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Mazi_Omenuko: Choi!!! You killed Tracy! Now who's lucan going to 'tidy' You didn't even allow him the pleasure of one round of something before killing his gf!!!

#. . .thinking aloud. . .shebi lucan is allowed to do a flash back of the good times he had with his girl. . .#



Ok, lemmie go and start work joor.

Better go and start. You don't want to be late, do you?

Awesome chapter! So, Efemena, this is what you'd have allowed us to miss if you'd pulled out of the team? This is so cool.

But, why did you mix the names Tracy and Tracey? You should rather stick with one, Tracy perhaps. Frank named her Tracy.

I still can't imagine how that dream can be linked to the event, except when a supernatural force is being introduced. And the introduction of supernatural/unnatural affairs is highly forbidden. The subsequent writers have a hell of a job to do from this fourth chapter.

Weldone ma'am.

These are the few errors I've been able to catch for now:

1. Strewn carelessly besides them on the floor were some loose bits of change...

2. "You, my dear Suleman, are one very sick man[b]",[/b] she grinned cheekily.
The commas should be reflected in the quotes, and not out of them.

3. I think I'm quite disappointed with you today.

4. Yes, they were there allright, all five of them online...

5. Someone who was probably a lot closer to him than he aware of...

6. For some inexplicable reason...

7. ...informing him that that would be using his flat for his latest "runz"...

Sooo sleepy I am now...later.

Okay, I'm gonna change the name asap. By the way, the constant use of 'babes' between Lucan and his paramour seems too monotonous.

Still haven't explained the link between Lucan's adventure in the dream and the burnt mansion in reality.

st.okolie:
larry abeg tear me my own viewer's slip to avoid harassment.

Viewer's slip? Lost! Lost!! Lost!!!

Weldone, Efe. It's a nice chapter you are creating. If you can still meet up with deadline, then ride on. I said 1500words at least, I didn't say the words cannot be more. A chapter can contain as much as 5000 or even 10'000words. The most important thing though is to plot a worthwhile story therefrom. I believe you're going to leave enough pointers for the next writers to work on. I already wrote it in the first page that where one writer might believe he has tied loose ends, another writers might just pick up from there and give the story a different direction, but not vying away from the theme though.

But, Efe, you left me confused when you brought in Agbani Darego. Remember that Agbani Darego is an actual person living. She is the former Miss World. I just introduced her in the dream of Lucan's. I never imagined that she'd really be created as a character. I wouldn't want Agbani sueing us all o. But seeing that you've got more arrows in your quiver, I'll just keep my thumbs crossed Weldone again.

The next poster is Efemena_xy, and she'll be posting on Wednesday (February 20, 2012).

HumbledbYGrace: I would have had my four kids then

That's nice to know

That lady is playing too smart for my liking. What's all the ideas about screening. She's thirty-five for heaven's sake! I expect her to be more serious than that.

Okay ma'am, I should go and check it out on the other thread.

HumbledbYGrace: didn't u read finding hubby episode one?I know lying is not good, I used to do that to get away with stuff let's say u were Kalu, what would be ur reaction?

No, I didn't read it. I thought you said you were going to post it.

Odinaka00: Pls dat blog is 4 mature guys, don't carry dat una "first to comment" ish go enter ther nw

Your words truly stink. I believe Lola understood what I meant. I don't want to derail this thread. Just zip that snout.

What are you guys talking about?

Ishilove: This guy, your big English sef is too much jor. Which one come be 'umbrage'?.

Actually, Xsolution, I don't think the idea of giving directives is the best, it'd kill the fun. We should rather leave everybody in the dark about what the next writer is going to post. That way, the next writer will have free hand to work (and not feel spoon-fed). I trust that every writer can give us the best chapters.

About Redmosquito's chapter, not only did he use the present tense in his narration but he also used the first person singular. Now, from my own personal experience of novel-readings, using the first-person singular (I) entails that the narrator is involved in the story itself; that he's also a character. Using Pidgin English in the description is also not impressive. I know that he was only dishing some sort of humour therein but it doesn't jibe. It would have been permitted if he had used it in the dialogue.

I hope he wouldn't take umbrage from people's comments. I have initially said that we should correct with love and not insult.

Efemena_xy: I don't hate you.

Never have, and never will.

True. Life is too short for us to spend time hating each other.

Rap maestro: which turn? Abeqi no dey joke wit me o.. I b ALIBABA pikin.. Anyway lwkmd

You will write the one millionth chapter.

Rap maestro: i can write it but i'm just tryinq 2 help wit all dis fuss nah.. Efe Na Wa 4 U O

Okay, wait for your turn, Efe is writing this one.

Efemena, if the time won't be enough for you to write your chapter, please let me know.

Thanks.

Rap maestro: Take it easy pple.. I can as well qinqah ur spirit wit quessinq..
-Wu b Ayomide?
-Wetin Lucan do am?
-Wu b d mutilated qirl in d pics?
-How he fit enter d death of Chief Koko master?
-The SIM card..wetin qo happen?
-How Lucan qo save himself...?
-The promise he made nko?
All dese and more will b d answer 2 d next chapter

LOL! How are you sure they'll be the answers to the next chapter? Are you going to write the next chapter?

I should go and reread the story all over again...for the upteenth time.

Redmoss totally redirected the flow.

As intriguing the chapter is, there is an irregularity in the narrative techniques. The first two chapters were written in the past tense narration while Moss used the present. It's either Red is unfamiliar with the past tense narrative technique or he imposed his own style.

brokoto: Can I make a suggestion? Yes!
Well, since it seems that Emefena's time has been shortened, is it possible to give her one extra day? I know it might encroach on the subsequent writers' time but it could be amended all round. Or are the set times cast in stone?

For this reason, I'll also advise that if any writer has his/her story ready before the deadline can just post it to avoid this kind of situation occuring again.

Redmoss, your excuse ehn...

You're right, sir. Let's wait and see Redmoss's update first. If we have to add one more day I'll change the time-table. Thanks for the suggestion.