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Re: Red Ashes by Nobody: 9:24pm On Mar 04, 2017
Chumzypinky:
Hmm... Many people complaining about the way the story ended. I'll explain everything, including those who happen to be confused in some areas.
Myra left with anger and hate in her heart.
And certainly, she must have been planning her revenge and keeping tabs on them all this while.
When the wedding didnt go down well, she must have been very happy. And then when she got to know that they were taking a DNA test, she knew she had to do something.

Of course she didnt know that they wouldnt have turned out to be siblings, but she just wanted to make sure.

And then with the help of an insider, she was able to find out the results stated Negative. And then she faked a Positive result and had it switched in the Laboratory, tho she was caught escaping the hospital.

As for those saying Nathan shouldnt have died, well, life is never a bed of roses. Shits happens. People go through so much pains and misfortunes.

U havent heard of newly wedded couples dying on a plane crash for their honeymoon.
You havent heard of Brides sleeping on Friday night and not waking up when Saturday happens to be the day of their wedding?
You havent heard of Coupls being murdered in cold blood in their hotel room on their wedding night? What are we not saying?

What happened to Kainene and Nathan is just part of life.
Not everyone has happy endings. I'm just trying to portray real life situations in the story.

This is Naija. This is the 21st century. We're living in a wicked world. So shine ur eyes!

I still don't feel good about the ending, i wanted them to have a happy end you know. So that in a way people can still believe that after the pain and suffering , you can still have your joy or happiness.

But you're the author and you know best, great job ma'am. Please what about moz.b what happened to him and his plan to get nene.
Re: Red Ashes by Chumzypinky(f): 9:58pm On Mar 04, 2017
Ellyne:
OMG! Mummy Chumzy you are the best . Wehdone Man. I knew Myra was planning something and the end no be here. It's just outta the world. Tragic! I love tragedies
lol, i hope u dnt end in tragedy sha
Re: Red Ashes by Chumzypinky(f): 10:01pm On Mar 04, 2017
Queenbeee:


I still don't feel good about the ending, i wanted them to have a happy end you know. So that in a way people can still believe that after the pain and suffering , you can still have your joy or happiness.

But you're the author and you know best, great job ma'am. Please what about moz.b what happened to him and his plan to get nene.
u also know that some people die with in dia sufferings rite? We have to start understanding that all this "and they lived happily ever after" only happened in Cinderella. This is the real life. I used to be a hopeless romantic, thinking d world was all about roses, flowers and kisses, but babe, when the truth struck me eh, it was something else, very shocking.
I know that after every sufferings, comes peace and compensation, but it doesnt happen all the time.
I'm sorry if the ending doesnt befit ur taste but thats life for u. Tooza
Re: Red Ashes by Nobody: 10:48pm On Mar 04, 2017
Chumzypinky:

u also know that some people die with in dia sufferings rite? We have to start understanding that all this "and they lived happily ever after" only happened in Cinderella. This is the real life. I used to be a hopeless romantic, thinking d world was all about roses, flowers and kisses, but babe, when the truth struck me eh, it was something else, very shocking.
I know that after every sufferings, comes peace and compensation, but it doesnt happen all the time.
I'm sorry if the ending doesnt befit ur taste but thats life for u. Tooza


Okay, thanks for that. You still didn't tell us what happened to mozB
Re: Red Ashes by Missclare1(f): 11:20pm On Mar 04, 2017
A sad way to die,Nene will live with that guilt forever.Anger and impatience doesn't pay.
Re: Red Ashes by Ikigia: 11:50pm On Mar 04, 2017
Well-done...... 10/10
Re: Red Ashes by TheBlessedMAN: 12:11am On Mar 05, 2017
Sequel to RED ASHES



Me- (faces Chumzypinky)

To what END!.. I say TO WHAT FORKING END do u av to do diz? Mrs CHUMZYPINKY?

because of the retreival of one stewpid 8gb memory thats full of 'ASSUMPTIONS' U took d life of an innocent? Ehn? Ok.. I dey come, make i bash ur characters first..



Me-(turns to MummyM) Madam Mabel... U see say na u kil ur own pikin? Only if u had kept ur mouth shut just for 6 more hours, i hav a feeling ur son might stil b alive.. Buh instead, u decided to let loose the gate of hell by running ur mouth like tap water...


Me - (turns to Kainene) And to u Kainene, U see ur life? I don dey expect u to do sometin unforgivable right frm the genesis of this story, buh instead u choose to do the damaging and unthinkable at the 90+added time mins of Red ashes.. Ah, u be commited Mugu..

Drop Gun, u no drop... Drop gun, u no drop... Drop gun, u no drop... Until u took d life of ur childs father? Av told u several times that, Thugery life, doesn't pay... Now u av killed him... Ur eye don clear.. Now go and marry the corpse o... U diz essential idiot.. U wan cry? Walahi, if i hear one cry 4 ur Mouth, i go give dat empty skull of urz a heavy Reset to factory settings Knock that wil send ur memory back to madness.. Stupid girl of a shameless father.. *hisses*



Me - (turns to Chucks) wait, shebi u suppose don die b4? Wetin u stil dey find? Everytin gud about this great story started falling apart, d moment u signed a contract with Chumzypinky to ruin peoples life... I wonder how much she offerred u, to av made u agreed to torment peoples life like diz.. Well, its like Death don forget u, maybe Death's stil grieving abt Arsenal's loss to Liverpool, thats why he forgets that u are next on his list..

once he kills u, pls i want u to do me a favour.. JUST STAY DEAD, cos if i hear say ur ugly ghost stil dey disturb people, wetin i go use ur eye see eh? U no go like am.. *hisses*



Me- (turns to Myra) Myra.. I have just 3 words for u.. THUNDER FIRE YOU (IJN)


ME- (Back to Chumzypinky) I just av one Question 4 u.. Ans it well, and u might av a chance of going scott free with all d crimes u and ur pen av both committed truout diz story..

