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semid4lyfe: Just passing by. . .

*Grabs his shirt and sings* #Pass me not oh gentle semid....hear my humble cry....when on all thou art calling...do not pass me by#

spade: Hakeem, Cleo, Bimp and Nando have conspired to nominate Dillish tomorrow.

I predict Cleo's popularity crashing terribly for choosing to align herself with that man-child Hakeem. Whatever did Dillish do to this vindictive prriick?

So glad Melvin ain't phucking with these people.

Cleo is an ar.seho.le if all she wants to do is promote infantile propaganda of Hakeem.
So, Nando and Bimp too agreed to this? hmmmm....I will wait till tomorrow to vent my anger but Dillish is my favourite female so far in the house, closely followed by Beverly. hakeem....leave her alone! !!! She doesn't care about you! !!

VillageBoi: I no dey read another persin 'love letter' or look in a woman's handbag - it's bad manners! lol

lol...you cant be serious. abeg read well well and lets hear ur comment/criticism...forget manners...and dis is nt a love letter. lol

OP, u try small for d second joke....but y dem dry like dis?

^^^^^^^^ Don't mind him. He has chosen to reserve his comment...lol

StateOfMind: The thing tire me o. Even the 30sth year olds are not spared of this immaturity syndrome. I respected and liked this oneal of a guy..I thought he was full of wisdom and maturity but I stopped the day he started coupling up and intensely cuddling feza after advising cleo not to be with hakeem giving good reasons like someone who was sound upstairs. Hypocrite!...Very annoying couple...they'd read bible together with his hands across feza's bosom like they are praying for an enlargement.


And as if that isn't enough, he's been going on in circles laying some annoying rules and nagging.

#TeamNoone

Ahahahahahahah!!!!!! STATE OF MIND!!!! LMAO!!!!!

StateOfMind welcome back ooo...I see u.

^^^^^^ Thanks.

But why is Feza then playing with Oneal's feelings since her target is Melvin?

This is why I like Dillish so far. She is self-secured...not desperate for a man to hang unto until she reaches her final bus stop. She didnt stick with Nando because he was available (he disturbed her in d first week) and even Elikem. ..even when she had not met Melvin.

But dont yall think the reason why many gehs in d house seem to be eyeing melvin is that he hasnt actually settled with one person? Thats what I think. So, dem dey get hope. But for how long would he play this card?

^^^^^ Abeg make una no vex for my argument. Me too wan learn ni oh.

tony ayo: dialogue is one aspect that makes a character to be out of character. Sometimes when you write the dialogues of ur characters as a conversation, u find it hard to stop the flow, that's when u might mistake the right dialogues of ur character.

I disagree with your post bro. The bolded even makes your message confusing...though I got it. Not to derail the thread with my own argument, I wud let sleeping dogs lie.























But btw , you mentioned smth in ur post that when writing a dialogue, you are carried away with the flow and bla bla....bro, dat shouldn't be. I rest my case.






























Em...but seriously , you ve not yet mastered writing in characters which you claim a 10-year old newbie in scriptwriting wud av grasped. Your dialogue shouldnt carry you away with its flow (when it is not river Jordan) but rather, you should carry your dialogue.

tony ayo: Mr sholay, i really appreciate ur comment. For d characterizing aspect of the script, a 10yrs old who is a newbie in scriptwriting already know dat u must be the character to really write about him/her. What village boi pin pointed was that i'm putting the wrong dialogue in the characters mouth, shit happens. I wrote this script in 10hrs (5hrs per day), so i was expecting such comments from village boi, that's why i kind of invited him.

Oh...I see.










_{I thought Villageboi said ur characters were 'out of character' and not just about the dialogue. Do you know what that means?}

But is Dillish really 22? I don't believe jare...shez too mature for dat age.

What won't happen before the world eventually comes to an end?

Nando's immaturity somtyms overshadows his carefree and naughty attitude.

