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| Re: Red Ashes by deewhydoski(m): 10:35pm On Feb 13, 2017 |
Abeg naw...make d story end sharp sharp naw |
| Re: Red Ashes by Nobody: 10:38pm On Feb 13, 2017 |
Chumzypinky: Something like that, mine is double 'm'. Please Amen should not share the grace with any of her children. Dude is a psycho. Nice twist in the story. I've this weird feeling that MozB will drug nene's drink. Dinner ko, breakfast ni. |
| Re: Red Ashes by Nobody: 10:38pm On Feb 13, 2017 |
I didn't see this twist coming. I hope this doesn't give Kainene more reasons to dislike her dad. |
| Re: Red Ashes by Nobody: 10:40pm On Feb 13, 2017 |
gangan gangan dz chuks of a man needs to be dealt with seriously. nice work mummy pinky |
| Re: Red Ashes by kajsa08: 11:08pm On Feb 13, 2017 |
wow wow wow wow wow wow wow wow wow wow. !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! |
| Re: Red Ashes by ladyverere(f): 11:16pm On Feb 13, 2017 |
Yes Chumzy, an unexpected and perfect twist. Even the length of the updates have improved. Well done. |
| Re: Red Ashes by TheBlessedMAN: 11:22pm On Feb 13, 2017 |
Wow! This is absolute pure piece of a geniuslistic mind... Chumzypinky.. Baby.. After me na u o.. Follow by anybody, that wants to join... I must tel u, i started reading diz masterclass less dan 72hrs ago.. And av been really glued to my S7/nokia2700 and Lenovo A850.. Infact the last time i remember having a genius mind was when i collected my Ss2 result that boast of two D7 and 8 'F's that are Kissing '9'.. My sister.. U are exactly like dat ss2 version of me.. KAINENE' my preBEST character so far(though with some nasty behaviours), i like her anyway.. She just reminded me of Guem JAN Di of Boys b4 Flowers.. NATHAN'.. My Best character by miles... He reminds me of Nikklaus of the Vampire dairies and Gu jun pyo of Boys b4 flowers.. I love Casanova guys like them.. Infact, i dnt mind being a Gay.. Just 4 them.. CHUCKS.. The Bastard son of Lucifer.. The only candidate of Hell so far... Reminds me of Mio frm HER MOTHERS DAUGHTER.. Nothing much to say abt dat absolute and diabolic fool... JOLADE'.. Reminds me of My 1st gf.. Ladies needs to learn from this character... Girls of now adays are in pain and agony, just because they wil do anytin to marry that HEdiot that doesn't deserve a single strand of hair on their head... Ladies pls learn, b4 ur Nigeria votes 4 Buhari again.. AMEN'.. The cunning incèstuos niggar of d story.. Reminds me of Nicholas Smith, of HERO by SmartestPOPQUEEN.. Came late into d story, but still stole the Headlines... Its gud to be bad sumtimes.. KAMSY'.. My favourite character.. I added her to my wishlist d moment she made me remember MELISSA.. If u don't knw how it feels to b left at d altar.. Pls try watching MELISSA 1-4.. CHIOMA.'.. May her stingy Soul and Pvssy rest in peace.. The architect of her own death.. Ordinary Pvssy, u no fit share? Ah.. Ladies can b stingy with that Open GATE they cal Vgina. CHUMZYPINKY...= The Pen mistress, thats been ditching out punishment to whom ever she feels like hurting.. 'KILLED chioma.. 'made Nathan looked like a bad guy.. 'Raped Jolade.. 'Gave Kainene a Razor like Mouth thats costing her her happiness.. 'GAVE Mabel Amnessia.. 'gave Chucks a Hungry man's dìck.. 'abandoned Kamsy at d altar... And lastly, sent Rice from 8,000naira to 20k.. Well... Despite all these... U are stil among my best writers of Nl.. And i promise u... Am very serious.. Nd i Mean it, just want to promise u dat, i wont tell, ur readers that u are my Ex Gf... And have gat a question 4 u.. How can a dead character Narrates her life experience? E.g Chioma nd any other character u stil going to kill? Pls ans me.. To my fellow HERO mates... Tgold1, Rohy, and Mrlemuel, i wish u a Recessive Valentine celebration in Advance.. TEAM HERO.. 16 Likes 4 Shares |
| Re: Red Ashes by Rhayne(f): 11:33pm On Feb 13, 2017 |
What a twist! |
| Re: Red Ashes by SmartestPopQUEEN(f): 12:17am On Feb 14, 2017 |
TheBlessedMAN:   always funny as ever...... Have missed yhu guys, like have missed my Monthly bloody obligations after i got engaged 7months ago.. Chumzypinky Mate,... I would have follow this story few weeks ago... Buh its unfortunate that, am having problems digesting the content of the story due to the Mixed dialect... E.g Pidgin, ibo and the Yaroba that yhu've been using.. Buh its obvious your work is excellent, with the comments have read so far... Keep it up.. And Keep The Writers Flag Flying High... #KTWFFH... Tgold, mrlemuel, Rohy and other Hero lovers... Happy Vals day.. 5 Likes 2 Shares |
| Re: Red Ashes by Tgold1(m): 12:31am On Feb 14, 2017 |
