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@Adikij,thanks 4 reading Ma'am
@Ozila,thanks 4 honoring my invitation

I've only commented once on dis thread bt 2day,ur updates has compelled me 2 deactivate my ghostmode.
Even tho I strongly believe dat dis piece is a fiction,contrary 2 d impression u gve @ d beginning dat it's a true life event, ur story is still fantastic n fascinating. Ur creativity in designing ur characters,scenes n storyline shows dat u are a genius. Dis work will be a perfect masterpiece if u publish it. Pple will love it.
However, I wish u could work on ur grammar n puntuations,tenses n concords. Sometimes I get confused @ who was saying wht or doing wht. Use past tenses where necesary in stead of present tenses all thru. These seemingly small things u are over-looking will go a long way in giving credence,class n taste 2 ur story. Nobody is perfect becos English is nt our mother tongue bt in a multi-lingual society as Nigeria,dat is d only universal means of communication,so it shud be used correctedly as possible. U can give ur updates 2 someone 2 proofread 4 u before uploading online. Dat's my advice 4 u.
All d same,I'm deeply in love wit ur story.Keep dem coming n don't forget 2 visit my thread also. Jah bless

@Insight2013.Yes,I am. Thanks 4 reading. God bless u

ganiyheart:
wow !! Wow!! wow,!! from the beginning to the end was CAPTIVATING.... #Bravo..... Nice write up.. These are things that happens in real life situations but victims of such circumstances can't come out boldly to fight for there rights and be vindicated, because the "Society" we live in is not ready to give them listening hears, no proper body/institution is put in place to fight this menace.. God help us...

Will really love to see it in movie form..

Lesson learnt.
well done cho25bc

U are 100% right Ma'am. Most victims are usually intimidated by dier oppressors 2 silence dem. May God give us d confidence 2 speak out wen in distress. God bless u Ma'am.

shukrawberry:
nice story....dunno wat to write self...pls tag me too in ur next story.

I will. Thanks dear

Amen. God bless u sir

Twinkle004:
Short,simple,educative & wonderful story...I pray that those who are victims of such circumstances wil be heal & they wil live their life normal

ysekina:
Nyc one dear, keep it up

Thanks dear

stlouiz:
The story is really interesting and the way you assemble the narative makes it captivating. I will love to watch the storyline in a movie someday. Keep it up sis.

Thanks a lot. God bless u

SPDAZZY:
I enjoyed this. Thanks for the story. More ink to your pen.

Amen.God bless u

Thanks dear. However,making a movie out of dis piece go costs o,lolz

laikas:
yeah, nice idea, like writin script 4 african magic 1/2 hour film, dis story wil make a nice film.

Lol!I'm so sorry abt ur beans.I'll replace ur burnt beans with one bag of honey beans. God bless u.I don't know wen another story will come up bt I'll notify u wen I av one 2 post.

laikas:
wow, wow, dis is so gud, what a brain 4 a gr8 story, u rock ma'am. my beans had 2 burn because i ws reading ur story. whn is d nxt 1 coming up.

Thank u very much

Otth:
Weldone

D story has ended. Thanks 4 dropping by.God bless u

easydrizzle:
You got a nice piece, please keep it going. Would be awaiting new update soon.

Thanks dearie

ebudera:
Nice piece,still glue 2 my phone

Amen, u too dear

cooluc:
Beautiful piece dear..keep the passion alive..you will go places.

emsco:
Lovely story. Why not turn this into visuals.. Am a film maker/ director if. Call me if yo need my service 08131501631

Hmmm.2 make films cost ooo.

iampistis:
[color=#770077][/color] nice one

Thanks dear.God bless u

[quote author=]Nice write up,luv it. Still hoping 4 more[/quote]Thanks a lot Ma'am

Loisemm:
When writing ur next story, pls tag me. Just finished reading it. U really did well. More grace... (u can work on ur tenses i.e past, present & past perfect tenses. When n how to use them. Then take time to edit or give an editor, ma'am). Its not an easy task to write o. Thumbs up

Thanks a lot Ma'am. I'm grateful. I will do dat. God bless u

olatex25:
yeah, determination leads 2 succes nd dat wot u jst did, am a gud reader bt hardly comment on any update here. Bt cant help it dan 2 commend d gud work here, so so exceptional. Kip it up, lik i said earlier more greese 2 ur elbow.

Amen sir. Thanks alot

Missmossy:
Aww Amen dear and you too,beautiful conclusion. Thumbs up.

Thanks love. U are wonderful

wastedsperm:
I got the job. Send me ur new pin

Congratulations friend. I'm happy 4 u
I'll send u my acct number instead,lol

MsOse:
Always a ghost reader.....u did well dear, captivating story...God bless ur hands for more work.

Amen dearie. God bless u too