The Question is, WHERE DID U GET THE GUN U GAVE KAINENE?

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Re: Red Ashes by kingofcasting(m): 12:41am On Mar 05, 2017
Chumzypinky:
Dedicated to Saraphina and Missmossy.


MABEL.



'where is Jolade?' i asked Nathan immediately he entered.


He stopped, eyed me and turned to leave. He was in a very foul mood today, i could sense it.


'Nathan? Is it not you i'm talking to? Where is Jolade?'




'do i look like her keeper?' he barked angrily 'look woman, i'm in no mood for your nonsense this evening. It will do you so much good if you'll just leave me alone!'




He turned to leave.




I jumped up on my feet and held his hand tightly 'how dare you....'




He winced and i let go of his hands only to see blood dripping from it.



'oh my God!' i gasped 'who did this to you?'




He shot me an angry look 'just leave me alone!' he climbed the stairs and headed for his room.




My phone rang immediately. It was Mrs Tonia, Jolade's mum.




'hello Mabel, any news?' she asked immediately.




'i'm sorry friend. Uhm...Nathan is not home yet. I'm calling him but he aint picking his calls'




'same here. I'm also calling his line but he's ignoring my calls. Look Mabel, please help me tell him, if something bad happens to my daughter then he should be ready to take responsibility for it because he was the last person Jolade saw before she got missing'




'now how do you know he was the last person Jolade saw?'




'because she told me she was going to see him that day! See Mabel, dont let me involve the police in this matter. This is a very delicate situation. Nathan could go to jail if Jolade isnt found in 24hours'




'you seem to be forgetting something here Tonia' i said 'Jolade is an adult and she has the right to go wherever she wants to. Who knows where she went to after seeing Nathan? Or how sure are you that it was Nathan she went to see? My son is a good boy, and he loves Jolade....' i swallowed at my lie 'he would never do anything to hurt her. But that notwithstanding, i'll also ask Nathan when he gets back'




'i am just sounding a warning so it doesnt come as a surprise to you'




'i understand how you feel Mrs Tonia. But its so low of you to think that my own son would be capable of such act. Besides, its not even confirmed yet if Jolade is missing or not'




'bye' she hung up quickly.




I let out a sigh. Deep down, i knew what i told her was a lie. Nathan was capable of doing anything. I didnt know what to believe anymore.




What if he had held her hostage in a place so he could rape and use her at will? Nathan was capable of that.




I placed my hand on my forehead 'God, please take control'




I stood up and went to his room. I didnt knock, i just pushed the door and entered.




I gasped.




Nathan was unclad, on his knees, his manhood in his left hand and his right hand supported his nose as he inhaled the whitish substance on the table.




I knew Nathan smoked all manner of rubbish but never for once did i suspect that he could also be a drug addict! I never knew my son takes cocaine!




He was making muffled sounds while wanking.




'cocaine!' i gasped loudly.




He raised his head, looked at me, smiled drunkenly and continued wanking.




My legs suddenly felt weak under me. I went to his bed, fell on it and cried loudly.




God why me? Was Nathan the repercussion for all my sins? Was he my nemesis? Did Chichi lay a curse on me?




I wept. I cursed God. I cursed my mother for giving birth to me. I cursed his father for impregnating me and running away.




I cried like never before. My son didnt deem it fit to console me. When i raised up my head again, he was jerking as cum poured out of his di.ck. He was so shameless, he couldnt even cover his unclothedness.




I cried to the extent that i didnt know when i fell asleep on his bed. But i knew i woke up the next morning, just outside his room. He had taken me out of his room and placed me on the floor. He couldnt even drop me in my room on my bed. Nathan was so heartless.




But i made up my mind never to shed a tear for him again. He had done his worst. Now its time to teach him a lesson he would never forget in a hurry.




TBC
nice
Re: Red Ashes by kingofcasting(m): 12:42am On Mar 05, 2017
Chumzypinky:
Dedicated to Abefe99 and FredN


JOLADE.




'come, let me help you' Kelvin said stretching his hand. I took it. I hugged myself in cold.




He had taken me to his house, where i had freshened up and wore a big shirt of his and a baggy short of his.




'i'm so sorry about your ordeal ma'am, i never expected to see you in that uncompleted building..it actually belongs to my late elder brother. I know hoodlums do gather there and do all sort of bad things, so i just decided to check on it today. I was very shocked to see you there totally naked. I'm sorry, but were you raped?' he asked as we stood by the roadside waiting to board a cab.




'will you just shut up and leave me alone?!' i barked at him 'just because you found me in this unfortunate condition and helped me doesnt mean you should try to pry into my private life. Because no matter what, you still remain my common cleaner, do you understand?!!!'




He lowered his head for a while before speaking, and when he did, his voice was soft 'i'm sorry ma'am, i didnt mean to get you angry. I...i just think you might need help. If you're able to recognise anyone of those guys who did this to you, i could help you find....'




