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Psalmwise:
THESE GUY IS D da BOMB
Dy baba ride on...,u re a masterpiece....sorry u re a master
Majestically #siping my beans.....munching my bread while I wait for an update...,

no mess here o

SexySapphire:
Yaaaay...thanks for deciding to continue the story. May God bless you for this decision candy. Pls mention me when you get to where we last stopped, can't afford to miss any bit of it.

ermh
Tobi go come back fully loaded

lol

racing to were?

May Addmu visit you in you dream for not updating for more than a week.

Ermh...

Were would i even start self? ( after spending a whooping 12hours to read this work, with work stress and other things ).

It's been a lovely ride here. I was pausing and suspending the day i would read this story but God made it for me to do it today, i think i would Thank Him for giving me the motivation to do that today.

Special thanks to my ba3 for not failing and also to etisalate for an error free time.

My observation
1. Some events look un-real and un-fictious. Ranging from the fiqht, (the torn clothes and the unclothedness. It would be a siqht to behold but haba; the unclothedness spoil show). Just check that part and see how you work on it.

2. The way the Rev. Sisters exposed the whole activity in church. Sounds unreal tho, i never fathom to behold such scene niether do i want any one to experience it. Na obodo naija , sum1 to clown another person in a short period of time was ridiculous.

3. Punctuation and sentence construction. I came across some point were you failed to utilize "a" and "an" well. And also wrong use of words and punctuation changed the meaning of some words.

My praises
1. I love the way the character are, they expose the realness of life. Many families experience them, (me not being an exception esp. that josephine, i pray make God expose 1woman like that )

2. Your time and megabyte wasted in updating even when the comments were not coming.

Nb: My views oh, nobody should counter me. Just read and talk about it on another day, as every body is entiled to his opinions.
Once again than you Fambeze

my go read the story first.

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not updating today

Evangelio:
I do not see this as a competition at all, though we rep our teams.
I perfectly understand what the thread is all about, the Lady made a suggestion and gave voice to her worry, which many may have bt have nt voiced, i threw in my 2 pence.

i wanted quoting her not you. My apologies

yu on whatsapp cyber show? I finishd typing the explanation only tryin to post it but got it lost.


Its just like a reported speech

Cybershow:
Yes we nid topic

check previous posts, it was postd yesterday

thronekid:
Derailing ke?, anway, Topic?

was posted yesterday

Evangelio:
Seconded, let a panel of Judges be set up, can't we invite some good writers on NL to judge our work?
I believe they can do a good job and divepen can still be part of the writing.

It's not a competition as you are taking it. It is a kind of class for helping. He does'nt have the final say to the rating that's why he said everone rate and give reasons, then he would be the one to do the mathematics in it.

The topics\question of the day, i think everyone is entitiled to bringing his\her own and we work on them. No need for panel of judge, it's a kind of class that help's each one of us here.

Have a thorouqh read and study the rules and motives of this group and see throuqh the idea's.

Mornq oh, thronekid yu de derail this thread oh. Go and start typing (time no de again)

shoyemiayodeji:
i swear u b wizard ooooooo............how u take know?

shildren of nowadays.

thronekid:
Done already, now, lets face the rating thing, u think?

bro why two updates na? I guess the rule did'nt permit that. Your mission to kickouras.s is somehow o.

Divepen what do yu say about that?

Liza oh. I de likinq but yur heartlessness go be the barrier.

Julie more grease to yur elbow, how has work been doing you? Hope you coping well. Its not easy

I think two people from each group would do for the rating.
How do you see it peeps?

Was that when de gave birth to you?

shoyemiayodeji:
the quote whey I don quote since 1996 nah m you u dey complain abt in 2015?

i sense that you haven't been throuqh skul thats why you did that.

The journey from my LASU to my lodge have been a type of ride i never hoped for. With the heavy traffic that early evening and the scotching sun which made the atmosphere unbearable, looking around in utmost dismay at the road officials who were taking time with their check-up. It was clear that their motive, being on the road at this hour and time of the month, to extort money from the motorist who would use the road that hour.

Enduring their time wasting, i was huming to the tune of 'Akon's sunny day' being played by the radio of my black Volkswagen Golf Mk3, which i recently got as a birthday gift from my mummy. I cared less about the officials whom seemed to be enjoying what so ever they claimed to be doing.

With few cars ahead of me, i made up my mind not to 'donate to their ministry' as they fondly referred to it. It was not my habit not to give, but i don't know the devil that took over me to have such thought in me.

A quick glance at the two officials, on their navy blue shirt neatly stalked-in to the trousers and a the mill-colour baret in which they wore, i lowered the volume of audio device not to increase the bill on myself. I greeted them and the officer whom seemed to be the superior spoke;

"this one that you are alone, hope all is well, i hope your have your contribution" admist smile show casing his cigeratte stained teeth.

"oga sir, na student i be o. Na only one hundred i get here and i wan use am buy sugar and groundnut take soak garri" i replied, with an ''am-sorry-nothing-today tone ''

"erh, bring am my find change give you something inside, just roger them boys, you see say i gat take care of my self" bringing out a packet of Benson & hedges to show me that he needed to buy that .

"oga sir, you know say boys them loyal. Make i move na.."

Was cut shut when an SUV lost control on the other land and crashed into an electric pole wire. The officer who was talking to me was running to the spot were the car crashed, forgeting that their was another officer at the other end, i made to take off and heed to the left hand side of the adjourning road when the other officer ran in front of my car and lay on the bonnet of it like was his bend shouting;

"Oya bring the hundred naira, i get change!"

My rating

Thronekid- 4point
Chinweblinkz- 6point
theorbiters- 7point


For the time being, until after the deadline i would post reasons because of those that have not posted.