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Re: Red Ashes by smizel(m): 10:23pm On Feb 21, 2017
Ayoomolabake:

undecided so his telling her "Sorry, am not usually friends with rude personalities" is what?
she has a rude personality truly. Even her frnd confirms it.
Re: Red Ashes by smizel(m): 10:27pm On Feb 21, 2017
mizchoc:


true kainene over reacted on the jolade ish
buh thr point is...when kainene realised her wrongs, Nathan walked out and gave her ideas that someone else had taken her place. u cant totally blame kainene cos s h e hated men until she met Nathan...

my only worry is the baby on board
all wat u said iz true bt if she stil luvz him, she wouldnt behave nonchanlantly in the car.
Re: Red Ashes by Nobody: 10:31pm On Feb 21, 2017
smizel:
she has a rude personality truly. Even her frnd confirms it.
There is no disputing the fact that she has a rude personality but he turning down her offer of friendship sure made her feel rejected.
Re: Red Ashes by heemah(f): 10:32pm On Feb 21, 2017
mizchoc:


true kainene over reacted on the jolade ish
buh thr point is...when kainene realised her wrongs, Nathan walked out and gave her ideas that someone else had taken her place. u cant totally blame kainene cos s h e hated men until she met Nathan...

my only worry is the baby on board
Pls tell them oo. Men be supporting each other's wrong doings. U know how many times Nene has tried to make amends and Nathan will walk out on her?
Her initial orientation about men is different so u can't really blame her for her attitudes. They should just do and make up jaweee. Them be prolonging dia fight

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Re: Red Ashes by dasilver20(f): 10:40pm On Feb 21, 2017
ikombe:
Women can form for africa i swear undecided

Hmmm forming is part of lyf na

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Re: Red Ashes by smizel(m): 10:46pm On Feb 21, 2017
Ayoomolabake:

There is no disputing the fact that she has a rude personality but he turning down her offer of friendship sure made her feel rejected.
hmm... It is true bt if she can handle dis issue going on btw them maturely, she shldnt have bring out her old self again wen nathan is trying to mend it.
Re: Red Ashes by smizel(m): 10:49pm On Feb 21, 2017
Her initial orientation about men is different so u can't really blame her for her attitudes. They should just do and make up jaweee. Them be prolonging dia fight[/quote] nyc write up

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Re: Red Ashes by smizel(m): 10:52pm On Feb 21, 2017
madam chumzypinky, wetin happen naw. U dont drop updates lyk b4.
Re: Red Ashes by gtin(m): 11:00pm On Feb 21, 2017
kellyoneinamill:

even if she did not move on, she is learning how to live without him. she cant keep going back and forth in her life. if he is staying, he should say so and be definite about it. remember she also has a kid to think of now not just herself.
Is it really possible for she to live without him, wen he is d father of her unborn child? Dnt u tink he has d ryt to knw abt d baby on the way? She is jst been selfish

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Re: Red Ashes by smizel(m): 11:02pm On Feb 21, 2017
gtin:

Is it really possible for she to live without him, wen he is d father of her unborn child? Dnt u tink he has d ryt to knw abt d baby on the way? She is jst been selfish
bros, na true u talk.
Re: Red Ashes by Nobody: 12:19am On Feb 22, 2017
That chuks of a man really needs a serious brain switching to restore factory setting beating. As for Nathan and Kaniene, I just dey watch una two for 6D for one corner.

Madam chumzypinky oya proceed.

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Re: Red Ashes by everton4life(m): 12:58am On Feb 22, 2017
Chumzypinky:
NATHAN.
I perceived the familiar cologne and i turned instantly. Even before i turned, i knew it was her. No one else - Kainene.

I wasnt sure she had seen me as she was busy picking her favourite cereal. She had grown robust, more rounded and wider hips than i knew her to be. Evidence of good living, i thought.

She still looked beautiful as usual, dressed in a casual pencilled, body-hugging, shape revealing sky blue jean with a black short front, back long chiffon blouse. I wondered why she really loved chiffon. A simple yet elegant gold coloured sandals graced her beautiful feet coupled with her nails which was polished red. Her weave was long and free, though i wasnt really seeing her face, i knew her make-up was light and simple, she looked exotic. Behind.