'and whoever said i was raped?!'




'i'm sorry'




'flag down a cab will you! Instead of just standing here and spitting nonsense!'




****




KAINENE.




'to be sincere mum, i did not like your reaction today, thats i did not like the way you handled things at the hotel today...' i said, my hands on my hips 'it was wrong, you didnt even care to listen to my own side of the story, you just went ahead to believe all that nicompoop was saying! Do you believe thats the same guy who slapped me at the hotel yesterday?'




My mum raised a brow, then smiled adjusting her glasses 'come on now Nene, you take things too serious. That guy is our customer and its our duty to take good care of our customers and overlook them sometimes'




'not for me! I believe every fuckup must be treated. If any customer tries to take advantage of me, then i'm so going to put that person into his pockets. Shits aint for me mum, i dont take it'




'do you realise you're speaking to me young lady?'




I sighed and rolled my eyes 'i'm sorry. But then you owe me an apology too!' i said pouting my lips 'do you know how many insults that stupid guy hauled at me?'




'i'm sorry dear. I'm just teaching you how to handle customers and respect their wishes. Besides, that guy looked like a nice catch...' she winked at me.




'oh oh! I said it!' i clapped my hands 'i knew you had something up your sleeves. I know you mum, i know you more than anyone else does! Fuc.k shi.t!'




She frowned immediately 'Kainene!'




'okay, sorry! I'm sorry about my language. But then, you should quit on doing such things. It wont work. Its high time you started realising that male antics wont work for me. No man would be given the chance to toy with my heard just the way yours was toyed with!' It was out before i could stop it.




I held my mouth immediately looking at my mum's sudden frown 'i'm very sorry mum'




She picked up her reading glasses and newspapers and left for her room without a second glance.




I felt really bad. I felt like going after her but i knew it would be best if i apologise the following morning.




My phone buzzed beside me. I hissed when i saw the caller. Why was she calling me?




I pushed the phone aside without picking, but when it continued to ring, i changed my mind.




'hello Kamsiyochukwu, why are you calling my line by this time of the night?' i asked angrily.




'K baby, take a chill pill there...' she said softly 'i called to apologise for what happened the other say. Please forgive me. I never meant to hurt you with my words. I'm really sorry'




'look Kaka...' i swallowed hard 'just, leave me alone'




'i'm so sorry. It wont happen again. Remember you slapped me. That slap blocked my ears i had to visit eh...what do they call those doctors that treats ears again...eh hen eartrician....'




I started laughing 'eartrician indeed! Are you sure you even went to school?'




'first class babe like me, na you dey use dey play abi? You dey chop bottle? No allow me tear your head ooo'




'eh hen, shebi na you dey apologise before, you con dey threaten me abi? Oya bye bye, no call my line again!'




'ahn ahn, someone cannot play with you. Is that how you used to do?'




'okay, do the do. May the spirit of kolewerk kill you!'




'amen!'




I laughed 'yeye girl. Okay now, make i go sleep. Time don do'




'i dey show for your crib tomorrow. You dey reach hotel?'




'no oo. I no get strength. I no go go tomorrow'




'no quata'




'sha no bring Marcus come'




'hahahaha, no problem. Nightie dearie, i love u'




'i love you too Kaka'




She laughed and hung up.




TBC
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Re: Red Ashes by RolaDiva(f): 3:51am On Mar 05, 2017
I cried
Re: Red Ashes by BlissfulJeff(m): 6:19am On Mar 05, 2017
wow.beautiful story u got here chumzypinky,dis is jst d beginning,u re going to greater heights.thanks so much
Re: Red Ashes by PrinceOFprince(m): 6:58am On Mar 05, 2017
TheBlessedMAN:
Sequel to RED ASHES



Me- (faces Chumzypinky)

To what END!.. I say TO WHAT FORKING END do u av to do diz? Mrs CHUMZYPINKY?

because of the retreival of one stewpid 8gb memory thats full of 'ASSUMPTIONS' U took d life of an innocent? Ehn? Ok.. I dey come, make i bash ur characters first..



Me-(turns to MummyM) Madam Mabel... U see say na u kil ur own pikin? Only if u had kept ur mouth shut just for 6 more hours, i hav a feeling ur son might stil b alive.. Buh instead, u decided to let loose the gate of hell by running ur mouth like tap water...


Me - (turns to Kainene) And to u Kainene, U see ur life? I don dey expect u to do sometin unforgivable right frm the genesis of this story, buh instead u choose to do the damaging and unthinkable at the 90+added time mins of Red ashes.. Ah, u be commited Mugu..

Drop Gun, u no drop... Drop gun, u no drop... Drop gun, u no drop... Until u took d life of ur childs father? Av told u several times that, Thugery life, doesn't pay... Now u av killed him... Ur eye don clear.. Now go and marry the corpse o... U diz essential idiot.. U wan cry? Walahi, if i hear one cry 4 ur Mouth, i go give dat empty skull of urz a heavy Reset to factory settings Knock that wil send ur memory back to madness.. Stupid girl of a shameless father.. *hisses*



Me - (turns to Chucks) wait, shebi u suppose don die b4? Wetin u stil dey find? Everytin gud about this great story started falling apart, d moment u signed a contract with Chumzypinky to ruin peoples life... I wonder how much she offerred u, to av made u agreed to torment peoples life like diz.. Well, its like Death don forget u, maybe Death's stil grieving abt Arsenal's loss to Liverpool, thats why he forgets that u are next on his list..

once he kills u, pls i want u to do me a favour.. JUST STAY DEAD, cos if i hear say ur ugly ghost stil dey disturb people, wetin i go use ur eye see eh? U no go like am.. *hisses*



Me- (turns to Myra) Myra.. I have just 3 words for u.. THUNDER FIRE YOU (IJN)


ME- (Back to Chumzypinky) I just av one Question 4 u.. Ans it well, and u might av a chance of going scott free with all d crimes u and ur pen av both committed truout diz story..

