@ Seun
When i saw this thread i though to ma self this guy just doesn't stop, does he? not that it's a bad thing it's actually very good you're very ambitious it's very er, erm attractive . Don't worry i'm not hitting on u just saying that i like that about u .

u broading your horizons and testing out differnt waters and different trying out differnt things.  Just don't become a jack of all trade master of none.

davidylan:

No Seun, i do not write dramas.
Your best bet like i said earlier would be to start writing, post it in here and many of us can help you polish it up or at least give our idea of how good it is. If only all these sycophantic "more, more" illiterates will give others breathing space to do an objective criticism!

Like Davidylan i don't often write drama's, onless i have a good reason to . Actually i could write the drama for u for free but since i left school couple of years back and ma change of location won't make me write something relevant to Nigerian school kids, so like David said why don't u start writing and post it here and we could all help you with inputs into the story.

davidylan link=topic=21592.msg583301#msg583301 date=1156824839:

I have 2 books published on the market now, from the amount i realised (not that much), i have realised the power of a simple manuscript! I would probably make 100x more money by developing my own manuscript!

 

what are your books called i'd love to read them, and probably get an autograph 

Do u mean something like asian movies or Grease when you say musical.
And when you say opera do u actually mean hitting high notes or actually creating some flows. Anyway whichever way it sounds interesting i just think you should create music that relates to the potential audience. And by 'here' where on earth do you mean?

tinard:

Na wa o. You people are getting a free story but u still de complain. I can't see any of you guys writing a story half as good,
To all the haters, write your own stories , IF YOU DARE

Okay tinard I find your comment highly insulting, no one ever said the story was bad *you might want to read back through the past comments* what has been said were that the story was incomplete and i made particular emphasis on the fact that Seun had not done his reaserch well so if you are going to make this personal i'll advice you have a good reason to do so . And sweetie don't bring the Simpsons into this, it's gone far .
Seun also said that the inspiration for his story was dragonball Z a cartoon i hate with a passion whenever my brothers watch it, i find nothing amusing about it except the fighting and so it is not surprising that i'm not taken by Seun's story.

tinard:

Also Seun as some of the Nairaland users seem to be incredibly thick, explain the purpose of each story before you start because even the ones who wants to be critics are

Okay now this comment you took one step to far, if you've read very good stories such as catherine cookson, Joan collins, Arundhati Roy "God of small things" and that dude who writes crime books can't remember his name right now, you'll realise that right from the first ten lines you are given an insight into the story. This can not be compared to that cause it's not even a story, it's a erm script like thingy and so that was why i needed to know the aim of the story.

And about your last line Haters?? sweetie think again. If i'm to buy this story/comic it better be worth it. I'm just raising comments on which i personally believe can be better, I'm not hating on the guy if he wants his story to be great then he has to listen to potential customers views. And if u think it's hating then clearly you are not one to listen to advice when it's given to u.

I must admit i'm not really feeling this story, there is no distinct difference between both characters the boy is supposed to be an angel but all i keep seeing in him is an everyday kid.
I was expecting more formality from him, use of a particular segment of words used by only the heavenly bodies more respect you know anything to make him seem out of this world and unusual and he is not actually supposed to question his name given by God, angels don't have free will.
And the part about taking baths in the river we(readers) realised that he doesn't know much about earth but in the last few lines he showed a lot of knowledge about earth and how filthy child abuse can be also for also for a thousand year old angel who has probably done this job a thousand times he is very incompetent and not good at delivering messages.

Also Please tell me the part where God strikes the kid is supposed to be intended humour, just knowing that the all-knowing was not aware that his angel did not like the name assigned to him is very

Naturally as a reader i like something that really stimulates my intellect, but i think you went into overdrive when you went into fantasy land. The theme of this story is not very obvious and the aim to be achieved is not clear.

I'm sorry that after you making three re-writes i still find the story incomplete. I'm guessing that after what i've written you are not going to like me very much but i really need you to end your last story Najarita or at least give a summary and since you are possibly hating me take your time but don't take it too much cause then i'll be the one who is angry.
I just see a lot more future for that story. Or it could just be my personal opinion.

Ps
You could actually make this story very funny and action packed, i just don't think you are going about it the rightway

does this now mean u are going to change the story line or start writing another story from scratch?

I've got a couple of film scripts that i've written but i can't give you any of those cause i'll need to update them, but within a couple of days i can get to writting a new one, since i already have an idea for it.   I don't like to brag but i'm a pretty good writer and a very inventive one. So i'll get to writing it and i'll get back to you.

Seun man, why are u doing this can't u u be a lot more generous while posting waiting for every scene is not fun. So preeety pleassssssssse get to posting. And stop portraying Linda as a stalker i was actually beginning to like her.

The drama setting is really captivating and interesting, while reading the whole of 1b i could not stop smiling, i guess because of the discriptions you gave which for me is very essential in a story.
In the part of Esther and her man u refered to the guy as her husband which slightly confused while reading through but so far i'm really enjoying the story.
Pleasssssssssssssssssssssssssse post more  . Thanks.