Just when i noticed she was about turning towards my direction, i returned my gaze to the perfumes i was purchasing.

'sorry excuse me there' i heard her voice, i knew she wasnt talking to me, an attendant nearby i guessed 'sorry, i cant seem to find Lucky Charms, i've picked my Cornflakes, but the Lucky Charms, it seems you guys ran out of it, yeah?'

'so sorry ma'am, i'll just check the warehouse' and he was gone.

I stood where i was wondering if i should just talk to her. My mother's words kept ringing in my head "love isnt perfect, you learn to make it perfect".

I closed my eyes and inhaled deeply. I turned and just then, we bumped into each other.

'heyy, watch it!' she said before looking up. I saw surprise in her eyes but she masked it quickly 'sorry, i wasnt looking'

'there's nothing to be sorry about' i tried to smile 'whats up?'

She seemed a bit surprised that i asked her that 'i'm cool' she forced a smile.

'how have you been?'

'i'm...i've been fine. Nathan' this time her smile looked genuine.

'what about Kamsi?'

'she's fine'

I reached out to her and held her cheeks 'how have you been coping?'

'i've been coping just fine, thank you' she looked down shyly 'what about your mum?'

I removed my hand and shrugged 'she's fine. You...'

'hey Nene, are you done picking what you wanted?' a voice said behind her. I looked up to see the guy with whom she had been sitting with at Rodinia.

She turned 'eh...MozB, i...yeah, uhm, not really, i...' she stuttered. So this was MozB? The guy who ruined Kaka's wedding?

'hello' the guy came forward and stretched his hand 'i'm guessing you must be Nathan? The guy who broke her heart and abandoned her when she needed him the most, right?'

She gasped 'MozB?'

'nice meeting you anyway'

I looked at his outstrectched hand and i scoffed 'nice meeting you too. I never knew you were the childhood friend she told me about who seduced Kamsi few weeks to her wedding thereby successfully ruining her wedding. I'd always wanted meeting you wondering what you had that made Kaka go gaga'

The dude actually smiled 'i'm a pretty cool guy'

'its really obvious'

'its okay now both of you' Kainene said coming between us 'Moses, i actually dont like the way you addressed my...Nathan. Its uncalled for. That was rude'

'well, i just wanted to be honest' With both hands in his pocket, he shrugged nonchalantly.

'and i appreciate honesty really' i said with a smile, then i held Nene's hand 'can we talk?'

She was about opening her mouth when MozB beat her to it 'Nene? Do you have time for that? Remember we need to stop over at the interior decorator's for your new apartment? Its almost 2 O'clock, there's no time for chitchats'

New apartment?

'you're moving?' i asked.

'uhm...i'm...actually i sold the house. I'm about relocating to one of the houses in my mother's estate'

'why?' i frowned.

'asks a runaway boyfriend' MozB said and i warned him with my eyes. He didnt get it but Kainene did and she in turn warned him with her own eyes.

I reached for her hands and i made her drop the basket containing stuffs she was holding 'sorry, but we've got a lot to talk about' She looked at MozB, then back to me, then we both left the supermarket.

I got into my car and she climbed over the passenger's seat.

I looked at her 'what happened? Why are you moving?'

She looked down 'i cant live alone in such a big house. It would have been better if i had to live with someone else'

'what about Kaka? Why dont you get her to live with you?'

'she's not in town presently'

'what about when she comes back?'

She shook her head 'i already sold the house'

'where's your new address?'

Then she looked at me and this time, i saw something different in her eyes. Something close to defiance 'why do you care?' she threw at me.

I was suddenly suprised.

'Nathan, you made it clear to me that you werent interested in me right? Why then are you suddenly asking me questions about myself?' she scoffed 'do you know why i was actually playing along? Because i wanted to know where this your so-called attention and niceness is going to lead us to. You made it clear that you didnt want to have anything to do with me? Then fine! Stay away from me!'