The Question is, WHERE DID U GET THE GUN U GAVE KAINENE?
cheesy cheesy ah.. Sequel indeed.. This more like complaint.. Nice1

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Re: Red Ashes by Chumzypinky(f): 7:54am On Mar 05, 2017
TheBlessedMAN:
Sequel to RED ASHES



Me- (faces Chumzypinky)

To what END!.. I say TO WHAT FORKING END do u av to do diz? Mrs CHUMZYPINKY?

because of the retreival of one stewpid 8gb memory thats full of 'ASSUMPTIONS' U took d life of an innocent? Ehn? Ok.. I dey come, make i bash ur characters first..



Me-(turns to MummyM) Madam Mabel... U see say na u kil ur own pikin? Only if u had kept ur mouth shut just for 6 more hours, i hav a feeling ur son might stil b alive.. Buh instead, u decided to let loose the gate of hell by running ur mouth like tap water...


Me - (turns to Kainene) And to u Kainene, U see ur life? I don dey expect u to do sometin unforgivable right frm the genesis of this story, buh instead u choose to do the damaging and unthinkable at the 90+added time mins of Red ashes.. Ah, u be commited Mugu..

Drop Gun, u no drop... Drop gun, u no drop... Drop gun, u no drop... Until u took d life of ur childs father? Av told u several times that, Thugery life, doesn't pay... Now u av killed him... Ur eye don clear.. Now go and marry the corpse o... U diz essential idiot.. U wan cry? Walahi, if i hear one cry 4 ur Mouth, i go give dat empty skull of urz a heavy Reset to factory settings Knock that wil send ur memory back to madness.. Stupid girl of a shameless father.. *hisses*



Me - (turns to Chucks) wait, shebi u suppose don die b4? Wetin u stil dey find? Everytin gud about this great story started falling apart, d moment u signed a contract with Chumzypinky to ruin peoples life... I wonder how much she offerred u, to av made u agreed to torment peoples life like diz.. Well, its like Death don forget u, maybe Death's stil grieving abt Arsenal's loss to Liverpool, thats why he forgets that u are next on his list..

once he kills u, pls i want u to do me a favour.. JUST STAY DEAD, cos if i hear say ur ugly ghost stil dey disturb people, wetin i go use ur eye see eh? U no go like am.. *hisses*



Me- (turns to Myra) Myra.. I have just 3 words for u.. THUNDER FIRE YOU (IJN)


ME- (Back to Chumzypinky) I just av one Question 4 u.. Ans it well, and u might av a chance of going scott free with all d crimes u and ur pen av both committed truout diz story..

The Question is, WHERE DID U GET THE GUN U GAVE KAINENE?
lol, she got it frm wereva she got it frm. Dats fiction 4 u +tongue out*
Re: Red Ashes by TheBlessedMAN: 9:33am On Mar 05, 2017
Chumzypinky:

lol, she got it frm wereva she got it frm. Dats fiction 4 u +tongue out*
Oh! I see.. U wanna play it tough right... The chances of that tongue getting back safely and uncut to ur mouth is tantamount to the chances of Buhari calling CORRUPTION as it reads instead of KWARAPTION...


Nathan might b dead in ur own story o... Buh in my own stubborn mind, he his not dead.. He's right now on his way to Dubai, to get his baby needs...


so let that sink in to ur genius mind... NATHAN IS NOT DEAD.. Buh lives 4eva... Get to go.. My gf just send me another 'pls call me I love you' sms.. And am sure u knw what am about to do? My left hand is about to get really busy...

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Re: Red Ashes by Warfibabe(f): 9:51am On Mar 05, 2017
Chumzypinky:
FINAL CHAPTER

THIS UPDATE HAS NO PARTICULAR POV.

Monday came.
The monday everyone was expecting. The monday when the fate of two souls were going to be sealed.

The doctor stared at everyone of them. They all had a fearful look on their faces.

'who do i hand over this envelope to first?' he asked holding the brown envelope.

Kainene swallowed. She deserved to know first, didnt she?

'i'll do the honours' her father said immediately.

She quickly looked at him, wondering why God ever gave her someone like that as a father.

The doctor handed over the result to him and he opened it. They all stared at his face.

Then suddenly, he started sweating, his palms became shaky and the paper fell from his hands.

Kainene rested her head on Nathan's chest immediately, unable to look at the result.

Mabel picked the result. Then she started crying 'i said it! I knew it! I said it that i knew who was responsible for my pregnancy. I knew Kainene and Nathan were siblings!'

Everything came to a standstill. Even time.

***

KAKA.
Kainene was the first to run out of the office and i quickly followed her.
As i was running after her, i bumped into someone.

'watch it!' the person said.

I looked up to see the person. It was Myra 'you're just a crazy blind human, well, i dont have your time' I left immediately.

***

NOBODY's POV.