SmartestPopQUEEN: Same to you. Its Tgold1 Not tgold..... Make I no just quote that funnyfarian.... 2 Likes |
| Re: Red Ashes by TheBlessedMAN: 12:37am On Feb 14, 2017 |
Tgold1:chai.. People get wahala o... Under diz recession, wey i never knw i go tey spend d 500naira wey dey my hand 4 my gf as vals gift, u stil get time to dey do correction of ur name?.... Na wa o... If u like cal urzlf Tsilver or Tbronze, everytin na MEDAL.... 2 Likes |
| Re: Red Ashes by wizsolzy(m): 6:56am On Feb 14, 2017 |
ihmmm dis story eyaf twist like kobo-leg
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| Re: Red Ashes by roseval(f): 7:27am On Feb 14, 2017 |
Hmmmmm!!!!!!!, chumzy u know go kill me with this twist & turn. I don't know which 1 am in love with (u or d story), anyways keep it coming. |
| Re: Red Ashes by Chumzypinky(f): 8:08am On Feb 14, 2017 |
[quote aHow can a dead character Narrates her life experience? E.g Chioma nd any other character u stil going to kill? Pls ans me.. TEAM HERO.. [/color] [/quote] dats fiction for u TheBlessedMan, lol. U must watch movies alot 1 Like |
| Re: Red Ashes by Chumzypinky(f): 8:41am On Feb 14, 2017 |
KAINENE. As i walked into Rodinia fastfood, i started having this wierd feeling, i couldnt understand. I sighed MozB seated at the far end of the beautiful place. This place was newly opened as at that time. And i'd never been there. The ones i had been to was Kilimanjaro and Foodland. I'd only seen a flyer that a new bar/restaurant was coming soon and that was Rodinia. Well, that was by the way. He smiled on seeing me and stood up. We hugged when i got to him. As we embraced, i sighted someone. Someone very familiar. I looked up. Our eyes met. Nathan. He was seating with a lady who i could guess was his new lover, Myra. He looked at me then to MozB who was backing him, then he rolled his eyes and looked away. I also rolled my eyes and looked away. MozB and i disentangled. Then we sat and placed our orders. At first we ate in silence. And during this time, my eyes kept meeting with Nathan's. It was as if he kept his eyes on because anytime i raised my head, our eyes met. And my heart tugged on seeing him. I just wanted us to be back together already, but then it was obviously very late. Very very late. Because he seemed happy with his secretary whom he was dating. 'hello' he waved at me 'where's your mind Princess?' I looked at MozB and smiled 'sorry dear, were you saying something?' 'so you werent listening?' 'i'm sorry. I was thinking i saw someone i knew. But it wasnt HER afterall' i made sure i laid emphasis on the HER. 'oh. Okay, i was asking how you've been? How have you been coping?' 'i've been coping just fine. How else do you expect me to cope? I'm okay, i'm doing great. God is doing miraculous things in my life' my eyes met with Nathan again. 'well, i'm glad. For once i've heard you sound so spiritual' I smacked his shoulders 'meaning what nah? Dont you know i'm a christian?' 'abegee! Everyone is a christian nah. Even the devil is and was a christian. He goes to church and sits beside you nah' 'tufiakwa! It is you he will sit beside and not me!' we both laughed. 'it is you he will sit beside' 'no its you' 'its you' 'its you' We started laughing again. I looked at Nathan again and this time, his brows were raised. And then i decided to smile at him. But the smile came out forced and apparently not genuine. He gave me that same forced smile before focusing on his lover. 'there's something i've been meaning to tell you Nene' MozB said drawing my attention back from Nathan. 'yes dear, what is it?' 'uhm...i...i fell in love with this lady a very long time ago. I actually still love this lady and i wish to spend the rest of my life with her but then, what do i do when she's engaged to be married to someone else?' I stared at him 'then you have no choice but to forget about her of course. Because you're also engaged to be married to someone else' 'no, no, no. You dont get it Kainene. I'm...i'm in love with you' My brows went up. I became speechless. **** KAKA. I thought my eyes were obviously deceiving me when i stared at what looked like the miniature of Kainene. What a coincidence! My first thought was Kainene needed to hear this. So she gave birth to a child and threw it away abi? That was my first hilarious thought though i knew it wasnt possible. 'go away!' Chidinma shoved the child from her cloth 'everytime food food food. Do i look like a farmer to you? If your stupid and useless father does not send us money, nobody is going to eat in this house. Get out!' The child started crying. I was shocked at Chidinma's behaviour towards her child. 