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One more thing,the senator's wife was a new character u failed to introduce.Am curious on why she will follow her husband to beg Mrs Silva.

Am hoping will come in to see Deifa on that bed so that she will show Tekena 'shege'.
Repo,are tekena and deifa not blacks? cos am seeing the word blush.

Whoooooooo!a poster wrote that u reminded him of John Grisham,naaah u reminded me of James Patterson.See twist and turn,suspense,dialogue aaaaah.Larry u are gonna be a great international writer,take it from me infact take it to the bank.....but take notes of the following:
1.Glorification of rape-3 of ur characters raped,in my opinion that is too much and u are one-sided about it in ur writeup.
2.I don't remember d last time I read and am checking my dictionary,it seems to me u re showing off coz toward the last few chapters it kind of reduced.
3.Ur strong point is ur attentin to details but u re overdetailizing and double detailizing while under detailizing some characters pardon my grammar.
4.Art is an imitation of life-but there are some part I ll read and I can't stop wondering Nigeria? eeeeehn? it just seems unreal.

As ur first novel I doff my hat infact am standing to give loud ovation.I never regretted reading this.Thanks

Larry u re welcome, before I bounce out to read the prequel I will love to go into specifics why I asked those questions.
1.In 1975 Cain was 18.In chp1 nine yrs later Daniel was flashing back? That is where am getting the mixed signal.
2.I know Nigerian police are useless but they couldn't be this dumb.They were also at the entrance and the arm robbers escaped without damaging their car!fine that one is even ok,the one that amaze me is mark,he even has the time to change bag and id card and also drive out!
Let me go and read the prequel.

Just finished chp1,great suspense,Beautiful character development and so far in my short stay here,I ve never seen anyone describe the way u did but...2 quick questions-
1.What time era was chp1 set coz am getting mixed signal.
2.I know most banks in Nigeria has one entrance and I just couldn't stop wondering how did the arm-robbers and Mike escaped?

Be back to finish it.

*Brings my bed,lay down* and start from the begining.

This is it,am enjoing this story.

I have notice this cliche 'My laptop battery is down coz NEPA has taken their power' is it another way of saying let's take a commercial break?Op what time era is ur story set?
So far am seeing potential in ur story but u re nt developing it before ur laptop battery get down.

Awww,I luv romance fiction. is fecking up,she shouldn't have accepted Tekena apologies.Repogirl keep it up.

We can't afford our mind to be bury 78 * 7 times.We can't afford to push our duties and responisiblities to the next generation.2015 is the time to do right and it start from now.

Flow na food food I just deh see for this thread,make I chop come finish the remaining tori.

@Chinedimo before I proceed I have to admit am a matchmaker.Now to follow ur reasoning,Tekena's heart belong to Deifa then Deifa's belong to Osawe until something happen.Am hoping something will happen that will change whatever feeling Tekena has 4 Deifa.Let's watch and see.

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Sir,am only pulling ur legs, take all the time u want to,I understand.

At 6:30am,ok o

Are they still playing ball? Is it possible for one to still be eating dinner at this time? Ok o

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@chinedumo I beg to disagree,u may desire something but that doesn't mean is good for u e.g deifa and osawe.
In my opinion,Tekena is just lusting after Deifa coz she is flashes and missing the real thing which is .

Tekena shouldn't dare break 's heart coz am already in love with her character.
My favourite chapter so far is 4,I luv the rapport,playfulness and reaction it generate btw Tekena and .Repogirl so far so good.

Just finish chp 3,nice story and a good dialogue.
Am just wondering as rich as they are,they couldn't afford a gateman! be back to finish it.

Wow!wow!wow! this is creativity,suspense character and storyline development at its finest.My heart is still beating fast.
Am thinking the creature came to warn Ojoade about the happening in the village.I hate to type this,abeg more updates.