'Nene! Stop it! Drop the gun now!' Mabel screamed as Kainene corked the gun.

'i'm so going to kill you, you monster!' she pointed the gun at her father 'you monster! You ruined my life! I'm going to kill you, then kill myself' She tasted the saltiness of her tears.

'Nene, stop it, drop the gun' Nathan said. He was obviously terrified.

'there's no point Nath. There's no life without you' She placed her index finger on the trigger.

Nathan knew she was going to do something stupid if he didnt stop her.

He rushed to her immediately in a bid to snatch the gun from her and they started struggling.

'you both should stop it!!!' Mabel screamed.

'its dangerous. Kainene just hand over the gun' Kaka said scared about what might happen.

Then there was a loud sound. A bullet was released.

Then everywhere was quiet. Everyone's eyes were tightly shut.

And when they opened their eyes, it was to see Nathan, clutching his stomach as blood gushed from it.

'haaaaaaaaa!'
'Nathan noooooooo!!!!!'

Kainene held him 'no! Nathan...i'm so sorry. I've every sorry. No! Please dont die, Nathan please dont die!'

Chuks was already making a phone call to his doctor friend.

'lets rush him to the hospital' Kaka spoka hastily at loss for what to do.

Nathan weakly reached for Kainene's hands 'my love' he muttered weakly.

'shh, save your strength, dont say anything' she cried 'dont give up please. I love you. I love you notwithstanding anything. You might be my brother but you'll never be a brother to me, you remain my first and last love. Nathan please live for me. If not for me, for your baby' She sobbed 'i'm sorry, its was never my intention for you to get hurt. I love you so much' She bent to kiss him.

'i love you so much Nene. Take care of yourself. And....and...our baby' He coughed out blood.

'Nathan, no! What are you saying?! You aint going to die are you? You wont leave me here by myself right? Right?'

'i...love...you...and i love our...our child...as well...on...on circumstances whatsoever...should...should you abort...our baby. Its...its going to be the symbol...of...of our forbidden love' He continued coughing.

'Nathan, please dont....'

'i love you Nene...' his grip on her hand was beginning to weaken as a tear dropped from his eyes 'i love you..so...so...so..much' His eyes closed, his hands fell to his side.

He gave up.

TWO HOURS LATER.

Everyone watched in tears as Nathan's body was taken into the ambulance to be taken to a mortuary. They just couldnt believe what had went down earlier. How their lives turned upside down within a few days. Because of a memory regain.

Chuks' phone rang immediately.

He stepped aside to pick it 'hello doctor?'

'hello sir. A lady with the name Myra Benson has just been caught sneaking out of the laboratory with the results of your tests. Your result was switched sir. The original test results here says you fathered only the girl. You're not the father of the guy. Thats to say, there aint siblings so they are free to be.....' Chuks wasnt listening anymore.

He looked at everyone 'Kainene and Nathan aint siblings'

Everyone looked.

THE END.

EPILOGUE
Inside his one room apartment, bright onuwa is lying face down on his bed covered with an old bedspread that seriously needs to be replaced with a new one. He sighed as he looked around his barely furnished apartment. Saved for the 12 inches television and the now worn out curtains that was given to him by his younger sister when she graduated 5 years ago from the university, and a wall hanger where he neatly handed his clothes, the room was really nothing to write home about. He sighed again, and dragged his small frame from the bed, and reached for his towel and his bucket of water near the door. He is already late for his afternoon shift and segun will definitely be mad.
'abeg make he vex!' to go work today just tire me' he silently grumbled.
20 minutes later he wore his work clothes and set out for the hospital where he works as a mortuary attendant. Yes! He takes care of dead bodies for a living, but who cares! So far he dey receive salary, he can work anywhere.

'oboy you nor dey try oh' I nor tell you say my pikin dey go back school today and I go need to go bank before I reach house make I for give am chop money?' segun accosted him.
'baba shegs nor vex abeg na hold up cause am'
'na so u dey always talk', any way dem just bring now person come, he dey table there, try prepare and find space put am.' I don go'.

' I hear sir'.
Bright hummed a low tune to himself as he prepared to work on the body before him.

Hmmmmmm' hmmmm' the barely audible groan came. Bright stopped what he was doing and listened, no sound came.
' I don dey hear spirit abi na wetin?
He continued cleaning the body and the strange sound came again, this time low but still audible enough for him to hear'
Nnnneenne... nnnnneeennee,!
Bright flew to the door, and stopped in his tracks,then he slowly came back to the table and observed the figure lying before him. Though bloodied, but very good looking nonetheless and in a flash a finger twitched. That was all bright needed to know the the body before him is still alive but unconscious.
He raced towards the hospital complex as fast a his legs could carry him shouting ' nurse come oh, doctor, nurse!
Les than a minute saw the nurses running out of their station towards the mortuary.


3 MONTHS LATER
Knock knock' Nathan looked up from the novel he was reading,'yes come in please' his face brightened when he saw who it was at the door. 'God how he loves this woman!' she looked exceptionally beautiful today, especially in her maternity gown. Looking at her already protuding tummy gave him the butterflies in his stomach. He can't even explain the feeling in his heart, knowing that in another few weeks, his daughter will be born. He can't wait to meet her.
' hi baby' how are you feeling today?
'aw c'mon love, you know I am better now, you are all the therapy I need!'