'come baby come' i beckoned on the child and she came to me. I squatted 'whats your name?' 'my name is Prettyhurts' she replied in a tiny voice. 'Prettyhurts? Thats someone who's pretty but is hurt? A damsel in distress? What kind of a name is that?' i looked up at Chidinma. 'what i decide to name my child is certainly none of your business nwanne' I reached for a candy inside my handbag 'here darling. Manage this until i prepare something palatable for you okay? Aunty just came back from a long long journey and she needs to rest' 'thanks ma' the lady postrated respectfully and ran inside with her dreads swinging in the air. Before i could open my mouth to speak, two hungry looking kids ran out. 'mummy mummy, where is mine?' they were saying 'mummy, Prettyhurts got a candy, dont we get one too?' I looked on. 'will you get out of here you morons? Do i look like a candy producing company to you? Eh?' Chidinma said sternly. 'over here kids' i beckoned on them and they rushed to me 'what are your names?' 'my name is Wizsolzy but my friends call me Wizzy' one of them smiled then positioned with his dirty knickers and slacked singlets. 'and i am Tupac Shakur. Two fingers in the air' the older looking one raised both fingers 'my names is Blessed. But i'd prefer you call me TheBlessedMAN, alright?' My mouth was agape. Chidinma hissed 'useless children. As useless as their dad!' TBC 9 Likes 3 Shares |
| Re: Red Ashes by Kimberlydavids(f): 8:51am On Feb 14, 2017 |
Nice story mummy chummy. Sorry for not commenting since o. But there are just no words to explain how amazing this story is. Keep up the good work |
| Re: Red Ashes by estie92: 8:57am On Feb 14, 2017 |
Anybody thinking what I'm thinking  Chuks The Womanizer and Chidimma(Pamela). Hmmmmmmmmmmm. will keep watching in 5D. Anyways, nice work dear. the story is so captivating. finished all in 2 days. Now I'm here. |
| Re: Red Ashes by talk2saintify(m): 9:02am On Feb 14, 2017 |
chumzpinky... Keep it up jor...yhu too much so much connection in this stwory 1 Like 1 Share |
| Re: Red Ashes by wizsolzy(m): 9:03am On Feb 14, 2017 |
hmmmmm wizsolzy eyaf come into d film....hope he is d one dat will shoot chuks.... let me pay me regards to mummy chumzy.... iyam trowa kwis for u from d middle of Lagos Ibadan express way.. 2 Likes
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| Re: Red Ashes by Missmossy(f): 9:30am On Feb 14, 2017 |
Aww this is enthralling thumbs up Chumzypinky more wisdom and strength to you. Kainene has some younger ones |
| Re: Red Ashes by Twinkle004(f): 9:35am On Feb 14, 2017 |
Mummy Chumzypinky well done but d story is getting deep & more interesting. Also d connection is getting serious(Kaka Sis, Chuks & Nene). Mummy do make u finish ds story |
| Re: Red Ashes by samyfreshsmooth(m): 10:12am On Feb 14, 2017 |
SmartestPopQUEEN: Noooooo!!! smartestpopqueen dont tell me u are no longer in da market o  why did u engage na?  if only u had wait 4 just 2 5yrs.....just 5 years  |
| Re: Red Ashes by Chumzypinky(f): 11:39am On Feb 14, 2017 |
KAINENE. 'i'm sorry MozB but i cant' i said in a slow voice after listening to him speak. There was no way things were going to work out between us. Firstly, i didnt love him and secondly, i was carrying another man's child and i was even in love with another! Guilt plaqued me. 'Kainene...' he tried holding my hand as i stood up. 'i'm sorry Moses but i have to go' From the corner of my eyes, i sighted Nathan standing up with Myra and they were both walking out of the restaurant. 'Kaine...' but i was already gone. Tears filled my eyes when i realised that i couldnt get the man i wanted anymore. Someone loved me but i was in love with someone else, it was very funny. I sighted Nathan and Myra walking towards his car. I just watched them. I wanted to go to him, but i couldnt. Not with Myra watching. I slowly walked to my car and got into it. I suddenly felt weak to drive. I just relaxed my head on the steering. I didnt know how long i rested my head there until i heard a knock on my window. I looked up 'Nathan?' i muttered as i rolled down the windows. 'are you alright?' he asked surveying me with his eyes 'have you been crying?' I reached for my eyes and noticed they were still wet 'i'm alright' i nodded, then i looked around for Myra 'where's she?' 'who?' he looked confused. 'your secretary, your lover. Myra' 'she's gone' 'okay' i simply nodded. 'you look weak. Do you think you can drive in this condition?' I jerked 'what condition?' he certainly hadnt found out i was pregnant, did he? No one knew i was pregnant, except Kaka. Kaka didnt snitch on me, did she? I would never forgive her if she did. 