TBC
cool
Re: Red Ashes by fam24(f): 3:50am On Feb 22, 2017
smizel:
all wat u said iz true bt if she stil luvz him, she wouldnt behave nonchanlantly in the car.

Oh. She should have showed him how much she loves him, and can't live without him ryt? Even when he claimed to have a new girlfriend and she's now a ex.

Sorry, if your ex-girlfriend should be so nice to you, aren't you guys the same people who will want to make advantage of that, and play her or tell your girlfriend she wants to seduce you, she wants you back.

Abeg, guys should learn to drop their ego, the world does not revolve around them

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Re: Red Ashes by fam24(f): 3:59am On Feb 22, 2017
smizel:
hmm... It is true bt if she can handle dis issue going on btw them maturely, she shldnt have bring out her old self again wen nathan is trying to mend it.

Wow. If she can handle this issue..., I thought relationship is abt 2 people, so she's the to handle it maturely by begging or what? How is Nathan trying to mend it o, by pushing her away and coming whenever he feels like, cos he is the man in the relationship ryt?

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Re: Red Ashes by fam24(f): 4:04am On Feb 22, 2017
gtin:

Is it really possible for she to live without him, wen he is d father of her unborn child? Dnt u tink he has d ryt to knw abt d baby on the way? She is jst been selfish

Very possible, do you need the statistics of single mothers in the world. Though, he deserves to know he's expecting a baby, even if it's through writing.

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Re: Red Ashes by Kupaskeybaba(m): 6:55am On Feb 22, 2017
Nath need to b man up and stop play games wt nene's feeling. Wat else doz he want? Dey say mk u chop u say u no want ,dey say mak u trow am away u say smal meat stil dey der! I beg bro Nath man up an tak a stand

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Re: Red Ashes by gtin(m): 6:59am On Feb 22, 2017
fam24:


Very possible, do you need the statistics of single mothers in the world. Though, he deserves to know he's expecting a baby, even if it's through writing.
Thank God we finally agreed on something

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Re: Red Ashes by BurnaKing21: 7:05am On Feb 22, 2017
Like play,like play....we don almost reach 100.....but y nowadayz story 4 nairaland dey long like dix,wen no b season film
Re: Red Ashes by mizchoc(f): 8:32am On Feb 22, 2017
smizel:
all wat u said iz true bt if she stil luvz him, she wouldnt behave nonchanlantly in the car.

it doesn't work that way.... the fact that he's trying to show care for a few seconds in the car doesn't mean she shud just forget about all the trash he's done in past months..
people just have to stop thinking they can just walk in and out of pple's lives anytime and anyhow...
this applies to real life situations too

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Re: Red Ashes by wizsolzy(m): 9:04am On Feb 22, 2017
everton4life:
cool
so u quoted everything becus of cool oh lawd help us lipsrsealed lipsrsealed lipsrsealed lipsrsealed

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Re: Red Ashes by Chumzypinky(f): 9:37am On Feb 22, 2017
Prettyhurts:
To be honest sweerie, I don't like how you update,it wasn't like this when you first started. These days we beg you for an update and is tiring. My humble opinion.
i'm sorry dear, but i expect you to understand nah. Normally i'm supposed to update in d morning and in d night due to my work in the afternun, bt now hubby hardly allows me touch my phone again. Because for the morning update, i would have to wake up early for it, and because of dat, he seizes my phone, and in d nite, he wont allow me hold it, he says i need all d rest i can get. I'm sorry honey, but all this would soon be over. The story's coming to an end

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Re: Red Ashes by BurnaKing21: 9:43am On Feb 22, 2017
Chumzypinky:

i'm sorry dear, but i expect you to understand nah. Normally i'm supposed to update in d morning and in d night due to my work in the afternun, bt now hubby hardly allows me touch my phone again. Because for the morning update, i would have to wake up early for it, and because of dat, he seizes my phone, and in d nite, he wont allow me hold it, he says i need all d rest i can get. I'm sorry honey, but all this would soon be over. The story's coming to an end


d time u take type dix would av been enough 4 an update @least........d way writers dey giv excuses ehn....i evn prefer 2 bliv lie mohammed

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Re: Red Ashes by fam24(f): 9:54am On Feb 22, 2017
gtin:
Thank God we finally agreed on something
Lol. Can you share your opinion abt how Kainene should have gone abt it?

