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Then this is one Haiku I composed

LIFE
Life is but a tree
Which often brings forth sweet fruits
But sour one, sometimes.

This thread is the meeting place. Or isn't it okay like that?
Who knows how we can get get a competent publisher for the project.
If we cannot find one on time, that means we shall have no choice but to publish the anthology in an ebook format at lulu.com
What do you guys feel?
Would that work out fine?
Pls post your views.

It seems more pple are getting interested in this stuff. I think we should welcome more suggestions and then get the project rolling. Or what do you feel?

I just came about an idea. I think we the amateur and professional poets of this forum can altogether publish a poetry anthology which will be a co-operative contribution of all the poets in this forum. Different poems from different poets will be collected, screened and the ones found eligible for publication will be published.
Fellows do you think it is a good idea. Will it work? How exactly? Please post your views. This is not a matter of money making, just to get yourself published and your message through to the world through your poetry. Nothing more. Your views are welcome.

Checkout my thread, Beauty and the Dream (revised). I don't have to paste it here again, it is against the admin's rules and regulations.

LIFE

Life is but a tree,
Which often brings forth sweet fruits,
But sour ones, sometimes.

Thanks for the reply, but I posted it for your critiques and not replies that will make my head swoon. Check out my weak points and let me know. I just a budding poet. Thanks.

The shady grove was but a graveyard.
Therein, I sat lonesome as in a coffin to be interred.
The dusk, a bracing breeze was heralding.
My eyes then caught a sylph while spinning
Around, like the earth on its axis. Rubicund
Her face was, like a fresh tomato just ripened.

Her gait, like on a catwalk, I paused to behold.
And her frame made me tremble like a naked kid in the cold.
My mouth gaped open like the morning glory just ere noon.
Fixed I stood as a tree, watching her as she down
The lane like a voyaging ship, gradually disappeared.
"Go after her!" a stimulant from nowhere ordered.

I turned into a dog at that instance,
And like she was a fat bone, I covered the distance.
The supportive wind conveyed me like a feather,
And I became sweat-clad like an ice container.
My love for this sylph, as I neared her, became stronger,
Like that 'tween two magnets being drawn closer.

Lion-heartedly, I approached her about my feelings,
And ere long, we were like two mating frogs, cudddling.
Like a watered blaze, our honeymoon halted abruptly,
I exitted the romantic dreamland untimely.
My eyes opened. Mocking me were the rays of the sun.
All my efforts wasted, my quarry gone!


                                                                                     (c)  A. Ola Toriola,
                                                                                      December 2006.

Thanks everybody for the comments.
For more of my poems you can check www.basicpoetry..com

Thanks all for your replies.Dammyboy,be careful next time.You accused me wrongly of plagiarising. Be careful!

dammyboy:
Hmmmm, It's a beautiful poem. Reminds me of how I like it, end rhyme!
But it sounds quite unlike you, KT, I guess you know what I am talking about.

@dammyboy,What exactly are you talking about? I don't understand.

Basic:
Something halted our honeymoon abruptly
I left the romantic dreamland untimely.

@ Oracle,what I actually meant was that I woke up unexpectedly from my sleep while the sweet dream was still going on.You know the whole poem is a dream.

Oh! They are feeling so dejected
For they have been to ridicule subjected
People treat them like lepers
And but God,they lack helpers

They were only victims of circumstance
But people don't about this think for once
They had suffered enough of stigmatisation
And had endured a lot of discrimination

People are reluctant to offer tham aids
All because they have HIV/AIDS
Why should we kill them with our actions?
When anyone can be in their conditions

The stigmatisation let us stop today
to make these poor people feel gay.

(c) A. Adeola Toriola
2006.

BEAUTY AND THE DREAM

All alone I sat on that fine evening
The dusk,a cool breeze was heralding
Then an epitome of beauty by me passed
Like a fresh tomato,her face was rubicund

I paused to behold her gait so gorgeous
And her body frame so beauteous
Gradually,down the lane she disappeared
"Go after her,"my heart ordered

I turned into a dog at that instance
And like I sighted a bone,I covered the distance
I ran in a way I've ne'er done before
For I kept falling in love the more

I approached her about my feelings
And ere long,we were already handling
Something halted our honeymoon abruptly
I left the romantic dreamland untimely.

AN EXODUS INTO HEAVEN


Fatality,though unseen was aboard
As they were driven heavenwards in a deathtrap
And like as for the battleground,
They set out on the dicey journey
Suddenly,they were violently diverted
To a destination for which they ne'er bargain'd
Led by that unseen passenger(among them)
What an exodus into heaven!


(c)A. adeola Toriola
2006.

DEDICATION:This poem is dedicated to all plane crash victims of late memory.May their gentle souls rest in absolute peace(Amen).

Infact,you've really helped. Gwatala,you are wonderful. Thank you very much. I shall work further on the poem.

Infact,you've really helped. Gwatala,you are wonderful. Thank you very much. I shall work further on the poem.

Infact,you've really helped. Gwatala,you are wonderful. Thank you very much. I shall work further on the poem.

Gwatala, thank you very much for the well-explained correction. I highly appreciate it. Please help me critique my other poems too. Thank you very much Gwatala.

Gwatala,I really appreciate the fact that you took your precious time to critique my work. Thank you very much for the analysis. I now know my weak points-thanks to one of my role models,Gwatala. I'll be glad if you could still take your time to comment on my other poems. I'm very okay by your comments even if no other person leaves comments. As for this poem,I'll rewrite it and show it to you again. I'm also looking forward to knowing you better. Pls give me your email address. I really like your poems and I wish I could write like you. Pls give me the tips I need to do so. Thanks once again,Gwatala.

Gwatala,I really appreciate the fact that you took your precious time to critique my work. Thank you very much for the analysis. I now know my weak points-thanks to one of my role models,Gwatala. I'll be glad if you could still take your time to comment on my other poems. I'm very okay by your comments even if no other person leaves comments. As for this poem,I'll rewrite it and show it to you again. I'm also looking forward to knowing you better. Pls give me your email address. I really like your poems and I wish I could write like you. Pls give me the tips I need to do so. Thanks once again,Gwatala.

I am just a budding poet so encourage me by critiquing my work. Thanks.

Hi fellow Nairalanders,pls post your comment on this poem, so that I'll know how really good I am in the art of poetry. Thanks.

Hi fellow Nairalanders,pls post your comment on this poem, so that I'll know how really good I am in the art of poetry. Thanks.

Hi fellow Nairalanders,pls post your comment on this poem, so that I'll know how really good I am in the art of poetry. Thanks.

Hi fellow Nairalanders,pls post your comment on this poem, so that I'll know how really good I am in the art of poetry. Thanks.

Hi fellow Nairalanders,pls post your comment on this poem, so that I'll know how really good I am in the art of poetry. Thanks.

Hi fellow Nairalanders,pls post your comment on this poem, so that I'll know how really good I am in the art of poetry. Thanks.

Hi fellow Nairalanders,pls post your comment on this poem, so that I'll know how really good I am in the art of poetry. Thanks.

Hi fellow Nairalanders,pls post your comment on this poem, so that I'll know how really good I am in the art of poetry. Thanks.

Hi fellow Nairalanders,pls post your comment on this poem, so that I'll know how really good I am in the art of poetry. Thanks.

Hi fellow Nairalanders,pls post your comment on this poem, so that I'll know how really good I am in the art of poetry. Thanks.