Yea I know' but we still need u to get better so we can take you home' by the way kaka says hi, she will be coming back next week with dave' you know their wedding is already around the corner, so they are trying to put finishing touches to their preparations'
'ah yes! I hope she is coming back with the baby stuffs i asked her to get for our baby'

'she nor try am sef, if not dat her flight go return back to france'

'what about mum?

Yea she is on her way here, I left her at home preparing peppersoup for you.
BTW the doc says you will be discharged next week' can't wait to have you back home my love'

Me too baby' and once I'm out we are going to the registry to get married, just the two of us, I don't anything else to jinx our wedding plans joor'


Baby anywhere you want make we marry I'm there ohhh, I just don't want to be in this life without you in it.

And we are going to the bahamas for our honeymoon'
Yea baby' kainene jumped excitedly on the bed and hugged Nathan fiercely.

I love you baby and can never live without you'
I love you too my sweeti..ah!
What is it my love?'
The baby kicked again' I'm sure she can't wait to meet the best daddy in the whole world.
They both laughed and nene kicked off her flats and joined him on the bed. Nathan gently rubbed her stomach, while the baby kicked in response.

Life is indeed beautiful when you are with the one you love, he silently thought to himself.
He is with the love of his life, and his life is beautiful.



The End.





(chumzypinky abeg nor vex say I edit the ending, I am a sucker for happy endings and I nor go fit imagine dis kain beautiful tory end for tragedy. Good job dear and can't wait to read another of your work.
Happy sunday.

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Re: Red Ashes by wizsolzy(m): 10:09am On Mar 05, 2017
gratitude and appreciation are important facets of our lives. There have been so many writers (especially d female folks) who have shared their wisdom and their knowledge with us." mummy chumzypinky, rachealfst Nd others too numerous to mention.... I know am one of d must hilarious readers here. always derailing d story with many pictures. mummy chumzypinky I want to say am sowi. but u should know dat without me Nd ikombe, Toshiba49ja d film no go sweet.... hmmmmm dat my frofrem sister pwety no Prettyhurts d film done end ... mummy chumzypinky thanks for the knowledge u shared. even though am always joking. I was reading Nd learning also....mk I carry my chair go bibijay film hall. ... mummy chumzypinky sup kwis

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Re: Red Ashes by TheBlessedMAN: 10:14am On Mar 05, 2017
Warfibabe:
EPILOGUE
Inside his one room apartment, bright onuwa is lying face down on his bed covered with an old bedspread that seriously needs to be replaced with a new one. He sighed as he looked around his barely furnished apartment. Saved for the 12 inches television and the now worn out curtains that was given to him by his younger sister when she graduated 5 years ago from the university, and a wall hanger where he neatly handed his clothes, the room was really nothing to write home about. He sighed again, and dragged his small frame from the bed, and reached for his towel and his bucket of water near the door. He is already late for his afternoon shift and segun will definitely be mad.
'abeg make he vex!' to go work today just tire me' he silently grumbled.
20 minutes later he wore his work clothes and set out for the hospital where he works as a mortuary attendant. Yes! He takes care of dead bodies for a living, but who cares! So far he dey receive salary, he can work anywhere.

'oboy you nor dey try oh' I nor tell you say my pikin dey go back school today and I go need to go bank before I reach house make I for give am chop money?' segun accosted him.
'baba shegs nor vex abeg na hold up cause am'
'na so u dey always talk', any way dem just bring now person come, he dey table there, try prepare and find space put am.' I don go'.

' I hear sir'.
Bright hummed a low tune to himself as he prepared to work on the body before him.

Hmmmmmm' hmmmm' the barely audible groan came. Bright stopped what he was doing and listened, no sound came.
' I don dey hear spirit abi na wetin?
He continued cleaning the body and the strange sound came again, this time low but still audible enough for him to hear'
Nnnneenne... nnnnneeennee,!
Bright flew to the door, and stopped in his tracks,then he slowly came back to the table and observed the figure lying before him. Though bloodied, but very good looking nonetheless and in a flash a finger twitched. That was all bright needed to know the the body before him is still alive but unconscious.
He raced towards the hospital complex a fast a his legs could carry him shouting ' nurse come oh, doctor, nurse!
Les than a minute saw the nurses running out of their station towards the mortuary.
wow! I so much love this sequel.. So u b mortuary agent... Now Nathan is alive... Chumzypinky... I told u so... Pls dnt u dare come anywhere near this wonderful sequel with ur blood sucking pen o...

MADAM, u too much jare.. I was about to check my dictionary 4 d right words to describe u 4 quoting a whole update, buh i quickly tucked d dico aside when i started realizing that Common sense Was not far from ur Post..



I cork my Gun 4 u o, Mr Woman... Take am... Gbosa! Gbosa!! Gbosa!!!

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Re: Red Ashes by Warfibabe(f): 10:38am On Mar 05, 2017
TheBlessedMAN:
wow! I so much love this sequel.. So u b mortuary agent... Now Nathan is alive... Chumzypinky... I told u so... Pls dnt u dare come anywhere near this wonderful sequel with ur blood sucking pen o...

MADAM, u too much jare.. I was about to check my dictionary 4 d right words to describe u 4 quoting a whole update, buh i quickly tucked d dico aside when i started realizing that Common sense Was not far from ur Post..



I cork my Gun 4 u o, Mr Woman... Take am... Gbosa! Gbosa!! Gbosa!!!
thanks dear go read am again. I already edited.

Can't imagine a beautiful story ending up in tragedy.