'you're weak. Are you sick?' he touched my forehead. 'do you care?' i said in what looked like a whisper. 'not like i care too much. I just happened to see someone i knew looking distressed and i thought i could be of help' he said nonchalantly withdrawing his hand. Though i felt bad, i didnt show it 'thanks alot but i'm fine by God's grace. And thanks for extending your kindness to "someone you knew". God bless you' I saw the amusement in his eyes and heard the sarcasm in his voice when he said 'God bless you too' I was even beginning to wonder when i became this spiritual. I wasnt an atheist really but i hardly went to church. Infact, i couldnt remember the last time i stepped into Winners Chapel which was my place of worship 'your regards to your mum for me' i said in a husky voice. He shrugged and turned to leave. I shuddered. I didnt want him to leave 'Nathan?' i called and he turned to me. I wondered if he didnt feel anything for me anymore. Was it so easy to cast aside what we once shared? Yes, i made so many mistakes and i realised them now but didnt they say love is forgiving? Shoprite was buzzing. Remember i stated that Rodinia was inside Shoprite? People were trooping in and out. We couldnt talk here. He came closer 'what is it?' 'please i beg you' i said with my palms together 'could you perhaps, get in the car? I...i want to discuss something with you' He eyed me suspiciously for a while then he went over to the other side and entered the car. I whined up. 'what is it you want to discuss with me?' he asked. I suddenly felt foolish. What was i thinking? This guy hated me already, what would he think of me when i say what i had to say? But then i had to tell him something, i had to say something. 'i just want us to be friends' i blurted out. Where did that come from? He looked at me like an interesting piece of art 'that we are ex-lovers doesnt mean we turn enemies right?' i searched his face for any reaction. 'are you kidding me?' then he laughed. 'i understand that you're in a very important relationship right now. With your secretary so i want us to be friends, no strings attached. 'sorry, i'm not usually friends with rude personalities' 'i'm willing to change. I know i'm rude, saucy, arrogant, badmouthed and what have you. And i've lost so many important things because of that. But i'm willing to become a better person now. I'm not asking you to take me back, i'm just asking for your forgiveness and your friendship. Nathan, i know i've wronged you in so many ways but the fact remains that i can never forget you. The hatred you have for me is killing me, its shattering' i poured out. He looked at me for a while. Then i heard him sigh heavily 'Kainene' he called out. 'i know its too late. You're already in love with someone else. And i dont plan on destroying that relationship. Infact i'm happy you've found happiness with the right woman' tears dropped from my eyes. I didnt mean all i was saying. I was crazy about this guy for goodness sake! 'why are you doing this Nene?' 'because i still love you!' 'you said what?' 'i love you Nathan. I love you! I still love you with every ounce of my being and i miss you like crazy. I dont know how i'm going to live without you!' i cried. TBC 15 Likes 3 Shares |
| Re: Red Ashes by mismore(f): 11:52am On Feb 14, 2017 |
Very emotional update. I'm loving the story more. |
| Re: Red Ashes by deewhydoski(m): 12:07pm On Feb 14, 2017 |
Nene so u can still beg...well u re doing d right thing. Pls nathan gve her another chance. |
| Re: Red Ashes by Eniqurl(f): 12:17pm On Feb 14, 2017 |
Nathan pls forgive Nene  |
| Re: Red Ashes by harunablezin(f): 12:18pm On Feb 14, 2017 |
waoh! mhmmmm....so wat next Nathan? |
| Re: Red Ashes by spiceybae(f): 12:33pm On Feb 14, 2017 |
TheBlessedMAN: wow wow ..dz z d best comment av seen so.far...guy u r very gud wit words...d.comparism z wow though i dnt remember sum of d.characters....can i join d H£®0 T£@M......ma'am chumzy u av got a nice read hia......ciao 1 Like 1 Share |
| Re: Red Ashes by Emekus92(m): 1:05pm On Feb 14, 2017 |
Emotional episode. pls Nathan forgive ha1 Like |
| Re: Red Ashes by wizsolzy(m): 1:08pm On Feb 14, 2017 |
harunablezin: Na to boil beans... but I still dey observe watin Nathan go do 2 Likes
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| Re: Red Ashes by Chumzypinky(f): 1:21pm On Feb 14, 2017 |
wizsolzy:dis boy eh, u're one of the craziest pple we have on this site thats why i named Chidimma's son after u |
| Re: Red Ashes by wizsolzy(m): 1:27pm On Feb 14, 2017 |
Chumzypinky: hmmmmm mummy chumzy
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