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Nickymezor:
Tnx fr d update Oga Larrysun... more ink to ur pen...I jst hope Rhoda shows up soon. Her absence is really weighing Blackie down... watz up with my Basky I don't get him @ all...I jst hope it isnt wat I'm thinking

Unfortunately, Rhoda might not be showing up anytime soon.

Dyoungstar:
I am watching from sidelines.

Hello bro! I'm missing you.

Your signature is as awesome as you are.

JeffreyJamez:
I believe Basket has a surprise for Blacky

He indeed did.

Skimpledawg:
D thunder DT will faya u Bros is still boiling in d faya......so u dey hia, u no call my line. *cwiosly vexin...na to beat u d way Basky beat doz two thieves n chapta 1 . Suxxman n slimzjoe, make una cm dz side small!!

Baddest Larrysun! Av got ma oxford dicko close by, learnin new words frm u.....mor grace

Thank you, sir. I still try to tone down on the vocs.

stuff46:
LarrySun doing his thing, we watching.

Baddest boss. Trouble rolling between friends is a natural thing, buh lets see if the duo can get over it.

Everything ends up over just a minor peccadillo.

adeh39:
WTF!!! Basket wat kind of birthday gift is dat nah? Haba, d thing is very funny sef, Abeg Blackie no gree ooo, Fourteen........Forty? chaii!

Larrysun, I dey feel u o, Thanks 4 d updates.....Keep it flowing..... following till d end.

Thank you so much, Miss Nairaland in focus. I'm solidly behind you, ma'am.

akejujoe:
wow ! this episode got me lol. well done mr larrysun

Thank you, ma'am.

kizzykeziah:
So Basket has been up to no good all this while. I want to trust Blackie on this anyway. Their differences are beginning to come up and might even separate them which if it happens, I hope will be for the better.

And I'm imagining how a monkey grins now, hehe

Lol! One of my friends' dads used to have a monkey. The monkey used to grin funny anything it was offered a sugarcane or banana. It has once grinned this way:

Ollyfad:
i knew basket had sumtin planned out but corrupting our innocent blackiehell no!.blackie pls leave dem alone abeg.if u r going to b deflowered get some pretty gal to do it joor.....ova fortydats child abuse!
nyc one oga larry.....i wish to b like you wen i grow up

@ bolded, I'm still a kid aiming to grow up, too.

afamjb:
lol....dis episode take style funny small oh,....larrysun u try..i con dey tink say na rhoda house dem gooo

Lol! What are friends for? They can go to an extremely silly way to please us.

lumzybo:
Now I am finally here #phew!!! I stayed glued to my phone till I got here.

@larrySun, u just got a new follower. It was ur comment on davidflo's newest story (more like a grammar fyt ) that made me do some Lil digging abt u. I'm glad I did

Pls, ya'll shld welcome me

You're very much welcome, sir.

I'm so sorry you got to know me through such execrable conduct. I'm not always like that, truly. It's just that I was in a very bad mood that day. I hope IDFWU would forgive me, too. I hope we can still be good friends.

IDFWU, if you're reading this, I'm truly sorry for everything. Please forgive me.

COMPLETE BOOK NOW AVAILABLE FOR DOWNLOAD HERE:

http://okadabooks.com/book/about/black_maria_book_one/20094

larrysundynasty@gmail.com

laykorn:
Wow!

*claps claps claps!
This is awesome. Will you, sir, tell us a story of how the e-diot was carted away to jail too, sir?

I'll reply your mail tomorrow, sir. I'm so sorry for the delay.

he was flanked on both sides by a policeman.

I think it should rather be he was flanked on both sides by two policemen.

Or

he was flanked on each side by a
policeman.

Very good narration, sir. This is an awesome piece. I hope to read more of your works.

thoxyno:
Oga Larry u are too good....words alone cannot define it.........May almighty God give u more wisdom an understanding.dnt forget to notify me on ur next stories ooooo

Thank you so much, ma'am. The next story is already up and running.

1stUnique:
Mehn.. The story is superb. 5***** for larry. God bless u bros

Thank you so much, sir.

tkpoint2:
This is a great work. No doubt you will go places.

- K.O.

Thank you so much, sir.

Wow! This is awesome. I couldn't stop. Please, more! Very few writers can write as you do, sir.

Divepen1:
Constructive Criticism is any criticism that will help the criticized. It is is secret or open criticism meant for the eyes of the criticized alone ( which a few might see and understand).
It's always good to see a person who can criticise without making fuss about it, to see someone that can tell you how to correct your work without showing others.
A constructive critic would tell you to reread your work but a bad one will tell you that it is full of blunders, which even it were true would reduce your morale. That is the secret constructive criticism

However, when a good critic see your blunder and does not to tell you to read your work again. He would point them out to you with possible correction: that is an open constructive criticism.