So, Selly thinks Melvin likes Maria but because d latter has a bf outside the house they cnt go further? Is nando that dumb to notice how she has been following the theme on Melvin but he no look her side?

I dnt believe Nando is married.

Maria is getting delusional.

But Selly fall hand small sha...tot she wud still hold on a bit...congrats to Nando...lol

^^^^^^^ Tnx.

This Yuzedo is as sick as The Joker.

VillageBoi: I forgot it was Friday. I did actually get home around 5pm but was straight out the door within 90 seconds... didn't get back till very, very late. You can see I posted that @ 3AM!

You no sabi say you be hot cake and u don get ministry for this section. God preserve you for us...

Na wa oo...Kslib...you fit yab lazarus make him rise after one day...kai!

Bro, I tried downloading your script but it couldn't open on my phone (and my laptop get as e be for now ).

But I would infer some things from what Villageboi has said (and would try not to repeat all he has said so I don't end up writing an epistle like he did )

First, I commend you for this effort and your readiness to even improve on your craft. But please, since you are a Nigerian (I assume you are going by ur moniker 'Tony ayo') and even a yoruba, try including our "tiwa-n-tiwa" names in your scripts. They may be yoruba/ibo/hausa names. It instantly helps to mentally draw the movie closer to your Nigerian/African audience (I assume you are not writing for Steven Spielberg yet), even if the story is not that Nigerian-like.

Instead of Shanice, lets have Chioma; instead of Bruce Wayne, give me Lawrence Anini . Let white people too see our movies and discuss characters like Kola, Kemi, Dauda etc. It goes a long way IMO.

Also, the part where Villageboi complained about 'the characters being out of character' is very vital and can crumble a very solid plot since the audience gets confused on what each character stands for.

As a fellow scriptwriter, I explore the advantage of also being an actor. I act all the characters mentally while writing and put myself in the character's position. For example, " if I was Clara, and I've been known to be impatient, how do I respond to a friend asking me to wait for her while it's taking her eternity to get dressed?"

That's how I think before I write each statement that slithers from the mouth of each character and all this would help dialogue-wise.

My advice is restricted 'cos I couldn't open the document but I hope this helps. Your best is yet to come.



_{But your title get as e be oo...e.r.oti.ca}

fork adict: Why should 2 grown dudes lie on a narrow bed as that? Whatever for? Omo, those guys are suspects abeg

Well...it's all done in the spirit of the game...

Chrisbenogor: Did you mean what's wrong with Melvin?

No...smth is really wrong with Maria. Can't she read body language? Melvin doesnt want to hurt her feelings but hez nt dat into her. Make she park well before Africa uproots her like elephant grass.

fork adict: Abeg na angelo & bassey wan sleep for the same bed o. E gbami ke

Why should we 'gba e or ra e kale'? Or what are you thinking? Spoonaddict.

Sexily Endowed: Lol guys can you not see this girl is playing the game. Nando thinks he is fooling her but i think it's rather her who is using him to her advantage as he is the head of house. They were kissing under the blanket, they did not have sex. This girl is dangerous.

*Yimu* If Selly crazy, Nando sef na from yaba left. We would see who's playing who as the game progresses.

miss sparkle: Like really? Selly sha..*smh*...I see a new betty n bolt in selly and nando.

I no agree oh. Nando is far too unserious to be committed and 'husbandize' selly the way Bolt dominated Betty.

I won't be surprised if he nominates her later on. Nando wants to satisfy his konji...finish. Tym will tell sha. It's Hakeem and Cleo dat may bcom Bolt and Betty.

safarigirl: Ricco's win happened like Keagan's- there wasn't a better choice. Besides, employing the words of Oga forkadict, BBA only got serious in season 4, all the others na wash, if in doubt, tell me where all the competitors and winners are presently

Really? HAZEL wasn't a better choice? I totally disagree with your postulate.

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