Poet" Competition by mikuz(m): 6:21pm On Aug 08, 2012
chucky234: hmmm,I was just rushing down here to check if my Freecocoa is at home ooo not knowing that aunty Cuddlemii has already locked the entrance gate.
No wahala na back door we go use play the remaining love na,my cocoa butter if I whistle make you sha answer ooo
this is literature section and not romance section. tongue
Re: Nairaland's "The Poet" Competition by SimplySEA(m): 8:18pm On Aug 08, 2012
Wasn't here to contest for winner. Was only here cos it provided for me a platform to play wit luv again!
To say deep tins from deep within again!
Tanks cuddlemii for d concept.. My heart was really cuddled. I only wish we connected more! I've always wanted poetic queen.
Btw, I must say i enjoyed every bit of it! I wouldn't hav given it up for even a bag of free cocoa or an idi filled wit ileke.....!
Tanks cuddlemii. U're too much!
.....
Waitin for criticism or a pat on d back pls! I tink need d former more!
Re: Nairaland's "The Poet" Competition by chucky234(m): 8:20pm On Aug 08, 2012
mikuz: this is literature section and not romance section. tongue
Wetin come concern literature inside love na,guy park well jare.
Re: Nairaland's "The Poet" Competition by Cuddlemii: 8:38pm On Aug 08, 2012
chucky234: hmmm,I was just rushing down here to check if my Freecocoa is at home ooo not knowing that aunty Cuddlemii has already locked the entrance gate.
No wahala na back door we go use play the remaining love na,my cocoa butter if I whistle make you sha answer ooo


I no shut the door O.
Feel free to express yourself my dear.
When you find love, do whatever it takes not to loose it.
Enjoy! wink
Re: Nairaland's "The Poet" Competition by Cuddlemii: 8:40pm On Aug 08, 2012
SimplySEA: Wasn't here to contest for winner. Was only here cos it provided for me a platform to play wit luv again!
To say deep tins from deep within again!
Tanks cuddlemii for d concept.. My heart was really cuddled. I only wish we connected more! I've always wanted poetic queen.
Btw, I must say i enjoyed every bit of it! I wouldn't hav given it up for even a bag of free cocoa or an idi filled wit ileke.....!
Tanks cuddlemii. U're too much!
.....
Waitin for criticism or a pat on d back pls! I tink need d former more!

Pat on the back X 5000000000000000000000000000000000000000
Thank you, I enjoyed myself too. I am certain everyone did.
Re: Nairaland's "The Poet" Competition by esere826: 8:42pm On Aug 08, 2012
@cuddlemii

Wheere is Ileke-idi? abi she b one of those gals wen no like poem and flower cheesy?
Re: Nairaland's "The Poet" Competition by Cuddlemii: 8:46pm On Aug 08, 2012
esere826: @cuddlemii

Wheere is Ileke-idi? abi she b one of those gals wen no like poem and flower cheesy?

Na she like am pass O
I bet she has bought a teddy bear in your name
Hope u get ego kudi owo, ileke no dey go iya ala amala joint
na pricey food wey no fit full ant belle na hin she chop
Re: Nairaland's "The Poet" Competition by Nobody: 9:44pm On Aug 08, 2012
Cuddlemii:

Na she like am pass O
I bet she has bought a teddy bear in your name
Hope u get ego kudi owo, ileke no dey go iya ala amala joint
na pricey food wey no fit full ant belle na hin she chop

lol grin

esere826: @cuddlemii

Wheere is Ileke-idi? abi she b one of those gals wen no like poem and flower cheesy?

