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Looooooo....lz,Sammie Hoe am feeling u.

ehnnnn,this called writing.Eze well done,it is truely in u.
But u are still not introducing ur characters,for instance I would have love u to introduce the chief opposition and supporter and tell us the reason behind their actions.I luv the way u introduce Omemgbe.
Also let's know the mood the characters are-pensive,angry,frighten,shaking,crying,serious,screaming etc.
But overally,there was a drastic improvement.

princesa: orphan indeed, with a suite to herself, a flourishing club, title of the most popular and beautiful girl on campus, a trust fund! and now Tikky! ;>

give G.G some credit, she has been with that handsome hunk for over seven years and what has Deifa been doing? SOBBING him!

all of a sudden she comes into the picture and you are giving her Tikky

anyway its romance and fairytale
in btw my other name is charity, so am gonna keep my account ready just in case

My sis,na so I see am but I no wan beef any character again.I wan see where the story go end.

chinedumo: If most females love that means they fantasize alot about chasing the man that turns them on. I wouldhave thought that women prefer it when men do the chasing

Of course we do have fantasy about the guy we are attracted to,some of us are not just bold to woo the guy.

Repo,for u to arouse feeling at least in me that means u are a beautiful writer.
Back to the issue,do u still remember pink girls club and their criteria for u to join,is that not been snobbish?
Having A-class celebrities coming to ur functions,is that not been high taste?

Repogirl if u notice most of the female posters luv why the guyz luv Deifa.
In my Opinion I ll tell u why,Deifa is just too perfect-most beautiful,rich,snobbish,high taste,has guyz at her fingertip,sexy and also has guyz bidding 10m naira just to spend a day with her! She is not an average girl,infact am jealous.

Repogirl am not happpy with u,how dare u break up Tekena and .
Anyway keep it coming,good job.

*bring in my seat*

Eze Promoe: [color=crimson]You don't really have to say you are sorry. I'm not writing this for myself. It's for the reader's pleasure. I'll try to fix the skipped somewhere.
Thanks for the correction BTW.[/color]

You are welcome.

Eze Promoe: [color=navyblue]Ochibiaram had just being buried, Uju and her sisters were in their incessant mourning mood, Agunna's whereabout still unknown. They had searched for him everywhere, in the villages, forests, in order neighbouring but all to no avail.
Sympathizers came frequently to express their heartfelt condolence to the orphans, food items were donated for their upkeep.
Uju's eye had swollen from her tear duct up to the skin of her eye brow, all because of her constant weeping, her body was becoming thinner as if she was ill treated.

She still look pretty even with her facial expression of gloom. Her sisters didn't cry as much as she had, which had made her credit scolding from some of the sympathizers.

"Uju, aren't you ashame that you're crying while your younger ones are watching", they teased.

Meanwhile, Madueke has been making further plan to take over what belongs to his brother, not minding whoever it may hurt.
Madueke had eight children whom he had had from three different women, he lived an uncultured life. Feeling of his presence was revulsive to many, he had bad manners of approach, and that is one of the reasons he had never been awarded a title which he long yearned for.
His late brother unlike him, was a kind hearted, humble and courageous man, he made apologies on behalf of his brother when he offends as somebody as usual. Madueke will never in his life say sorry to anyone, you can go to hell if you wish, he may say in his mind.
The death of Ichie Ararume came as a great shocker to the hearing of the villagers, people believed that the death wasn't natural but hadn't back up their claims. The late Ararume was coming from a town hall meeting and on his way back home when he started vomiting strange objects, he managed to get home, putting hands in his chest, he threw up more and then he gave up. His death was indeed painful to the entire village, he was given a befitting burial where many weep in sorrow.
But since Ararume's death, Madueke has been in strong contention with Ochibiaram over the ownership of Ararume's property but she had had the courage to defend her right over husband's property.
Madueke has in different occasion used his wives as a weapon in an attempt to smear her. [/color]

[color=navyblue]Nwabiala, his first wife dissociated herself from such plot which she termed as 'inhuman practice' and that made her won hate from her husband and her rivals, her husband had in some occasion threatened to throw her out and send her to her father's house but Nwabiala was a very important woman to him as she was more cultured and mannered than Ahurone and Mbiaka, his second and third wives respectively, and was the mother to three of his eldest son. Little wonder why he could just end all his rantings with empty threats but not act against her.
She had warned her sons against malevolence to their fellow human, but only Okala her second son that has adhered strictly to this warnings. Madueke on the other hand had also threatened to disinherit him, but he didn't care.
He had hated his father's attitude towards people and that had brought bad names to him. He had wish on some occasions that he had a better father, and had prayed to be reincarnated into a godly family headed by a responsible father like the late Ichie Ararume.[/color]
[color=navyblue]On the other hand, Nwona and Ihuchi, his brothers, followed the footsteps of their father.
Their father has promised them all Ararume's property which had build the zeal in them to oppress according to their father's directives.[/color]

This is an example,the villagers were mourning with Uju then it switch to Madueke who was Scheming and doing flashback then switch to Nwabiala then to Okala.
Am sorry for the quote.

Eze promoe,nice story,it kind of remind me of nollywood films.
But u are writting as though we are watching film i.e u are not describing ur characters and enviroment.Then in a chapter,we are viewing happenings from more than one characters which is kind of confusing.Let me explain with illustration.

*Sigh*

Oahray am not techy techy but this guy own was discovered on facebook,how come?

As Seun&co are trying to find solution to this,as writers and readers what can we do? To be candid,am happy this happen cos am seeing opportunities,opportunity to be proactive.So I ll go first.......
As some1 said,writers should check for their work online and open a thread immediately to alert us if there is any discrepancy.Cuddlemii I don't know if it is possible to send mails to us in order to bombard the site massively.
Am still thinking of more idea.

*Ignore him*

*Sit down with a bottle of coke* and start from the begining.

*sigh* Oga o,egbe agbara le.

*Wipe tears* Blinkinize ur last post weaken my heart.
Post ur apology also on ur facebook page and hopefully u ve learnt from it and this will not damage ur future.
My fellow nairalanders temper justice with mercy,pls forgive him.

Emeka just called me,he promised everything will be pulled down.
Seun,more thing still need to be done to protect people work o.

Eeeeehn,Emeka I know u are reading this,so becos u didn't print it to sell make it right,'NO' it doesn't make it right.
You are suppose to acknowlegde the original authors and not take glory for people's work.If u are not in jail for what u did just to church and give testimony.

What rubbish! what nonsense! abeg the guy should be trace,why are people like this.It is very annoying.

U are welcome.

Bolushalom well done,what a simple and beautiful write-up.
But what's the main character's name or is this not fiction and what's her age bracket?

Is it fiction?