Brilliantly put. This absolves me of the charges Standd placed on me.

KingzPen:
My Twinny studied Yoruba Engineering...

Lmaooooo...

Can't wait to do a writing collaboration with you...

I'd love that a lot.

standd:
Sorry but I don't know IDFWU, I know LarrySun and I saw only your reply.
Thank you.

It's okay, ma'am. All is well.

standd:
You actually spent time quoting and duelling with IDFWU, straining and showing off your literary/grammatical muscles, when you could have spent that time outlining and helping to correct some of the errors you noticed.

I said the OP should re-read his post. I was sure he would catch the obvious errors by doing that. The errors were majorly omissions and spellings. Many of us are guilty of such errors; and they can be easily seen and corrected if we check what we have written. I didn't think I had to outline the errors when he could have easily noticed them on second glance.

And @ bolded, I'm surprised that you didn't see who cast the first stone; who showed the 'grammatical muscles', as you put it. Surely, you would have read where he said I claimed to know everything when I only said Davidflo should re-read what he posted. IDFWU bluntly insulted and tried to publicly emasculate me. I'm sure that even you would not have turned the other cheek.

Truly, it was wrong of me to have replied him so coldly. He forced words out of me. If I had kept quiet, he would have assumed a Goliath complex. Sometimes, you've got to put people in their places.

Ohibenemma:
The point here shouldn't be about the gory descriptions in some of the stories, but ABOUT THEIR RELEVANCE to the entire story.

Writing about murder just for the sake of getting the readers hooked is a no no, if it would have no bearing on the rest of the story.

Frank 3:16(17) does it, making the reader mentally squirm in disgust, but at the end you see that the bloody scene(s) is highly relevant to the entire story. Don't do it just for the fun of it and end up losing yourself in the process. That's just like a man who had enough money to build a house, using normal corrugated roofing sheets, but decides to shoot above his means by using the entire budget for oven-baked, roofing panels; only to, after another 15 years, still be searching for the funds
to make his dream come true.

A writer sure gets bolder with experience and recognition...we see this in Chimamanda's latter works where sexual expressions are generously(almost irritatingly) detailed...far cries from the cautious 'testing the waters' mien of Purple Hibiscus.

You should calm down, sir.

Rather than propounding some half-baked explanations, I shall contend myself, in this regard, with pointing out baked explanations. I hope I would not be stepping on too many tails.

What is Constructive Criticism? No, I'm not going to bore you with an unnecessary explanation when it has already been explained by the great Texanomaly herself. But I reckon you will agree with me that constructive criticisms can be given only by constructive critics.

Who is a Constructive Critic? He is anyone painfully honest. He is a vicious butcher, plunging his grammatical knife into the bowels of a poor literary specimen. Like a carpenter, he jams the end of his hammer on the awkward joints of jarring clauses. He is the unkind pugilist that slams his knuckles on the temple of disabled syntax and crippled tenses. The constructive critic is the furnaced knife that cauterizes the bleeding wounds of grammatical nonsense.

The honest critic can be very raw; even sometimes cruel. The question is: Who really wants the constructive criticism? Are we not really entangling ourselves in our own verbal cobwebs? A piece of work blown into the court of a constructive critic may take a yoke of oxen to drag it out again unscathed. I say we should be careful of what coxcombries we wish for. Constructive criticism goes beyond the words of the tribes of Isreal who constantly praise Moses for performing wonders with a magical staff.

It is a pity to still discover that some of the writers who solicit for the so-called constructive criticisms only end up screaming foul at the slightest trimming of their hedges. The literary world would be better off without these acidulated sciolists and balderdashing decadents who are dizzy with their own intellectual altitude.

tigar007:
What an intrigue! Nobody had it in mind Basket would survive. Master planner, we seek thee!!!!![b][/b]

Thank you again, Sir Tigar.

tigar007:
Nairaland's most celebrated writer of all time. I'm very sure you would be reckoned internationally sooner rather than later. Need more lessons on Creative Writing o. What was your discipline as an undergraduate and also your alma mater?

Thank you so much, sir.

About my discipline, you wouldn't believe me if I told you.

Mourin:
This Rhoda character is far 2 mature for her age, nice job though. More data 2 ur device...

A fourteen-year-old girl can be really smart. A couple of them have amazed me in reality.

Essyprity:
Hmmmmmmmm. Keep it coming Larry. Black and Basket, I hv my eyes on u both. #off to find Rhoda#

LOL! @ bolded. Good luck on that quest.

Akposb:
Well done, but the characters of Rhoda and Black are really smart and far more knowledgeable than their age. Their characters are also making this story cool and interesting. The combination of these three leaves me with the impression that likes do attract.

You're right, sir. I'll have to tone down their smart dispositions.

Jumizie13:
Laaaarrryyyyy

Hello, kid sister. How is life over there?