I like am, esp when it's taped on a new mercedes Benz. Thanks jare.
smiley


Ok Cuddlemii, what happens next? Am I supposed to judge his poem? I give him 9.5/10 (No car attached) wink
Re: Nairaland's "The Poet" Competition by Cuddlemii: 9:57pm On Aug 08, 2012
Ileke-IdI:


lol grin



I like am, esp when it's taped on a new mercedes Benz. Thanks jare.
smiley


Ok Cuddlemii, what happens next? Am I supposed to judge his poem? I give him 9.5/10 (No car attached) wink

Since u have scored him, he automatically becomes ur date! Go easy on him will you wink
Re: Nairaland's "The Poet" Competition by chucky234(m): 10:33pm On Aug 08, 2012
Cuddlemii:


I no shut the door O.
Feel free to express yourself my dear.
When you find love, do whatever it takes not to loose it.
Enjoy! wink
Thank you ooo aunty mi,God go bless you plenty plenty abi na mighty mighty dem dey talk am sef,which ever one sha.
Re: Nairaland's "The Poet" Competition by Nobody: 10:37pm On Aug 08, 2012
Cuddlemii:

Since u have scored him, he automatically becomes ur date! Go easy on him will you wink
Huh?

Is he rich?
Re: Nairaland's "The Poet" Competition by SimplySEA(m): 10:59pm On Aug 08, 2012
Cuddlemii:

Pat on the back X 5000000000000000000000000000000000000000
Thank you, I enjoyed myself too. I am certain everyone did.
Thanks for d pat! What does 50000000..... means? And about d datin, u lost me there.... What's d game lik now?
Re: Nairaland's "The Poet" Competition by Cuddlemii: 11:52pm On Aug 08, 2012
Ileke-IdI:

Huh?

Is he rich?

If he is not then pick from other posters.
Ileke, so you not fit treat the guy to a date?
Anyways the power is in your hands, make it worth your while
Re: Nairaland's "The Poet" Competition by Cuddlemii: 11:55pm On Aug 08, 2012
SimplySEA:
Thanks for d pat! What does 50000000..... means? And about d datin, u lost me there.... What's d game lik now?

The X stands for multiplication sign. Was just hyping u!
Check my first three post on page 1 for clarification. It only applies to contestants cheesy
Re: Nairaland's "The Poet" Competition by Nobody: 5:12am On Aug 09, 2012
Cuddlemii:

If he is not then pick from other posters.
Ileke, so you not fit treat the guy to a date?
Anyways the power is in your hands, make it worth your while

LOL the guy just wrote me a wonderful heart melting poem.
It's not a matter of treating him to a date or not, it's a matter of how much he has to spend on me.
We're both women o, shey you et wink grin
Re: Nairaland's "The Poet" Competition by Cuddlemii: 5:24am On Aug 09, 2012
*Ileke-IdI:


LOL the guy just wrote me a wonderful heart melting poem.
It's not a matter of treating him to a date or not, it's a matter of how much he has to spend on me.
We're both women o, shey you et wink grin

How about we wait and see what he has to offer you.
I am sure he can defend himself. Na wa O
Re: Nairaland's "The Poet" Competition by Nobody: 5:27am On Aug 09, 2012
Cuddlemii:

How about we wait and see what he has to offer you.
I am sure he can defend himself. Na wa O

Ok o, I dey wait. lol
Re: Nairaland's "The Poet" Competition by esere826: 5:49am On Aug 09, 2012
Ileke-IdI:


lol grin

I like am, esp when it's taped on a new mercedes Benz. Thanks jare.
smiley

Ok Cuddlemii, what happens next? Am I supposed to judge his poem? I give him 9.5/10 (No car attached) wink


9.5/10? [/b]mmmh,... this is love at first 'write' grin
[b]taped to a mercedez benz?
,.... my dear, no be boast oo, but we don live land, na yatchs we dey work on now
How much I have to spend on u? , .... Na poor man dey vex for dis kain question smiley, but make i put am in a succint way: as much as u are worth kiss
Re: Nairaland's "The Poet" Competition by Nobody: 5:52am On Aug 09, 2012
esere826:


9.5/10? [/b]mmmh,... this is love at first 'write' grin
[b]taped to a mercedez benz?
,.... my dear, no be boast oo, but we don live land, na yatchs we dey work on now
How much I have to spend on u? , .... Na poor man dey vex for dis kain question smiley, but make i put am in a succint way: as much as u are worth kiss

Hehehe giggling while blushing girlishly grin grin tongue

Thanks jare. kiss You know I'm priceless na, it's how much you're worth tongue

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