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Re: Red Ashes by fam24(f): 10:06am On Feb 22, 2017
Madam Chumzypinky, you won't see all the comments on the thread now with no regular update o. Later be threatening not to update if the comments did not reach so, so, so, page. And be monitoring those that are viewing, even before one reads, one must have comment, as if na every time one must have something to talk about.
Re: Red Ashes by gtin(m): 10:22am On Feb 22, 2017
fam24:


Lol.
Can you share your opinion abt how Kainene should have gone abt it?
For me i dnt see any way arnd it, she shud hv told abt the baby now he has come to his senses nd gv him her new address for easy to his baby since she has moved on its dat simple
Re: Red Ashes by Chumzypinky(f): 10:38am On Feb 22, 2017
JOLADE.
Getting married to Kelvin was the happiest moment of my life. It was a small wedding, something my mother wasnt happy about. Infact, throughout the small get-together wedding ceremony, she wasnt cheerful at all and i knew it was the presence of Bidemi that made her come.

All along, i never knew what love entailed.

I finally knew what it felt like to love and recieve love in return. I finally understood that love doesnt judge you by your past. That love stands by you no matter the circumstances.

The past few months had been interesting for me. I was due soon. Yes, maybe Kelvin and i rushed things but we had to. The first reason being our love and the second being the fact that the baby was soon to arrive.

Mum wasnt happy. And i knew she wouldnt have agreed had it not been for Bidemi who was close to her heart. Bidemi had shown up few weeks ago. And though she hadnt stated her reason for suddenly coming back, Folake and i knew she was running away from her husband. She came with her kids also.

Folake gave up a furnished apartment for us to reside in while Bidemi bought us a car. Folake used her connections as a senator's ex-wife to get Kelvin a job in a reputable company since he was a graduate.

Qasa relocated to the states and i never saw her again. Even though i told Kelvin about the relationship between the both of us, i was glad she left my life for good.

It was a month now since we got married. And even though i still thought of Nathan once in a while, i knew that whatever i felt towards him had long died. Kelvin was my everything now, my hero, my champion, my all.
The man who stood by me throughout the most trying times of my life.

'honey?' his voice jerked me back to consciousness.

I looked up as his hands circled my face from back. I smiled 'you're back? Welcome'

'what were you thinking about? I just stood here watching you for a while but you made no movement. I was scared you died while sitting' he joked.

I smacked his hands playfully 'you're not serious. You know if i die, you'll suffer as well. And i will die with your child' i placed my hands on my stomach.

'please oo. Even if you must die, make sure you drop my child first' he came over to my front and squatted just before my bulging abdomen, then he kissed it 'how's my baby doing over there?'

'your baby is doing awesome' i replied. Then i suddenly felt like asking, the thought just came to me 'Kels, i just felt i should ask. If..thats when i finally give birth to this child. And...after him, i give birth to yours, i..will he be your first child or your biological one...'

'what are you saying now Jolade?' he cut in immediately 'do you think that when my own child comes, i'm going to bypass our first child for the second? Is that what you're saying?'

'Kels, its not...'

'Lade, please dont ever mention that again. I love you and i love our child as well. I could never, i repeat, i could never bypass the first for the second. I will love them both equally for they are both my children, Lade please dont mention that again'

I just smiled. I thought i saw something in his eyes. Something i couldnt place, but i waved it off 'your food is in the kitchen, should i serve it?'

He nodded and i stood up. I turned to leave when he grabbed my waist and pulled me to himself, he kissed me on my lips 'i love you Jolly. Never you doubt that, no matter what'

I nodded and wrapped my hands around his neck 'i love you my darling' Our lips locked in another kiss.