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Re: Red Ashes by Chumzypinky(f): 11:46am On Mar 05, 2017
Lol... Warfibabe and TheBlessedMAN, una no go kill me oo, lol. No be small sequel abi na epilogue, i enjoyed it sha. Me too i'm a sucker for happy endings...
Re: Red Ashes by wizsolzy(m): 12:04pm On Mar 05, 2017
preciousuweh:

No wonder the oza oza blood is in you *****winks. Runs to carry broom in case of you know na*****
if ah shoot u ehhhh

Re: Red Ashes by Olusojisorunmu(m): 4:49pm On Mar 05, 2017
What a story, what a writer! I just couldn't find the right words to describe this piece. More wisdom and understanding to u ma.....
Re: Red Ashes by BlizzydoDo(f): 5:28pm On Mar 05, 2017
A great read.
Re: Red Ashes by Chumzypinky(f): 6:02pm On Mar 05, 2017
Olusojisorunmu:
What a story, what a writer! I just couldn't find the right words to describe this piece. More wisdom and understanding to u ma.....
tanx dear
Re: Red Ashes by ikombe: 6:49pm On Mar 05, 2017
So na so this sweet story end cry

No happy ending . Isalrite

Mummy Chumzypinky you do well. God bless you for such an intriguing write up.

Re: Red Ashes by Queenbee123: 7:48pm On Mar 05, 2017
TheBlessedMAN:
Sequel to RED ASHES



Me- (faces Chumzypinky)

To what END!.. I say TO WHAT FORKING END do u av to do diz? Mrs CHUMZYPINKY?

because of the retreival of one stewpid 8gb memory thats full of 'ASSUMPTIONS' U took d life of an innocent? Ehn? Ok.. I dey come, make i bash ur characters first..



Me-(turns to MummyM) Madam Mabel... U see say na u kil ur own pikin? Only if u had kept ur mouth shut just for 6 more hours, i hav a feeling ur son might stil b alive.. Buh instead, u decided to let loose the gate of hell by running ur mouth like tap water...


Me - (turns to Kainene) And to u Kainene, U see ur life? I don dey expect u to do sometin unforgivable right frm the genesis of this story, buh instead u choose to do the damaging and unthinkable at the 90+added time mins of Red ashes.. Ah, u be commited Mugu..

Drop Gun, u no drop... Drop gun, u no drop... Drop gun, u no drop... Until u took d life of ur childs father? Av told u several times that, Thugery life, doesn't pay... Now u av killed him... Ur eye don clear.. Now go and marry the corpse o... U diz essential idiot.. U wan cry? Walahi, if i hear one cry 4 ur Mouth, i go give dat empty skull of urz a heavy Reset to factory settings Knock that wil send ur memory back to madness.. Stupid girl of a shameless father.. *hisses*



Me - (turns to Chucks) wait, shebi u suppose don die b4? Wetin u stil dey find? Everytin gud about this great story started falling apart, d moment u signed a contract with Chumzypinky to ruin peoples life... I wonder how much she offerred u, to av made u agreed to torment peoples life like diz.. Well, its like Death don forget u, maybe Death's stil grieving abt Arsenal's loss to Liverpool, thats why he forgets that u are next on his list..

once he kills u, pls i want u to do me a favour.. JUST STAY DEAD, cos if i hear say ur ugly ghost stil dey disturb people, wetin i go use ur eye see eh? U no go like am.. *hisses*



Me- (turns to Myra) Myra.. I have just 3 words for u.. THUNDER FIRE YOU (IJN)


ME- (Back to Chumzypinky) I just av one Question 4 u.. Ans it well, and u might av a chance of going scott free with all d crimes u and ur pen av both committed truout diz story..

The Question is, WHERE DID U GET THE GUN U GAVE KAINENE?

Wow, wow, I fucking love this.
Standing ovation to you man
I can't stop laughing

I don travel out of this country before cos of the ending of this story, was just peeping through the air port and I fucking saw this.

Weldon Sir
Re: Red Ashes by Azeequeen(f): 7:57pm On Mar 05, 2017
Chumzypinky:

i luv ur style

The Doctor came out of the ward and stared at them-Kaka,Nene,Mabel and Chuks unsure of how to break the news to them.

'What happened to him?' Mabel spoke first.

'Well,we Doctors only try but the ultimate healing belongs to God. You know by the time you brought him here,he already lost so much blood...

'And what? Just go straight to the point and tell us...

'We lost him' The Doctor blurted out and left their presence almost immediately.

Mabel screamed.

Kaka rushed to her side.

Chuks had an heart attack,slumped and died immediately.

Nene insouciant.


Four days later

'Nene, why are you doing this to yourself? Why? You can't continue like this for the sake of your baby,yourself and mummyM. You've refused to eat anything since,you are not even talking to anybody. Kainenechukwu,please be happy for Nathan...' Kaka continued saying while Nene just stared into space. A knock distracted her,'come in',she said. Then came in Jolade.

'Nene,the Lord told me Nathan is not dead' Jolade said turning to look at her.

For the first time in four days,something piqued Nene's interest as she turned to look at Jolade.

'Where is he? Has he been buried?' 'No,he is still at the mortuary' Kaka replied.
'Let's go' and together they left.

On getting to the mortuary,Jolade spoke to the person in charge and explained the situation to him and he allowed them in. When they got in and saw Nathan's corpse,Jolade couldn't help but pity Nene.

Pray. The Spirit said.