If only i knew...

TBC

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Re: Red Ashes by ElajRita(f): 10:40am On Feb 22, 2017
Chumzypinky:

i'm sorry dear, but i expect you to understand nah. Normally i'm supposed to update in d morning and in d night due to my work in the afternun, bt now hubby hardly allows me touch my phone again. Because for the morning update, i would have to wake up early for it, and because of dat, he seizes my phone, and in d nite, he wont allow me hold it, he says i need all d rest i can get. I'm sorry honey, but all this would soon be over. The story's coming to an end



Dont mind them jare, take all the time you need, ur hubby is right you need all the rest you can get, if the storu like make e reach nxt year, nobody fit come ur house come beat you...
Re: Red Ashes by Chumzypinky(f): 10:44am On Feb 22, 2017
BurnaKing21:



d time u take type dix would av been enough 4 an update @least........d way writers dey giv excuses ehn....i evn prefer 2 bliv lie mohammed
rili? Is that what you think? Do you think its easy to type an update? Do u think its just about picking up ur fone and start typing anything dat comes to my head?
I dont copy and paste from anywhere, i type directly from my head. Sometimes, when typing, i have to pause to try remembering some things so i dont mix things up.

For example, when typing this last update, i had to rack my brain in order to remember the name of Jolade's sister who lives abroad. At first i tot it was Jennifer, Scholarsticar, Jane, i had to pause and it took me over fifteen minutes to finally remember it was Bidemi, it takes me thirty minutes if not more to type an update and u're telling me the tym i used to type dat 1 would have been enof for an update, what kind of a statement is that?
Re: Red Ashes by Toshiba49ja(m): 10:50am On Feb 22, 2017
Chumzypinky:

rili? Is that what you think? Do you think its easy to type an update? Do u think its just about picking up ur fone and start typing anything dat comes to my head?
I dont copy and paste from anywhere, i type directly from my head. Sometimes, when typing, i have to pause to try remembering some things so i dont mix things up.

For example, when typing this last update, i had to rack my brain in order to remember the name of Jolade's sister who lives abroad. At first i tot it was Jennifer, Scholarsticar, Jane, i had to pause and it took me over fifteen minutes to finally remember it was Bidemi, it takes me thirty minutes if not more to type an update and u're telling me the tym i used to type dat 1 would have been enof for an update, what kind of a statement is that?


Dunoor mind him jhor


Some guys ehn...

Wot dey cannor du faa sad undecided

Re: Red Ashes by Chumzypinky(f): 10:50am On Feb 22, 2017
fam24:
Madam Chumzypinky, you won't see all the comments on the thread now with no regular update o. Later be threatening not to update if the comments did not reach so, so, so, page. And be monitoring those that are viewing, even before one reads, one must have comment, as if na every time one must have something to talk about.
sometimes, the way people talk gets me wondering if God actually gave everybody he created common sense.
U see those times when i actually say i wont update till it gets to so and so page, i'm just using that as an excuse becos i know i wont be available at that particular time. So i'll use that to keep you guys busy till i'm less busy. That doesnt mean that when i'm less busy i wont type even if it hasnt gotten to that particular page.

And even when i type names of people that are viewing without commenting, dos that mean that if dey dont comment, i'll kill dem? Or i'll stop updating? Or do you think my entire life is on nairaland? I'm a very jovial person but i'm also very temperemental, pls dont push me to say things i'm not supposed to say
Re: Red Ashes by Chumzypinky(f): 10:52am On Feb 22, 2017
ElajRita:




Dont mind them jare, take all the time you need, ur hubby is right you need all the rest you can get, if the storu like make e reach nxt year, nobody fit come ur house come beat you...
abi? Thank God people like Wizsolzy and Ikombe do not know my address
Re: Red Ashes by Toshiba49ja(m): 10:53am On Feb 22, 2017
BurnaKing21:



d time u take type dix would av been enough 4 an update @least........d way writers dey giv excuses ehn....i evn prefer 2 bliv lie mohammed

Blivin LIEMohammed ees up to u sad

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