They started praying. They prayed for hours non-stop yet nothing happened. It got to a point that the attendants in the mortuary asked them to keep quiet but they didn't.

Praise. The Spirit said again.

They started praising again and nothing happened. Nene herself was at the verge of losing hope but God brought out an edifice of hope from the remnants of her past.

A bright light shone from heaven upon Nathan's corpse and there was a mixture of lightening and thunder from heaven and with loud shriek,Nathan cried out 'Thank You Lord'.

The whole mortuary was in chaos. 'This is another Lazarus,Dead body rose again...' filled the air.

There and then,Nene let it all out. She started crying.

TBC

Maam chumpzypinky,so sorry if this would annoy you

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Re: Red Ashes by Azeequeen(f): 8:41pm On Mar 05, 2017
A week later


'Lord,it is only You that can do it,yes,You've done it and we say it is marvellous in our sight,therefore,take all the glory in Jesus' Name...In Jesus unfailing Name we have prayed'. 'Amen' they all chorused as Kelvin completed the prayers.

It was a full house. Nene sat beside Nathan and rested her head on his shoulder while Nathan held her hands firmly but yet tenderly. It was so obvious that she was the happiest woman on earth. Kelvin and Jolade sat st the other side of the couch while Kaka sat with Mabel opposite them. It was indeed a great reunion with Christ present in their lives. They had lunch in Kelvin's place and were catching up on old times when an some set of people arrived. Jolade's mum and her siblings. She rushed to her with tears on her face. 'Jolade,I'm sorry,I know I have been such a bad mother,please forgive me...' 'Mum,I forgave you a long time ago,it is okay' Jolade replied genuinely.

'Please,help me to beg Mabel too...'

'I already forgave you too' Mabel said smiling.

'Same here' Kelvin and Nathan replied simultaneously.


'My fiancée and I have decided to drop the charges against Myra,let's just leave her alone' Nathan said.

'You sure say Nene gree??'

'C'mon,I did' Nene replied smiling shyly looking at Nathan who in turn caressed her cheeks. He looked at her and saw the changes in her. The old Nene will never agree with that,over her dead body.

He chuckled softly. 'Baby,what is it?' Nene asked. 'Just thinking about the old you' Nathan replied. Nene was about to talk when Kaka spoke out.

'Nene,you need to know something. Although,everyone is aware but it is not right to put you in the dark,you have step siblings'. Chidinma and her children came in looking at Nene intently for her reaction.

Nene smiled 'I'm not surprised,it's what my father is capable of doing'. Everybody heaved a sigh of relieve as Nene opened her arms to receive them.

'We are one big family'. Mabel said smiling.

'Yes,we are'. They all replied.


Epilogue
Nathan and Nene had their wedding in the same church. Afterwards,they gave birth to a bouncing baby boy who was a carbon copy of Nathan.

Kaka and Davidson also got married and lived happily together after.

MozB spent the next five years searching for his life partner but eventually got after he seek for Nathan's and Nene's forgiveness.

Chidinma got married to a man who loved and cherished her and she. lived happily with her husband and children thereafter.

Mabel stayed alone with Nathan and Nene always checking on her with her grandchild.

Amen was sentenced to eighteen years imprisonment with hard labour.

THE END

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Re: Red Ashes by TheBlessedMAN: 9:58pm On Mar 05, 2017
Queenbee123:


Wow, wow, I fucking love this.
Standing ovation to you man
I can't stop laughing

I don travel out of this country before cos of the ending of this story, was just peeping through the air port and I fucking saw this.

Weldon Sir
i remain loyal to u o... Pls feel free to masturbate with me..

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Re: Red Ashes by Lankyannie(f): 10:36pm On Mar 05, 2017
WOW WOWER WOWEST.So babes lyk warfebabe and azequeen dy dz oux i kun dy beg mummy pinky 4 happily ever afta okwa ya?4dz 2daful sequel u guys gave me eeeh,i go slap army 4una on ur birthday.ma baez ma boos.ayam nw a follower of u ppl frm nw on,u guys rili gt talent.prayn 4more fountain of wisdom 2shower on u guys.ma slay mamas,may ur love lyfs be lyk NATHNEN'S,Amen.P.S:Chummzypinky coman see d foreva afta crews ooo we slay pass buharified naija.

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Re: Red Ashes by Ellyne(f): 10:38pm On Mar 05, 2017
Chumzypinky:
lol, i hope u dnt end in tragedy sha
Ahn! Mummy Chumzy no be wetin i mean o. I meant fictional stories not reality
Re: Red Ashes by Phunmmielurlar: 10:40pm On Mar 05, 2017
Ntn to tlk again sef,I don cum late n pple don already do justice to d matter.....y mummychummzy go do us lyk DT,cum dey ask me who kill Nathan,Na u nd ur pen Na,who else!

Wafibabe 4 dt sequel wa u do ehn *chop kiss*....u do beta justice to our story,na so e suppose end!,ama sucker 4 hapi endings jawe!

Mummychummzy, wehdone ma!...hope ull b dropin anoder mnd blowing story soon,sha mention me anytym!

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Re: Red Ashes by Nobody: 10:50pm On Mar 05, 2017
WOW...red ashes was da bomb!one of m bestest NL tori ever.and chumzypinky*just so u know*i feel like using dat broom on on my profile pix to whip yhu... >:-( Waffibabe n azeequeen,u guys saved maami pinky frm serious beating 2day

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